Good poem! I am more drawn to the positive, upbeat tones, but this was, for me, a way to define some days in life...either as a mom, or as a person who may get overlooked or a person who always seems joyful and does not want to show sorrow to anyone. I can see it and sometimes have had days like that! Overwhelming times! Thank God they are only days! Trying to be more positive and realize each day that I have so much to be thankful for and appreciate each blessing!
When I read one piece, I usually go to the portfolio and learn from the bio about the person and keep reading other pieces. That is why I reviewed two of your writings in the same night. You have little time to write, like me, but your writing is great! And I know it is a needed distraction, a piece of you that needs releasing for your independence! Keep writing!
Love it! Such deep thoughts! Great work!
In just a few words...you express an immensely overwhelming feeling that I can identify with. Great job!
You know I am one of your biggest fans!!!
I love this poem! Such imagery! Great personal experience! Being intimate is such an easy thing for me to write about. I love it so much and I have the best partner! I have a similar poem from my real life posted on my portfolio called 'So Into You'. Check it out if you like and see the similarities. I would love to also have your thoughts on it if you can...
Keep writing! I really enjoyed reading.
There are a lot of things in this poem that I agree with and I can see happening before us.
Good writing! I always say the best writing is from true, personal experiences. You've done well here! Maybe things will turn around soon for the better of America!
I understand that sometimes poetry only means something to the author...I enjoyed your poem and your choice of words. Very original! I am not sure of the meaning here, though. Maybe you could enlighten me?
If not, it is fine as well. Some things that are written I know are hard to explain. Maybe I am not looking deep enough. I am just curious about the meaning...
Keep writing!
How beautiful! I love how you present your feelings. Always telling what you are doing when you write down these words. Very down to earth and extremely romantic. And then at some points, it seems like a fairytale. But I think love is like that when you find the right one!
Great writing!
Wow! That is a great story. I am sorry that in reality it does bring you down to raise kids with all you've got and then they take their own road. My kids are only 9 and 6 but I can tell from my own life and my sister's that going down the wrong path can only make you happy for a short while. Hopefully the wild one will realize that and change. But it is definitely funny sometimes how different two siblings can be! Mine are like night and day. Maybe God planned it that way...as a balance...for the good one to rub off on the other and be an example. You never know what kind of influence is being shown and watched by the other one. Good luck! Good writing! I always think the best writing is from personal experiences.
What a unique story! I love it! It is personal and romantic. Life is a journey and so is finding the love of your life! I love that you call that special someone your "light". My favorite line from your story is..."He never travels alone. His constant companion is the boy he once was and his guide is the man he will become". We truly do not realize how our past influences our present and future! Great composition! I will be looking for more with your name on it!
Wonderful poem! I can feel your immense devotion to your wife! I also feel this way about my husband. He is amazing!
You have truly inspired me with your words. Great poem! Keep writing!
This is a very interesting poem. Good writing and the flow is consistent. I think ordinary is an opinion, though. Like normal. We can only define these words by our own view of them. Sounds like this person seeks a new and interesting life, not a routine. Very nice! Makes me think about living in the now. Because we are not promised tomorrow. Keep writing!
This is a very deep and interesting short story. At first, I thought you might be describing a bad mother. I kept myself from reading the end first.
Good writing!
That is an interesting short story. I cheated and looked at the last line before reading the whole thing. That is just me!
Sounds like a little fantasy thriller. (A demon and wings)
Good imagery!
This is a very interesting poem. It tells a sweet story of someone being a good friend. I saw a few times when words might be in the wrong tense. Like in line 3, "won't" might sound better "wouldn't". And the last line "you're" might sound better as "you'll". But overall, I thought it sounded good. Keep writing.
This letter is good, but it seems unfinished to me. Only my opinion. I can only imagine it would be hard to have only a phone relationship but I can see how you could fall for someone that way too. Keep writing!
Beautiful poem! You put the words out there and I can imagine the scene and picture it in my mind as I read. I really enjoyed it! Keep writing! I thrive on erotica!
Oh I love this poem! I wish my man would write something like this to me! Very nice! I love to write erotica too from my own experiences. Feel free to look me up, read and review. I am always looking for male reviewers. Sometimes the females do not understand my writing. I think because I actually love sex! I hear too many women say that they fake it or act as if it is a chore. Not me!
Keep writing and I will keep reading it! Enjoyed it!
I like this poem! Very nice!
I did not see any grammatical errors. Flow and content were both nice.
Some might say to not repeat the last line in each verse, but I think it really works here.
(It worked for The Raven...nevermore)
My favorite verse is the second one.
Very well written. Keep writing!
Good poll. If I had taken this same poll a few years ago...I would have been in the first category and not the second. It is funny how things and people change. I do not mind giving, but receiving would also be nice more often. But it seems like a chore to have to ask all the time. I mean, who would not like to receive oral sex!!
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