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Open, honest, heartfelt, sincere. If I see something wrong I feel you should fix. I will tell you.
I'm good at...
Making people feel good about themselves. Helping others. Being honest. Caring for others. Letting you know what sounds good or makes others feel wanted or special.
Favorite Genres
Non-Fiction, real life, romance
Least Favorite Genres
I don't really have a least favorite. I am not good at writing poetry.
Favorite Item Types
non-fiction, real life, romance, fiction, fantasy, mystery
Least Favorite Item Types
distasteful,raunchy erotica... Now write tasteful sexy eroctica and I will gladly read and review it.
I will not review...
distasteful,raunchy erotica and Bestiality
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Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Blog City ~ Every Blogger'...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, My Name is Marcia I'm Here to read and review your writing.Please keep in mind I am a writer here at writing.com just as you are. The suggestions contained in this review are only to help you. You may do with them as you wish because your writing is yours and yours alone to do with as you see fit. I hope you enjoy your review from me.n
This is a review from: *RainbowL* beautiful "Blog City ~ Every Blogger's Paradise"  *RainbowR*.
I have the following comments for you: *Delight*
This is review number two of five I owe you from your win in "Genre Auction and Fundraiser" 
*PenY* Title:
"Grand & Epic Adventures" 
*QuestionBL* What's the piece about?:
This piece is about a young boy named Jayden who is writing an Epic and Grand adventure. As he writes the story him and his little sister, Caitlin, begin to really live the story he's writing Only in fairy tales right? That's what they thought too. They met a man, named Wiremu. He knew everything there is to know about the Taniwha that Jayden was writing his story about as the kind old man talked about the Taniwha an amazing thing happened one appeared in the ocean. It was an awesome sight— one the children would not soon forget.
*Bookopen* Marcia's Personal Impression:
I like the way this story is written very much. It's a different idea with a lot of thought an imagination written within it. I wish I had an imagination. To be honest I shouldn't say I don't I've never really tried. The names you chose to use in this story are different. To be honest, I couldn't pronounce some of them.
*ThumbsUp* Does anything leave a lasting impression?:
Yes, I love The name Jayden. *Heart* I believe I told you why when I read and reviewed "Grand & Epic Adventures"  Invalid Review It will be near an dear to my heart RIP My precious Great Niece Jayden Lane Lewis. *Heart*
*Notepady* Suggestions/considerations:
You know how you started out telling the reader how to pronounce Taniwha? That was awesome. I think it would be cool if you did that for all the names. Just a suggestion,maybe make a list in the front. *Smile*
*BookStack2* In Conclusion:
I hope you continue to write more stories. I've really enjoyed spending time in your world. Thank you for allowing me to do that. I will be back soon. May Heavenly Father, always keep you safe from harm.
Much Love and Respect always~Marcia *Awarenessg* Cerebral Palsy *Heart*
Marcia~I'm Home :)
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Review of Journey to Live  
Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! My Name is Marcia. I'm in your portfolio today because Elle - on hiatus won my donated package in "Genre Auction and Fundraiser" . You are the friend she chose to receive five heartfelt reviews from me. This is the FIRST OF FIVE .
I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile* in

After reading "Journey to Live" 

*Flowerw*Title: me
"Journey to Live"  I think the title you chose for this chapter fits it very well.
*Flower1* Marcia's Personal Impression:
I don't normally read and review poetry. Something drew me to this one. I have a strong faith. Our beliefs are the same. LDS members love deeply, we view life as a gift and death isn't so scary, You, like me don't push my beliefs on anyone, but I know I'm here for a reason and that everything in life happens for a reason; hence why your poem is so amazing!
*Idea* Marcia's Impression of your Characters:
Poems don't have Characters but it is well versed and the rhythm is awesome.
*Flower4* Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling:
I think you did really well in this area.
*Note1* Does anything need changing?:
No, I think this poem is written perfect.
*Star* What Is my favorite part about the piece:
I like how this poem links together with the next line.
*Sad* Did I dislike anything about the piece:
No, I really enjoyed reading this poem.
*Smile* In conclusion:
Please, continue writing your amazing poems. You have a talent to write. I will be back soon. I hope you enjoyed your first review from me. May, Heavenly father always bless you and keep you safe from harm. Much love Always, Marcia *Awarenessg*
Marcia~I'm Home :)
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Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*
Hello, It is Marcia. I'm here in your portfolio because you entered "Invalid Item"  so I decided read and review this piece of writing for you. Please keep in mind I am a writer here at writing.com just as you are. The suggestions contained in this review are only to help you. You may do with them as you wish because your writing is yours and yours alone to do with as you see fit. I hope you enjoy your review from me. *Smile*

This is a review from "Invalid Item"  after reading "Puppy Love at Fourteen" 
*Flowerw*Title:
"Puppy Love at Fourteen"  I like the title you chose for this short story. I think It really fits this piece very well. *Smile*

*Flower1* Marcia's Personal Impression:
I enjoy your style of writing very much. You draw the reader right into your story with you. I can picture everything that is happening. I really like that you are able to take me out of this world and into the world of the story I'm reading. To me, This is the makings of an amazing writer.

This was a sweet story about a teenage girl having a crush on the class president. She's attracted to him because of his intelligence in math and his leadership. Her parent's even give in and allow, Bert, to visit their home, but make her six year old sister tag along on their alone time. She's allowed to go to the prom with Bert. She's so excited! All bedazzled in beautiful dress...and as they were dancing she spotted earwax in his ear--Forever ending her crush! Oh My, teenagers are funny aren't they.

*Idea* Marcia's Impression of your Characters:
Your teenage self- I love how you describe all your feelings as they happen within your story,
Bert-The math genius, Your crush, and class president.
Your six year old sister-Your parent's little spy.
Your brother-In the same grade as you because he got held back a few times.

*Flower4* Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling:
I think your punctuation, grammar, and spelling are very good.

*Note1* Does anything need changing?:
I only saw one thing you might consider fixing.
You wrote:
I didn't want to have any part with him any longer.
Consider writing:
I didn't want to have any part of him any longer.

*Star* What Is my favorite part about the piece:
As we were dancing, I happened to spot wax in his ear. Eheew…How disgusting!

*Sad* Did I dislike anything about the piece:
No, I enjoyed reading this story very much!

*Smile* In conclusion:
Thank you very much for sharing this story with me. I hope you continue to enter my contest.*Smile*
I pray, God, always keeps you safe and free from harm!
Much *Heart* Love, Always,Now,and Forever, *Awarenessg* Marcia
Marcia~I'm Home :)
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Review of Why?  
Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! My name is Marcia I The host of "Invalid Item"  I've stopped by your port to read and review "Why?" 
I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*
This is a review from "Invalid Item"  after reading "Why?" 
The loss of a daughter
by Lynda ~ Wishbone Laughing Tree (71)

*Flowerw*Title:
"Why?"  The title you chose for this piece makes complete sense to me because when things like this happen in our lives we as humans have this overwhelming need to know why it had to happen. It's only normal as a Mother to want to know what makes now different than the other times. Why? is very fitting for this piece of writing.

*Flower1* Marcia's Personal Impression:
Writing has an amazing healing factor in it a way that nothing else does because you can describe real feelings and help people understand how you really felt at the moment you felt lost without your daughter.

I wish I could take that pain, that ache, away for you and your son my sweet friend, but sadly, I can't. I'm deeply sorry for your loss on both occasions. For the tragic loss of your daughter and the recent loss of your daughter-in-law. I send love and prayers to your precious son as well; that he find a way to cope with this loss. I'm here for you, Lynda, anytime even if you just need to chat. I'm a good listener.

Death so sad and hard to deal with. To me there isn't a time clock on grief. I don't believe in time healing all wounds. I don't think as a Mother you will ever get over your daughter's death and that is okay, Lynda, You don't have to! *Sad* That does not mean you are weak. It just means you have a heart and you love your daughter and you miss her. It's okay to cry about it! It just means you care. *Heart*

Believe it or not you going to become a stronger woman because of what you have been through.

I'm sure you have two amazing Guardian Angels watching over you and your family now.

*Star* What Is my favorite part about the piece:
I liked how you were so open with this writing...no holding back.

*Sad* Did I dislike anything about the piece:
Not dislike really, but it breaks my heart when parents have to lose their children. It isn't the way life is supposed to be.
*Smile* In conclusion:
If can help one person feel better in any way then it is all worth my time and effort. Much *Heart* Love and Respect Always, Marcia Belle Bucella
Marcia~I'm Home :)
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Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I have the following comments to offer:*bitogsmile*

This is a review from Marcia after reading "Genre Auction Group" 
Here's a few GP's for your Auction. I pray it is an amazing success. Come write for me! Oh, You already did! I hope you keep writing for me! *Heart*
*Flowerw*Title:
"Genre Auction Group"  I think the title and banner are amazing! Marci Missing Everyone does amazing work! I'm so in love with my pages now. Take a peek. "Invalid Item"  Isn't it so cute! I love her so much!
*Flower1* Marcia's Personal Impression:
Hi! I just thought I'd pop by with a review to brighten up your day! Your Auction Page looks amazing! I wish you incredible success not only this adventure here at writing.com, but also with everything you touch in life. You came into my life and helped me start my new chapter here at WdC so, I think it's only fitting I take the time to help you understand how much your time, help, and efforts really truly meant to me personally. I not only started my own group "Invalid Item"  and
"Invalid Item" , but I also feel like gained an amazing new friendship. I know it's only the beginning, but I hope you feel the same. *Bigsmile*
*Note1* Does anything need changing?:
No, I love it the way it is! It looks awesome!
*Smile* In conclusion:
I'm thinking about adding reviewing short stories to my group. What do you think?
Marcia~I'm Home :)
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Review of Dooms Day  
Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

This is a review from Marcia after reading "Dooms Day" 
I am here in your portfolio because you asked me to review this piece of your work for you. I would like to take this time to welcome you to writing.com. I hope you enjoy your time here with us and as you learn and grow as a writer here I hope you meet many new friends here too. *Smile*
*Flowerw*Title:
"Dooms Day"  I think the title you chose for this chapter fits it very well.
*Flower1* Marcia's Personal Impression:
Wow! I must say I was really shocked at how easy this account of this true event in your life was so easy to read. I am impressed with the way you expressed how everything occurred that day. You didn't beat around the bush you got right to the heart of the story which kept me, the reader, very focused and interested to see what was going to happen next. Your story flowed very well from the first sentence to the very last sentence telling the reader how lucky you felt to have survived the accident that day. The good thing you feel that came out of that day is there is now stop signs and a light at the intersection where the accident took place.
*Idea* Marcia's Impression of your Characters:
I really didn't get a personal feeling for the characters in your story, but that isn't a bad thing. I think this story was more focused on the accident and how thankful you were that no one got killed that day and how vivid the memory is in your mind.
*Flower4* Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling:
I think you did very well in this area. I'm not an expert in this area. I'm learning something new everyday when it comes to writing and reviewing so with that said someone else may see it differently.
*Note1* Does anything need changing?:
I personally, like your story the way it so, no, I don't think anything needs to be changed.
*Star* What Is my favorite part about the piece:
My favorite part about this story is how easy it is to read and comprehend.
*Sad* Did I dislike anything about the piece:
Anytime anyone has to suffer some type of trauma in their lives it makes me feel bad for them.
*Smile* In conclusion:
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing your story. The next time I come back I hope your story has a happy ending. This one did, but next time a love story would be nice. *Bigsmile*

Take Care, May God always bless you and keep you and your family safe from harm!

Love, *Heart* Marcia
Marcia~I'm Home :)
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Review of Greed  
Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Umbrellav*This review is part of your Shower package from "Invalid Item"  . *Umbrellav*
I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

This is a review from Marcia after reading "Invalid Item" family

*Flowerw*Title:
"Invalid Item"  I think the title you chose for this piece fits it very well.
*Flower1* Marcia's Personal Impression:
This story opens with Darrel, David Rivers, oldest son bragging to his current toy/whore about how he is just waiting for his father to call him to his bedside to tell him how much money he will get. Next his wife Betsy and his Youngest son Robert are talking about a rocketship David Rivers is having built. Robert is very upset about it. Betsy his wife says don't worry let him have his silly dream. He will have a telescope floating in space and we will have nine billion left to comfort us when he's gone as they both laugh when they go to David Rivers room to see him. When they enter the room David Rivers has tubes and bags coming from everywhere. The table is full of papers. His Accountants and Lawyers are there. He is finishing up final necessary paper work that he wanted done. Then he asked to speak to his family aGlone. David began to tell his family how he hired investigators so he knew his wife cheated on him. He knew is son Robert owed gambling debts and his son Darrel was keeping many houses and women happy that they were all just waiting for him to die so that they could each inherit one third of David's money. David told them all he only had one request. He wanted to die in peace. So his family left. Three Days later they were all called to David Rivers attorneys office for the reading of the will. They're all in a hurry. Just tell us who gets what. Very well, Mr. Miller says The three of you get everything. Everything gets divided among you three. Great, lets go to the mansion. I'm afraid you don't have a mansion to go to its been sold along with everything else and turned into gold. No problem, Darrel says, gold is easy to cash in. Mr. Miller says, follow me please, as he takes the Rivers family to watch as a rocket ship takes off. Did you ever hear the phrase you can't take it with you? Well, David Rivers did.
*Idea* Marcia's Impression of your Characters:
Darrel Rivers - Is David Rivers oldest son he has many girlfriends and many houses in different states/countries
Betsy Rivers - Is David Rivers Wife. She Cheats on him.
Robert Rivers - Is David's. He has a gambling problem. Promising his dad will make him rich when he dies
John Miller- Is David Rivers Attorney.
David Rivers -I like Frank a lot he keeps his eyes and ears open and in the end his greedy family gets what they really d eserve. *Bigsmile*
*Flower4* Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling:
you are an excellent writer, John, I think you have amazing skills in this area. It is my opinion that you are highly skilled in this area. I am impressed with your ability in this area. It is my belief it may be a God given talent. Unless you were an english teacher at some point in your life.
*Note1* Does anything need changing?:
No, I love this piece the way it was written.
*Star* What Is my favorite part about the piece:
I like when they are told they have to take off everything but their clothes that made me giggle.
*Sad* Did I dislike anything about the piece: he
YES,why do some people let money let them be ugly--love should make the world go around not money! I WISH WE COULD PAY BILLS WITH LOVE...JUST SAYIN!
*Smile* In conclusion:
Money can make some people so mean and ugly if I was rich I would share with people who deserve to have what they need and want in life, but can't have it due to things beyond their control.

Please, continue to invite me into your world and write more of these awesome stories for me to read and review.
Love, Marcia
Marcia~I'm Home :)
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Review of My New Business  
Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

This is a review from Marcia after reading "My New Business" 

*Flowerw*Title:
"My New Business"  I think the title you chose for this chapter fits it very well.
*Flower1* Marcia's Personal Impression:
This story open's with the main Character who doesn't have a name opening a steakhouse. On the day of the grand opening no one comes in he steps outside to see what the problem is. There is a crowd alright, but they are holding signs and banners condemning me. Off in the distance I see them burning a figure of me in effigy. Let me tell you, New Delhi, India is not a place to do business.*Facepalm* The main Character doesn't give up he does research he decides to open up a shoe store. He gets to his destination. He sets up shop and opens his doors for business. Again, no one rushes in. he walks to see what is going on. At least this time there are no images of him. He looks at all the people They're all barefoot and need shoes, but they're looking at him like he has two heads. For weeks, he waits and no one comes in. He decides he should not do business in the Shire.*Facepalm* This time he has learned his lesson. He is going to open up his business in the USA. He decides to open up a Starbucks at Brigham Young University. *Facepalm*

*Flower4* Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling:
effigy-a representation or image, especially sculptured, as on a monument.

Thank you for teaching me a new word. I actually had to look this word up for two reasons: I couldn't pronounce it and I didn't know what it meant.
*Note1* Does anything need changing?:
I like piece the way it is written so no, I don't think anything needs to be changed.
*Star* What Is my favorite part about the piece:
You are a funny one John, I know you didn't know this but I am Mormon/LDS. I enjoy reading and reviewing everything you write. I don't practice my religion, but my faith is still very strong if that makes any sense so I do drink coffee and tea.
*Sad* Did I dislike anything about the piece:
No, I really thought the whole thing was funny because this poor guy didn't do his research very well...*Laugh* I know you meant it too be funny. You did an amazing job!
*Smile* In conclusion:
Please, Continue to write your stories they make my day! You are a very talented writer!
Take Care, and May God Always Bless you and keep you safe from harm.
Love, *Heart* Marcia

Marcia~I'm Home :)
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Review of Obsolete  
Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Garden"  after reading "IN SEARCH OF FRANK MILLER (Chapter 1.) " 

*Flowerw*Title:
"Obsolete "  I think the title you chose for this chapter fits it very well.
*Flower1* Marcia's Personal Impression:
This story starts off with Mike telling Roy about the new computer DTH-1. The DTH-1 has a 20 gigabyte memory and can process 20 megs a second. Wait, there's more; DTH-1 can put the the right flowers in the right vases watch; as DTH-1 stood up, turned attempted to put the rose in the proper vase, broke the vase. sometime later; Roy presented, Mike with DTH-2. The DTH-2 has forty-five gigs of memory and processes data at thirty-two megs a second it also has heat sensors 2 can go into disaster areas to locate warm bodies to help rescue people. 1 is now obsolete in the incinerator 1 goes. Sometime later Mike introduces Roy to DTH-3. It has fifteen terabytes of memory and six times the processing speed. It is lighter, has enhance visual abilities. It can see heat can move in places where we would not be able to see. Its strength seventy percent increased from the previous version. 2 is obsolete In the incinerator DTH-2 goes. Sometime later; DTH-4 has all the capabilities of 3, Add to it has an encyclopedia it has sixty-five percent more RAM, can process data thirty percent faster. It is a smarter machine. What about 3? It's obsolete together they put 3 in the incinerator. Sometime later; the DTH-5 is presented to Roy He said, That's not a robot. The DTH-5 is advanced enough Mike decided to make it an android; a pleasure machine therefore; DTH-4 is obsolete.

Mike went way overboard with DTH 6 with an assortment of hair styles, skin tones, different voices, languages he also added strength. DTH-5 obsolete in the incinerator well, you would think, Mike, would stop there, but no, he kept going the DTH-7 was born...She was the most beautiful woman Roy, had ever seen. She had long red hair and emerald eyes. Roy thought he was in love. Mike asked him so what do you think? Roy was in shock to find out this was the DTH-7. The DTH-7 got up the cafeteria with Mike and Roy.

DTH-7 completed tests with Roy and Mike for two hours as DTH-6 watched. They all looked at 6 told him he was now obsolete. Together they all put 6 in the incinerator before they even realized what was happening DTH-7 banged Roy and Mike's heads together because she was so strong it killed them both. She put them in the incinerator. Called and placed an order for The DTH-7 to be manufactured...(in Mike's voice) Humans obsolete. All in the days work of an android... *Smirk*


*Idea* Marcia's Impression of your Characters:
Roy- Checks out all Mikes inventions.
Mike- Is very intelligent maybe a little too intelligent for his own good.
DTH-1- can sort, but is not smart enough not to break the vase.
DTH-2- has heat sensors, and can locate warm bodies to save peoples lives in disaster areas.
DTH-3-It has visual abilities.
DTH-4- It has an encyclopedia.
DTH-5-Is an Android. A female. A pleasure machine.
DTH-6-The model 6 has all the features of DTH-5, but also comes with an assortment of hair styles, skin tones, different voices, and can increase or decrease bust size to suit anybody.

DTH-7-Is a beautiful woman with emerald eyes-or so Roy thought.

*Flower4* Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling:
I don't see anything that needs to be changed in my opinion. I think This area was well done. I really enjoyed this story. It is a modern story. I hope never comes true. I hope computers never become intelligent enough to kill a human or take over the world in anyway. I think that would be pretty scarey.

*Note1* Does anything need changing?:
No, I like your story the way it is written. I like how your imagination works. *Shock*
*Star* What Is my favorite part about the piece:
I liked how the story progressed with a stronger better Robot. *Smirk*
*Sad* Did I dislike anything about the piece:
I am not sure if I want to say that I disliked the end, but I must say it startled me *Bigsmile*
*Smile* In conclusion:
I really enjoy reading your stories because there is always a surprise twist at the end. Please, continue to write on! You have an amazing writing talent that I really enjoy reading and reviewing for you.

Take Care, and may God always bless you and keep you safe from harm.

Love, *Heart* Marcia
Marcia~I'm Home :)
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Review of Oak  
Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  after reading "Oak" 

Hi! My Name is Marcia. I am glad to be here. You sent me a review request to read and review the following piece for you. "Oak" 
*Flower1* Marcia's Personal Impression:
This is a beautifully written story. I really enjoyed reading it. I loved how you wrote this from the actual point of view of the oak tree. It is written in the oak trees voice. I truly love this it is written as if the tree has real feelings. To me this shows real talent in a writer. It shows that the writer has a heart, a soul, real feelings that some writers have a hard time finding. You gave a tree a voice. You gave it emotion, wow! You showed without telling that is for sure. Now, I know what they mean when they say you can learn a lot by reviewing someone else's work. I will be back to read this piece again and again, Mr. John Nation. *Bigsmile*
*Flower3* Punctuation/Grammar/Spelling:
I didn't see anything that caught my eye. I am learning new things everyday in this area when it comes to writing everyday. To be honest, I like to leave this area to the experts because they may see things differently then I do because they are more skilled in this area then I am.
*Note1* Does anything need changing?:
No, I actually took the time to read this piece out loud and I wouldn't change a thing about it. I love it the way it is written. *Bigsmile*
*Star* What Is my favorite part about the piece:
My favorite part is when the Oak is describing all the animal homes in its branches and all around it.
*Sad* Did I dislike anything about the piece:
I was nervous when the hurricane came. I was so happy the Oak survived. *Happycry*
*Smile* In conclusion:
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing this story, please continue to Write On! Here at writing.com so that not only me, but others can enjoy your amazing writing.
Take Care.
And May God always bless you and keep you safe from harm.
Love,*Heart* Marcia
Marcia~I'm Home :)
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Review of The First Rain  
Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  after reading "Dear Me" 

Hi! My Name is Marcia. I saw that you were on our shower review board so I stopped by to look over your port.
I really enjoy reading and reviewing short stories that is why I chose to review this piece. "Dear Me" 

*FlowerT* Title
I think the title you choose really fits your story

*Flower1* Marcia's Personal Impression:
This is a very emotional story about how close this family is during the very trying time of no rain. The mother is found fallen by the well and brought home to the family.The father watches outside for rain during the day and comes into eat, but as his wife gets sicker he no longer eats or comes inside to eat and he prays for his family and rain. Finally, his prayers are answered and a cloud covers the sun and rain slowly begins to fall. The child comes out to see and feel the rain. It is indeed raining. The child turns to go get his mother to share the good news that the dry spell is over and the mother is already on her feet on her way outside. The child is so happy he begins to run. The rain coming down harder...all he sees are lights. Something hits his stomach. His mind goes blank. He opens his eyes. He feels his broken body... He hears talking...as his blood mixes with the rain.

*Idea* Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar :
I needed to look this word up because I didn't know what a chapati was. A chapati.(in Indian cooking): a thin pancake of unleavened whole-grain bread cooked on a griddle.Thank you for teaching me something new today.

*Note1* Does anything need changing?:
No, I like the story the way it is written except I wish the child didn't get hurt.
*Star* What Is my favorite part about the piece:

*Sad* Did I dislike anything about the piece:
Yes, It made me upset when the child got hit by the car.
*Smile* In conclusion:
This was a well written piece of how a family sticks together in a time of need with a tragic ending.
Write On! Please continue to share your writing talent with us here at writing.com Please, keep in mind that I am a writer here at writing.com like you. My suggestions are only for you to do with as you wish. Your writing is yours and yours alone. Take Care and May God Always Bless You.
Love, *Heart* Marcia
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Review of Sisterhood  
Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  after reading "Sisterhood" 

Hi! My Name is Marcia. I saw that you needed a review for"Sisterhood"  so I stopped by to help you out as I am a member of your team.
I really enjoyed your story of how you brought yourself out of a place where you felt like you were alone to a place where you finally felt comfortable enough to realize that you didn't want to be a "loaner" anymore. You finally realized that it is lonely being alone all the time. You wanted more in you life that only communicating with people and having friends could help you to see how much fun life can be.

*Flower1* Marcia's Personal Impression:
I am so happy that you realized you can have the best of both worlds. You can study and do well in school, but can also have good friends like your roommates Kaci and Mandi and have some fun.

*Idea* Marcia's Impression of your characters:
Kaci and Mandi your roommates are key parts to your story because without them popping into your room laughing and giggling you may still be missing out on all the fun they made you realize you were missing *Smile*

*Note1* Does anything need changing?:
No, I don't think so...unless you want tell us in detail about the first time you ventured out of that stuffy dorm room...Just kidding!

*Star* What Is my favorite part about the piece:
When you put your feet on the floor and started talking to your roommates...Yahoo!

*Sad* Did I dislike anything about the piece:
Why are there 1/2 every time there is suppose to be an apostrophe?

*Smile* In conclusion:
I wish you the best of luck my fellow writer. May God Bless you!
Love, Marcia
Marcia~I'm Home :)
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Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  after reading "Sins of a Woman-Chapter One " 

Hi! My it is Marcia. I saw that you were on our shower review board so I stopped by to look over your portfolio. I am really enjoying this story so I am glad that you told me that I could read and review it for you from the beginning so here is my review for "Sins of a Woman-Chapter One " 

*Flower1* Marcia's Personal Impression:
I knew this story was going to hit me right were it counts. In my heart. I am the reader on the outside knowing all that the writer will allow me to know. Right from the start my heart aches for this young innocent child that believes that it is something she did wrong to cause her flesh and blood cousin to do this horrible nasty thing to her, this is so sad. I for the life of me can't understand what goes on in an abusers mind that makes them justify the act in their own head. I have been up close and personal with this topic in my own life with my own husband the father of my children. Not once but twice. To this day he is still in denial. He served ten years for violating a neighborhood child. It is so sad how much this goes on in todays world. Needless to say, I became a single mother raising three amazing children on my own. It was not until my husband was already incarcerated for six months that my oldest son revealed to me that he too had been touched.

*Idea* Marcia's Impression of your characters:
My heart breaks for Zaharra no one should have to deal with being violated by any man ever.*Cry*
Asa, I see myself in him. I didn't see the signs either.
Tairza, I am so glad that Zaharra had someone tell her what it was going to like as she grew into a woman. I was sad that Zaharra's own mother died and that Tariza passed away also because now Zaharra didn't have anyone to talk to. Well except the almighty one.(God),but she didn't know if he was there for her anymore because she was unclean.
Ishmael- He turns my stomach, but I don't think that I am suppose to like him anyway. *Angry*

*Note1* Does anything need changing?:
No, I don't feel that anything needs to be changed. I would like to thank you for broadening my vocabulary. I had to look up the meaning of three words today while I was reading and reviewing your story. I found that after I looked them up even though I think you could have used simpler words that these words were used properly so with that being said; I think it will be good for your future readers to broaden their vocabularies too.
Here are the words that I needed to define for myself:
(1) brazier - a portable heater consisting of a pan or stand for holding lighted coals. (2) comely-attractive or appropriate. and (3) demure-demure woman or girl can be described as polite and a little shy.

*Star* What Is my favorite part about the piece:
I liked that Zaharra felt safe up on the hill talking with God and gardening *Smile*

*Sad* Did I dislike anything about the piece:
I didn't like it when Ishmael acted liked didn't do anything to hurt Zaharra. It made me angry that he asked her why she was acting like he wronged her. I wanted to scream!

*Smile* In conclusion:
I think you have an amazing talent to write. Even though this is a very sensitive subject I am very impressed believe me take it from a woman who has been surrounded by this subject one way or the other my whole life. I would tell you if you were missing the mark. Trust me when I tell you are hitting the nail right on the head sweetheart! Write On! This is well written *Delight* *Shock*

Take care,
May God Always Bless You!
Love, *Heart* Marcia
Marcia~I'm Home :)
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Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group"  after reading "Sins of a Woman Introduction" 

Hi! It is Marcia again. I know that you have been patiently waiting for me to get back to you with a review. Please for give me for taking so long. I have a little story of my own to tell you why it has taken me so long to get back to you. On this passed Friday evening I read and began to review "Invalid Item"  I spent four hours doing this maybe a little longer because I am very impressed with your writing and I am really enjoying this story. Now, I was just about done my review, but my body was getting sore and tired from sitting in my chair all day. I have cerebral palsy and I get sore sometimes its just the nature of the beast *Smile* I deal with it and move on with a smile remember the blessings God has given me. My son Matthew came in to lay me down in bed and I jumped at the chance. Long story short in the process of getting me out of my chair and into bed and moving my computer your review for chapter 10 was lost into cyber space. I cried. *Cry* I was so mad I could have spit*Angry*! Please keep in mind I am the most patient person in this world, but when it takes me hours to type something an it is just gone in a split second because somebody is not watching what they are doing,Oh,boy! look out I WAS SNAPPING' and somehow my software that saves what I am doing (Lazarus) was disabled. I wonder if it was a sign that I should start from the beginning so that is what I did. Here is my review for "Sins of a Woman Introduction" 

*Flower1* Marcia's Personal Impression:

I am so curious to see were this is going to go now. I have a strong faith in God. I am excited to read this story now that I know The meaning behind the plot. this is the story of Zaharra's walk with God. It is my personal opinion that there could be no greater story ever told! *Bigsmile* I think reading this story may change my life.

*Idea* Marcia's Impression of your characters:

From what I have read so far you very strong characters.

*Note1* Does anything need changing?:

No, I believe that this is an amazing beginning to captivate your readers into wanting to know more about the heroine of your story. You tell your readers that she is tempted by evil. You also tell your readers that the almighty one tells the heroine that he has bigger and better plans for her. As time passes your Heroine is still tempted by evil, but is God still there for her? I guess this is what we will find out in the chapters that follow.

*Star* What Is my favorite part about the piece:

I liked it when I found out that this is the story of Zaharra's walk with God that brightened up my whole day! Thank you for that so much...*Smile*

*Sad* Did I dislike anything about the piece:

I don't like that anyone has to suffer any kind of pain. It is just the kind of person I am. I know that everyone has been through some kind of pain,whether it has been physical, mental or emotional it is still pain, but that is how we learn and become strong by the life lessons that we have been through. I know that is the case for me anyway. I have made tons of mistakes in my life, but I am a stronger, better woman now because of what I have been through.

*Smile* In conclusion:

I can't wait to see what happen next! Please continue writing. I am really enjoying this story it is easy to read and comprehend. You have an amazing talent to write a story.

Take care and may God always bless you.

Love Marcia *Heart*
Marcia~I'm Home :)
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Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with disABILITY WRITERS GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

*LeafO* This review is a gift to you from "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP"  *LeafO*
after reading "Grand & Epic Adventures" 

Hi! My Name is Marcia. I wanted to pop by and give you a review so I stopped by to look over your portfolio and made myself at home. I grabbed a snack and a drink and started picking through your shelves. I know that you are new to our site and you haven't really had time to spread your wings and get all your books out on the shelves yet. I am so excited that you are here. I can't wait to introduce you to warriormom and ~A.J. Lyle~ when they find out you are my daughter they are going to be so excited that you are here. I wasn't real active when you were here last year but I am this year as you know I have been doing a ton of reviews. I love doing them and that is why I am here now to give you your first review from me.

*Flower1* Marcia's Personal Impression of your story/Plot

Your imagination has always astounded me. This story leaves me wondering is the boy at the end of the story Irving before he died? Just curious.. You know I ask crazy questions.

*Idea* Marcia's Impression of your Characters

You always come up with some off the wall and amazing characters. I don't think you have ever come with one that I have not been impressed with.
*Note1* Does anything need changing?:

Natalie pulled over to the side away from the crowd. "I have someone that wants to meet you." She said cheerily.
Natalie pulled me over to the side away from the crowd. "I have someone that wants to meet you." She said cheerily.

*Star* What Is my favorite part about the piece:

I liked when the "ghosts" at the party meet the real Irving Lane.

*Sad* Did I dislike anything about the piece:

No, I didn't dislike anything about the story. I really liked it. I wish I could write from my imagination I am not very good at it. I write mostly non-fiction.

*Smile* In conclusion:

Please, continue to write I sincerely believe that you have a God given talent to be an amazing writer. Please, Write On!
May God bless you.
Love, *Heart* Marcia
Marcia~I'm Home :)
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Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Hi! This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group" after reading"TWO DREAMERS---TWO DREAMS" 

I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

Hello! Yup its me again Marcia. I can't bring myself to leave you and Molly have made me feel like a member of the family. Ann, your pet turkey is trying to spoon with me...oh my gosh! *Laugh* *FacePalm*. He is so lovable and sweet! *Heart*

*Flower1*Marcia's Personal Impression:

Oh man, this piece
 
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TWO DREAMERS---TWO DREAMS  (E)
An elderly piano instructor and her protege find joy in music.
#1195998 by ANN Counselor, Lesbian & Happy
made me cry *Happycry* It had a bittersweet ending that brought real tears to my eyes. I really enjoy the way you deliver a story to your readers. From the very beginning of this story my heart ached for, Mrs. Ethelene Schuster, because she was in such pain from the
arthritis. She had to stop playing the piano herself, but she took on teaching. She limited the number of private students she took on because the pain was so bad, but she really believed in one her students,Brett Kensington, so much that she was his benefactor to invitations. Bret knew that his teacher was his benefactor. Her dream was to see Brett play at Carnegie Hall. As the years went by Brett stayed in contact with his beloved teacher and sent her recordings of his performances all over the world.
*Idea* My Suggestions:


*Note1*Does anything need to be changed or fixed?:

I think this piece is amazing the way it is. It is well written. It is easy to read and understand.

*Star*What I Liked about the piece:

I liked story of the relationship that grew between teacher and student. I loved how much the teacher believed in her student so much so that the last scene of the written story that brought me to tears was when Mrs. Ethelene Schuster told her nurse that she wanted to wear the blue gown that she wore for her own Carnage Hall performance when she listened to Brett's recording.

Oh, I am such a boo hoo nippsy ... I am crying as I am typing this review because it was just so sad to read that when Brett called too see how his beloved teacher had enjoyed his performance the nurse had to tell Brett how happy and beautiful his teacher looked. She was wearing her blue gown that she wore to her own Carnage Hall performance and how happy and proud she was to hear his performance. She passed on with a smile on her face. *HappyCry* Oh, what a bittersweet ending. If that was fiction all I can say is Wow!

*Smile* In conclusion:

My heart ached after reading and reviewing this story. I think you are an amazing writer and I pray that you continue to share your talent with us here at writing.com. Write On! Take care and may God bless you!

Love, *Heart* Marcia

Marcia~I'm Home :)

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Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi! This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group" after reading"Thanks! What Is It?" 

I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

Hi! My Name is Marcia. I saw that you were on our shower review board so I stopped by to look over your portfolio. I really enjoyed looking through your port it looks like a fun place to be and I am sure I will be back again because I really enjoyed reading this story. I like Christmas stories so that is why I chose to read and review this piece.
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Thanks! What Is It?  (E)
Short story based off of a writing prompt about receiving terrible gifts
#1972281 by Charlie ~


*Flower1*Marcia's Personal Impression:

I really felt bad for Leah from the beginning of this story. It was so sad. She was surrounded by her family, but they acted like she didn't even matter or like she wasn't even in the room. The saddest part of the whole story was that none of Leah's family members seemed to care what she liked or wanted. It just seemed liked they enjoyed making a big joke out of her Christmas gift and it really didn't matter if Leah liked it or not. Her family really didn't seem to care. Her family was oblivious to anything she really felt.

*Idea* My Suggestions:

Please, keep writing. I enjoyed reading your story it was very easy to read and comprehend. You have the talent to tell a good meaningful story. *Smile*

*Note1*Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:

I needed to look this word up because I didn't know the meaning of it. I enjoy learning one or two new words when I read a piece.
lithe- thin, supple, and graceful. I learned a new word today. Thank you for that.

*Star*What I Liked about the piece:

I liked that Leah tried to tell her family what she liked even though her family wasn't really listening to her at least she said it anyway. To me, her family seemed very shallow.

*Smile* In conclusion:

Thank you for writing this story. It is a perfect example of how you can feel very alone in room full of people. Oh man, how I can relate that at times and isn't a good feeling either! *Facepalm* Take care and may God bless you.

Love,*Heart* Marcia
Marcia~I'm Home :)

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Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi! This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group" after reading"To the Ones Who Serve " 

I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

Hi! It is Marcia. I saw that you are still a member of writing.com so I stopped by to look over your portfolio and give you a review and let you know you that I miss our e-mails and our chats. It has been a long time. I wanted to let you know that every time I look at my badges. I think of you with a smile. You were the one that gave me my very first badge. You gave me my "optimistic" badge. It is one of my favorites for two reasons. One, because it is from you and two, because I love Smiley faces. *BigSmile*

*Flower1*Marcia's Personal Impression:

I enjoyed reading your letter. It was very well written. It was very personal and am glad that you have writing.com to use as a place put down your thoughts. I know when I was in counselling for everything that I went through with my husband. My personal adviser taught me to put my negative feelings on paper in a blog/Journal and it helped me immensely because I could put anything in there that I wanted to and nobody was allowed to see it but me. It was just my personal thoughts. It was more like a diary back then. Computers weren't the in thing yet. I had a key to it. They still have them I think. It makes it more personal because only you have the key. So if you need to snap out and write/say angry stuff you can because its under your personal lock and key. Then when you think you are really ready you destroy it. Throw it in the water somewhere in the ocean or burn it. Then say a prayer and ask God to help you leave all the anger and hate behind you and ask these things in Jesus name Amen.

*Idea* My Suggestions:

Keep writing, Dena, continue to believe in yourself. I still believe in you!

*Note1*Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:

I didn't see any mistakes, but I will be very honest with you here and let you know that I am still learning in this area when it comes to writing so I will leave this area to the experts.

*Star*What I Liked about the piece:

I loved how open and honest you are in this piece. This is a well thought out; well written story from deep in your heart

*Smile* In conclusion:

I hope this review finds you well and happy. I hope it puts a smile your face to know that I think of you often and I miss you.

Love, *Heart* Marcia

Marcia~I'm Home :)

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Review of Oh, dear me!  
Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi! This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group" after reading"Oh, dear me!" 

I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

Hi! My Name is Marcia. I saw that you were on our shower review board so I stopped by to look over your portfolio. I looked around for a little bit and this title "Oh, dear me!"  caught my eye. As I began to read I couldn't help but laugh because I have actually accidentally sent e-mail to myself and didn't figure it out until I went back and looked at my sent e-mail wondering why the person I "thought" that I e-mailed didn't answer me back. Most of the time I have the sound down on my computer unless I am listening to music or watching a video so I don't here any sounds stupid me right *BigSmile* When I go back on and check my e-mail I just shake my head at myself*RollEyes**FacePalm* thinking one these days I will learn.

*Flower1*Marcia's Personal Impression:

Have you ever picked up a book and you just don't get what the author is trying to say no matter how hard you try? If I am not interested by the third sentence. I put it down. Well I was hooked at sentence one.
I enjoyed this piece so much! It was awesome. I loved the easy way you write. this story just flowed from beginning to end. It was so simple and easy to read and comprehend. I enjoy that so much when I read. I believe I have found another favorite author. The comedy in this story was well written and will bring me back for more. It is like potato chips you can't eat just one. Well, I can't read just one so, I will be back.

*Idea* My Suggestions:

You have the talent to write! Keep doing what you are doing. I thought that there wasn't enough hours in the day to do what I want to do on this website. Wow, after reading what you have accomplished and what you continue to do here at WdC. I don't know if I will ever be able to do all of that. I enjoy doing reviews and I will continue to do them daily, but I also need to work on my book that I would like to have published within the next year I hope. I have a ton of work to do on it though.

*Note1* Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:

I didn't see any problems in this area, but I am still learning when it comes to writing so I would like to leave this area to the experts.

*Star* What I Liked about the piece:

My favorite part of this piece was the comedy in it. When you were telling yourself that 'you' were going to be jealous of all that 'you' have accomplished. I really was laughing out loud!

*Smile* In conclusion:

I really enjoyed reading and review this story. I hope you write many more like this one. I will be visiting your portfolio again. Thank you for being an asset to the writing.com community. Take care and may God bless you.

Love, *Heart* Marcia

Marcia~I'm Home :)

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Review of To My Children  
Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi! This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group" after reading"To My Children" 

Hi! My Name is Marcia. I saw that you were on our shower review board so I stopped by to look over your port.
I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

Hi! My Name is Marcia. I saw that you were on our shower review board so I stopped by to look over your portfolio. I have to tell you the truth...what caught my eye was the title of this piece. "To My Children"  My hand to God I have ask for forgiveness here because guess what I did...I assumed it was going to be a little ditty about your children. I am sitting here smiling, shaking my head thinking," Lord in heaven I should have known her handle is Sister of Mercy. I need to ask for forgiveness for my stupidity. "She's a nun!" I figured one of two things was going to happen. One you would think I was as stupid as I feel at this moment or two you would laugh *Laugh* because you would realize how dumb I feel at this particular moment. I pray for the latter. *Blush*

*Flower1*Marcia's Personal Impression:

Now, onto your precious story.

Josette-Taught you unconditional love. My oldest son Andrew who is twenty-seven now wins this prize.

Maggie-Is your super model. My middle child is twenty-four. She is my super model. My beautiful daughter Amy is my only girl.

Rocky-Is your youngest child and taught you patience. My youngest son, Matthew, tries my patience. Does that mean he taught me patience? I think it might qualify.*BigSmile*

Your story also made me think of my precious Frankie. I had to give him to a new owner when I moved because we weren't allowed to have pets in our new apartment. I miss him dearly, but I know he has a good home.

I know Frankie is a dog, but I swear he understood me like no one else did.
He slept with me.
When I would leave the house for work he would wait at the window until I returned home. He would run out the door when I greet me with so much love.
Thank you for reminding me of those precious memories.

*Idea* My Suggestions:

I hope that you continue to share your awesome stories with us here at writing. com. This story deeply touched my heart and reminded me of my own relationship that that I had with my own precious Frankie. I need to go back and revisit my own story that I wrote about him and fix it so I can share it properly with others.

*Note1*Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:

I didn't see anything that needed to be fixed. I must be honest and tell you that I am just learning about this area when it comes to writing so I would like to leave this area to the experts. I have been a student here at writing.com to improve in this area.

*Star*What I Liked about the piece:

I liked that your piece because I see how blessed I am to be a mother to my own wonderful children. I thank God everyday for them because I have always known that my children are precious gifts from God for me to treasure.
But on the other hand; You don't always have to have children of your own to be an amazing mother to others like you are to your precious Josette,Maggie,and Rocky.

*Smile* In conclusion:

I hope you continue to write your stories. I really enjoyed reviewing this one. Thank you so much for sharing it!

I will be back again.

Take Care and may God bless you.

Love, *Heart* Marcia

Marcia~I'm Home :)

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Review by Marcia~I'm ...
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hi! This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group" after reading"Adventure for Love" 

I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

Hi! It is Marcia again. I hope that you don't mind that I stopped by to look over your portfolio again. I saw that you are still on our shower review board. I really enjoyed the last story that I reviewed for you so, I was looking forward to coming back and reviewing some more of your work. I searched for a good while and I finally came across this piece.
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Adventure for Love  (ASR)
Pelo and Pooca -- a story of love.
#857323 by Maryann
I am a little sore from sitting in my wheelchair to long today so, I gabbed a blanket and a pillow found a comfy spot on the floor and stretched out and began to read. (While my wheelchair was charging.) I hope you don't mind. I like the floor.

*Flower1*Marcia's Personal Impression:

I like your writing style it is very easy to understand,read and comprehend. I enjoy reading something when I don't have to keep stopping to look up words that I don't know the meaning of. You keep your writing simple and easy to follow. I like that in my favorite authors. I would come back again with pleasure to read anything that you write. I am a sucker for romance that is why I choose to read this story. It didn't have as much romance in it as I had hoped it would, but I was still very pleased with the story itself. I am impressed again with your writing skills because I was amazed at how well you were able to describe how trading goes on between different people and places.

*Idea* My Suggestions:

Please, Continue to write your wonderful stories. I really enjoy reading them. They are easy to read and understand.

*Note1*Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:

I didn't see anything wrong, but please keep in mind that this is only my opinion.
Someone else may see it differently. I am still learning in this area when it comes to writing so with that said I really would like to keep this area for the experts.

*Star*What I Liked about the piece:

What I liked about this piece was that Pooca was able to get all of the goods she needed and had plenty of money left over so that she and her companions were able to stay in a hotel and eat plenty of food for dinner and breakfast and Pooca was still able to give Patrick money for a tip after all her business was done.

*Smile* In conclusion:

I was just impressed with how you were able to write this story from your imagination. To me that is that mind of a great writer. Write On!

Take Care and May God Bless you.
Love, Marcia

*Leafo*This review is a gift to you from "disABILITY WRITERS GROUP" *Leafo*


Marcia~I'm Home :)


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Review by Marcia~I'm ...
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi! This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group" after reading"Grand & Epic Adventures" 

I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

Hi! My Name is Marcia. I saw that you were on our shower review board so I stopped by to look over your portfolio. I noticed that you have already received some reviews on this piece, but when I began to read it I couldn't stop. The little boy, Jayden, that is that main character in this story just brings you in his own world with him.

*Flower1*Marcia's Personal Impression:

I really enjoyed the simple language used in this story. I enjoyed the way this was written from Jayden's point of view. I liked as the story progressed Jayden told his readers that he wanted his story to be an epic adventure and that he wanted to be a cryptozoologist when he gets older.

*Idea* My Suggestions:

You write very well. Your writing is easy to read, understand and comprehend. I like that in my favorite authors. I will be back to read the rest of the story. please, write on!

*Note1*Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:

I did not see anything wrong. I must be honest and tell you that I am just learning in this area where writing is concerned,so to be honest, I like to leave it to the experts.

*Star*What I Liked about the piece:

I wanted to review this piece because when I read the first line and saw that the main characters' name was Jayden it touched my heart. Let me explain. My niece Tammy(She was only thirty-eight) passed away suddenly. She was six and a half months pregnant with a baby girl. Her name would have been JAYDEN LANE LEWIS ,but sadly she passed with her mom.

*Smile* In conclusion:

Thank you making me think of Tammy and Jayden. They are dearly missed, but will remain in my heart forever and always! Please continue to share your amazing writing with the world.
Take care.
and may GOD bless you.
Love,*Heart* Marcia

Marcia~I'm Home :)

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Review by Marcia~I'm ...
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi! This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group" after reading"Lemonade Girls Detective Agency" 

I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

Hi! My Name is Marcia. I saw that you were on our shower review board so I stopped by to look over your portfolio and this title
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Lemonade Girls Detective Agency  (ASR)
A lemonade stand turns out to be a secret business
#863924 by Maryann
caught my eye so I looked around for a comfortable spot to sit and started to read. Reading this brought back fond memories of when I was a little girl and my sister and I used to set up a lemonade stand outside of our house.

*Flower1*Marcia's Personal Impression:

I enjoyed this story. I loved the way it was written. I was impressed that you were able to write a story based on a picture. You proved that you have a vivid imagination. Not only did you have the lemonade stand in the story,but you were even able to put the detective agency spin on the story.

*Idea* My Suggestions:

Please, continue to write. I really enjoyed your story. It was so easy to understand and comprehend.

*Note1*Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:

I don't see anything wrong, but in all honesty I am just learning this stuff when it comes to writing so, would like to leave this area to the experts. Please understand that I am only here to offer my opinion on your work and encourage you to keep writing. Your work is yours and yours alone to do as wish with it. I hope you continue to write on!

*Star*What I Liked about the piece:

I love the end of the story when Buster the dog came running up with Mari Lena's Teddy bear in his mouth.

*Smile* In conclusion:

I love teddy bears. I collect them. It made me like this story even more because there was a teddy bear in it that and I am a sucker for happy endings.

Take Care,
And may God bless you.
Love, Marcia

Marcia~I'm Home :)

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Review of My first love  
Review by Marcia~I'm ...
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi! This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group" after reading"My first love" 

Hi! My Name is Marcia. I saw that you were on our shower review board so I stopped by to look over your port and this piece caught my eye.
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My first love  (13+)
The story of how I met and fell in love with my hubby!
#1927696 by Marci Missing Everyone


I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

First, I am a sucker for romance. Second, I love non-fiction true stories because that's all that I write. Third, I like your name. And fourth, I love that you tell the world that you are christian.

*Flower1*Marcia's Personal Impression:

Now, to the story itself. It is well written. I was right there with you in church. I could see and feel everything and I like that in my favorite authors. I just found a new one by the way, yes, you. I will be back. I really enjoyed your story. I have to say I was hoping you married him. I was very happy with the ending. I liked how it was a surprise in a way. Even though that is what the reader is hoping for you do manage to keep that little element of surprise there and I liked that.

*Idea* My Suggestions:

Please, keep writing you do have a talent and it shows. Keep sharing your stories with the world.

*Note1*Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:

I don't see anything, but I am just learning in this area when it comes to writing so, I like to leave this area to the experts. Please keep in mind this review is only my opinion and your work is yours and yours only to do with as you wish. I am only here to encourage you to believe in yourself and your writing.

*Star*What I Liked about the piece:

I liked that you shared a very personal part of your life with the world and made it into an amazing romance.

*Smile* In conclusion:

I want you to remember that "Everything In Life happens For A Reason and no one can make you feel less amazing!"

Love, *Heart*Marcia

Marcia~I'm Home :)

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Review of The Kiss  
Review by Marcia~I'm ...
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi! This is a review from "Showering Acts of Joy Group" after reading"The Kiss" 

I have the following comments to offer:*BigSmile*

Hello! It is Marcia. I am here to give you a review. I have been here in your port before. I just enjoy your writing very much. I feel like I am right there the whole time I am reading what you write. I love that in an author. You write very well in the first person and your dialogue is amazing.

*Flower1*First Impression:

This was written so well that it brought tears to my eyes. This story is a true account of how much two people love each other. A story in my eyes that can only be true, real, non-fiction. I can't imagine someone writing something like this from their imagination. If you did I am in awe. Now, that is writing. I compliment you in this way because I have only written true, real life stories, so far.

*Idea*Suggestions:

Please, continue to write and touch the hearts of others with your skill.

*Note1*Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:

I don't see any mistakes, but am just learning about all of this stuff as far as writing is concerned. I have even attended some classes here at writing.com so, I don't like to give my opinion in this area to much.

*Star*What I Like:

I liked how the story ended and Amy and Ron were in each others arms when Sally came in. It was a bittersweet ending to an amazing love story.

I have a question if you don't mind. Is this a fiction or non-fiction story? I am really curious.
Write On! Always!
Love, *Heart* Marcia

Marcia~I'm Home :)

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