This is an Interesting piece and has enough fish hooks to make me interested to read more than what is here. I like the descriptive writing and the piece is well written. The first two paragraphs are great as a mini synopsis and you cover sci fi and fantasy very well.
These pieces are very very good. You have used great words and each piece flows well. They look like separate pieces out of one story? You have written the above very well and great use of descriptive words. i would like to read more it is that well done.
Not sure if i agree with all of what you say or like it; but in any case i will stay away from the subject matter and concentrate on the writing instead. I like the layout and the structure of your piece. It is well written and uses some very good descriptive wording. I like the play on 'trash.'
This piece is very interesting with great potential to be expanded into a short story or a novel. You capture sci fi and fantasy elements very well. There is room for growth with the gangster side of things. Still you have great bones here for a longer more expanded story.
I really really like this piece. It is light-hearted, warm and happy. The holiday Christmas poem does need a spell check but over all you have really captured the true Christmas spirit. Great use of descriptive wording and your words really capture the Christmas essence.
A very well written piece. You show true community spirit within this piece as well as telling a happy wee story. You have some great skills that could be transferred to writing stories, novels and the such. Great use of descriptive wording and you have done a great job.
This piece is very very well written. Just a minor spelling mistake but overall a very good piece. I like who the poem is written and some careful thought has gone into this piece. the piece has very descriptive wording and the imaginary is very well done.
An interesting little mysterious piece. Does need a spell check and a sentence structure check so that the piece flows better.
there is potential to turn this short story into something more as well as developing the main characters. there is definitely an educational element :)
This piece is pretty well written. Could do with a spelling and sentence structure review. However, I enjoyed reading through the piece and there is certainly potential to make this piece into an action fantasy adventure story. Love the action adventure!
what a beautiful and emotional experience. I totally agree that the pretty butterfly was a message from your buddy Rusty.
Well written and heartfelt. Very descriptive use of words. I really enjoyed reading this piece. Thank you for sharing a piece of your personal history
a very descriptive piece. Needs more development and also be expanded into a longer story as you could potentially turn this into something along the lines of Andy McNab. you certainly already have great bones here. It is descriptive, interesting and exciting.
a lovely piece about springtime. Going into winter in this part of the world it is nice to have the imaginary reminder of what i can look forward too. great use of words, very descriptive and captures the essence of summer, spring, holiday, being at peace
What a great story. a very entertaining and enjoyable read. Well written with great use of descriptive wording. It is easy for the reader to imagine being right there in the middle of the story running away from the made italian chef and appalling food. thumbs up
you have worked hard on this piece. they rhyming is great and well thought out. The structure is well formed and the use of descriptive wording shows through very well. The story itself touches the reader as how our society has changed and how nature is missing
wow this is a great piece of writing. I really like some of the words that you have used as i dont see them much today. Such examples is 'braggart' love it. THe wording is descriptive and comes with great imaginery. Briallant. i dont normally do 5's but you are getting one.
what a lovely little piece of writing. You depict the season very well. Great use of descriptive wording. Very real feeling reading this piece. The imaginery is great too and it is easy to picture the scene. a positive happy story could almost be a child's story
This opinion piece of writing is so true. Too many times we are quick to judge without really knowing what is going on. It can be unintentional and other times its not. This piece got me thinking as I read through it which is great as a writer because you have truly connected with your audience.
This is a great piece of writing. I like the rhyming and you have done very well with that. The use of descriptive wording mixed in with the imaginery is very effective. It is thought provoking in the sense that the reader is able to relate to similar situations. Great piece.
An interesting short piece of emotional writing. In my interpretation I would suggest an emotional relationship that may be not farring to well mixed with a loss of self.
I like how you capture the emotional feelings so well within the descriptive wording.
wow this is very dark, but extremely honest in a good way. You capture the essence of exactly how people can and do behave when there are issues happening in their lives. Great use of descriptive wording and I think a good piece of writing and ends really nicely.
What an enjoyable read. THe finding of new romance and individual growth as a human being in order to find it. Mixed in with a dash of comedy this piece of writing was fun to read. It is also written quite well and that made the story flow through nicely.
THis is full on but in a good way. I love action so you had me reading all the way through and it held my attention. Great descriptive use of words.
They only thing I would say is that not sure why its all centred with each person's name above it but I mite have missed something. In any case I like it.
Oh what a deliciously dark experience. I really like the use of your descriptive wording here. IT is easy to visualise sitting there being on the outside looking in but still separate from what is happening. This has a deep poetic sense of loss and you have captured it brillantly
A interesting story and heaps of room to continue into a larger one should you want too. I like the detail and the use of wording. The content is thought provoking as well as being detailed. The reliving of the car accident is pretty well detailed and descriptive.
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