Hi! The Virtual Dice say it's time for an Anniversary Review, so here we go! Lord only knows where, but I've actually heard of this coffee. Anyone visiting this shop should be forewarned by its name, and I thought it was a nice 'plug' to name the owner Kopi. I liked how you set up Sidehill Wampus Cat's habitat, quietly explained in the area set aside for 'special customers', as well as the gathering and roasting process. That's pretty much how "in the wild" beans are harvested, and I thought it made a fun read.
Hi! I just wanted to share a few thoughts about your poem. It's a sad poem about two people who were very much in love, but issues of some sort came between them and they grew apart, leaving only the memories of how great they were together to sustain him. Thanks for sharing bit of yourself with us.
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Good evening! If I may, I'd like to offer a few thoughts on your poem. I like how you expand on the prompt image by taking us from tiny twig to tree, and how you urge the tree to grow ever taller, so that it can most benefit from the sunlight. I also see how you used the last line to reflect a possible reason for the sparseness of fully grown trees in the image.
As to your poem's form and rhyme scheme, both were well executed; none of it felt 'forced' to me. Thanks for sharing this!
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Hi! I chose Passion for this week's review. The image you created of shared passion just leaps right off the screen, showcasing the personal and emotional viewpoint allowed in a tanka. For me, it conjures an image suitable for use as the front cover of a romance novel (and we all know how racy some of those can be). Your Note addresses any concern one might have regarding the form's rules, so I think you followed them just fine, so I have no suggestions for improvement. Thanks for sharing this!
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Hi! I chose your poem from the Week 4 entries for review. I like the acrostic you created. I've always liked that form, as it allows a great deal of freedom, but still requires some thought. This particular poem tells a truth; after all, no one hopes for less. Thanks for sharing it with us!
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I've never tried to hail a taxi on the street, but the idea that a more or less famous person stands a better chance isn't all that far-fetched; location probably matters, too. It's also likely, in a big city, anyway, that you're walking if you're not driving. Besides the yellow (mostly) beetles scurrying about, you also mentioned one particular car. Do you know who may have a car labelled WRITER? The same guy who had a bulletproof vest with that label: Richard Castle [character in the eponymous TV show].
The rhyme and meter don't play a part in free verse, so I'd say you did you just fine and I have no suggestions for improvement. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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Hi! The title certainly matches your poem, which does a great job describing the hottest part of the year. I can easily imagine wilting plants all bent over and begging for rain, and many of us have seen that shimmer of heat above a baked surface. You clearly made appropriate use of seasonal kigo, too - great job!
I don't see any errors, nor do I have any suggestions for improvement. Thanks for sharing this with us!
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I chose "Until 2 A.M. (Silly Bunny)" to review for this week's prompt. I found your poem to be both sad and sweet. Sad, in that the little boy was so different, he was tormented by other schoolkids and learned to hide in order to protect himself. Sweet, in that his mom was so loving and understanding, that she read him stories and told him tales until late into the night. I like how he finally was able to stand on his own, and that he found someone with whom to share his nights.
I have no suggestions for corrections or additions; I like the poem just as it is. Thanks for sharing it with us.
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I like how you describe your relationship with God as an on-going thing, a work in progress. You also seem to view repentance as more than just a "one and done" proposition. You describe what is likely the most important part of your plan for your life and, although it's fairly short, you lay out some important points. Thank you for sharing this with us.
I don't know if that's how you intended it, but this poem speaks to me of feelings hurt and love lost long ago, causing the heart to freeze over. The heart now waits, hoping, wondering, if the warmth of love will ever bring a thaw. And if it comes, how will it be?
Thank you for sharing this with us, Kåre.
I, too, have memories of our 'before time', and I'm glad of it. I never considered a feather comparison before but, as feathers in the slightest breeze will go any- and everywhere, so, too, are my memories of her. They're everywhere I look, everything I hear. Thanks for sharing this, Ken.
In Manchester she came into the world -
not England's north, but north of Boston Town -
and frolicked as the snowflakes 'round her swirled
and lit upon her head - a frosty crown.
She served at home but also far abroad
her country's uniform so proudly wore
and walked, perhaps, where Charlemagne had trod
when conquering he went in days of yore.
Romantic arts reside within her heart,
and so to show us love's not just for birds,
she plies her skill with such creative art
to make us puzzles full of lovely words.
Now having set them out for us to do,
if falls to us to leave a good review.
A good puzzle, StephBee - GOT Survivor! One long word to keep us thinking we can do it - - and a liberal sprinkling of shorter ones to keep us looking. Thanks for sharing!
I hope that feeling of rebirth, of renewal, that traditionally arrives with Spring comes much sooner than a look at the calendar would indicate. You, and your city, have suffered more than long enough.
Jeez, Ned, you really know how to work a prompt. I find this to be a very powerful poem. To me, you paint a quite clear picture of a loved one's passing from life to death, and that final earthly separation at the grave. Thank you for sharing this with us.
I'm afraid I'm having trouble seeing the picture you're painting. I took a look at the previous entries, so I have some idea of the characters, but I just don't get it. Lysele can obviously teleport herself and she appears to be a guide of some sort but, for me at this particular time, there just isn't enough context to say anything more. I'm sorry.
Sussan knows what she wants and is willing to do whatever she must in order to achieve her goal, which is to live her last summer where the air is clean and she can enjoy what's left of her life. I really like how you wove in the little details of mountain life in Norway. Thank you for sharing this with us.
This is a very cool take on the whole Schrödinger's cat experiment. It even has a hint of "Why did the chicken cross the road?" thrown in. I like how you started the poem, then restarted it towards the end, albeit just a bit differently. I also liked how you described the descending/ascending nature of his atoms ("...living and dying decaying and thriving..."). Thanks for sharing this.
A sad remembrance of a childhood friend's loss in time of war. You are absolutely right, Constance; peacekeepers do die trying to maintain what is usually a very fragile peace. After all, if everyone agreed that the war should be ended, where would be the need? It's hard enough to visit the grave of a family member or friend, so I liked how you used joyful aspects of nature to help lighten the mood. Thank you for sharing this with us.
A "designated shopper" for Bigfoot? I love it! And this process would work - contactless delivery - even outside the pandemic. I liked how you set up the list's location, too. It reminded me of Scout and Jem finding items in that tree's knothole in To Kill A Mockingbird. Thanks for sharing this with us.
That was a sad, bad day, and that's a fact. You want to protest the way things are going? Fine. Put on your boots and pick up your 1st Amendment sign. You want to go out of your way to harm and destroy, like rioters you would have stopped back in the day? As LtCdr Worf would likely say: "You are without honor."
Thanks for sharing this with us.
Hi, Kåre! I came across this item in the Random Reads and, with the basic title plus the description, I just knew I had to check it out [The Moody Blues were my wife's favorite group, and this album was possibly her favorite]. You're right: it's funny, what current event or stimulus will spark a memory of long ago. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Means. Motive. Opportunity. Iffy friends, at best; railways to disaster-in-waiting most times. Great story, Nick. I loved how you wove in the backstory--getting caught and lectured by "the old whingers", Steve's dad and how he shared his knowledge (and, thereby, becoming unknowingly complicit in your random acts of fun ), etc. From my own childhood escapades, I certainly know the feeling of having gotten away with something; unfortunately, I'm also familiar with the other side of the coin. Thanks for sharing this with us!
These are wonderful Merit Badges and trinkets, Princess Megan Rose 22 Years! Thank you so much for allowing us to collect them. My oldest daughter was also a Pokey Puppy fan, and I've always enjoyed Glen Campbell's singing and playing [I love the YouTube video of him playing the finale to the "William Tell Overture"], and personally, I thought he did a fine job in True Grit. Thanks again for sharing your collection!
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- and a liberal sprinkling of shorter ones to keep us looking. Thanks for sharing!