Hello, first of all Luke, you need to make the change!
not for the world, but! for yourself,theirs no need for you to carry the worlds burdens on your young shoulders
let your parents worry about mortgages, Rentals, give
yourself time to fool around with friends, your only young once, with teachers! well you have to face them on a daily bases they are the ones who gives you the start you need to shape your life, if you want to be a
Banker or whatever, then you will need a teacher tudor, trainers they play an important roll, you have a phobic where Authority is concern, even your parents a glowing brightly in that corner, you wrote "Teenage Anger Coming Out" thank goodness you didn't write this theme on my behalf your turns coming Luke to be an adult, then you will taste the power within until then catch you on the morrow
Arohanui
Day
hello luke, "One in War" a good poem
written in two mood swings I get like that
too sometimes, but I try not to let
one over rule the other,or let the other
take over and dominate, you were doing well
until you let corruption move in to be the
dominant force, thank you luke for sharing
catch you on the morrow
Arohanui
Day
Hello, I too hold an account
of 9-11 that had the urgent
need to be released in writing
"Terror In The Sky" akin to "twin Towers"
hundreds of other poems a tribute to
all those who lost their lives
each one written so differently
it was a day the world stood still
thank you for letting me visit
catch you on the morrow
Arohanui
Day
hello, I too think many spirits go
unchecked, for we human beings
are creatures from the devine
why is it an honor to die for ones
country, 99% of the people don't know
you had died for them you become a
satistic, "Unknown Soldier" only
the hearts of the loved ones do
know of the valour you gave to
your country thank you for sharing
catch you on the morrow
Arohanui
Day
Hello, Your "Conversation in Poetry" hardly
differs from mine, I have no time in my
head when I'm in front of the screen, the
keys, letterd from A-Z exposing my fingers
to untold mischief, you have your husband
I have my mom, together you and I have w.com
lol by the way you were having a nightmare
thank you for sharing catch you on the morrow
Arohanui
Day
Hello, I have read several war poems today
your poem has been written well for all those who have lost their lives during the war, specially with no explaination, rhyme or reason, who can say,did
God turn a blind eye, whatever the reason it happened
thank you for sharing "A Night Without End" catch you on the morrow
Arohanui
Day
Hello Native, I hear and see the
vermin in your poem unafraid to
state your fact I like that, an
for that reason you deserve a rate
higher than usual plus the fact
been, you do have talent and not
afraid to show it thank you for
sharing catch you on the morrow
Arohanui Day
Hello Dr Taher, "Freedom at Last"
I liked better than the poem
"The Dark Ages-A Turnaround"
this poem gave me a good shake
where else the second poem
gave me a break,so that I was able
to enjoy and read your poem thank
you for sharing catch you on the
morrow
Arohanui Day
Hello, thank you for sharing
"Let Me Tell You About Karen"
you both deserve the happiness
and you also deserve the 5 I'm
giving you as a belated Anniversary
gift, may your love be never ending
catch you on the morrow
Arohanui Day
Hello Beller, "Southern Sun" must be
a real curse for the ones in chains to
work up a sweat, then the hammer falls
the men can relax smile and let your
poem do all the work and listen to
the hammer fall nice poem catch
you on the morrow
Arohanui Day
Hello poet Darka, "Crossing Truth" I have rated
this poem a 4 1/2 I see you have potentials but
not using all of it to its full capacity and that
include many of us as well, thank goodness we have
this wonderful site W.Com to teach us how to write
encourage, and be heard keep writing, catch you
on the morrow
Arohanui Day
lol my Aunt went through the same problem
we were raising funds when she came shuffling
along begging for a safty pin, no one could
help her she shuffled on, we all watched her
knowing she was in some kind of predicament
she hadn't shuffled far when her dignity fell
around her ankles she giggled and that triggered
us all into laughter, you have brought back
fond memories thank you for sharing "My most
embarrassing moments" loved it
Arohanui Day
hello, Oh Gina when I read your writing I get so
engrossed many times I have forgotten to rate
your wonderful work, I am back in your port again
so I have the pleasure of reading your poems
all over again "Welcome dearest Cole" a nice gift to give him when he turns the age of 21yrs aah thank you for sharing
Arohanui Day
Hello Gina, I throughly enjoyed reading
"My Life" I must admit I had alot of giggling
in some of the entries "Look the beans" I want
to know what that means, I can also see where
you are coming from with the "Crusie" yet little
Bro has a point its all up to you its fanastic
Gina well written an ideal "sitcom" try Aaron Spelling
who knows it could be worth your while thank you so
much for sharing your life with us, catch you on the morrow
Arohanui Day
Hello Gina, when Beth heaved all over
the Dream Weaver, I wanted to jump
for sheer joy, please let me know
when Part(8) is ready not only is
the Dream Weaver awaits with bated
breath I am too, catch you on the
morrow
Arohanui Day
Hello Gina, oooh Mark appears to be
on a winning streak, and making
more plans for the future, while
David could only look on helplessly
and the Dream Weaver gloats like
a cat who has been at the cream
can't wait for "Time: Part6"
catch you on the morrow
Arohanui Day
Hello Gina, ooooh so Beths
has gained some strength
she has her moments of
weakness, but, she picks up
and warns herslf of the hidden
pitfalls Mark, has come on the
scene I can see the jealousy
fly, the Dream weaver grits
his teeth to morrow he grins
is another day an Time
thank you so much for sharing
Arohanui Day
Hello Gina,I have read "Time:Part2"the dream thickens
Beth displayed, that she is the weakest link In the dream game, she was frighten, she lack the courage to go on she had problems dealing with the deceptions of what is real and what is a dream, shes more or less lost in time, I really fear for her life, Gina is Beth running on borrowed time.
please drop me a line...let me know
Arohanui Day
Hello "Missing Something" perhapes we are to hard to please, that goes for man or a woman, that little twinkle you use to share hasn't gone out just merely dimmed waiting to be coached to shine brightly once more, say it with flowers and those three little words
Arohanui Day
aah you explain so fully
that even I can Understand
parts of your way of life
I do like reading your poems
they have depth, and I do
feel for the woman. In our
culture once, the woman followed
one step behind her man, not
only that she had to do as she
was told, now we have equal rights
I feel very sad for our sisters
who have to follow the men of the
Taliban, thank you for sharing
catch you on the morrow
With Regards Day
lol hello gina thank goodness I am only
a reader, yet I feel I can get trap
in your Time Peice very quickly and
find myself in all sorts of trouble,
Time is like a maze,and the dreams
do they guide you to the truth or
is it a way of torment,your doing well
for your first story, keep going
Time is precious, catch you on the morrow
Big Hugs
Arohanui Day
Hello, your poem tells of your
hidden secret, you don't want
anyone to know,but reading between
the lines,your poem tells on you
if its written from your imagination
keep writing thank you for sharing
catch you on the morrow
cheers Day
aah Gina each and everyone of us
have our special "Seasons" some
like it hot, some like it with chills
you have written this poem so beautiful
I really do like its meaning and what
it has offered thank you so much
warmest regards Day
Wow Andi that was really a wonderful
"Love Poem" I throughly enjoyed
reading,I hope too your dream
will yield fruit,come over to my
port and read about Al Capone
it might interest you, if I'm
not home the doors open
thank you for sharing
cheers Day
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