As a special needs person and former student (highschool GED) I really appreciate your work at raising awareness for the need of special needs staff and workers. I just wish it was that easy to get one for real. As a person living with autism and other cognitive disabilities and have worked with and helped kids with down syndrome, this really hits close to home for me. Please don't stop making stories like this and keep up the good work.
As for the constructive criticism, you could have broken the longer paragraphs into shorter ones. The longer the paragraph goes on, the more likely it is to over detail things. Wile over detailing wasn't present here, I just want you to know from my own personal experiences of what could happen.
Great work overall and keep it up!
Happy writing and reading on WDC,
Kenny B.
That was some very interesting content you wrote. It was well written and kept my interest peaked as well. It was a very nice writing, and I found myself wanting more! Do they overthrow the "governor" or do they get caught or worse yet, killed! I need a sequil to this. It had the ease of the reader in mind, something that I really need to work on. Over all, it was very well written and kept short, but not too short without being too long either, if that makes any sense to you.
Happy writing,
Kenny B
My great grandfather was a veteran in the Korean war and so is my grandpa. Unfortunately I didn't get to know either one, but I can tell from the stories my parents have told me about them that I would've loved to hear their stories of war and their triumphs and defeats so thank you for writing this. Now for the criticism. I really couldn't find anything wrong with this poem. It was perfect (well... as perfect as humanly possible) so I don't have anything to say that is called constructive criticism. Well done!
Happy writing,
Kenny B.
That's a dream I likento call acid trip dreams. It has nothing involving the drug and they're somewhat normal when there's extreme heat or cold. Your brain makes things appear real in dreams it is weird like that. Anyways. The story outline was amazing and it kept my interest. You didn't over detail at all so in my view the detailing was perfect. I think dreams like this are what you would call paranormals. It's not like the paranormal creatures or anything besides Tue talking bird, but I've had dreams where I've talked to animals too. Overall it was a great story! Well done!
Happy writing,
Kenny B.
It was very interesting. There were, however a couple typos and some spaces were missed, but overall it was a good story, I just wish it lasted longer. Hope you take this constructive criticism to heart and make sure to proof read next time. Again, it was a great story.
Happy writing,
Kenny B.
Oh man. What to say! It was a perfectly delivered comedy! I couldn't find anything that needed work! If there was a ten star rating, you'd get it my friend! It was flawless. It was an easy read and you had humor. That's what I call art! Well done!
Happy writing!
Kenny B.
So the standing queen died? That was a morbid ending. I feel like it could be a metaphor for the struggles inside as well. Dark clouds means depression or addiction and the streak of light is the last flicker of hope. Thankfully there's stories like this so some people can understand some of the troubles that people who are is are recovered addicts or a person with depression feel almost daily. Thanks for this.
Happy writing,
Kenny B.
Wow. Talk about paranoia. I'm definitely a little bit paranoid after reading this. I'll never hear whispers in the same way again. I've been through a lot in my 26 years of life. I've tried shaking away demons that have cursed me and now I have to worry about another one? I'm just hoping that this I'd just folklore and it's not real, but I'm quite gullible. I'll believe something that I feel isn't real if it's described like this story was. I believe in supernatural things like ghosts, spirits and God, but this is different in so many ways. I couldn't find anything that denies her existence, but I have to wonder if it's real or not. I'm literally hiding under the covers in my bed, and it usually takes something audible to do that to me, so way to go! It was written so well, and had no big words in there that are hard to pronounce, so for that I say well done. Good read!
Happy writing!
Kenny B.
This story just goes to show that even people that have been rotton their whole life, can change and become good. I guess there's still hope in this messed up world after all.
Now for the constructive criticism. While it was an easy read, it was over detailed about only two people. As they were main characters, I get it that we as humans can get lost in over detailing things or characters. As a writer, I try to spread out the details a little bit at a time leading up to the full picture, but then again, I'm writing books instead of short stories such as this. I'm not saying that they're perfect as I do need improvement, but overall it was a good story. I did loose a little bit of my interest toward the middle because of the over detailing, but it was okay. I'll give this a mediocre rating because of that, but it was an interesting story. Great job. Room for improvement.
Happy writing
Kenny B.
Welcome to life. That's what it is. I've just come to accept the pain and emotional turmoil. All the therapists in the world can't help with that. Everyone at one point or another in life feels that way my friend. I've had those feelings for a long time now and trust me. It can get worse. It usually does. It can break you down and stomp on you like ashes in a firepit that haven't completely smothered out yet, then more strife and turmoil comes in and takes away all the hope you have remaining and throws it away like used wrappers and dirty napkins. Once in a while you'll have someone there to help you build back up, but that's a rarity.
Wishing you the best and as always.
Happy writing,
Kenny B.
As a 25 year old male living with autism, I love seeing sites like this that help support those people that have disabilities like autism. If you didn't know this, one of the richest men on earth has autism. That'd right! Bill Gates has autism and he developed a whole computer industry. In fact, if he didn't have a personal assistant with him 24/7, he wouldn't be dressed in the morning. You heard right. The CEO and developer of a major computer program would be completely NAKED if someone wasn't there to tell him to get dressed every day. So I love seeing places like this encouraging people with disabilities. May God bless you. Happy Easter.
Kenny B.
That's my feeling right now. Writers block has set in on all three stories I'm working on. This is a look into the eyes of a well seasoned writer of short stories like this one. I can't say that it was an attention grabber, however, it was very informational. It was a third person pov looking in on someone that don't know themselves anymore and I gotta say. I get it. Hang in there. It will get worse before it gets better. I know because I've been through it. Just keep pushing on and forward.
Happy Writing,
Kenny B.
There's a lot of love in your home. I have one cat. I downsized from having twenty cats. Anyways. That story was a real attention grabber with a lot of detail, but it didn't smother out the story. Overall it was well written, and I want to see more of your stories. This one was really good. Job well done!
Happy Writing,
Kenny B.
That's a goofy idea, but it would be hilarious! I would have laughed so hard if I did that in highschool. I would have pranked the meanest teacher there. Anyways, it was a great story. Moving cupcakes. That'd be a sight to see, but I do like the exploding cupcake idea better.
This story was well written and eloquently detailed, but wasn't overpowered with detail. It was the perfect amount is scheming mixed with intrigue. Overall, great story and an easy read. Great job!
Happy Writing,
Kenny B.
I gotta say. I was rather surprised. It was a very interesting story, just gotta wonder if it's real or not? If it is real, they you have one famous aunt. It was a perfect attention grabber, but I need to know what happens next. Does the grandpa rip the picture? Do you take the album? What's next? I wish the story was longer, but overall it was rather impressive! Great job!
Happy writing!
Kenny B.
That was kinda sexist if you ask me. I'm a man, and I do all the shopping because I work at the damn grocery store. Next time you need to "vent" your frustrations go to a different platform. This us what the "great divide" between men and women looks like at it's finest. It didn't even mention all the courteous men out there. That really frustrates me. It also makes me a little ticked off. Make sure you mention the "good" men out there, that you think don't exist.
I feel the sole of the foot will get me more "aroused" than both the top and the sole. I have fantasies of licking feet and will continue to have them. Another part that makes me get "wood" is toes. Not just the bottom of the toes either. Have you ever sucked on a nice juicy big toe, or others for that matter? I have and it is always so good. I've had people, women and girls alike, ask me to lick their stinky feet, and I usually say yes, considering age and age appropriateness. If a girl under 13 asks me to, I say no just because of the age related sex appeal I get towards feet, but 13 and over, I let her have my best foot treatment that involves my tongue. It's a definite turn on for me. I hope this helps clarify some fetish specifications. Best writing!
Kenneth B.
That isn't exactly all true, but it sounds like you were raised on a farm and loved it there. I have worked at several farms and none of them were peaceful at all. They were either chaotic or there were so many people there that I had no time to even breathe. I do like the poem though. All of my feelings aside, it made farm life sound so peaceful and serene. Hopefully you can do one about the chaotic farms later. Just saying. Best writing wishes!
Kenneth B.
That was beautiful. It was a real attention grabber. I really liked all the descriptive adjectives in there. All the beautiful images that were portrayed really got me. Made me feel all the emotions that were said in there. Sadness and joy were in there, and I thought I caught a hint of anguish and fear in that as well. I hope to see more like this, but you need to work on having a little bit longer paragraphs with the major details that mix with the minor ones as well. Happy writing!
Not my style of writing, or reading for that matter, but it drew me in. I was interested. You should make a book from this idea. This could be the prologue that gets people interested. I sure was. From the first line in though that it would be a boring read, but man was I wrong! I was intrigued and want to known what happens at the meeting! Please do a part two!
That was beautifully written. I could tell there were some comparisons of flowers as the good times in life, and the dark water seeping cave with moss was the dark times. Where it said you were dragged out, that must have meant your preservered through and made it into the light which could mean several things. I want to see more and I really wish it was a longer story, but it was great over all. Thanks for sharing your gift with the world.
That was very... interesting. It was different in a good way. I can only assume that the italics were the (presumably) a child thinking all that. It was a good story for sure. It was interesting in the fact that you seem to have done a lot of thinking and maybe some research. I liked it and hope to see more in the near future.
I just joined today, but I already love it. It's definitely what I've been looking for, for quite some time now. Please help me get a membership. I would really appertiate it. My life is full of stories ready to be read and I need something like this to do just that. Thank you for your time.
Sincerely,
Kenneth Blazek
I feel the same way and I too hear the calling of tomorrow beckoning me to join in, in it's celebrations. Yesterday is history and tomorrow's a mystery is pretty much what you're saying. I totally agree.
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