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Review of Pyramid Scheme  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
That last line!

Even though I am English I have heard of some of those ranches.

I liked the talking animals the dialogue worked fantastically. The way you slipped thos names in and misused them was a cracking job done well.

But that last line was masterful I literally wet myself sniggering at it.

Thank you for this


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Review of Hank's Flower  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I think we all know a little girl like this one.

I think you did a great job describing the rain and storm. You use some very good descriptive sentences that work really well.

The dad did a great job of comforting his daughter and calming her about the flower. Four years old is a delicate time in children. At this stage they are like sponges soaking up knowledge and experience in equal measure. It is not easy I have two daughter and two step daughters.


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Review of Silent Hero  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Nice story, it helps bring hope in a world that sadly needs it at the moment.

I like the way your main character threw himself in front of the thug. It showed determination and guts.

Unfortunately you also managed to capture the dark side of society of which there are far too many. Theft and violence comes too easy to this new generation.

I liked the dialogue between the jewellery store owner and Ed

Again you caught onto the fact that we as humans are too quick to lash out with groundless accusations.

Nice writing I enjoyed reading this


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Review of Dear Mum  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (5.0)
you had me crying by the time I had got to the end.

Not bad saying I am a fifty year old biker who does not normally show emotion.

Certain things hit certain buttons, my mom has been gone nearly 25 years and still I would not have been able to write anything about her or to her, even now the pain is too great.

I cannot comment on the poems structure as I know not a jot about it.

But on an emotional level this connected with me hard. To the point I am squinting back tears as I write this.

Thank you for sharing this with us.


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Review of 4-11-16  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice writing.

Very descriptive you had me hooked all the way to the end.

I saw one spelling problem I think 'including the captivating smize and her embroidered name under the company logo on her shirt'

Other than that I liked it.

Other grammar issues I cannot help with.

I hope you are all sorted out in your life now. I get the impression from your writing interpretation it was quite a bad time you had. You have turned that experience into something special here.

thank you for sharing this with us.


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Review of Green  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the idea behind this I might try something similar as a writing exercise.

Some very nice descriptive phrases used, including a couple of words I had to look up.

Only a small piece but you managed to paint a vibrant picture of growth and vitality.

Well done keep up the good work.


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Review of Haunting Home  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I had a bit of a tear in my eye when it came to him saying goodbye to his mom.

I like how you handled this you could have laid the anguish and heartache on thick but you didn't you had a little bit of humour which I thought balanced the piece out.

The interaction with the girl worked very well and the tone in which you told the story worked really well too.

I can only tell you my gut feelings I do not know enough on grammar to start picking things out.

Plain and simple I enjoyed reading this, cracking job. keep up the good work.


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Review of A Better World  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Nice use of dialogue in this piece of writing.

You left us asking a lot of questions.

What was happening? Why was it happening? Who was making it happen?

I liked the way the piece continued throughout the day with the main character the only constant.

Grammar is not my forte to be honest I need a lot work here myself.

Overall a nice entertaining piece of writing.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A truly great read. I enjoyed reading this.

I wondered where it was going first thing, I was pleasantly suprised.

I cannot imagine what that kind of experience would be like and hopefully i never will. At my age i do not think it will happen unless we get invaded.

Some nice descriptive phrases you painted a vivid picture. Thank you for sharing this with u.


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Review of Showers of Joy  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice whimsical little piece of writing.

It paints a nice picture of an old couple, happy with their lot.

It made me think of how my wife and I interact, we are constantly teasing each other and playing about even though we are no spring chickens anymore.

Your dialogue rings true and fits the scene perfectly.

I enjoyed reading this, thank you


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Review of Take It Away  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Nice story, I think we all know someone like your main character.

I noticed a couple of mistakes 'following the forms of her parts fighting verbally' I think you meant parents, and the other one was ' the the container that was her got filled to the neck'

Normally I would not mention grammar as it is something that I am not too good at myself.

The guardian angel was a nice touch you added another level with the angels feelings.

Nice story, thank you for sharing it with us.


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Review of The Big Top  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked this.

You painted a bleak picture to start off with. With the desert and the heat. I am guessing that Alberto had crossed a border and had been given instruction on what to do.

Only problem I have is why is he on his own? You have painted a picture of a small boy, and using terms like 'mama' and 'dangerous man' I would find it hard to believe that he would be alone or that a mother would just walk away from her child.

Saying that though I am being picky, your story worked well. You had some nice descriptive passages and a nice ending where he had secreted himself in the big top.

Well worth the read.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (5.0)
How very brave of you. It could not be easy sharing these feelings with us.

It is funny how different things trigger our memories. I have now I am just entering my fifties a very bad memory but like you certain things trigger strong feelings.

The songs played at both of my weddings.

The song that I listened to when my boyhood dreams of entering the military were dashed because my eye glasses prescription was too strong. That had been my only goal for all of my 16 years on this earth until that day. I was devastated.

Ok nothing that bad for some people, but I can relate to this a little bit I remember the days my parents argued both my sister and I hated it.

Anyway I digress. You use some great descriptive phrases in your writing. Obviously written from the heart.

Thank you for sharing this with us.


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Review of Soon Enough  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Sad but it is nice to think of a love that strong.

I like the way you described the holiday hideaway, the way built the feeling of loss.

The last couple of paragraphs were where it got me welling up a bit.

The use of the same phrase was a nice touch. Shame for those he left behind though.

Well written though. nice job


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Review of A Therapy Session  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This worked well. Even substituting humans for animals the dialogue made it work.

Nice descriptive phrases to show us the different species between the Psychiatrist and the patient but to be fair that was not the focus. The dialogue could have been between anything or anyone it showed two entities ambroiled in a battle of wits.

Well that is what it said to me.

I enjoyed reading this.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice job. As well as an experience you also shared some very interesting facts about the space station.

Some great descriptive scenes painted with your words, yet you managed it in such a small count.

Grammar wise I do not have a clue as it is one of my weak points.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice piece of writing and oh so true.

I will not pretend to be a fantastic reviewer or writer because i am honest enough to realise what i do needs improvement. It is hard to accept criticism even thoguh it is meant well and is given with the best intentions.

I usually write a piec then when i think it is finished i leave it for a couple days first then go back to it.

My grammar is shocking so i do not comment on that when i review other authors.

I may even fall into the ego massaging group, that is only because i know my technical knowledge is still lacking. It will get better but until then i write on how the piece of writing i am reviewing makse me feel.

In some instances when i receive an e mail from someone thanking me i read what i have written and i see spelling errors or bad sentence construction that i just did not see whilst i was writing the review.

So like you i believe revision is very important.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Very nice story.

I had a tear in my eye when her father turned up. I will be honest i was not sure how you were going to to go with this. I thought you may have gone the dark route with her father coming home but not under his own steam. I am glad you did it your way.

Some nice descriptive phrases in there. A hint of sadness from the mother and a childs innocent joy.

Grammar, unfortunately not my strong point so i cannot comment on that.

Well done.


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Review of Quark Soup  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice, I like how you use the historical and biblical references.

Quite a nice humorous piece of writing.

Obviously we were expecting the cook to use the animals but the last line was very good. A hint of disgust with a pinch of humour.

It was a nice touch how you made the name of the soup up too.


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Review of Whispers of Hope  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Nice piece of writing written from the heart it reads like.

You use some really nice descriptive phrases throughout this piece of writing.

Unfortunately you are right in the way that Africa is portrayed it is always war, famine or medical related shock stories.


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Review of All Of My Peices  
Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I want to know more.

I like this although not normally the type of thing that i read i thought i would give it a try and review something different from what i normally read.

I am glad that i did. I like the idea that you are pursuing and i look foward to you developing it into something bigger.

I cannot comment on the grammar of the piece as i am not that hot at it myself.

Either way this got me hooked in, which i am really suprised by.

I like the descriptive phrases at the start when you were describing your character and the feelings of ... i don't know disapointment?

It is thos opening sentences that got me reading.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Very good, I like what you have done here. Something most of us can relate to.

It made for a pleasant tale too.

So do you really have an obsession with the site?

I think most of us do slightly.

I cannot comment on the grammar as I do need some improvement there.

The story flowed, there was a plot and it made me smile.


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Review of A Scary Night  
Review by bellowsface
Rated: E | (4.0)
Wow that is a tight word count.

Mind you did nail it, although a bit abrupt you set us a starting point, you progressed into the middle or in the case the consultation and you gave us an ending.

Not sure i could have done that in 100 words to be honest.

Well done.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Nice dialogue throughout your writing.

We do get attached toi our pets and i think if anyone had lost a pet and they found them they would have taken them back.

I would have liked the cat catcher lady to get her just desserts though.

I enjoyed reading this it flowed nicely.


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Review by bellowsface
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Obviously influenced by the 'Little Red Riding Hood' story but a nice interpretation.

You left us asking more questions. The only reason we know her grandmother is involved is because it is in the title.

The two characters at the and who I am assuming were the wolf and her grandmother could be turned into anyone. You could then add more twists to your plot. Something like her family were werewolves and she was due to reach the time when she first changed, but the two that saved her could have been from a rival pack with a blood feud with her family.

Lots of ideas could come from this even using the similar story line but making the hunters the rival pack.

Whichever way you want to play it, I enjoyed reading this and it stimulated my own thought processes so a job well done in my opinion.


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