Oh this is a nice poem. I like how you used a person's feelings in words: it makes the poem sound realistic and almost like a diary! I guess that poor person is a little chicken to make his/her next move in having a relationship. I am guessing this poem is a Free Verse? I like writing those.
Wow, good job!!! This, I believe is a very heartfelt, emotional poem with lots of hidden feelings! Of love? Of loneliness? Of homesickness? Great job, it was really cool of you to repeat some lines. Very creative:) Is this a Free Verse poem? I love those kind of poems
Wow this is really good. You have put a lot of emotion and feeling into this mysterious poem. It takes some figuring out what's happening in the poem; I think people are having sex? Your word choices, punctuation, and spelling are amazing. Especially the words you choose to enrich this poem. It's so powerful and heartfeeling:) Good job! You are definitely a natural poet. You've got talent.
Lololololol this is a hilarious story! I practically fell out of my chair laughing and my sides split! You did amazing with the word choice, humor, punctuation and spelling. I have to admit I tried to find errors but I found none. And that's a good thing. Most other people I have reviewed always seem to have some sort of spelling or punctuation error that I have to point it out for them to fix. Not you, though! Amazing job:)
Wo-ow!!! Omg you are a great poet!! :3 Yeah you probably have a talent in poetry!!!!!!!! Oh can u read my story too please lol I have a kinda poetic song type Thingy in my story. Have you thought of publishing a book of poems all written by you? You could be the next Edgar Allan Poe on a lighter side:)
This is a very cute story and definitely for children, although I would prefer that the sentences not be in such short quick bursts. The sentences are rather choppy, and to make a child understand the story better, to change certain words into easier worlds to understand. For example: injured--->hurt. Cute story, though!!!
Wo-ow!!! This omg is soo good! Ha actually I was really amused with this story. Besides your story being incredibly long and interesting, it's not really all dark and scary. Just startling. Apart from the language being a bit strong (I'm not really a fan of cussing stories), your attention to detail is amazing. I sincerely believe you have talent. Are you a real author??? If not, then, you are fit to be a bestselling-type author!!
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