A very emotional piece, taking all into its grasp. The loss of someone so young at such a tender age, the possibility of others around being able to commiserate with others. How everyone can help, and then the final deal of the cards. A very well written piece of your heart.
Very nice piece, with great thoughts. Some of the best writing I have ever come across is by Laura Ingalls Wilder in her rediscovered writings. So far ahead of her time of the early 20th century. I enjoyed your poetry.
Very interesting short. I believe my recommendation on what to do would depend on which gender, and how old, you are. I would suggest leaving her alone, for now anyway, and possibly expanding on your story to fill the reader in on what actually happens.
Very interesting piece, with good creative words, leading to vibrant pictures in the mind. I do suggest you might want to change some of the rhymes which tend to take away from the overall delightful character of this poem. However, enjoyable and interesting!
A very introspective visit...one I was not sure where you were going, with all the intricacies of your experience. I am glad I held on to see your finish. A little much with all the labor details, I enjoyed the whole because of your beautiful ending.
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