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Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a lovely contrast that clearly expresses the love of a father experienced by his child to the love of the Father expressed to His child. I find your thoughts to progress in a well organized and logical manner. The poem has nice cadence to it. There are good visuals. Mostly it expresses the joy of knowing God in a clear and concise manner that would be appealing to any reader! Great Work! Write on!
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Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Okay, got a real chuckle out of this. It is presented in a most humerous fashion. I enjoyed reading it and truthfully, I wasn't sure where you were going until you pulled the punch. Well written and a delightful look at how things are done around here. No my only question is, what is your gripe with tYpO?
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Review of The Haircut  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Diamondgirl: Welcome to WDC! I'm the class clown tYpO! I must say Haircut is wonderful and entertaining. Is it the beginning of a coming of age novel of some sort? The characterization and plot are flawless. Of course I did take note that you are published. You will be a most welcome addition to our community! If I can ever do anything to help you get situated arounud here, please let me know! Great writing! Write on!
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Review of The window  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome to WDC! This is nice work. It moves smoothly from beginning to end and is not choppy. You have rich symbolism that creates a nice visual in the reader's mind and leaves a fresh feeling. A little heads up on spelling: In the 1st verse "inperfection" should be "imperfection;" and later in the final verse "breath" should be "breathe." That last one is difficult because spell check will not pick it up so only proofreading can catch it. All in all though this is nice work! Obviously well thought out and makes a neat little package and an enjoyable read. Thanks so much for sharing it! Looking forward to more of your work in the future!
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Review of The Best Revenge  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome to WDC! This is a juicy little piece of work! Each little piece is short and packs a punch. Each verse is a part of the bigger and whole picture. There is a nice story hidden here between these lines and there are also nice visuals provided. I like how the teller has gotten over it and is clearly delivering the message " too bad, your loss!" Great job! Write on!
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Review of Dracula Essay  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Shay! Welcome to WDC! This is a nice story. The characterization is good and the plot does stand up on its own. No loose ends, nice and tight. This is an interesting study in an imagined scene. I love the undyling loyalty and love Elisabeta has for Vlad. The title is a little misleading as essays are normally informative. I might simply entitle it Elisabeta and make it clearer within this story who Vlad is. The only real problem i noticed was in the 4th paragraph:

I pleaded for him to stay, willed him with my eyes and body and mouth to forget this hideous war. He would not, could not he told me, and pleaded also for me to understand. I told him I would not, could not.

The repetitions I have bolded might be just as effectively presented as: "He would not," and "I told him I could not." The contrast of the two might prove to make a bigger impact.

This is only a suggestion, it is, after all, your story; and it's a good one! Thanks for sharing! Write On!
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Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a good story; albeit kind of short. But I like that when reviewing. It has a kind of old-movie Bogart feel to it. It's a nice tight package with no loose ends or anything haning like stale smoke in a run down gin joint at the edge of town. There is a good plot and nice characterization. All of the elements are in place. Great job! Well done! Write on!
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Review of Snowflake  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a good analogy and how well I remember feeling just like this when I was in middle school. Your thoughts are very well put down here. I just love stuff that is said between the lines and you have accomplished that well. It is important to remember that even a snowflake, though seemingly insignificant in the accumulation is still unique in and of itself. There is absolutely no other like it, in this regard, I found your thoughts beautiful. Nice work, and welcome to WDC! Write on!
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Review of The Last Ride  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Parrothead: First, I would like to say welcome to WDC! I hope you are being made to feel at home here in our big family! Now with that said, on to your poem! I really enjoyed this most engaging work. It is an intimate sharing of the last moments of this cow poke's life. There is a good plot and a nice ending. The only thing I would point out is that although there are no spelling errors it is possible to spell check and item and still have a problem such as in the very first line. The word "role" is not misspelled but it is not the proper word. "Roll" should have been used here. Other than that this is a nice poem. It is very engaging and descriptive. You had nice use of setting and characterization. Lots of story elements were well done as well as the poem itself. Thanks for sharing, and again, welcome to WDC. If I can help you get settled in here, please don't hesitate to let me know.
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Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.5)
You have captured the futility, frustration, and tediousness of the work day in this clever and packed piece. Effectively this is a looke over your shoulder while you accomplish more than a few good things at work. I like the different attitudes you have included and how you have engaged our senses. This is really nice work! Write on!
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Review of Pauperbacks  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Oh this is a nice tid-bit! It's meter flows smoothly. Definitely well thought and planned. You deliver a story, a message, and ask a thought provoking question all in the context of delivering a really nice metaphor. I truly enjoyed this. Very well done! Thanks for sharing! Write on!
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Review of Knight of Hues  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Very interesting work and done from beginning to end with questions. That is one thing that definitely got my attention. Your poem moves smoothly from begining to end and is rife with visual stimulaiton. All in allI really enjoyed this poem. Thanks for sharing it! Welcome to WDC! Let me know if I can help you get settled in! Write on!
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Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Very interesting work and rife with rich symbols of regret and despair. There is a lot of depression and as you mentioned it is a very dark poem. It does move quickly from beginning to end and it tells a story in an artful and well thought manner. I enjoyed reading it very much. Thanks for sharing! BTW, welcome to WDC! If I can help you get settled in, please let me know! Write on!
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Review of My Angel  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.5)
You have effectively communicated your anguish and grief in just two short verses. This is a nice and tight little piece that accomplishes so much in so little space. It tells a story, however brief, about loss, and sadness. Welcome to WDC! If I can do anything to help you get settled in, please let me know! Thanks for sharing your work and your heart. Write on!
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Review of Stranger  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Maverick: Welcome to WDC! Nice job on this poem. It moves well from beginning to end. Your word choices created a most interesting pattern that was easy for me to follow. No real problems here. You did a good job! I really enjoyed it and look forward to seeing more from you in the future! Keep up the good work! Write on!
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Review of Karma  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Carrie: I enjoyed the theme and structure to your "Karma" very much. I found it to be well thought out, planned and executed. No spelling or grammar issues that I could identify. I found the internal changes the character was undergoing to be very interesting. There is a good story here as well as the poem. Really nice work! Welcome to WDC! Write On!
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Review of gaia  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is an interesting little tale disguised in verse. It mourns the apparent abuse of a deity of some sort, or at least that deity's provision. There are a couple of things that are a little bit distracting and I am not sure if this was intentional or not. The first is the entire work is in lower case and the second is a complete lack of punctuation. If there is an artistic reason for this I'm sorry but it escapes me. On the other hand though I suppose a case could be made that it could be used to make a point of the supplicant's insignificance as compared to the deity's magnificence? Also please notice that the word defile was spelled "defial;" it's just a little bit distracting from what you are trying to accomplish. Still it was a nice piece to read and it does tell a story that is complete and succinct; in that, it's a nice read. Take care, and Write On!
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Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Your poem tells an interesting little story. Your central character is certainly going through a constellation of emotions. Spelling looks good. It moves nicely from beginning to end. Now for me, and I want to stress just that, for me the ending is good but it could be better. She goes from grieving the loss, to a bit of anguish, and perhaps then to some anger that is shown to us by the sarcasm near the middle. I can't believe I am suggesting this to someone for the second time in as many days, but I would have her anger turn to rage at this point, and perhaps to the point of plotting some sort of revenge. Now this is only a suggestion. It is, after all, your poem and you have done a very nice job. Write on!
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Review of Only For Me  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Oh the thoughts shared by only a glance between lovers. You almost put me in a poetic mood too! This is very well done. It has good word pictures and a smooth cadence from beginning to end. No spelling problems. You have presented this situation in a most artful fashion that shows you spent the time and thought this through. This is really nice work! Thanks for sharing it with us. Welcome to the WDC community. If I can be of any help to you, please don't hesitate to let me know.
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Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is really nice work. It has good word pictures and good cadence to it. It also flows along really well. You have actually painted a very complex picture here. I really enjoyed the changes of you bringing us from the beginning to the end and a story is told. There are so many different emotions that come through. You have invested time and thought into this piece and it shows. The only suggestion I have is some proof reading. There are a couple of spelling errors and I have pasted them below. Otherwise I really enjoyed your work! Looking forward to really good stuff from ya! So glad you are here! Welcome to the WDC family!

Why does this fish insist apon trying?

Conceil me within your sweet arms, and just lie.
Conceil me within your sweet arms, and just lie.
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Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an absolutely delightful poem. I love the way it flows from beginning to end with a wonderful cadence built into it. The word pictures and symbology used is magnificent! The entire concept is very clever! As the wand maker told Harry Potter: "I think we are going to see great things from you." Welcome to WDC! Feel free to call on me if I can help!
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Review of left  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I must have read this at least 10 times, probably more. There is a lot of abandonment and betrayal coming through on my read. Certainly also heartache and sorrow. As far as the opening paragraph I would either be more direct or more metaphorical. I get that this is a description of tears and sorrow. But unless it is "raining from the sky, and my soul. . ." the opening just doesn't work for me. Otherwise I do really enjoy it. It has a nice flow and logical presentation. Good job! Write on!
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Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is too cute! You not only tell the story accurately but you tell it with only dialogue. With dialog you have setting, plot, and a bit of tension with humor mixed in for good measure. This was absolutely delightful! It is nice and tight with no problems that I could see. Great Job! Write On!
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Review of Mother Asylum  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
There is an interesting journey here in the mind of the solo character. They are filled with so many questions. Emptiness and futility are what come through to me. Perhaps some of what the writer of Ecclesiastes in the Bible noted. There is nothing new under the sun. In your character's mind what I get is "is this all there is?" There is also futility and frustration. I like the quick rapid fire manner of presentaiton as well. Good job! Write on!
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Review of Fresh Snow  
Review by tYpO/T.Boilerman
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Marc! You have a nice piece of work here. It flows well from beginning to end. It gets my attention in that it is crisp and clean just like new snow! It's the fluffy powdery kind that is fun to walk in and I had fun reading this little gem several times. Really nice work! Write on!
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