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Review of Words  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Nice imagery going on, But one thing that I noticed is that in the 1st stanza you put a period after each line whicj=h isn't neccessary. Just add a comma or two and your good.
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Review of I Remember  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Nice depth of emotion in it and it has a good rhyme. And the only error i could find was that you didn't have a period at the end. But other than that it was very nice and a pleasant read!!

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Review of YOU  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Here is an error: you need to punctualize your words because it makes your peom look choppy and unorganized.
Other tha that its really good!!! And its very descriptive and has good imagery. NICE!!
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Review of Quiet  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (5.0)
JUST LIKE YOU I AM A WRITER AND I AM GIVNG YOU MY HONEST OPINIONS TO MAKE YOU A BETTER WRITER. SO PLEASE DON'T FEEL OFFENDED, BECAUSE I AM ONLY TRYING TO HELP!!

In the second line you said "crying in" don't you mean the inside? It'll sound much more flowing a better.
And I noticed that you a have a lack of periods. Use those and it'll make it mopre easier to read because when you don't have them, then the reader reads to fast. But other than that it was very good. It had a great depth of emotion in it. You could feel what the character is feeling. It was very nice and enjoyable!!
GOOD JOB AND KEEP WRITING!!!
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Review of Bury Me Now  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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The piece was good, but it could have had been better if it was seperated into stanza's.
In line five, instead of saying were not you could of said weren't. That would of been an easy read!! But other than that the piece was really good and had a agreat deal of emotion in it which i really like!!!

GOOD JOB AND KEEP WRITING!!!
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Review by dena
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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When you use dialogue, be sure to put it on another line because it'll make it easier to read.
But other than that AWESOME STORY!!!
It had a great flow to it and it kept myattention the whole time and it was very nice..I loved it!!!
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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review of Expired  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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One thing about this is you use "i will never open" to much.
You can try giving the poem some zest without using those wrods over and over again.
But other than that it was very good!!
GOOD JOB AND KEEP WRITING!!
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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review of Checking Out  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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WOW!!
This is such a strong and powerful poem!!!
It really reminds me of me in way. I used to be like you and to me this poem really speaked to me!! Ilove it!!
GOOD JOB AND KEEP WRITING!!
sn:this deserves and award!!
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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review of I Believe  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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WHAT A PERFECT ROMANCE POEM!!!
This is what I like. It's so descriptive and emotional. You have the most perfect imagery in here!!! It's nice to express love and hand it out!
I alos love it when you talk about how the planets look down on you, really nice and I can picture that perfectly!!
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Review by dena
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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NICE!!
well written I should say!!!
I love the emotion behind it, it's very nice and flowing!!
GREAT IMAGERY!!
Yes, this piece has alo of potential!!
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Review of The broken heart  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I like this. ALOT!!
But there were a few errors:
1) you have to have punctuation
2) you misspelled always in the third stanza
But always proof read your stuff before you post it.
But other than that I loved it and it had a very good depth of emotion in it!!!
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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review of You.  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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This poem is very VERY colorful in a way!!
I like how you describe how you couldn't describe him in colors.
But something doesnt seem to make sense. You can't describe him in colors, but you can describe him as a rainbow.
That to me doesn't seem to make much sense to me.
But overall I like it. It was very descriptive and had good imagery!!
GOOD JOB AND KEEP WRITING!!!
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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review of Drawn To You  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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I like this poem. It really has a good flow and rhym to it.
But one thing you have to do, is capitalize you I's.
And at the end of the first stanza, you forgot your punction. Maybe an I perhaps??
But other than that it was really good and has good emotion!!!
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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review of Her  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I like the way you compare it to a woman.
The poem itself is very warm. It has a very warm feeling to it.
The words are very descriptive and flows very well.
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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review of A Friend  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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I like the way it ryhme but although it really didnt give me an WOW!
I think you could have had been longer and that you could of added soem more spice to it.
But other than that I like it very much!!
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Review by dena
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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AAAAAAAAAW!! The story was kinda sad in a way. But although you could have had made it longer, but thats just me.
I really liked the story. It had lot of emotion behind it and the characters had great emotion to them to!! I like it!!
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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review of My Love For You  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I like this alot!! Its very emotional and descriptive. It's really obvious that you love you father and that no matter what you'll always love him.
It kinda reminds me of my father. He can be really nerve wrecking and I might say I hate him but in reality I love him by the end of the day.
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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review by dena
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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WOW!!
ok lolz really nice story!! But try to proof read your things to make them better. Towards the end you said you were hiding behind a brush. Did you mean bush?? But other than that this was a really nice story!! It kept my attention throughout the whole thing and I mean its amazing!! Although the character is a tad bit crazy for me, I like alot lolz.
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#1300305 by Maryann
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Review of EVERLONG...  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
JUST LIKE YOU I AM A WRITER AND I AM GIVING YOU MY HONEST OPINIONS TO MAKE YOU A BETTER WRITER. SO PLEASE DONT FEEL OFFENDED BECAUSE I'M ONLY TRYING TO HELP!!

In my opinion I think you could have had made this into a story rather than a poem. It sound like it can be a strory to me.
I like this poem though. You put alot of imagery in it which makes it a good story!!
I also like all the descriptions in it and the romance!! It makes me want to snuggle up with someone of my own lolz.
But other than that its a very good story!!
GOOS JOB AND KEEP WRITING!!
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Review by dena
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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One thing about this is that you say "when you come around" to much. An when you constantly repeat it over and over again, its makes it boring to read and takes the interest away. You can spice up your poem by using some imagery and talk about the reason he makes you feel this way. Other than that it was very romantic and good.
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Review by dena
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Rated: E | (3.5)
JUST LIKE YOU I AM A WRITER AND I AM GIVING YOU MY HONEST OPINIONS TO MAKE YOU A BETTER WRITER, SO PLEASE DONT FEEL OFFENDED BECAUSE I'M ONLY TRYING TO HELP!!

One thing about this poem is that it is really long!!! And I highly doubt someone is going to read all of this, so it'll probably be better if it was in story form??
It really didnt appeal to me. Like the first sentence just really didnt grab me at all.
But one thing about it, is that it flowed very well!! Nice job on that!!
GOOD JOB AND KEEP WRITING!!
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Review of On My Way Down  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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WOW!!!!
I mean this poem has lot of emotion behind it and ITS STRONG!!!
The one thing I love about this poem, is that I can tell that it comes straight from the heart (just like mines do, check out some of mines) but anyway, I like it and I can sense the the chararcter is so used to being in apin and suffering that he/she is used to it and wants it, its kind of like an addiction!!
I love and I think that this has alot of potential. And if I were you, I would enter it into a contest of some kind.
KEEP WRITING!!!
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Review of To My Love  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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WOW! The end was so sad and I was hoping it'll be a happy one.
The poem is very STRONG with emotion, which is something I like!!
I would say I wouldnt change anything about this except for a happy ending. I really thought this was a good piece, it really was.
GOOD JOB AND KEEP WRITING!!
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Review of secret love  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Okay first off the story is good and you have to be careful with capitalizing your I's. secone, you hsouldnt use first person when your telling the readers your dead, it just doesnt work right.
You should use third person, that way it'll make the story flow better.
Other than that great story and it touched my heart. :))
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Review of My time to go  
Review by dena
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Rated: E | (5.0)
YES YES YES!! this is a very great poem that expresses alot of emotion that I can feel!! I like it and I also see that you were inspired by the rock group (great choice!!!). Very nice job on this I like !!
KEEP WRITING!!
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