it is a wonderfully written poem,, i randomly picked it to read, and frankly that's one helluva of a poem. it's so appropriate, i can connect to all these feeelings you talk about. great job!
its a sweet and very passionate piece of poetry, i really appreciate the simplicity of your easy words strewn together and working out so well. great job but try working more through your emotions and say more. happy writing up ahead!
in such few words you have remarkably expressed the small things in life we often wonder about. it is with understanding that you must write so peacefully yet so efficiently.
that is one of the sweetest and most heart touching poems i have read. addressed to a grandmother it appeals even more special. your poetry is so simple, but is yet so meaningful.
this was a really great piece. i can't imagine how much truth you have said in a few lines alone. it is amazingly realistic. you have used a very simple language, yet it works well! great job. happy writing!
very great short story i must say. i couldn't stop reading. its so emotional, upfront, straightforward, true and so honest. feelings have been portrayed so well. i must say you did a great job. i enjoyed reading the story, understanding and connecting to the feelings of this man
honestly your poetry is innovative and creative.really well done i must say. its so simple and to the point poetry. makes me connect to your emotions or what you wanted to portray immediately. short but so effective in language. any reader shall appreciate the "responsive" character to it. nice idea by the way.
a wondering. very well put together. often we wonder about so me things that we writers can only pour out when the pen meets the paper. really simple piece, i can see it comes straight from the heart. nice writing style i must say. happy writing up ahead!
nicely written piece. appreciate your simplicity. well done. keep it up. i was inspired by your writing. you have a good flair for it. good job. happy writing ahead. just pay a little more attention to your transitions. otherwise great job.
really nicely and so accurately portrayed. i just hope its not from experience because you are a good writer. nice and simple rhyming pattern. i loved the brevity and simplicity of your poetry. at the same time it transports me to the scene and ensues a heart wrnching cry. its that realistic. well done!
amazing poetry. comical, appealing, and very stylish i must say. from the heading to the ending. i liked your poem a lot, honestly. neat rhyming scheme. very effective, works for me. well done i must say. inspiring poetry. you have a good knack for writing and a keen sense of wit. happy writing!
you used a lot of alliterations if i am not mistaken. it so happens that when someone attempts such a feat they are often left with a piece that is utterly confusing and vague. however, this hasn't happened in your case. nothing is overddone. and also you have given me a lesson or two to write such a poem myself.kuddos to you!!
seasons are such an interesting phenomenon. it makes you wonder beyond emotions transforming them into poetry. i see you have done exactly the same, very well done on this poem . your poem is short and simple but it is so realistic and self-explanatory, happy writing
verey nice poem. great yet so simply effective rhyming pattern. you have done a wonderful job with expressing your emotions. the poem strikes a cord in the heart immediately. short and sweet poem but so aptly done. great job done. happy writing ahead.
the poem or abstract is well written .the only problem is, i do not understand that are you anti-christianity or what? you have expressed your feelings quite vaguely but at the same time i see a rebellious outlook in the piece. more on the wondering front. i would still say its a good job.
it reminded me of a famous poem called the raven by Edgar Allen Poe. your poem however is very different. short and simple but its definitely creative and effectively written. very truly spoken of, a miracle it surely is. great job done. you made your point in just a few lines.
its a pretty neat piece. some highlights are like your easy flow of writing, that continues throughout, the simplicity of words used and the cause at the same time makes me wondering about what was really the inspiration behind this. its well summarized though its a little lengthy but the beauty lies in its essence
cute, sweet. well written. easy flowing poetry. i can see it comes straight from the heart..very interesting piece. simply too good for words. inspiring job done, got me thinking myself. well done. a very easy flowing language and very effective at the same time. grrrreeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaattttttttttttttttttttttttt ttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttt job done. kuddos! keep writing! n happy writing!!....
very interesting piece. simply too good for words. inspiring job done, got me thinking myself. well done. a very easy flowing language and very effective at the same time. grrrreeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaattttttttttttttttttttttttt ttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttt job done. kuddos! keep writing! n happy writing!!....
feelings so correctly portrayed. very simply written but so emotional and strong at the same time. really well written. makes me connect to the feel of the piece almost immediately. well done on the sequence, quite effectively worked out. good job. seems like it worked its way straight from the heart.....happy writing!!!
cute, sweet. well written. easy flowing concept. i can see it comes straight from the heart..very interesting piece. simply too good for words. inspiring job done, got me thinking myself. well done. a very easy flowing language and very effective at the same time. grrrreeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaattttttttttttttttttttttttt ttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttt job done. kuddos! keep writing! n happy writing!!....
amazingly written.great job.well done. cut to cut , very straight forward and to the point. yet its sensitive to the scenes. almost like a movie unfurling in front of you. really nicely written in a simple yet effective language. keep writing on. inspiring job. gives me an idea or two of my own. happy writing!
the struggle of winning or losing. sports passions galore. the tension and the strain. well written. actually inspired me to do something about my craze for sports. really appeals to any and every sportsperson anywhere. simply written yet beautifully illustrated. great job. happy writing!!!
honestly written. simply creative. i myself love basketball. its a common passion. mad me rethink my own schedule. need to get back to the old ball. you right in a simple manner, yet so effectively. well done. inspiring piece. you follow your heart indeed. a passion has to be pruned and preserved. great going. happy writing!!!
it is wonderful piece. speaks of emotions and feelings of a couple. very nicely put together. has a hint of confidence as though the writer is speaking from experience. even if it isn't true the reader believes in the piece because it speaks strongly to them. use of simple yet effective language.
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