What I like about the poem is that it is not just a poem but rather, you explained who Serena is. You gave us the readers a background about Serena and make her alive.
One final note, personally, I think that she is not alone when her mermaid friends are gone and only her dolphin friends are with her. Dolphins, just like our pets make us feel happy and contented even without our friends.
Will definitely read more of your Mermaid Series :)
Just want to start my message by thanking you for reviewing my new written essays.
What I want about this poem is that it is inviting in a sense that the words used were presented in a way that is aesthetically pleasing to the eyes. By using blue font, the reader feels more relaxed reading the poem.
Also, I like the Sea Goddess being depicted here, she is kind to human beings unlike other Greek Gods. She respects men and are friendly to the animals, she feels more humane than other Gods which is a very respectable trait of her.
As a non-native English speaker and writer, I will say that this is beautifully written. It captured the beauty and sadness of being in love with someone who we cannot be with. An image or even a scent of them is not even enough to describe how we truly miss them. Hopefully you will be able to reunite with your love one soon. :). Keep on writing heartfelt poems.
What I like about this short story is that it captures so many element at a single sitting. As an adult who is afraid of dolls, I will say that you were able to capture the essence of not only horror but also mystery. Particularly, who structured the doll with the button eyes and hair of Mr. Tobias and the crayon theme? Also, what is the intent? Was the doll created as a voodoo doll? Because here in the Philippines, based on our culture, we do such thing and there are people who are capable of doing bad things using the hair of an individual. I know that it sounds impossible but it happens here in the Philippines.
It gives me the "Coraline" vibes together with "The Miniaturist" vibe.
Thank you for informing your reader what a quatrain is. Such an informative and thoughtful thing for you to do as a reader! Also, I do agree that there is simplicity and purity back when we were younger that we want to relive as an adult. It seems that you have put so much thought and time in writing such poem. Keep writing!
What I like about the poem is that the past is described first followed by the future. Then the present. It gives hope to the reader and yet it leaves an ending question, "His Throne" is referring to? In conclusion, a poem easy to read and recommended to other readers.
This is an interesting short story. There is this element of curiosity at the same time, it makes me wonder as a reader what is she doing in an abandoned house? What is she running away from? Who is Barry? This questions are yet to be answered. Such simple writing style that can be interpreted in so many ways. One of the short stories out there!
You started the poem with such passion and ended it with such gentleness. Clearly, there is a great longing for a love one after the separation. I also like how you described the eyes of your loved one using a lotus flower. It shows sincerity.
The poem was written well. It was easy to read and follow. I like the background story of how the current owner and the Cocker Spaniel became friends, which explains the title. As a dog owner myself, this is one of my favorite poems so far. Keep writing, hopefully to read another poem of yours soon. :)
I like how the word "euphoria" is connected with addiction and was used in this essay. I do agree with what you just wrote. People usually have an addiction, however, what people consider as an addiction are only the ones that are common. Particularly; excessive eating, drug addiction, alcohol, social media, eating disorder, k-pop addiction and many more. That is to say that these things are should be totally banned. Rather, with the right moderation, people could enjoy such thing without being dependent on it.
On conclusion, I do agree with the written words "when in reality it's only a feeling that drives you to destroy the prettiest parts of yourself until nothing is left of your poor withered body." This sums up everything about addiction. To which, I agree.
Is this based on a true story? If it is, then I am delighted to be able to read such story. What I also like about the story is that, the writer tried to maximize every paragraph. There was so many things happening in this story however it was easy to read because of it was presented. The pacing of the story is also good. Also the details of every scenario was written with precision.
First of all, I like the fact that you clearly described the environment and what the characters felt. It feels like a summer love breeze, there is innocence and passion in this poem. Second, the setting is simple yet written with care.
Straight to my heart! First I am going to talk about the beauty of the simplicity of your poem. Even the number of stanzas are well thought of. What I like about this is that discusses the beauty of falling in love with the persona of an individual. Unconditionally giving and risking anything even if we could see right from the start that it will be the ending soon. In the end of the day, there is courage and so much love from letting go someone.
What I like about it is that, it pictures gray zone area of reality. That is, sometimes it is not sunny. That sometimes we hide in order to protect ourselves from danger. Whatever that may mean. You might find it odd but for me it is not really dark, rather for me it is a story of hope and being persistent to stay in a horrible place. Knowing that even if you could see that nothing is going right but you hope that things will be okay is enough.
Thank you so much for writing such poem. I thought I was the only one who thinks that working, developing my skills and at the same time finding the balance to rest is important before soaring. It is simple yet one of the most beautiful poems that I have ever read. Clearly one day, you will soar just like a butterfly.
As I was reading this, there is a smile on my face because of how passionate you were when you wrote this. It seems that you really enjoyed writing. What is funny about this story is that even if I could not completely picture what was happening, something was really not right but still life continued. Was worth reading it.
I like the setting, the names and the atmosphere of the chapter as I was reading it. It makes me miss the sea side. Very illustrative. The first set of paragraphs really captivated me just like a fresh breath out of the sea. I just wish that you could have saved some words for the next chapter? But in conclusion, still one of the first chapters that I have read.
I like this poem. It is not selfish. It is as if the author wants everyone to be aware of the possible consequences of their actions. To make each one of us to be held accountable. The word selection and length is maximized.
I was nodding the whole time that I was reading your poem. I could not agree more. The depth and reality is something that I admire. You have selected words that welcomes people of different nationalities and so I read and "listened" to your poem it is like you are speaking with such dignity and hope for the future.
I like how carefully you have written your emotions about the reality that you have faced. I have heard from some people that they want to do more in their job or in anything that they do but will not do so because of the tricks that they have encountered. That is not fair but I do admire your strength and bravery. Your poem was well written without too much complain but rather was written in order to set your heart free.
Such an endearing poem by a parent to their daughter. I know nothing about parenting but one of the things that I admire about parents is the capacity to love their child so much so that they are willing to sacrifice more than they are capable of. I am an adult but this poem makes me feel like the warm hug of my mother as a child. Clearly one of the best poems out there.
This leaves to so many meanings. At first, I thought of marriage because of the "vows" but then again, after reading the title of the story, the interpretation changed. I rarely read the title of the written story or poems but clearly this leaves to so many meanings. Which I like. My interpretation is that, sometimes we make a wish during New Year's eve without fully committing to it because of so many reasons. I might be wrong but I enjoyed reading it!
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