I enjoyed your story very much. Both characters are unique and distinct. Humor is sprinkled throughout, and it highlights the inherent silliness of predicting the weather based on whether a groundhog sees his shadow. The story is well-written overall, and very entertaining.
I enjoyed your story. The story is interesting, and the main character is distinct. His confusion and anxiety were clear. I would enjoy reading more of this story. I noticed that each sentence is a separate line/paragraph. It did make reading the story a little difficult. Putting a space between each paragraph and/or indenting the paragraphs would aid readability.
Also, some of the sentences can been combined to make a single paragraph instead of several paragraphs. For example, the section that starts with, " I pushed my desk away, looking for my backpack," and ends with, "Nobody ever cared to take a look; except me, who was trying hard to avoid stepping on the shattered glasses on either side of the floor," could be one paragraph, instead of what appears to be eight. However, it may be the formatting. Overall, a good story with a lot of potential.
I enjoyed your piece. It's well-written and expresses your fond memories of past Halloweens. As a fellow lover of Halloween and all things spooky, I enjoyed accompanying on your trip down memory lane to the spookiness of days past. Well done. Happy Halloween.
I enjoyed your limerick very much. It's well written and utilizes the form well. It's a short limerick but the shortness of it doesn't take away from the limerick at all. The length is well-used, and no word is wasted. The subject of the limerick, wanting to write a poem about a specific thing but not being able to get it to work, is a familiar one. Very well done.
I enjoyed your story very much. The characters are well-written and distinct. The descriptions were well done, bringing life to the characters, events and the story as a whole. I enjoyed the way you weaved the world building throughout the story. Overall, this is a very well-written story. Good work.
I enjoyed your poem. It does very well in expressing heartbreak and the pain it causes. The tone is consistent throughout. The use of free verse aids the poem in expressing its' subject. Even though there's no rhyme scheme in the poem, that doesn't detract from the poem at all. Overall, well done.
I enjoyed your haiku very much. It does a lot to invoke the image of forests and it does so with very little. It's a different style of haiku, one I haven't tried myself yet, but it's a good demonstration of the style. This is a very good poem. Good job.
I enjoyed your story. It's well written and consistent. Both characters are distinct, and their first meeting is sweet. I did notice that in the fifteenth paragraph, when Jo comes back from New York there's the line, "I had not asked the right questions with the right tone, at the right I thought..". It reads like there's a word missing between the last "right" and "I" that would allow the line to make a bit more sense and there's also a second period. Also, in the next paragraph the line, "I couldn't fathom how you just go from, I love you, to nothing," has extra spacing between "I" and "couldn't" which end up splitting the sentence and the paragraph a bit awkwardly. But overall, this is a sweet story.
I enjoyed your poem very much. It's well written and consistent. While it's not very long, the poem's length doesn't take away from the details. Having heard the folklore about the Superstition Mountains, this poem does very well in expressing the folklore and bringing it to life. Good work.
This is a good start. I would recommend spacing out the lines and indenting for clearer, more distinct paragraphs and easier reading. Also, adding quotation marks when characters are speaking will assist in readability. Adding more detail will help draw in readers. Altogether, this is a good start to a story, and it has a lot of potential.
I enjoyed your comparison between three different versions of a well-loved fairytale. It's well-written and well-thought out. Your critique details both the differences between the versions and the similarities between them very well. Very well done.
I enjoyed your story very much. The story is very well-written, and the two characters are distinct. The story is short, but it doesn't detract from the story at all. The story does very well in doing a lot in a little. The plot, though brief, is intriguing and it didn't go where I was expecting it to go. Very well done.
I enjoyed your story. It's both humorous and interesting to see the story of a cat attacking a ball of yarn from the yarn's perspective. One thing I did notice is that although there are obvious paragraphs, they're not indented nor are there spaces between them. Even though the story is short, indenting the paragraphs or having a space between them would add to the readability.
I enjoyed reading your travel experience of visiting Fort Lauderdale, Florida, particularly ad someone who's never visited the city. I also enjoyed your restaurant reviews/recommendations. I'll have to keep Tiki Tiki in mind should I pay a visit Fort Lauderdale.
I enjoyed your story very much. It's well-written and cohesive. The characters are distinct and interesting. The world-building sprinkled throughout the story are interesting and give a distinct impression of the world the story's set in. Overall, a well-written story. I look forward to reading more about these characters.
I enjoyed your poem very much. The poem was well-written, and I found the form interesting. The subject of crossword puzzles, their difficulty and the unique, interesting clues that are utilized within them are well expressed. There isn't a rhyme scheme in the poem, but it doesn't take away from the poem at all. Overall, a very well-done poem.
I enjoyed your piece very much. It's a well-written letter that details both the things the writer had already done this year and the writer's plans for the rest of the year. I enjoyed the conversational nature and tone of the letter, which remains consistent throughout.
I enjoyed your story very much. It's very well-written piece about honoring a hero and grief. The lead character has a distinct voice. The grief over the loss is clear and well expressed. Having lost both my grandfathers, I understand the loss she's feeling. Overall, a fantastic piece. Goof job.
I enjoyed your poem. It's very well-written and incredibly relevant. Though the poem doesn't have a rhyme scheme, that doesn't detract from the poem at all. The theme and style remain consistent throughout. Overall, this poem is very well-done. Very good job.
I enjoyed your article very much. It's very informative about building characters and how they're important for long stories/series. The resources the article contains are well explained and useful. Overall, this is a well-written and helpful article.
I enjoyed your poem very much. The rhyme scheme and theme were consistent throughout. The speaker's opinion on not wishing is well-expressed through each line. Taking the last word of each line and using it as the first word of the next line was an interesting choice that was very well-done.
I enjoyed your poem very much. It's a colorful, descriptive look at the solstice and summer itself. It brings all the images of the flowers , the shores and the mountains forward. I also enjoyed the image of nature being an artist bringing color back to the world after winter's chill.
I enjoyed your poem very much. It captures the spirit of winter clearly. The rhyme was consistent throughout the poem. The words used were descriptive and created clear images. I'm very glad you decided to share this poem with us. Keep up the good work.
I enjoyed your story very much. I found the story entertaining and the characters interesting. I did notice two spelling errors. The first is is when the female board member is speaking. I believe it should say "an", not "and". The second spelling error was in the second to last sentence which says "hoe" instead of home. But it was overall a good story.
I enjoyed your story very much. Even though it's short the word count was well utilized. Each character is unique and displays distinct personality. The slight twist at the end was unexpected and well-done. I did notice one small thing. The last sentence doesn't have the second quotation mark. Overall, well-done.
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