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I like to read novels and biographies, so if I can review them at the same time, why not. My ratings are usually at the high end because I think if someone has taken the time and effort to write a large piece, it is an achievement. The review will give the opportunity to flag up typographic errors. I do not mark down ratings for these errors because they are easily fixed.
Favorite Item Types
Rhyming Verse. Novels and short stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Non-rhyming poetry.
I will not review...
Erotica, Vampire and Wolf stories. Their stories are all very samey to me.
Public Reviews
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Review of Part 18: Fallout  
Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another good read. The bad demon seems to be moving forward and others are getting jittery.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The writing continues in a standard that is good for me. Obviously, it has been well proofed by the writer as I have found no typo's throughout. In this part, we are introduced to more characters/creatures. This could become a bit confusing if more are added at this rate, but for now, I am managing to follow it okay. A lot of the parts have very good hooks at the end and this one is another of them. I look forward to finding out the implications of that hook.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Pesky commas. I usually get them right but sometimes I find it easy to get confused, as in this sentence. I have read about usage in many books, but none have been as helpful and straight forward as this item. It is laid out well with Error and Correct examples. All I need is to study the text and I am sure that my comma usage will improve.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An enjoyable read with the story moving on nicely. Can't wait to meet the nasty one.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another good chapter with plenty of action and suspense. Towards the end, I thought they were fearing the arrival of the female demon, but it was the weaker male. It was well done to have given me that impression. It leaves me with the thought: if they are that scared of the male what will the stronger female be like. Again I spotted no errors, but I would probably not have noticed if there were, such was my interest.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Now, this is getting really good. This part has me on the edge of my seat, so to speak. There is so much going on and it flows very well and takes us along with it. The writing and storyline continue to be impressive. I am eager to read more and see how they take on and defeat the evil one. A recommended read.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
New characters add to the mix at the start and near the end. I was a bit fooled, probably intentionally, by the author, in believing that the nasty gang had returned. As it turned out they were good guys; brilliantly done. Glad to see that X is on the mend. This part finishes with, perhaps, a bit of possible romance. I wonder.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another great action-packed part. My earlier comment that the story is suitable for all ages now seems a bit premature, and the 13+ rating that it has seems to be the correct one given the violence, but that was my mistake and not the authors. I enjoyed the read although I was a bit puzzled as to why the creatures retreated from Red Bird as we know nothing about her which could cause this. But like other questions in this tale, I am sure we will find out as we proceed.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A great chapter and my favourite so far. The other chapters were well written and interesting but this one was full of suspense and action. The new characters were a good addition to the story and the ending was, as usual, a great hook and a firm prompt for me to read on. Very well done with no typo's noticed.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This part starts with a trek to a new place but then we get to see an action-packed ending that keeps the reader in suspense as to what is about to happen. A great hook at the end ensures that I am eager to read on. Very well written as usual and I spotted no errors.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A good chapter which answers some readers' questions from a previous chapter: Why has Charmian been picked, why does her mother and the shopkeeper act the way they do? The answers are here. We also meet Red Bird who seems a bit more timid than I expected, but no doubt that will change. I like the way this is progressing and it seems to be a story suitable for all ages.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Tal turns up in the story and seems okay now, though I was unsure at first if he was a good or bad guy. It's good that we meet the girl in the photo from an early chapter and await some information as to what the quest of the two friends is and what adventure lies ahead. This part continues with a good quality of writing and an easy read.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Introduced to new characters and we learn a little more, though not much. The chapter mainly involves a journey to the camp and a meeting with Silver Eagle Feather. This is unfolding in a way that makes me want to know more. Very well done and keeps me interested again throughout with no flat spots and no typo's noticed..
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The story continues to entertain me. Character names: Stick-In-The-Dirt and Silver Eagle Feather, classic and can only make the reader smile with these imaginative names. Although a pleasant read there is always the thought of something lurking nearby. Excellent writing and no typo's spotted.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am impressed by your writing style and the ease to which I seem to flow through your serial chapters. I still don't understand why a young girl is chosen for the quest, but this in no way spoils the story. Perhaps it will become apparent later, or as this could be aimed at young adults, the early teenage readers may relate to the story with greater interest with young heroic characters. As in all good serials, the hook at the end of all the parts so far has prompted me to read the next part to find what happens.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is my favourite so far. I think the theme running through it is very cleverly done. The reader learns some things but is denied others. The only thing that sticks in my mind is: what is about the girl that makes her right for the quest? The ending is a bit of a surprise and leaves the reading wondering if the creature is good or evil. The last paragraph indicates the later.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Still in the shop and a lot to take in. I thought I would struggle at first but managed to keep it all together which I was pleased with. Anne is, to me, not just a shop keeper but a bigger player, or maybe not. All will be revealed no doubt. It looks as if there is an exciting, if not dangerous, adventure ahead. The writing style remains excellent for me and no typo's were spotted. I look forward to the journey and arrival at the island.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An enjoyable read giving in this part what I term real time as opposed to fantasy. This introduces me to two friends who I believe one or both will play a major part in the fantasy as it unfurls. The setting is easy to visualise and the characters are well-drawn. It has a good entertainment value to me and I love the style of writing. The character names are good and as I sometimes find in other works of fantasy/SF the names are made in such a way as to make them almost unreadable. Would I like to read on with this serial? You bet.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A great start to the serial. A beast-like character seems to be the main focus in this part. The description is enough for me to visualise the setting. To quote the author: "the seeds of curiosity had been planted." They certainly have with me and I look forward to looking at the next part to see how it all fits together.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This chapter is a treat to read. The story flows well and there is a good element of suspense. I noticed a few bits that may need attention. “taking a deep breath she_” Although this is obviously an interruption it looks like missing text on the page . Perhaps 3 dots... would look better./ “silence with(out) him interrupting her” / “I know that your sorry (you’re) “. I noticed “it’s” a couple of times and I’m not sure if they should be possessive, or not. What I particularly like is the way the names of your characters roll off the tongue. So often in fantasy/SF character names are difficult to pronounce. Thank you for a very good read.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I was going to say "Once Upon A Time" is a bit of a cliche nowadays but when I read on I found it was relevant to the writing in the prologue. A great idea and I wish I had thought of it. This is a good prologue, not too long and filled with facts that will ensure I read on. The writing is of a high standard and I spotted no errors. I look forward to more from you.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Brilliant. I thought I would read on from the last item as I wanted to know the fate of Spit. I am glad I did. This not only kept my interest but also kept a smile on my face even though Spit had fallen on hard times. I was even treated to a bit of a quiz with the voice mail which I soon saw as "Mr Mann your stinking cat's no good." The only bit I was not sure of was when Spit was driven back to his jet because a previous paragraph implied he was already there. Spit ends up at the hobo's camp fire. I don't know if you have plans to continue with this, but I would sure like to know what happens to Spit, even though I'm a dog person.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (5.0)
An entertaining fantasy that captures and potentially keeps the interest of adult and junior readers, especially if they are cat lovers. A well-written piece and I noticed no errors. The ending prompts the question of what happens next? I think most readers would take a look to find out.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a good start to your novel and retained my interest as I read through. It has good potential to develop the story further. However, there are a few things that need attention, mainly capitalisation at the start of sentences and I noticed kate was not capitilised. Also a couple of typo's: "Mrs KLm (Kim)" / "really matter(ed) because" "/ Andrew new (knew)" all these are easily fixed and will make the story a better experience for the reader. I noticed that the surname Kim is known by both characters so I assume that they might be somehow related. If you continue with this I would certainly read more.
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Review by Bruce.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Chapters 3 and 4. Again I feel that these two chapters should be put together as one. The story continues nicely and I wonder if you are going to continue with this. I could certainly read on, finding this a bit different and an interesting read. In one sentence you use the word "hanger" twice. I think it would be better to replace one of them with another word as it seems to stand out. Also noted a possible typographic error: " I heard the doos slid open (slide). I thank you for a very enjoyable read.
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