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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am not a pro at poetry, and don't know the 'style' this is. BUT...
I like this poem a lot. It brought a smile to my face.

You are consistent with the style, and the repetitous lines.

You are humorous while delivering a message that stands true. You hit it right on!
I rarely give 5's.
Thanks for sharing this with us.

love, LinnAnn

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I am not a pro, but can at least say what I appreciate and my opinons, they are only my opinions. Take what you want and leave the rest.

The meter seemed to flow nicely through all of it and did not give me any problems until the end. Since I'm not a pro. I'm not sure if the change is deliberate or not. sorry.

It's a very touching and sad poem. If this is based on fact, I am truly sorry.

Your last line in verse three, I thought maybe should be similar to the others, what about...I couldn't believe I was losing you. since he/she wasn't gone yet.

The last verse's line didn't go with the others at all, but again I didn't know if it was part of the style.

It is a lovely poem and I thank you for sharing.
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Such a sad poem. If this is based on fact, then I offer my profoundest appology.

Your first verse, I don't know if I'd hope, as then your house would be haunted.
That, to me, would be scary

Your third verse produces a very intense image to me, so sad.

Some of your verse patterns don't match with the other verses, are they supposed to be that way?

This sounds like an older person, and in so many cases that is what happens, the one left behind feels so incomplete, they just don't last alone.

Thank you so much for sharing this with us.

Love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Okay, you made me get out my dictionary for this one. At first I thought this was notes from a science class.

Well professor, I just learned that ungulate means having hooves. Now for artiodactyla-my Websters does not have that word. the dactyla, makes me think related to dinosaurs. However, I must be spelling pterydactle wrong, because I can't find it either, at least not under the beginning 'pt'.

I do hope you will tell me what the word means, lol

I have a hard time seeing this as a poem, even free verse. I am not a pro when it comes to poetry, but even reading it out loud, I can't find a rythm, and I feel frustrated in not being able to help you. Maybe someone who is better at poetry can give you a better crit on this.

I do like the information you shared. I also care that the poor things keep getting butchered for their tusks. What a waste of a fantastic creature.

Thanks for sharing this with us and the education.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of Glory and Honor?  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
as a former Army National Guard woman, I thought it was a great 'guts and glory' piece. I liked the part about where we had put the weapons down, but then picked them back up to fight together for the common good.

I did get a bit confused with the 'toys' and it sounded like 'we' had gone to the other planet at first, but then not later. As a reader I'd like to know if 'we' were still fighting on our own planet or not.

It was a good read, got the emotion in and tightly done. Thanks for the good read.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of Lovesong  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I am not a pro at poetry, and I know there are many kinds but I couldn't quite figure this rhyme scheme.

The first verse rhymed quite nicely. ABCBDDE

Then the otheres didn't rhyme in a way I could tell.

Then the verses changed the amount of lines per stanza, (it is a song, right?)

It has a sweet sentiment and I see that you put your heart into it.

Thank you for sharing this with us.

Love, LinnAnn

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Review of Sparrow  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
There are those who would advocate for punctuation. The same people who say I need more in my poetry. so I won't say that!! lol

I hope the little bird wasn't you. This was a very sad poem and I felt for the 'bird'

I did get pulled out at a cople of spots where I thought. "do sparrows float on the sea?" I never thought of them doing that as they don't have webbed feeet. Then thought it was just a metaphore.

I"m thinking the end was Heaven? I got confused cause she started out 'avenging' her wing?

I"m sorry I probably missed the boat on this. But I did enjoy reading it. I hope someone can do better for you.

Thanks so much for sharing your little sparrow.

Love, LinnAnn

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Review of LOVE LINES  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
How absolutley sweet and touching. Also, what a memory to have and to cherish.

I am not a pro at poetry, so I don't know the style of this poem, but I do like the graceful way your sentences don't just end at the end of the line. I like the way they wrap around to the next line or even verse.---so cool

And then he felt the need

To run his fingers over my lips
and kiss me on the nose

Thanks so much for sharing this with us. It brought a smile to my face.

love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed this very much I'm not a pro at poetry, so I'm not sure what type it is. I found bits that rhymed, but not sure if it was supposed to. That, my ignorance, does not detract from the sweetness and loveliness of your poem.

I also like the progression of your one item a day, to flourish to all you wanted to write. Love should be like that.

Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of My Happy Dance  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I absolutely loved this poem/song. It's so happy and perky, and so Irish. lol

I loved the 'fetching perfumes of natures blooms'--well put.

'I the groom, within her womb' --lost me there. groom to nature I could sort of see, but in her womb? I'm sorry, is it Mother earth and being on earth is in her womb?

Your chorus is also delightful. Made me want to sing along.

Love, LinnAnn

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Review of How can this be?  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
When I read 'this place that is nurture' I thought of family, home. But the rest of the poem is so sad, as if there is no happiness in that home, or family.

Then I was thinking, the mind? who is to give the soothing to the friend?

This is very touching, and thought provoking. It causes me to ask questions.

I love the last sentence. writing is a wonderful thing.

Thank you so much for sharing this with us.

love, LinnAnn

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Review of Christmas Eve  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm not a poetry pro, though I do write and read it. I LIKE this. The meter was easy to find and it was consistent all the way through. The rhymes weren't too pat and obvious and were not a stretch. Easy and smooth all the way through.

I also like the silhouette. You would not believe how hard it was to get the spelling of that word, lol the security guard here at the library had an 'app' for that. giggle.

Thanks again for the lovely read.

love, LinnAnn

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Review of In Elysian Fields  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm not a pro at poetry, but I do know what I like. I love this. Are you studying Greek mythology or have you recently?

I have not heard of Shadofax, who is that? I'm nearly 60 and high school was a long time ago.

I like the tone, older style sounding. It falls off the tongue nicely. The tone makes it easier to picture her with the white lflowing gown and split at shoulders so they show.

I like how they were given an 'out' and not 'face disgrace'.

well done, thanks for sharing. I rarely give '5's. It is my pleasure.

love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really could have used this little article when I joined, lol I had no clue, and no memory. I should have gotten a dollar store little notebook and written directions down as I discovered them or they were told to me my Marsha Mussleman. She was wonderful.

I like that you gave some beginning directions on what and where to find the 'search' box in your third paragraph. Where were you when I needed you? lol

This was written well, and concise.
thanks for sharing.

love, LinnAnn

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Review of Vlad's Wife  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Take or leave whatever you want in my review. lol

I think the time frame between the first two paragraphs is too fast. In one sentece the bad guys are riding into the yard, and 4 sentences later they already are in the castle. The time it took to turn from the window and go to her bedroom door. You might want to consider adding something else to show more time passage, how long to get from a horse, run into the castle and start fighting? At the end of the 2nd paragraph they aren't in the halls fighting, they are battering down the door.

I often act out my scenes so I can get a realistic estimate of time.

You did get a fair amount of information into a small space, good for you. What if she said it aloud, so it's more show and less tell? Or even better, what if she said it to a chambermaid or lady in waiting?

I got a bit confused, if she wasn't going to surrendure and also not fight, that leaves death, either by her own hand or by the ottomans.

I was wondering why you said 'to the unknown' since she could see the river down below? Why not first see if her husband can win?

If this wasn't limited by a fixed word count, I'd like to see it expanded. You have a good start here. You could add a tiny bit more description. Maybe she could rush more to show the tension? I'm not a pro, but as a reader, I'd like some more filling in. Like I said, you have a good start.

Thanks for sharing with us.

Have a wonderful Christmas.

Love, LinnAnn

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Review of Morning Brew  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
First off, let me thank you for explaining the type of poem and giving me the specifics. I am not a pro so thanks for the help. lol

You followed the 'rules' lol, and actually it's rather good for such a tiny poem. Triple white chocolate, good detail, and the 'Sweet Bliss' reminds me of how I like cocoa with different flavorings.

I like the annimated picture too. I don't drink coffee, but the donut would work. lol

Thanks so much for sharing and have a wonderful Christmas , if you celebrate.

Love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (3.5)
I'm not a pro with poetry, and I'm not sure what the 'form' or style is for this one.

Mabye gaps here and there to separate into more than one long verse would help. I started out trying to see the pattern.

A
B
C
B
D
B
E
B
F
G
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I Then I quit. I was too confused trying to find the rhyming scheme.

It is a sweet poem, and gives a delightful image of what I think was a father, son moment of play.

thank you for sharing this with us.

love, LinnAnn

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I absolutely LOVE that you explained at the bottom about the type of poem you wrote. I am not a pro, and there is so much i do not understand or know about all the different forms of poetry. Thanks for the heads up. lol

I notices some lines are repeated in other spots, I do not know the form, but I can tell it's ment to.

I sincerely hope you answer this question, as I could not find it in my dictionary. What is 'stygian'???

Rhymes well, and not forced. You hooked me at the first verse.

Its taint infects the ink that creates each word--I like this line, well done

offered as a perfume on its fetid breath.--another great line, made me go 'eewwww'

I may not be a pro, but I can appreciate the work and effort, and quality.

Thanks for sharing.

Merry Christmas.

Love, LinnAnn

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Review of LED BY A STAR  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Do you havve any idea how intimidating it is to review your work? lol

I am not a pro at poetry so pardon my ignorance.

I first started to sing the poem to Twinkle Little Star and it didn't work. sigh
I tried to say it and the meter didn't seem right, and I have no idea if it's the way it's supposed to be or not. So I'll go for content.

I love the first two lines. Helps me to picture that bright sky full of stars, one more brighter than the rest.

I also liked the part about the angels singing. I would have loved to be in that group of Angels, maybe I was. lol

The red and green colors also add the Christmasy feel!

You paint a lovely picture of that royal birth, and give it due respect and awe.

Thank you so much for sharing this.

love, LinnAnn

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Review of Trumpets Sound  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm so glad you added the explanation of the type of poem at the bottom. I am not a poetry pro, so please bear with me.

I really like how in three verses short you cover the whole history of earth.

Your rhyming is easy and not forced, nor is it blatently predictable.

The last line lost me a tiny bit. do you mean the callous are the ones that fall? All the righteous will be able to affirm it, so I just wanted to clarify.

thanks so muych for sharing this well done poetry.

Merry Christmas.

Love, LinnAnn

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Review of My Fairytale  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
What an emotionally intense poem. Starting out all childlike and hopeful and then ending in up all doom and gloom. How trangic and what a very good example of extreme depressioin.

The 'happy' part is shorter than the depressing part, whick further emphasizes the illusion of the fairy tale life. Nicely done.

Your last two lines were the strongest, as is great, that you have the 'mind slipping away.' insanity can be caused by lost or never found love.

If this is based on your life, I am truly sorry. But Prince charmings are more likely found outside of your home.

Thank you for sharing.

Hang in there.
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
I"m wondering how long it took you to write this poem, with having to find sixteen words with the long 'o' sound for your rhyme. lol

For somereason the 'quilted throw' reminded me of someone in a rocker looking out the window, with a snapping fire. Then I look closer to see what kind of quilt is it?

ground with a shiny glow,
Are autumn tree leaves covered with snow.--Since you said 'glow' I pictured leaves 'sprinkled' with snow.

The harvest now past that came too slow,--reminds me of our late, brief summer. Most of my tomatoes are out there, still green, and covered in ice. our summer was sho short you could count the days above 70 on two hands and one foot.

I loved the sleigh rides, but I've never heard of them bing free. We don't get enough snow for sleigh rides. You are fortunate if this is a true thing from where you live.

You paint a lovely picture, thanks so much for sharing it with us.

Love, LinnAnn


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Review of WEATHERED STONES  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Such a sad poem. You did well at tugging my heartstrings. I guess it would take a vet to pause to remember those that have passed on.

such a bitter useless loss.--I think a comma goes after 'bitter'


You did so well at rhyming and describing each burial spot or broken statue and the life that was, before it rested.

I lost a baby girl, but I inow that someday in the future I will see her again.

Thanks for all the love and thought you put into this piece.

Merrry Christmas if you celebrate.
1st of the 303 in Yakima, washington, 1970's-80'd
love, LinnAnn
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Review of REUNION  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The stone 6 feet high, made me think of a memorial, but I thought it was like the Vietnam memorial an dhe had gone to see if his buddies were on it.

Your third paragraph when he is wondering where Hank was, and that he hadn't seen him again made me think that. You kept the secret well. lol

When he 'finally' saw his name, it made me think that he was out of town, looking at a tribute for those there not just dead. You still kept the secret punch line, of sorts. I suspected, but wasn't quite sure.

It wasn't until 'he faded away' that you dropped the shoe. lol

Well done, I'm impressed.
Thanks for sharing with us.

love, LinnAnn

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Review of MID LIFE CRISIS  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I read all the way through, and you cracked me up at the end. I just loved it.
Withthe government cuts in funding for medicade and social security, I was totally expecting you to end with the life expectancy lowered to forty or fifty

I do have a question for you, how much is three score? lol I never got that part of Lincoln's address either. lol

Rhymed well, meter was fine, held my interest. I don't give many 5's.

Thanks for sharing with us, and the chuckle.
Merry Christmas

love, LinnAnn

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