This is a really great idea - I am Jewish so I do not know if I qualify for your forum - but I am one to believe in the relationship between man/woman and God, whatever the religion. If I do qualify, I would like to be a member of your group and have access to the materials that you have - communicating with God via the written word is divine.
For a young woman, you are incredibly talented. This was a really lovely poem, with true substance and feeling. I could really feel your emotions - and identify with you having been there all too many years ago. I would have added a little more punctuation, but that is only a personal thing. Also in the last paragraph, you mix tenses - but that is just a minor error. I really liked this poem.
What a poignant story - what a wonderful mother and mother in law you must be - not to mention a great writer - this story is something that all women want to read about - a true romantic experience - the SM's are great - and their combined effort to make this site what it is is a tribute to that. But it must come from some place - in reading your works - I see what a sensitive, cat loving woman you are - and I look forward to reading more of your work.
This is a very nice essay - I was a difficult child, so I can identify with this - I was the kind of child who went to my father for a yes, when my mother said no. As an adult now, I see alot of the mistakes I made, and wish I could redo my life - but,...
You must be a good mother for your son to come out and follow your advice. So you should not get hurt, I think sons probably go to fathers for relationship advice - but maybe that does not go across the board.
I think that this was written very nicely and from the heart - and it would be very poignant if you showed it to your son.
I liked this poem a great deal - in its free verse form it flows beautifully and has a great theme to it. My only suggestion is that perhaps you separate it into multiple paragraphs to make it a bit easier to read. Otherwise - I think this poem is just perfect.
What a thought provoking poem - as the mortality rate increases - more and more people will be in nursing homes - forcing their families to learn how to deal with it - as somebody who works in social services, I know the feeling that families feel about dealing with relatives who are either sick or old.
I loved this poem - I could almost picture you talking to your father as you were delivering the ode - it sounds like despite everything, you had a nice childhood. I was a daddy's girl, but I never thought of writing a poem about it - you have definately inspired me to try that. Your rhythm and flow are great - it flows evenly and is easy to follow. My only comment might be that you separate some of it into multi-paragraphs - but that might only be my thing.
This is a great story - I am looking forward to reading more - the character development is great - you really want to understand Joseph - and I guess as the story progresses will get to know more about him. I was wondering why this took place in some strange time period. Or maybe I just do not understand this type of novella. What I do know is that I am enjoying it, and looking forward to reading more.
This is a brilliant idea - I have just become an upgraded member - and I have some more gift points - I would like to send c notes - but I have to decide who I want to send it to and which ones I will send.
How much do they cost. Thank you - they are so beautiful.
This is a great poem - its rhythm and flow are great - and it is easy to read - It is definately something that we can all identify with - I think of your essay - and I think how we must learn to love ourselves before we can let another person into our lives.
Just one typo = I think you meant its - not it's
This essay is great - as somebody who has morbid obesity, I identify with it immensely - bariatric surgeries are on the rise - it is really frightening about what is happening - obesity is the # 1 health problem in this country - and you have done a great service by discussing this in an eloquent, well written and dignified way. I think this message is so necessary for Americans to hear - I suffer from some depressive disorders which are so related to my obesity - so I thank you from the bottom of my heart for this essay. The only reason that I did not give it a perfect score is because I found a few grammatical errors in it. Probably oversights on your part -
This is an interesting poem - it certainly has a wonderful message - and a very important one - while you dedicated it to the Somalia war - it could certainly apply to any of the wars that we are engaged in now. I was particularly moved by the selective capitalization that you had - and wondered if that was purposeful.
I loved this story - I hate to sound stupid, but even though this is fiction, is it based on a true story? I loved how you started the story - your descriptions of the area - and the character descriptions - I empathized with Alise - I always wonder what draws women to become nuns - but you told this story with great dignity -
This is sensational - your images are extraordinary - and the poetry that is in them and accompanies them is even more extraordinary - these have a Hallmark feel to them - you must have some really special friends here on the site - I am seeing now how special the connections are that we make.
I really liked this poem - its message was conveyed very clearly in an easy to follow mode - I liked the rhythm and flow of it - I particularly liked the way that you formatted the they and the we - it accenuated the message that you are trying to send in this poem.
I really liked this - and how I identified with it - maybe you should send it to the Republicans - anyway, it certainly conveyed a point which is shared by many Americans - particularly this year when we are voting for a president. Your rhythm and flow are excellent - My only comment is that I think that on certain lines there should have been more punctuation - but that is only my thing.
This was a very informative essay - I was wondering where you finally went to (or did I miss something in the essay?)- You seem to know a whole lot about travelling - and for somebody who has not been anywhere, this was great. Unfortunately, I found a lot of spelling errors in the piece, and to me that detracted from the quality of the work. In some places, it was confusing and I had to figure out what word you really meant. My other comment is that I thought the formatting needs to be adjusted - I think that some of the paragraphs were a bit too long, making it a little hard to understand what you were trying to convey = and being that this was a teaching tool I thought that that was important.
I actually liked this - it had an interesting rhythm to it - for a first poem, I give you a lot of credit, I am sure as you go on you will get better - my comments are that the punctuation is inconsistent - making us have to form the rhythm which I am sure is what you wanted, by ourselves. Secondly, I realize that you wanted to center it, but for some reason, the way that it formatted, did not come out that way. I think with a bit of tweaking this could be great.
I hope that this is not the end - I am finally getting to know Ean - and I think that Nicholas is rubbing off a little on him - as a feminist I am confused about the D/S stuff, but I have always dreamed of a Cinderella like ending of sorts - and that is what readers of these types of works are craving as well. And you give it to them. Pure and simple - you are like the next Danielle Steel.
What prompted you to write this essay - as somebody who has been called a cunt - in multiple languages, mind you - I appreciated the undertone that you have in this poem as such - It is interesting that cock has also gotten to mean only one thing in society when in effect it has a number of other non-sexual meanings. In going to the local Chinese restaurant, they were talking about the 'year of the cock' and I kind of laughed - realizing that it was about an animal and not a man's member.
Poetically, though, I think this essay needs some work - its flow is good on some levels, but the paragraphs seem inconsistent in their structure.
Just another naive question = who is Vincent = is that Abby's significant other? I liked this chapter - although I thought it was a tad bit short - the way you continue to build up the characters is exciting - and the way you get into Erin is amazing. Ean is a mysterious man, the kind you find in these types of stories. You want him to be prince charming, but somehow you feel something is going to go wrong. I can't wait till the next chapter.
I am loving this story - I can not wait for more - I am a big Danielle Steel fan, having read many of her novels - and this one seems very similar in genre to that. YOur character description is impeccable, as is your imagery - I am picturing the restaurants in totality -
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