I'm crying, I' crying the creative you have in truly a gift and please, I do not just say this. Everyone do not have the gift of creativity, many things can be done with this ability that you have. The creation that you was produced in this piece is unspeakable. I'm still laugh at Santa, poor fellow. Great writing ability, please keep this moving!
What chapter are we in? This is a tv show and I'm eating my popcorn and we're all sitting at the edge of our seats. This is somewhat the results of how people react to EXCELLENT stories. We are spellbound and can not move. The characters, Diane Trudy, Shannon and Craig prove to me that this was well thought out and can easily go in book form or what about TV Hats Off!
This is brilliant in all aspects from the words to the rhythm to the structure. This is
seriously worthy the time I review, I just know there is a sincere writing coming soon.
And here you are! I enjoyed, music to the ear. Keep writing and striving for Greatness
Very Touchy, This story is done with great kindness and generosity from a true military solider. The part abut the plate at the table was somewhat personal and
a delight to the the reader. Just to hear the concern that this family had for military in itself is touchy. The story was rewarding and refreshing to read, for some who have no family in the military, they can hear the experience and learn to appreciate the freedom that so many times we take for granted. Excellent story and I feel that we(the general public) need to read more of your stories.
Keep Writing!
Great piece; Yes they did hunt for there food and they did live close to the running rivers where fresh fish was plenty. I've done some research on my own family and I do know some basic things about the Native Fathers. Oh, they did pray!
Excellent from your heart and with room for more. I would but this in the catagory of a poem not poetry. Great Reading
Beautiful piece of work, I could feel the motion written in the words, the foot steps were loud yet quite as a dove. This is great work, well thought out and present. For some reason the instrument that I could see was a drum and of course, the sticks
intersting piece of work. I also felt a native spirit rising up and moving all through this remarkable piece. Someone is watching,keep writing
The Rhythm is truly there! Great choice of words. In your four columns you stated what was necessary, then you were out. You did not prolong the sound, you hit and ran.By doing this you stayed with the beat, good in the poetic world.
That's Coolllll! The ability to cause a mind to wonder in a gift that everyone does not have. Those (4) lines, were more powerful that you can ever imagine.
Keep Writing!
Interesting story, well thought out point well taken ,as I am sure it was given. The difference examples used to state your views was neatly placed and your personal testimony just fit right into it's place. Overall this is something we all must learn to do and many of us are still struggling with the how to, Forgive.
Great Piece!
Sheep
What a breathe of fresh air this is, yes, the irony and ability to produce such a story about the Greatness of others and yet you have that same Greatness in oneselve. This is truly outstanding to me. The rarity in the story is, you have place Anne Frank in the same story with Clark Kent, along with Shakespeare's Lancelot. This is very usual,but tastefully done.
I am with you with this, even if a begining or and end. Some good things atart off small and they grow to become big things. I saw your protential I could feel this was from your heart. Keep writing and you will fine tune your skills.
I feel you, yes I really feel you. This is truly from the heart. I read it and then I read it again. Like the concept the purpose was there and it was productive and not just a pile of words, thrown together!
Hats Off
This is cute, very cute. Your entire idea is great, structure a plus your characters of course, the kids are just what the mother needs. To be Away! Couldn't resist that.
It's interesting to hear the way you'rehandling your empty nest. Now what better way than to get a four legged child. They already think their human, this is a great story, great for mom's who have kids going off to college. I enjoyed
Sheep
Wow! what a imagination you have. This is something else, you just need structure adjustments, (corrections) in your sentences. However, I got your general thought and it's really something to write in this tense which is past and presence. Wow, I must say that again, Hats Off! I liked that. Keep on writing and you will fine tune your story. Great thought process.
Sheep
This is a intense story, the suspense was great the character excellent. Story structure a plus. I enjoyed the beginning to end,plenty of reasoning in your story. The surprise to me was in the end he did not want to leave his family touching!
Sheep
Really different, so different I had to read this twice, it's nice very creative more appealing to a picture book publisher! Very extraodinary, the choice of words
are select with care, all to make the writing stand at attention! Very Interesting
sheep
Wow! this was eye opening, to actually take a Reindeer and place him in something that has nothing to do with Santa is remarkable. Story: well thought out subject matter: great characters: very interesting sentence structure: good creative:yes
sheep
This is a Blaze! I like it because I live around those four legged creatures and I think they are cute and very smart too. Here they dig holes in the ground and bury their pecans. Your dialogue was great, structure was to the point you spoke about your experience with the squirrels very candied.
Great piece
sheep
Makes me think more about Hallows Eve and what it means to others. Great descriptive work along with the company of family and food, which are all best vocal points for any story. Personally I found the part of being in college and having to study with music, I did that got an excellent t shirt and many A's too.
Interesting format: The WereWolf acting like a human, communicating with humans and it's no big deal. Okay, Now the part about the name of the child was cute and differentiate the pronouncation which placed the two sets of people to join together.
Very Interesting, I kept thinking that Jessica was going to drank the blood from her mate Neil. One thing I must state and that is I am guilty of being upset with women, who stay in relationships like this one. To read this piece and see that someone did leave, even tho you did leave the end where Jessican could return at anytime, I still enjoyed the entire work.
I only had one problem the margin to the right was a little to close to the frame. It became hard for me to figure out which word was to my right.
Overall your idea of what a christian is was interesting. I like the way you started your piece, by first setting a floor plan.
Hats Off!
Sheep
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