Thank you for teaching us about the fundamentals of poetry - I am new to the whole thing and I am eager to learn as much as possible - I do not know enough to tell you if it is correct, but I really like what I see, and I know that when you tighten it up it will be great.
Interesting poem - and at least the way that I read it, a lot of double entendres - but I empathize with your pain - you have done a great job expressing it - your poetic flair is wonderful - with good rhythm and timing.
I like the poem very much - and trust me - I identify with you in many ways - as you can see from my works - it is a common issue - yet I have never read it from a man's point of view - my only comment is that the rhythm and flow should be tightened up just a little bit.
This is a lovely song with well thought out lyrics - the rhythm is great and I only wonder what the actual music sounds like - my only ocmment is that there are some typos - some of the contractions have apostrophes, and some do not.
This is great - I am just a newbie - and I need help with my poetry - it is not terrible - but, I could really use the assistance of a pro like you - I was hoping that you could look at my portfolio - I will understand if you are overloaded and can not - and I also am open to all constructive criticism.
What an interesting and informative essay - I have never been to Australia - and learning about it was an eye-opener to me - the extent that I have seen it is at the Olympics and the Australian Open - I was curious what propelled you to write about it - I know that you would like to go there - but why there in particular -
My only comment regarding the writing is that it should either be indented at the beginning of each paragraph - or double spaced at the end of each paragraph - other than that, I really loved this.
Thank you for this - I have often had questions about the ratings that I have given - and you have answered a lot of my concerns. Shameless plug - I would love you to look at my portfolio - I have gotten a lot of different kind of feedback - I think that the whole reason that I have joined this website is to get truthful feedback - so I agree with you about the honesty issue - though sometimes I have trouble giving out lower than a 4
What a sensational poem - from a poetic stance it has rhythm and flow - you possess a great talent - from a topical view - I congratulate you on your pregnancy - and know that you make a fabulous mother - I wonder if you will show this to your son on a designated moment later in his life
What an interesting format for a poem - it is good that you explained what you were doing prior to the poem, otherwise it would have been difficult to interpret. I love math and all the technicalities, as well as loving poetry - so the combination of the two was really intriguing
This is a great poem - I really like it - I like how you have put the print into red - a color of love - it gets you further into the mood that the poem wants you to feel
What a moving poem - you talk about issues that are really important for us to deal with - they say the golden years are not all that golden - and the horrors of homelessness are more than some people want to deal with = I work in mental health so I come into contact with this on a regular basis - and it is a real reality check - you have written this in an eloquent way
What a great story - is it true - if not, what did you base it on - I only ask this because I battle depression as does the object of my affection, who like in your story, considers me his sister - it is a painful road to watch a friend battle depression - as has been for my friends to watch me - you have written this eloquently with a lot of emotion.
My only criticism, if you would call it that is the presentation - There are places in the dialogue where it is double spaced. And others where it is single spaced, and to me, harder to follow -
This is a nice poem - I was just curious abuot its format - why are some of the lines in upper case and some in lower case - is this a format of poetry (one that as a newbie I am not familiar with)
Interesting poem with an interesting premise - I did not quite understand it, but appreciated it nonethless - I hate to sound naive, but I could not understand the metaphor of blood and tears to the fear of the darkness - I would like you to explain that to me - as somebody who is phobic of the dark, it is an interesting metaphor to draw upon
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