Wow... great article. I have never been to Omaha but the description given is done so well that I felt like I was visiting the zoo being described as I read through it. It seems like it is set up very nicely divided up biomes and animals. The Bronx Zoo the closest zoo to visit nearby me is set up in a similar fashion. They have similar exhibits a world of birds area, a monkey house and a reptile. They also divide up by continents so they have an Asia area and Africa area. Omaha has this zoo beat with the Wallabies.
Each location in the zoo described sounded really neat. In particular the Aquarium sounds really nice with the fish swimming to the right left and above. The desert area sounded really cool as well.
Mentioning the restaurants and the butterfly pavilion and mentioning they won't be covered just made me want to know more about them. You might consider expanding this article unless you are working with a character limit. I liked how the gift shop was teased and then covered at the end though. It usually the last location people visit in the zoo so it really helped the reader feel like they had traveled along with you on this experience. Great article. Thank you so much for writing and sharing your experiences.
This is a very cool story. I like the description for it. It is a great hook letting everyone know they are in for a mystery. It is an interesting idea to have the story be told from the Cat's perspective. It reminds me a little bit of the movie Cat's eyes. It was a creative idea having the sorceress explore the cats memories to be able to find out the murder. It lead to a great resolution.
On a technical level, the story is well written. It opens with some great description. I love the use of colors with the contrast of scarlet and white. It gives a great visual image and the rest of the story follows along with some nicely described allowing the reader to visualize the story really well. The description of the pheasant sounded delicious and the murder was shocking. The segments within the cats memories were captured the essence of the way that a cat would think
The story moves at a quick and I feel could have benefitted more from more pacing. For example the murderer gives up a little quickly. The Writer's camp challenges are written within a short amount of time so that is understandable though. That said though the plot was exciting to read through and overall it was a very good story.
I know that I am reviewing this late and outside of the holiday season but really cool Christmas Word Search. It definitely made me feel warm Holiday feelings. It had so many winter and holiday words available in it. I enjoyed trying this out. Thank you so much for making this. It was a lot of fun.
A lot of great insights with this analysis on time. It makes me want to make every second I have could Time is definitely a commodity that we never have enough of. You make a great point considering time to be more valuable than money. When it is gone that is it. It is a thought that makes you want to push through things quickly. Nice writing!
It is very cool to see a Sonic Interactive on WDC. It is neat that you have included a variety of Sonic universes to choose from. It would be very cool to see some arcs with Shadow and Knuckles. It looks like this story is off to a very good start. Hopefully it will continue to develop and grow.
This interactive combines two of my favorite things Pokemon and Giantesses. It is developed really well with pretty much all the gym leaders and champions. I am happy because my two favorite gym leaders are included in the mix (Flannery and Clair). It also has my favorite Champion (Cynthia). I hope that we get more storylines involving them in the future. Of the arcs available, my favorite is the one with Cynthia although you have some other great ones available as well. Keep up the great writing.
It is great to see a Zelda crossword. I really have to brush up on my Zelda knowledge. I could only get about three of them with the oracles and Ganon. I probably need to play the the more recent games. In any case this was a fun puzzle. Thank you for making it!
Great word search. I really love Alice in Wonderland and Through the Looking Glass. You have a nice variety of classic Wonderland characters and phrases in it making it a lot of fun to go through. I brings back a lot of my memories of reading the series. I also love the cover picture. You did a really good job making this.
Mushroom hunting sounds like a lot of fun. It seems like a great way to celebrate the springtime. You really capture the feel of the activity very well with the sights and smells involved. Just from reading, I feel like I am involved in the activity as well. I could picture the scent of the mushrooms as they were being picked. You seem like a pro at this activity being able to find the mushrooms and knowing when and where to check for them. Since it is done regularly on an annual basis, it makes sense that you would be adept at it.
This is an interesting story. The perspective of a scientist performing tests on animals are not typically done so it is a unique perspective to witness. The reader immediately feels sympathy for the monkey but the later humanizes the scientist as well showing that the scientist has a child struggling with Diabetes. You can't fault the scientist for doing everything possible to help the struggling child. It is a powerful shift.
You should share a link to the photograph that was used as a prompt. I am curious to see what inspired this story. In any case great writing.
Great tickling interactive. You have a nice set of characters and set up with each character having different weaknesses leading to a variety of story possibilities. This interactive is still developing but the arcs that have been added seem to be coming along. I really like the arc with Taylor so far. I hope that you continue to build this interactive some more. With these type of stories I recommend you provide as many details as possible as it will will help readers to visualize and imagine the scenes very well allowing them to enjoy this story more. Good luck with your writing!
This is a really good poem. I really liked the contrast between where the narrator is and where the narrator wants to be. You could feel the congestion of the narrator's current surroundings vs the freedom of where they were hoping to be.
I particularly loved the second stanza (and fourth)... it made for a nice refrain with the peaceful imagery of the the cascading waterfalls and grass. Actually this poem have beautiful imagery throughout both covering the frustrations of crowded (what I imagine to be city) areas and the natural environment being yearned for. It is very convincing and makes the reader yearn for them and want to get away as well.
This is a really nice story. The setting is very well written and it gives off the impression right away that I am reading a science fiction type of story. I immediately thought of the beginning of the movie Independence day when I was reading this with the military investigating something of Alien origin.
The characters in the story feel right out of that type of movie as well with the FBI agent and Doctor looking into the site of the monolith. The story has some great description as I could visualize every moment that occurred clearly from the Monolith to the hotel room cool.
I feel like the setup of this short story was developed could have easily been expanded into a full length Science fiction Alien story if desired but it also worked really well as is. The ending was really a great punchline with the monolith turning out to be an advertisement that I did not see coming. In hindsight the title hints at it but it was a really great twist. I really enjoyed reading this story very much. Thank you so much for writing it.
This is an awesome crossword puzzle. It's been so long since I've seen the Merlin series. I couldn't completely solve this but it brought back memories. I miss this series. This reminded me of a lot of things that happened in Season 1. I forgot Nimueh was the early Villain. Morgana was also a great character and I love the Dragon. The series definitely could on for longer. You had some great clues in this with a lot of memorable characters and classic elements from the series. I really enjoyed this puzzle very much.
This is a beautiful poem. I think that anyone who has a loved one relates to this heavily. This poem emphasizes the idea that someone you are keeping in your heart has the ability to strengthen you. You have some really beautiful imagery in this Poem. I love the contrasts between sunlight and darkness, life and death and the Heart and Mind. On a rhythmic level. I really loved the rhymes. It made your poem flow and read smoothly. It is very powerful and comforting idea that keeping what you love in your heart stays with you forever. Thank you so much for writing and sharing this.
Good poem. Great title. The outdoors can be a cool source of inspiration. It gives some great visual imagery. I love the description of the grass as telling a tale of those who walked upon it. The last 4 lines provide an interesting perspective. I particularly loved the last two lines describing the Cabin as a contract between men and nature. You naturally think of the contrast but instead it provides a union between them. On a technical level this poem has a nice rhythm to it. It reads pretty smoothly. I liked reading this.
Nice short story. This captures the essence of conversations I feel like I have been on both sides on. I've been both the troubled individual not quite ready to share my problems as well as the person wanting to know more. In the short you manage to capture some realistic feelings and a conversation. I wonder if you are planning to expand this into a longer work. It feels like this could included in a much larger story if you wanted to. In any case this was very nice writing. Thank you so much for sharing it.
Zootopia is an interesting place to use as the basis for an interactive. They have a very wide range of characters so it makes for some wild possibilities. This interactive is still early in development but you have a good setup going allowing writers to introduce their own original characters into the Zootopia world.
I am also glad there is a segment for for the series leads like Judy Hopp and Nick Wilde. Hopefully we will get to see more story arc getting added to this. I recommended having at least one good storyline going to set the tone and encourage other authors to read and add to it. Good luck with your writing.
Wow this is really cool. I have never seen a mirrored acrostic before. It must have been challenging to write. Getting words to end on the last letter is a lot harder than starting a sentence with a specific letter in mind. This poem captures the experience of a broken heart really well. Great writing.
This is a very nice Poem. It has a good rhythm to it and you can feel the dedication to your religion behind it. I think that its best feature is the four different rhymes that were used to end each of the Stanzas of this poem. It makes it smooth to read through. It has some great description too with each segment covering different aspects which people associate with the holy spirit (i.e direction, protection, perfection) The way it is structured reminds me of reading a prayer ending with an Amen. It is really very well crafted.
This is a good analysis. It really puts things in perspective. I also find myself guilty at times of not being satisfied with the job I have. The story of the Bank Teller is a good reminder that we should take pride in our work and there are opportunities to grow even when we aren't where we want to be in out life. I feel it is a good reminder for me that I should take to heart.. You cover the other end of this as well that you always strive for better prospects which is true as well. It feels a little bit like walking a tightrope to balance between the two but both sides are needed. Thank you for sharing your insights and writing this.
This is a nice poem. First off I like how you organized the layout of this with the expandable prompt. I also really like the title of your book item for this. It has a great alliteration.
Gateway is a great word to inspire a poem. I think you covered the prompt really nicely and I enjoyed reading it.
Here are some of my general observations:
You may want to adjust Gateway in lower case in the title... I recommend uppercasing it to give it more pop as it is the center thought of this poem unless there is an artistic reason you are keeping it in lower case.
I briefly thought this resembled an acrostic poem the way that this was set up visually.
You have some really good pairings with your lines in this. Having similar ideas together in consecutive lines to complement each other i.e.
A place -> A passage
Neither here -> Nor there
Portal guarded -> Guard post set
How to arrive -> How to depart
I also really love how you closed this poem out with the last 3 lines. It is cool to think of gateways as the point that joins places together. Also ending with the line a "A door to more" really leaves the reader with a sense of wonder reminding them there are pretty limitless possibilities that a gateway can lead to.
Nice Poem. I couldn't help thinking but think of Lady Gaga's Just dance when I was reading this. First off I love the writing ML used for this colorful and eye catching. There is some beautiful imagery in this poem often highlighted by the colors (i.e. the blossomed floor and rays by the bed, the shiny blue teacup). I liked the "and they will say..." refrains in this. The word choices in this were really excellent.
This feels proud, defiant and energetic. It made me want to stand tall and dance myself.
This is a wild premise having a pen that can grant wishes. It don't blame the main character for trying to use it to fill his fantasies. I think this story would definitely appeal to the audience it was created for i.e. diaper fans. You capture the experience of regressing to being a baby very well. I think the only thing missing in this scenario is that the main character is by himself throughout the experience. It might be more fun to have other other characters there to witness and react to him regressing. Maybe something that you might use in another story.
This is a good poem. It conjures up a lot of visual images such as the environment of the beach, the umbrella and various types of weather that the narrator experiences. The poem makes great use of descriptive colors using them to convey emotions. I particular loved the colors of the ocean described. The Umbrella works really well as a symbol sharing the narrator's loneliness.
On a rhythmic level this poem is good with a nice set of rhymes to read through making it easy for readers to enjoy.
There are a couple of technical recommendations/notes:
-In the second stanza it circles around a bit with the narrator crying twice.
-In the third stanza there seems to be a typo - "So I grabbed the Umbrella and dashed the the park"
Other than that... it is a very nice poem. Thank you for writing!
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This is a very nice Poem. It has a good rhythm to it and you can feel the dedication to your religion behind it. I think that its best feature is the four different rhymes that were used to end each of the Stanzas of this poem. It makes it smooth to read through. It has some great description too with each segment covering different aspects which people associate with the holy spirit (i.e direction, protection, perfection) The way it is structured reminds me of reading a prayer ending with an Amen. It is really very well crafted.