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Review of Enemy  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Kyle! I found this in your port and thought to leave a comment or two.

It looks like some higher-up neglected to take the possibility of technological advancement seriously, if they even considered it at all. Their complacency and acceptance of the seemingly never-ending status quo cost their men their lives; it may have even cost them the possibility of coming out the victor in this conflict. Unfortunate.

Your story of men manning the trenches and preparing to repel attackers rings true enough. I like how you used uncommon words in the tale: fosse and, from the Basque, etsai. Very cool. Thanks for sharing this!

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Review of Lemonade  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I found this in your port and thought to comment; just remember, though, it's only one man's opinion.

This looks like a great Daily Flash Fiction entry. It's most unfortunate that pesky word count limit tripped you up. Five little words - I've been there more times than I care to remember. That said, you paint a realistic picture of a father desperately trying to find his little girl at a local water park. You even have his heart almost stop when he sees a youngster face down in the water and grabs her, only to find out she's not his child. He finds her safe and sound, but I'd bet she got a serious talking-to after his heart rate dropped back under 100.

The only comment I would make is that, with the child missing for an hour, you would think the police would have been swarming the area. I'm not sure what part of the story you could remove in order for them to at least get a mention, but I think it would help sell the story. Thanks for sharing this with us!

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm a retired soldier and this poem's title caught my eye, so I thought I'd comment. Naturally, I very much liked the subject of your poem. You make mention of the reasons he chose to serve, and you allude to the sacrifices he's made and the hardships he's endured. I'm glad this soldier was also your friend.
I like the rhyme scheme you chose. Although the meter seems to be variable, it works for this poem. Thanks for sharing it.

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (3.5)
You've put together quite the listing of movies and sorted them by category. I recognized many of the films included in this collection and have seen quite a few of them, although there are huge gaps in my 'viewing database'. For instance, I've seen The Three Musketeers, The Adventures of Robin Hood, and Robin and Marian, and then there's a giant void until Darby O'Gill and the Little People. It gets somewhat better after that, with The Princess Bride and The Lion, the Witch &the Wardrobe, the Tolkien films (live and animated), and perhaps a dozen more. The list makes a nice review of good films, and I enjoyed scanning it for favorites. Thanks for putting it together.

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Review of Taste  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi! I found this in your port and thought to offer some comments. I like the way you incorporate the title in the text, and I just had to wonder: which came first, the title or the text? It appears they shared a violent love and I can't decide if the shared kiss transformed the protagonist, or just so captured his heart and senses that he seemingly takes sides against his friends either physically or philosophically. A dark poem indeed.

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I found this in your port and wanted to comment. I like this love poem, and I like how you use repetition to drive your point home. The love of our life does exist in our chest - in our heart - and it's good to remind our soulmate of that fact. I also like how you describe the emptiness of life without that love to fill and fuel it. Thank you for sharing this.

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Review of THE LAST WHAT IF  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Ah, the regret of "What if...?" Her choice, her decision, doomed her to a life without the love of helpmate. She knew he loved her and always would, but she somehow couldn't make herself commit to him. It's very sweet how, at the very end of her life, he was able to prove his eternal love for her by being there to welcome her into the afterlife. Thanks for sharing this.

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Review of Wonderland 2024  
for entry "A-2. The Antipathies" 
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hey, there! Just dropping in for I Write in 2024. So-o-o many things went through my head as the story unfolded. "Essence of Han Solo" seems to permeate the tale although, from the mention of the excellent pay onward, hints of Tom Hanks' Jimmy Dugan from A League Of Their Own kept coming up (e.g. "Well, I could certainly use the money.") I like your little monologue on spacecraft design, and what Star Trek fan never wondered about those inertial dampeners? Oh, yes - the whole "south side of the galaxy" thing is a hoot.
Thanks for sharing this!


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Review of A Snowy Dawn  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I came to your port for a review and found this gem. Overall, the meter you chose is generally even and works well with the abcb rhyme scheme. The verses paint a lovely picture of an early stroll through a snowy wood, rescue dog in tow (or, possibly, with you in tow). I like how you portrayed the pup's concern for you when you took that spill, your rescue dog ready to rescue you right back.

My favorite line: The dawn comes up to cardinal sound; it reminds me of the mourning doves I can hear around here in the mornings. Thanks for sharing this with us!

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The account anniversary group size for today is very small, so I thought I'd give you a review. A number of things about your poem caught my eye. I like the internal rhyme you used, including the title: spring morning, Daffodils...hills, chick...pick and, to a slightly lesser extent (although the alliteration was cool), tune...two. I also liked how you pivoted the meaning of 'pick' from the chick trying to find some food, to its meaning as relates to music. Clever!
I enjoyed reading this; thanks for sharing it.

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Review of WoRdS lEfT uNsAiD  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
A hard-edged poem about the painful ending of a relationship. The "...sharp jagged edges..." of words unsaid can inflict a lot of emotional damage and pain. The imagining of what those words might be, the feelings brought forth by the thought that they could possibly be true, can all cause deep emotional wounds.

Relationships come to an end all the time. Frequently, the ending can be foreseen. One party or the other - and sometimes, both - have engaged in behaviors ill-suited to maintaining a healthy and loving relationship. In this case, it appears that it has come as a complete surprise to the protagonist. It's easy to picture her (as seems likely) holding her head in her hands and uttering that query, her voice showing the shock she's beginning to feel at her partner's revelation. As realization sets in and the finality of her loss takes hold, she regains her strength of will and leaves her former partner standing alone, using her own unsaid words to strike back at his heart as she departs.

Thank you for sharing this.

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a beautiful poem about the love a man has for his wife, what she means to him, and his hope and desire that they will continue to grow together until they are as one. I love the second line, describing how the bond to your bride is so strong, that just seeing her recalls the smell of the breeze of your homeland.

May you two share a long and happy life together, and thank you for sharing this with us!

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Review by Writer_Mike
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this depiction of life in the rural Wisconsin of the 1950s. A trip I once made to northern New York took me along I-90, meaning I actually went through Sparta - quite the coincidence! - so your description of the rolling landscape seemed extra familiar. Your description of your trek back to the farm easily held my interest and was very entertaining (certainly more so for me than it was for you at the time). Regarding suggestions, I don't really have any other than to comment that including descriptions for Margaret and Mr. Michelson - even ones as basic as the one given of Mr. Kelly - would have added an extra bit of 'scenery' to the story; it doesn't suffer from their absence, though.

Thanks for sharing a bit of your past with us!

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Review of The End of Her  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very sad poem about how lost and adrift one can feel at the loss of a parent; in this particular case, a daughter losing her mother. The world at large doesn't change, but the ties to it that ran through the mother are gone and what was once familiar now feels strangely different. Here, as with the loss of any significant person to you, you look at the places where she used to be, doors through which she used to come, and expect to see her appear. She doesn't, and the sorrow deepens all the more.

The open verse style employed works well here, and no rhyme scheme is needed to get across the feelings of loss and abandonment. Thank you for sharing this heartfelt poem.

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (3.5)
My wife used to love the Suite Life shows and, as noted, this is a piece of fanfiction. It shows a side of Dylan I don't recall from either series, but - hey! - literary license. It's easy enough to follow the action and even, perhaps, to make a prediction or two on how Dylan is next going to mistreat his brother. Definitely a different take on the siblings' on-screen dynamic.

As far as suggestions go, I would only say that, if you want to make this available to a wider or different audience, you may want to use a grammar checker. It would catch little things like desert versus dessert, and possibly make a recommendation for rewording unusual descriptions (such as replacing 'scantily posed' with 'scantily clad'). As a fanfiction item, this story assumes some familiarity with Suite Life canon, so fans of the boys' antics will likely enjoy reading it. Thanks for sharing!

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
As I'm a past (and possibly future) NaNo'er myself, the title of this poem caught my eye. Naturally, based on that title, I read it with the basic rhyme scheme and rhythm of Mr. Moore's classic Christmas poem and found that it followed those characteristics quite nicely. It's obviously much shorter than the original poem, but I believe that's completely understandable, as it was created less than eight hours before NaNoWriMo kicked off and you were probably hoping for a little nap to get you started. *Laugh*

The poem's actual subject matter is clearly in sync with the title and indicates you were likely as prepared as it was possible to be. *ThumbsUpGreen* Thanks for sharing this with us!

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I have a son-in-law who would probably enjoy this, as he's very much interested in minerals, rocks, and so on. This is a fun exercise and it contains a few terms that are likely unfamiliar to the world at large (augite, chalcopyrite and plagioclase, to name a few). Thanks for setting this up for us!

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Review of The Rose  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
How appropriate, that I found this poem during Valentine's Day week! I love your comparison of love to a rose, and how you describe the nature of each, as well as the simple rhyme scheme. Both love and the rose have their phases, their waxing and waning but, as you point out in hope, having friendship as love's foundation is something to be desired. Thank you for sharing this!

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Review of Silent Child  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This isn't a very long poem, but you still manage to get across the desperate feelings of despair and fear the girl or woman lives with. Isolated on a farm and apparently unable to flee, she has to endure whatever evils are inflicted upon her. It's all very sad, and even worse that it happens in thousands of homes every single day.

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Review of Lucky Irish  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Ah, the things that bind father to son! It's touching that you wanted to share such a deep-rooted cultural tradition with your son, and it's too bad his young palate wasn't developed enough to appreciate some of the finer products of Irish brewing and distilling traditions. Maybe after he completes Primary School; you never know. *Laugh* Thanks for sharing this (ideally nowhere close to autobiographical) story with us!

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Ah - an oldie but a goodie! You poetically mention multiple ways to amuse and entertain yourself while barricading yourself from the scourge that was (and, to some extent, still is). I like your aabb rhyme scheme and, even though the rhythm varies somewhat, it still carries the poem right along from start to finish.
Thanks for sharing this, and keep that mask handy!

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Review of The Suitor  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
You just have to wonder: are male black widow spiders not required to attend Spider Sex Ed., or they just not bright enough to grasp the end result of their flight to passion? Whichever one's true - or, maybe, both of them - the system works, else we'd have run out of black widows long, long ago.

I do like how you tell the tale of spider mating in so few words. The mental image accompanies the text quite nicely. Thanks for sharing this!


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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (5.0)
For some reason, it seems as if the system had mercy on us, aided and abetted by the longish words scattered among the words to be found. This one wasn't as hard as some past ones have been. Of course, that was on this go 'round; the letters get reshuffled every time you load the page, so the next time might be different. Anyways, these were all good words and, as always, it's fun to complete a word search. Thanks for setting this one up for us!
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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Looks like another fine entry for The Dialogue 500 from back in the day! I like the humor you injected into this story, with the customer going on about his girlfriends - one of which is, unbeknownst to her, on the way out - and his primary, whose name he's getting permanently inked to his body. His description of her and their relationship is sexist, to say the least, and bragging about his "multi-level marketing empire" incurs the ire of the tattoo artist (to his detriment). His favorite phrase seems to be "Life is strange."; so is he.
Thanks for sharing this; it was funny.

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Review of Incarnate  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Looks like what we have here is 'Freaky Friday' with a horrific twist. The movies were basically sweetness and light, with a soupçon of teenage angst. This story? Not so much. *Shock2* I never saw any of the 'Chucky' movies, but this tale looks like it would fit right into that movieverse.

You have the action blocked out into appropriate sections, from what I can see, so I have no suggestions. Thanks - I think - for sharing this!

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