WHAT I LIKED
I really thought you did a great job with this poem.
WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing really. The only thing I can think of is that it didn't move me. That's it.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
- I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
IN MY OPINION…
A nice short poem, but missing something.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the subject matter and the simplicity of the poem.
WHAT I DISLIKED
It felt like it was "part" of a poem. It doesn't feel complete. It feels like you're missing the ending.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I noticed.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I would continue this poem. Maybe try to find a fitting ending for it. "Of friends" just doesn't seem like the end.
- I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.
WHAT I LIKED
Everything. It makes me want to get to know you better.
WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I look forward to getting to know you. BTW, I couldn't find the item you listed as your favorite in the CYAW Group Application. Can you email it to me in bitem format?
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IN MY OPINION…
This is an emotional and touching poem.
WHAT I LIKED
My favorite line is, "While tears are waiting in the wings."
WHAT I DISLIKED
I wished the poem was one more stanza. I would have liked you to repeat the line above, kind of like bookends. Just my personal preference.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
The only suggestion I have is to expand this poem. But no matter what this is a great piece!!
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WHAT I LIKED
I liked how you described all the Barbie's you own.
WHAT I DISLIKED
I thought you could add more information and/or facts about Barbie in the essay.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
In the 1st paragraph - Doctor should not be capitalized.
In the 2nd paragraph - sienged = singed
In the 4th paragraph - dools = dolls
In last paragraph - Barbie got through me through my childhood = you have an extra through in there. Should be "Barbie got me through my childhood."
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I use to collect Barbie's as well. I have many Barbie's that I plan on giving my daughter once she moves out. I, too, loved playing with Barbie growing up. This essay reminded me of those special times. Thank you.
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WHAT I LIKED
I really liked the basketball analogy.
WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing really.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
their live would have been lived in vain = their lives
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
My only suggestion is to keep on writing. Good job!
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WHAT I LIKED
I liked the light feeling of this poem.
WHAT I DISLIKED
It feels like you could expand this.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
The title should have periods not commas. Skate...My First Date
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I don't have any suggestions to make this poem better except that you could make it longer. It felt like it was missing something. Because of this I gave it a solid 4.5 stars.
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WHAT I LIKED
Great job! I found it to be an interesting and enjoyable read.
WHAT I DISLIKED
There was absolutely nothing I disliked. But I do have a question: Why do you call Donuskae three different names (Donuskae, Don, and Uskae)? It was a little confusing. And I would introduce him to the story as Donuskae and then introduce his nickname. It's just a suggestion.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I noticed.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
The only suggestion I have is to only use two names for Donuskae instead of three.
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WHAT I LIKED
I liked the overall story. I really enjoyed reading it.
WHAT I DISLIKED
I think you could have explained some of the horse things better. If someone doesn't know horses it's hard to understand what you're saying in some parts.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
She was was an eye catcher.=only one was
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Good job! Keep on writing.
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Fancy
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WHAT I DISLIKED
The ending seems confusing. You talk about how you missed this person then you say you never left.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
I think your title should be Cold, not Old.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I would change the ending to fit the poem.
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IN MY OPINION…
What a wonderful piece! I love our LORD!!
WHAT I LIKED
I loved the content and the concept.
WHAT I DISLIKED
I feel like it is too short. I think you can totally expand this piece.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
When my first baby was still born=stillborn
my heart was having trouble understanding why?=no question mark
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I think this is a lovely short piece. I'm sorry you've gone through these hardships. May God bless you and keep you safe.
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Hi Steve!
I just want to welcome you to WDC. I, too, have not written in years. I'm looking forward to writing and learning more about the craft.
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
FANCY’S REVIEW
Item Reviewed – Shaped To Speak
IN MY OPINION…
Strange, yet interesting piece.
WHAT I LIKED
This piece was very descriptive.
WHAT I DISLIKED
My confusion. I am confused as to what exactly happened to the man. Please explain.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
I was beautiful beyond expression.=It
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I would really like to find out what happened in this story. Please reply.
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WHAT I LIKED
I like the concept of the poem. It has great potential.
WHAT I DISLIKED
You deserve every good thing at least today - "at least today" sounds awkward. I would simply take that part out.
How you got so lucky, we might never know. - This line doesn't really sound right for this poem. You're telling her how great she is and then you say you don't know how she got so lucky.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Well done. I think with a couple of revisions this can be a great poem.
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WHAT I LIKED
I loved this story. It is beautiful and sad.
WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I have no suggestions to make this story better. You've done a great job. Well done!
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Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
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WHAT I LIKED
I loved how the story was from the POV of Annabelle.
I liked your descriptions.
I could totally hear the character's voices.
WHAT I DISLIKED
The ending, of course.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Well done! Good luck in the contest.
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Fancy
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IN MY OPINION…
Great article! Completely on point!
WHAT I LIKED
I loved this article. I learned a lot. Thank you.
WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing that I can think of.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Thank you for this article. While I've been thinking of all the ways to make my stories better, I never thought about pacing. Thanks for the reminder.
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Fancy
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WHAT I LIKED
I think this is a very interesting story line.
WHAT I DISLIKED
A couple of things bothered me.
1. You don't need to say "then asked her in animal language." Let people just assume these animals can communicate.
2. I don't know if you need to explain how the wolf's milk dried up. If you do feel the need to explain this, I would do it sooner in the story. Maybe around the time you say the wolf's "nipples are dripping with milk" you could explain why.
3. I think you should state that the fox is young early on in your story. It doesn't seem to fit when you use parenthesis to say (he was a very young fox).
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
These are just my personal opinions. Hope they are helpful.
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Fancy
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WHAT I LIKED
I liked the tone of this poem. Very fun and light.
WHAT I DISLIKED
I didn't like how some lines rhymed and some didn't. I think you should stick to one or the other. Either rhyme the whole way through or not at all. Just my personal opinion.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
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WHAT I LIKED
I liked how you used the word WORTHLESS. I also loved the word tetrahedral. Great vocabulary word!
WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing I can think of.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I have nothing to add to make this poem better.
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Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
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IN MY OPINION…
This is an interesting poem and point of view.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked how you bookended the poem with the phrase "Products, Not free. People, Not free."
WHAT I DISLIKED
"People" and "feeble" is a stretch when it comes to rhyming.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
Nothing I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I'm interested in looking at your other pieces. Are they all political?
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WHAT I LIKED
I liked Tom and Patsy's relationship.
WHAT I DISLIKED
See Below, GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
You need to work on editing this piece. There are no quotes around spoken words, capitals at the beginning of a sentences, etc.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
My only suggestions (at this time) is to go in and edit your work for punctuations. It was hard to read without them.
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Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
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WHAT I LIKED
The poem is sweet and whimsical. Also, great word "effervesce"!
WHAT I DISLIKED
There was nothing I disliked. I just have a one idea. You use the word "dismay" twice. It makes it feel repetitive. I would change that.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Well done! Looking forward to reading more of your work.
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Sherri,
First let me comment on that number next to your name. 1059!?!?!? WOW!! Good job! How do you get that high? That's crazy talk.
FANCY’S REVIEW
Item Reviewed – Go Away?
IN MY OPINION…
This is a well written poem that reminds me of someone I know. ;)
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the content of the poem.
WHAT I DISLIKED
It wasn't so much that I disliked it. It is just something I noticed. All the stanzas end with "go away" twice (ie.“Leave me alone. Just go away! Go away!") Your first stanza is different where it only says "go away" once. I'm not saying it's wrong. I'm just saying I noticed it.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Thank you for your review of my poem. I thought I'd stop by and review something of yours. I'll come back when I can stay longer. You have a lot to read in your port.
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IN MY OPINION…
This is a well written (maybe too well written) essay.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked your argument. It goes along with my beliefs. I'm glad that many people are reading your essay.
WHAT I DISLIKED
It was written so well it was hard to understand in areas. I'm worried that the average person is going to have a hard time understanding what you're trying to convey.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I wish you would write this same piece in a less formal manner. This way the average person can get more out of your piece.
-Take it or leave it. I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a great writer.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!
Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
“May the Muse join you on your journey, and may your writing and your life continue to surprise you.” ~ Judy Reeves
IN MY OPINION…
This is a well written piece. I really enjoyed reading it.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the story that came from that simple prompt.
WHAT I DISLIKED
The only thing I can say I didn't like was the ending. I felt like this story could have continued. It leaves you hanging. I know you had the ability to write more words in the contest. I think you should have written more.
SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Well done! I would suggest you continue this story and expand it. I felt invested and I didn't get a pay off.
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1059!?!?!? WOW!! Good job! How do you get that high? That's crazy talk. 
