This is truly a descriptive piece of work, you could not ask for more detail and you have pro-trade d in this work. The general plot was great the along with your story line. It put me in a place over seas, where things like this probably did happen in the 18th century.
To use the setting of a harlequin as the main character was a plus as well!
Pat your self on the back, Or do you know if you have a back or not? This is remarkable work, It's like I'm communicating with the AIR something I can't see or touch but it can write.
This would truly make a great book or even a movie of course you would have to lengthen it a bit. This is truly great, the setting is quite interesting your character yourself is excellent. Even activity was in place and your ideas and your imagination is superb!
I found no mistakes in your constructor and your writing style was great!
What planet are you living on, is Alfred Hitchcock your relative? This is the BEST I've read YET!!
More, More, I am at the edge of my sit and waiting for the rest of this story, please don't stop NOW, I can't go to sleep.
I will wonder what the outcome was. Everything was excellent about this piece, there were NO Flaws in your writing. Very Exciting,Great Thriller,
Electrifying. MORE! MORE!
Interesting piece I can appreciate the fact that this was written with carefully selected words. Anything else would not do any justice.
Sounds like something from a horror movie and yet you project, Love and kindness at the end! Very touchy
Full, Full great piece I haven't seen in a while,allow me to pat you on your back. Children like you are a rarity today. Your father is blessed to have one so special as you, you have already stated that you are his eyes and as I read this piece I began to believe that you were and at the end to see that you have stepped up to the plate and hit a home run.(Deciding to be there for your Dad) is remarkable. Excellent!
Read Out Loud!
Exciting and Breathe Taking, I can feel the movement of your words in each line.
The words you use jump right off the page with the main course "Rhythm"
This is truly a remarkable piece, it stands to be suitable for a book marker, greeting card and more!
Great very inform to the point in a business type savvy way. Holds your interest and does the main then and that is to put your mind into wondering what is this Speedy course and where can I get more information.
Loaded down with information about how you too can make a change in your own life. Very upbeat!
Great for Commercial writing.
Hey: Takes Six is something that you would see while sitting in the director chair
This is nicely done, is reminds me of a series of stories in a book or on a movie screen.
I guess the best would be movie theater since this is the setting through the writing.
I kinda like your concept the poem structure
but there is a stronger need for rhythm and tune
At one moment I think you writing in e bonnets
Then the next line you're not.
Not sure if somethings were mistakes on purpose or not.
Need a little more clarity in your piece.
Don't stop!
Very interesting piece of work, To the point and yet has a rhyme of it's own. Concept a plus and the setting is very quine in it's own way. It is a breathe of fresh air along with the words that are used.
Hey, thanks for the Psychology class, interesting read, in the art world colors are everything and everything is colors. Yes, there is a meaning behind all colors that is why and how they were created. Red is the defined color of temper and rage, earth tones are always safe and neutral.Some fine tuning could be in order here,and yet this could be your style of writing?
Your writing is great the contempt is interesting. Keep the Psychology going and enjoy writing.
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If ever there was something to love, this is it! Without any doubt your langage is superior. The writing is of everyday word usage, yet their is a beautiful flare to your letters!
Personally and professionaly I can not find anything wrong with this piece of work!
Quit interesting, your choice of characters are a plus, I don't doubt that this story is being played out in many schools around the country. It reminds me of walking down the street in New York, we all see you, but no one will come to your rescue, if your in a distress situation.
Many will be able to say they can feel your pain but none will come to your aid, whether in the public or private of your home.
Overall your piece begin with many of the tracts of a battered woman/battered girl someone effected by bullying. I can feel the tenseness in the way Austin answers and the gentleness he receives once he's around folks who care and have Godly concern.
Great story, very inspiring at the same time very moving. Who's to say battering only happens to a female!
Reminds me of so many things in life, how we have a passion to do something and how something like Ghosts work against our success, even tho we try hard to triumph with victory other times we are beaten so hard until we ourselves don't believe we can any more.
This is a great piece in it's own rights, and everyone of us can in some way relate to this whether it's a tower or a garden something has beaten us down and we have tried hard to overcome.
Your plot and purpose of this was very excellent and it sounds like something that can motive many of our countrymen who sometime fall in a dump!
Tears are truly at the center of this writing, my heart is heavy as well. This is a great piece, for a moment I thought
this person was apart of our military. This maybe only on paper to some, but to others this is the real deal.
Your depth of words and feelings were mixed together. The love and concern were also presence.
So fixing for an occasion as 5/11/14 the words became real like they stood up on the page. We all can feel you.
The descriptive choice of words that you used were of an excellent choice. Supply of clarity and mostly superior for the May 11.
Unique in it's on way, Your feelings are revolving all around this piece. Great for a romance novel with some fine tuning this piece of work can be around for a long time. Your feelings are made known without reservation.
Emotional this is, very emotional. Usually the art behind poetry is a beat a tune a little rhythm, ? The art behind poetry is to feel the words whether they are running words or strong words, but usually you will have a beat. Now, in reading this piece I find the movement of your words very slows and some are too emotional.
To fairly critique your work, I truly suggest and little more time and patience, things can only get better.
Nice piece, great descriptive information on the event that you missed (Mother's Day} the feelings that you project were honest and genuine.
A little fine tuning can improve your story. Overall this can be a interesting read. Mothers love to be treated special on this special and their birthday. Nevertheless, your organizing of this piece was remarkable and yes, I do enjoy brownies.
Amazing event, amazing writing, I could feel your panic the excitement in every word that was displayed in this piece. I am aware of the fact that you place this under a poetry. I just feel that it could also be placed, in a novel form as well. Which can only mean, we need more from you. Excellent setting, general plot remarkably done.
Why do I feel this way? These words are design to encourage, shine a light on the way we view life, but it enlightens us to the real way. Yes, this is my personal feeling about these words. I need this I know many others too.
Now about your thoughts in this piece nothing short of the truth, the words are from your soul which has displayed a huge amount of knowledge. This is great for the inspiration section, the encouragement section and the achievement section.
Very Interesting Very Interesting, must I had to read this twice maybe three times to really feel you. Once that was over I could embrace your concept and see your vision. While reading this you eventually learn that you are no longer alive and that all the chances you have are over.
Sadness appears and finally contentment because the choices were all your own. Structure is a plus with great rythmn
Love your thoughts
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