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Review of HUNTER'S RUN  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Well done. This had me smiling when I finished reading. Nothing better than long shot to success to make you smile when it goes right.

I like the way you painted the scenery and described the cold weather.

The dog 'Hell' injected a bit of humour with his behaviour and I could feel the pain in the arm.

Cracking job well done.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very well done. This bought a tear to my eye as I read this. I lost my mom to this disease over 20 years ago and it is still raw.

You painted a very good picture, the pain, the heartache and the feelings that are generated by this horrible disease.

I cannot comment on the grammar or the construction of your piece as it is an area that I need to improve myself but your piece did inspire strong feelings .

Not a pleasant subject but you handled it well.


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Review of Amsterdam  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Quite the cliff hanger. You build up quite the sense of suspense and as you finally think your going to get to hear whether they get together or not BOOM! You pull the rug, I like it, although it is a bit frustrating.

On reflection you could tale this and build it into all sorts of genres, spy, crime, romance, thriller.

All we know at the moment is that he is going to see a woman he thinks he loves but has never met, she could be anybody. Terrorist, spy, a little old lady or even a man.

Well done I liked it.


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Review of Moments of Gold  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I can relate to your story for I too am a grandfather. To Riley age 5 and lily 5 weeks old. Riley already thinks I am older than god's dog.

Everything is so simple at that age. They live in a world full of questions and trust us to answer all of them, because as they tell us we have lived forever and should know everything.

Do we though?

I think not they live in the now and only have minimal restraints on them where as we react to how society expect us to.

So communication for youngsters is simpler I feel wherever as adults become guarded and are guided by what we think is the right way.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
HA, I see know. I have just found the first part of your story, obviously based upon the tale of scrooge but a new modern slant put on it.

I like it. Drugs are indead a terrible problem that leads to misery in all too many modern cities, and small towns too if the truth be told.

I particularly liked the part of souls making up the individual links of the chain, and the thought of carrying thos chains for eternity with them always crying out for morew does indeed make you think.

I am looking forward to following this even more now.

Well done


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Review of Mary  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
A dark subject, You managed to put across the hopeless existence of an addict quite well.

Describing her dress and how the need for the drugs overcame what normally would have had her scared to face. (i am assuming it is a dangerous neighbourhood ands Scourge is a dangerous person too)

I will keep my eyes open to see how you develop this story.

Thank you for sharing it with us.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I like the activity.

Three seperate scenes and you handled them all well.

You portrayed different moods in each of them so your perspective had to change to write each scene.

I cannot comment on the technical side of the writing as i do not know enough, i can just give you the view on how your writing makes me feel as i read it.

I think you could expand on this quite easily. You have given yourself 20 years of military campaigns to choose from. Each one could be filled with new characters and intrigue with your main character the only costant to hold them all together.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Really good.

I liked the way you implied Earth had been raided which made us more ameniable to the examples for size referencing that you used.

Nice easy plot to follow with enough twists to keep it interesting and entertaining.

I enjoyed reading it, thank you.

I will not comment on grammar as i need to improve considerably on that myself.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Very descriptive and i also liked the voice of the Lieutenant as he was telling the story.

It does make you ask also 'how many times in the past has this been true?'

Orders given on outdated information or just wrong information.

Or years ago at the whim of a local warlord hungry for land and power.

Or just rogue troops hungry for loot and pillage.

All in all i enjoyed it very good.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
An engaging story.

The only negative from my point of view was the ending. It felt a tad rushed. That may have been due to a word count limit i'm not sure but the story was definately worth reading with plenty of scope to expand upon.

I noticed a few errors towards the end but they were minor and would soon be fixed.

Have you taken this further? Or do you have plans to take it further?

Well done i enjoyed reading this piece


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Review of Fractured Reality  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Well, sounds ok so far. You have got me curious into what is going on. I am starting to formulate my own ideas, so as a piece it is certainly making me think. The technical side of things i am not too hot on. My grammar leaves a lot to be desired.

Definately a good start with plenty of intrigue as to who, what, why the war.

Just enough tidbits dropped to make us start to question, is his dad dead? If not where is he?

Why must it be those particular 5 that have got to be trained?

I look forward to reading more soon.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Nice job so far.

I felt myself starting to read faster as the action started.

I am no expert on grammar or story construction but i do loike what you ahve done so far. You have started me asking questions.

What did he guard?
How big are the Dragons?
Why have they flew North?
What is krassos hiding?
Who is Krassos?
What is Krassos?

You get the picture. I look forward to seeing how you develop this piece.

Keep up the good work.


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Review of The Flawed Gods  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Certainly thought inspiring. I am intrigued as to your main characters birth, What is? Where is he from etc...

From the little i have read i am assuming at the moment in his timeline that you are writing about he is some sort of robotic or alien vigilante or cleans up the worlds streets one action at a time.

That your character is complex and cannot find answers for questions he asks or that he knows the answers but is afraid to follow up on them until it is forced upon him. I keep using him it could be a her or a nongender entity.

Either way i liked what you have written and it has left me thinking on how your character has come into existence, what is their purpose, do they know themselves? So asking more questions, there is a lot of potential here, well done so far.


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Review of Valentine Flight  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice!

When i finished reading this piece i imagined a female face smiling as she drove home in her car.
Very descriptive without being too over the top.

I got a sense that the author wrote this from the heart and it not just an exersise in writing.

I can relate to this as i ride myself but not very often anymore and like what was sritten horses do get in your blood. Once you have the bug it is like a drug, you must get your fix. Again riding is the icing on the cake just being around horses is enough to sate the desire slightly.

A lovely heart felt piece i thouroughly enjoyed reading it


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Review by bellowsface
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very informative. I learned a great deal from such a short piece of writing. I was not aware that any lighthouse had been built that high. I also did not know how much work went into the everyday live of a lighthouse keeper and thier family.

Even though this is aimed at children i still think it would help with older pupils too. The likes of which came to learning later in life for whatever reason.

A nice piece very informative not over the top with too many facts and figures but enough to keep you hooked without it getting boring and you losing interest, which is what happens to me a lot. If a piece of writing starts just listing facts and figures or does not introduce a new element or trigger my thought processes i lose interest fast.


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Review of The Creators  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
My first thought as soon as i finished reading this piece was 'you know what this is believable.'
I can see this sought of thing being true. Some of the big advances we have made and some of the conspiracy theories that are circulated.

Anyway, your piece was well written i enjoyed reading it. The conversations were believable, i do believe that we would be arrogant enough to try to bargain with a higher power instead of trying to learn from them.

Straight away you can tell that your writing has got me thinking and triggered my own thought processes. Well done it would be a nice project to run with and expand on.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Interesting, i could feel the tension building as i made my way through the piece.

Descriptive and your piece definately made my mind work i could see your character from your words.

A lot of information was passed over to the readeer from your work without detracting from your piece. Even though you had such a lot to get in, character description, emotions portrayed, worries and doubts expressed.

You did not waste time with a bog flowery desription of the surrounding but ket it to the point. You painted enough of a picture for me to get a feel of the pressure your character was under by being surrounded the rest of the room did not matter.

Thank you for sharing this with us, not the normal type of genre i would read but i am glad i tried something different.


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Review of The Snow Maiden  
Review by bellowsface
Rated: E | (4.0)
A compelling read, I do not normally read this type of story. Very descriptive piece I found that once I started reading I coudn't stop. I did work out what was coming but even then I still kept reading just in case. I would definitely read more. I liked it that it was the children who found him, it was like coming full circle.
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Review of The Troll Wife  
Review by bellowsface
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This had me smiling all the way through it. A nice twist I think on a romantic tale.

When I first started reading i thought it could have been tightened up a bit, but I soon forgot that the further into the piece I got. I get recally enjoyed reading it
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Review of The Collapse (1)  
Review by bellowsface
Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your piece very descriptive I could see her. You handled what I think is a very sensitive subject very well. I also liked how you introduced grief as an entity and not just an emotion, it gave it a twist. The grief Katy was feeling came across very well.

I noticed one typo in your last sentence that was all. I do not comment on grammar as it is an area I need to improve in.
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Review by bellowsface
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I enjoyed this. The ending made me smile. You hid the character well for the first part. Although you did give us a few hints it still made me smile when you confirmed it was a dog telling the story. I cannot comment on grammar as that is my week area, but your story did flow nicely. Very descriptive well done.
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Review of The Sirens Three  
Review by bellowsface
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Well what can I say? This is not the sort of story I would normally read. I would usually have read a paragraph thought no not for me and moved on. But you hooked me in. Your writing is very descriptive and I enjoyed reading this piece. I found it flowed well. I personally thought the last part of the piece was the best, I was there on the beach with him. Thank you for putting this piece on here I enjoyed reading it.
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Review of Elsewhere  
Review by bellowsface
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,
I am not an authority on writing or grammar but I will be honest from a readers point of view. I thought you painted a good picture in my mind of the setting for your piece. You did get me wondering who were the council? What was the power they had?
I was also interested in the fact that your character was not happy with his job, and you left me wanting to know why.
You called the councils' power archane so is it magic or mechanical? You mention static and electricity which made me ask the question.
In short I would definitely read more if you wrote more. It left me asking questions which is always a good sign.
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