Excellent word-portrait of a dual-personality teen girl that grabs the readers' attention and holds it fast! This is well worth more than a single read!
Sad, intense, and passionately painful, this poem speaks powerfully on several levels! I would only change the format, were it mine, and make it a bit more verse-like. Extremely well-written piece though!
Sterling words of wisdom all, however, one might also add that Jesus would be appalled at the number of wars started by inferior intellects in His name! Just an opinion of course!
Nicely woven little piece with a structure that is not often seen and not easily accomplished! I enjoyed the theme, the flow of the poem, and the unique way that the writer manipulates the words. All in all, this is a very nice piece of poetry! Bravo!
Very Tolkienesque! I like it! Has good rhythm, a nice, even flow, and decent imagery. Reminds one of a Dwarven marching song from Lord of The Rings or The Hobbit! You can almost see Bibo and his Dwarf comrades tromping along through Murkwood, or Frodo and the gang journeying under Moria! Very nice!
Intriguing theme here, and lots of nice imagery! Structure is okay, but would work better if the lines were shortened, I think. I really like this piece!
Brief verse about an environmentalist's view of a perfect automobile. My only critique would be to change the word FLOAT in line four to FLOATS which makes the line more readable. Other than that, nice job!
Excellent poem depicting the virtues and vulnerabilities of a woman's heart! Intense imagery, and stong continuity make this piece stand out even more! Very well done!
A pleasant little Haiku depicting the chaotic chances of Nature! Not having a strong familiarity with the Haiku format, I am reluctant to state positively if the syllable count is correct, but I believe it is close! The poem states its point well and contains some vivid truth!
I like the feel of this piece, but think it would work better if re-structured a tad and spiced up with more intense imagery! Still, very readable as is also!
If I'm not mistaken, this poem is addressing the Christian event called The Rapture". Although quite short, it is clear enough to allow the reader to perceive its message! The wording is good, the flow constant, and all in all, the poem is well-crafted! Very well done!
A terse, but powerfully passionate poem dealing with one of love's greatest challenges, a termination! Well thought out, and intensely truthful, this piece depicts the end of a relationship with a blend of decency and anger that is genuine and makes the reader believe! Nicely done!
Very brief but yet holds the reader's attention! I like the unspoken message hidden between the lines of this poem, and the way it sort of creeps into your psyche to play hide and seek with your thoughts! Extremely well-written piece with good imagery and intensity!
Great content here, however, I feel the poem would be even more powerful if re-structured into a more poetic format. Still very intense and passionate as is!
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