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Review of love  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Who doesn't love the subject of love? Who understands it, without a bit of craziness

Overall impression of piece This is kind of a come-along-side type of piece that works aslong as we believe you

Grammatical and spelling errors: Quotes begin with a capital

What I liked?*Smile* YOu do have examples of perceived love, but they tend to be a bit cliche. I love love crosses out flaws. It is just them

Points to Ponder:*Idea* There are a ton of cliches in here, like actions speak larger than words. You have kind of set yourself up as the resident expert on love. There are innumerable resources, especially the Bible and Jesus. You spoke of this generally; we don't become an expert until we wrestle with it permanently

How the piece made me feel I have been married for 46 years and counting. It changes

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I saw your picture on your port. Your smile makes you look like a dandelion. Jesus wasn't talking about planted gardens. God has a way of taking care of "His" pets. There is color and emotion here God made many beautiful things in the wild world.

I wouldn't give up "flower power."

Michael
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Review of VINTAGE  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I get this. I shop a lot at second hand stores. When their clothes are better than mine, it is time to go shopping. I asked one impeccably dressed clerk if he bought all his clothes there. He assured me, he did

I don't see any errors at your edit points. This almost seems like a commercial. I am not sure what the purpose was. I spent time in Edmonton so the our on color brought back memories.

I notice you have quite a writing background. Up to 10 pieces are free and after that, pretty reasonable

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the shameless plug page

Overall impression of piece: I believe this is a real happening. It is raining today (in the desert) and wonder about the "Why" of existence

Grammatical and spelling errors Some of your allusions to Ponodorros are beyond me

What I liked?*Smile* Interesting imagery of dry branch and tinder. I feel that way until I take a closer look atmyself. The albatross allusion makes me think of "Rhyme of the Ancient Mariner by Coleridge. I think the people would die for any sense of normality

Points to Ponder:*Idea*: Misery can be very apparent to you, but some of it is harder to follow. Mos Eisley is beyond me.

How the piece made me feelThe rest of my world has gone back to work. Since I am a professional volunteer I am left here alone watching it rain. It is a staged horror show

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of What We Never Had  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the fearless plug page

Overall impression of piece: Sensuousity in spades. I feel what is going on here

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I love your explanation of the form, You do tell a story that is very easy to follow. It is logical and sequential

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Lips and rips is kind of a strained rhyme. My lips don't rip

How the piece made me feelThis whole season of Covid has been a season of loss. I almost figure that death would have been easier. Do we have to die, a bit to move on? I wonder about that. Intimate relations are not always physical--especially as you get older.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Lost  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this pieceWelcome to WDC. Saw this in a review column

Overall impression of piece This is quite picturesque

Grammatical and spelling errors Dashes are two hyphens together. Like her deserved: maybe she. A genuine heart felt smile is kind of a clause; maybe join it with a dash. Sentence fragments in the last paragraph

What I liked?*Smile* I can see and feel a lot of what is going on. The descriptions are visceral and identifiable

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I am not sure what the friend is about

How the piece made me feelI am not sure why this was written. It is kind of on the prose side which makes the grammar things more manageable. There is talent here.

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Review of Phone Call  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This came up on a random review. Often, I am not a flash fiction fan. You have the whole story here and it makes sense (As much as life ever does).

We try and make sense of things when life can and is pretty chaotic. I love that he never says what "It"is that she can do. This is entertaining and captures the basic human conundrum
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Review of Life  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece A newbie review. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: You have got some pretty good basic thoughts. Life is not for wimps and the faint of heart.

Grammatical and spelling errors I would like some punctuation

What I liked?*Smile* I like the line of don't look where your fell. That certainly does happen

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Life is hard borders cliche

How the piece made me feel I am not too sure where up is. I think a lot would be confused

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is kind of unique. I have heard most of these affirmations before but never have been given a reason to do them. If we don't feel them, we won't do them. Indians of yore understood these things. I think they were closer to God than most Christian white guys. This is a relationship and loving the world we live in is a part of it.

Michael
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Review of Void  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I Like this one better. It shows the anonymity of today's person That is still a creature of the night. I can feel like nothing and be a part of everything.

Are we light on a dark dark night? Are we supposed to blend with darkness? We are part of a dark world but hopefully, we have something to offer.
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Review of Overgrowth  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
You start off with interaction between you and the forest. And someone is watching. I wonder what a city of spiderwebs would look like. The forest has a presence. I and most people would get this.

I am not sure if you can overstate this. What's it like? You are trying to create a reaslity.
It is a good start, but it is not quite there. Don't forget to fill in your bio. It helps us as reviewers.

Michael
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Cool piece for 12 years old. I went through the polio attack in the 50's We were kind of dumb to know what was going on. They thought it came from bananas or stray cats.

These feelings are pretty universal in our age. I volunteered 5 places that aren't open at all. I started writed in Junior high

Thee way to make this best is to say how you personally feel. I would capitalize your I's in the sentence. Poets do pretty much whatever.

Never stop wwriting

Michael
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Review of True  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Great first line. We all make poetry and beauty, if we are open to truly hear and feel what is going on. God may have created the world originally (I am sure He did) but we continue to recreate it, Poetry is getting back to the original creator. Maybe that is the actual root you talk of.

You have got a lot of what this feels like. Maybe there is more?

Happiness does grow in relationship. Speaking of relationship, don't be afraid to fill out your bio. It helps us as reviewerss. I would guess Rocky mtn states

Michael
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Review of Marriage  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Yes, I get this. There are issues that seemingly won't go away. We're different. One is male and on is female, for starters

I have been married for 46 years. I figure that things have evolved numerous times. I want them for the better. I often don't feel that is what is happening.

We need too create relationship. We call it a marriage covenant/ That is a sacred promise before God. If you made a covenant,you sacrificed animals and burned them up saying, if I violate the covenant, this will happen to you. In Abraham's case, God burned up sacrifices on both side of the covenant while Abraham slept.

WE can't do Covenant on our own. Divorce rate is sky high. You are logical in your thinking but this kind of transcends logic

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Definitely a drive down memory lane. Most of the cars were before my time

Overall impression of piece Seem to know your cars well

Grammatical and spelling errors No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* YOu seem to have an extensive view of cars I have never seen or thought about. My 69 Rambler seemed classic and it worked, for us

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I think the format kind of handcuffs you a bit. Poetry is good for feeling and imagery of what something looked like. This has little of that. I think Louis the fourteenth said the quote, not Degaul, but Degaul said all kinds of crazy things

How the piece made me feel You never said how you felt about them

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Peace and beauty in freefall
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Review of Valentine Flight  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I can see why this is so well reviewed and liked. Our memories are tied to smell and the visions they entail. When Sirhan Sirhan remembered killing Bobby Kennedy, he first had to be guided through the anger he felt.

It is easy to understand and feel along with you. One and being are both capitalized. Interesting. Maybe we are both Godlike. Can we be like that here on Earth?

I liked coming full circle to jumping off the picnic table. A lot of us remember stuff like this. (I polevaulted off a building) The flight was good but the landing was a bit harsh
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Review of Whisked Away  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow. This is fun. We are created to be something. Like eggs,we nurture ourselves and others. Who knows what will come out? Have you seen me cook? It can be ingeneous.

To do lists will wait, but are we defined by what we do?Is the story the story without a narrative plot where things happen?. I live with an extreme introvert.

Who isn't waiting for an adventure? The Fantastics musical has a line that says "Celebrate adventure. You've been there. You remember. That secret place where you hid away from the tyranny of time and life was sweeter than the berries or the stinging taste of mint."

Favorite play. Yours is pretty excellent too.

Michael
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Review of Weight of War  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Welcome to WDC
Why I chose this piece This is a real treat to read.

Overall impression of piece: Wow. This is a battle. We like to think it isn't and that we are in control. We are not.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads very well. No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* This is very picturesque. I can't say you have not seen things well

Points to Ponder:*Idea* You have got lots of questions. The serious side of this is answers. We have power of and in the third day. The same power that resurrected Jesus is available to us as believers. We aren't taught to live in this power. Why is that?

How the piece made me feel You have a lot to offer. Don't hold back

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Just A Baby  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You have watched these babies. They are all looking for the same things if they are 2 or 22. I think that even as adults, we take hesitating kind of steps forward. What if I am wrong? What if I fall down. This isn't easy

You've got this. I can tell by the numerous reviews and the high star value. I see it too. It is easys to see and relate to.
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Review of Sensory Overload  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: There is no doubt about how you feel. I am glad I am older and don't get hooked into as much

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This seems like an anxiety attach. Buddha said (not a fan) humans have 3000 thoughts per second. You have described it well.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* There seems no way out. I think we all can find a quiet place. Baby's breathe from their diaphagm. No chest breathing. We learn to speed things up

How the piece made me feel All the time that people waste on social media would be enough to run the three largest companies

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.0)
A prologue is set up to get people to read something. This has got certain things on the human interest portion. We are all strange--even 68 year old reviewers. You need to entice us to read the story. Why does he have a core personality. Is there something mysterious about the Hubb? Why should I read the story? Style is kind of old fashioned like referring to the author as interacting. Let your hero interact, if only on a limited manner. What is he like?
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece +I saw this advertised and have written similar pieces

Overall impression of piece: This is a pretty cogent piece. They do kind of sneak up on us. No one plans a crisis

Grammatical and spelling errors In most cases, in without a cap

What I liked?*Smile* Good advice about taking emotion out of the scenario. Suggestions are logical and sequential

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Never answered what is a crisis. Perhaps it is anything that takes us out of our daily rituals and routines

How the piece made me feelI think there are general rules for crisis management. Maybe we could teach our governments> Covid pieces are highlighted in my port

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Review of That Night  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Newbie review. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. Simple numbers like three spelled out.

What I liked?*Smile* I could see the place and time. I could sense some of the feelings

Points to Ponder:*Idea* To much telling. The poetic outlook often focuses on description and feelings, not telling. There is a lot of telling. Perhaps not the best format. Maybe prose?

How the piece made me feel Kind of like our Covid 19 living. I have felt some of this. Tell us more of yourself in your bio. You are "Grey storm" will a blue logo

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Cool deal. This is probably stuff I should know but don't. I know most of it exists, but as to a timeline, not so much
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Review of Little Oskar  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Saw this in a newsletter. Grew up in Alberta and did spend some time on a farm. Spent summers on a farm in Montana. I know something of the life.

Stooks is a mystery to me. Maybe a parenthesis to show what it means. On a farm, everybody worked. Mostly, they didn't get paid. This is definitely life that most don't know about.
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