for a "newbie" you're really good. actually for any poet, you're really good :) its rare to find good poetry on here none the less poetry that rhymes :)
and i really do appreciate this piece of yours. I't s based on a dream you had, you say? well you have some very odd dreams but look at the ut come, a wonderful poem that has caught my attention and most like those of others as well.
i wish you well on your journey in writing & hope that your dreams keep delivering poem worthy ideas :)
with great pleasure -pikachu
crazy story. i really do think that the new generation is
getting carried away with technology. I never thought about
it this way. and now that I have; it seems pretty scary.
when i finished reading this; i intensely stared at my computer
hoping it wouldnt attack me haha.
this really is a good story though. keep writing :)
wow; you killed it :)
I just absolutely LOVE poetry.
I spend hours (i'm exaggerating haha) on here
to find well written poetry like yours. Poems like yours
are the reason i love; well poems.
So please for the sake of poetry and my sanity write some
more and tell me when you do. you're a good writer and you make my
time here on WDC worth it :)
interesting perspective on life i like the repetitiveness.
and this is really good. i like it. it's very on point and i like the message
the best. how good things happen every day but every day
is one less we have..
i liked this; im not sure if it was a story or a poem but i liked it.
i can relate . and if this really is a rant about your actual mom;
i say that you deserve better.
No one deserves that. not you; not I.
keep on writing :)
The beginning was a bit dry but as I kept on going it got really good.
I want to know more. Did they leave earth because they were the last ones
alive? or did they leave because it was dangerous living there.
You should really write a sequel. ...or even better a PREQUEL :)
That would be amazing if you did. and if you do; you should let me
know so I can read it. Good job
wow.. You need to write more of these so I can show them to my girlfriend!
Even as I was reading; I felt completely aroused. You have a gift; or perhaps
past experience? either way. please write more :)
This poem is good. but it would be way better if you actually put your emotions in to it.
I don't think you actually know what hate is (judging by your poem)
but if you did; I bet you could write a better poem.
keep on trying.. and write what you truly feel inside.
This is deep. When you read this; you can't help but to think of people you should forgive. and look at the mistakes you have made. But what really spoke to me; was this part:
"Perhaps, if God had wanted slaves each one of us would have had puppet strings which we would have been unable to ignore. There would have been no choice, no need to think, see, hear, or make decisions. I suspect a follower of this nature would lack the luster of a follower who was able to understand there is a choice, and then make the conscious choice to follow, and choose to remain teachable. "
It makes so much sense and I myself was never able to think of it this way.
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