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I am no expert on anything. So I can only tell you how something makes me feel. My native language is also not English and I am not an American. So I might not understand culture specific expressions. 5: If I absolutely love the item and would remember it and even recommend others to read it by posting it in my newsfeed. I will also give 50 GPS+ if I have any GPs left in my account. 4-5: If I like the item, but not enough to recommend it to others and post the link in my newsfeed. No GPs. 3 -4: If the item is okay. I kept on reading it because I thought I might change my opinion, but the item failed to meet my expectation. On the other hand I did not find any grammatical or spelling errors in it. 2-3: If the item is something which I didn't get at all and found at least one grammatical/ spelling error. 1 -2: I did not like it at all and could not even feel like reading it to the last.
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Comedy
Least Favorite Genres
Sci- Fi, fan fiction and contemporary fantasy
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories. Poetry
Least Favorite Item Types
Books, Chapters, Novels
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I don't like to review long things
Public Reviews
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Review by Tammy
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi New Age,

I opened your static item reading the intro, because I was curious about the 'Troubles' you wrote about in Ireland. Well your poetry invoked my curiosity about Ireland further. If you get the time, may be you can enlighten me a little about this over email.
As for your poetry, I feel if you shorten some of the lines for example the last line of the second stanza say by dropping articles or prepositions, the rhythm of the poetry would be better.

Keep Writing!

Regards,

Tamanna
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Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Ghost,
As I read through the first paragraph of your monologue, I thought I was reading about myself. I too have very little to complain about. In fact, I lead an extremely privileged life in a country where millions of people are still living below the poverty line. As a women I can't say I have never been molested, but my experiences are not as nightmarish as that of the 1000 girls who faces sexual violence on average every month in my country.
So I should be thankful right? But instead, I find there is something missing in my life. There is this unexplained emptiness in me too.
Reading your work I am glad to know I am not the only one who feel this way, there are other people who go through the same restlessness of not knowing the purpose of their living.
I liked the poetic way you described your situation in the last para. Keep writing, may be you will find your answer some day.

Tammy
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Review of Untitled  
Review by Tammy
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Lol! This is funny. It was as if a scene taken out of Sex and the City. I kinda agree with Heidi, a ping-pong date is not that bad. People, I think connect better, when they play. AND there is less chance of getting bored.

Anyway, I think and it is just my opinion as a reader that this particular writing would do much better as a script for a skit.

Good work. Keep writing!
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Review of The Beginning  
Review by Tammy
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Dear Ben,
I liked your comment more that the narrative and to be honest if the explanation that was written for the reviewer was part of the story, then your piece is really something unique. I believe very few writers actually puts a footnote for the reader to emphasise that the story was a true account.

Anyways, I noticed two grammatical deviations in the 2nd para; 3rd line --"Although I found her to be highly attractive I determined not to see her again." I think it should be '...I was determined...'
5th line: "Yet the next day the girl who'd arranged the date in the first place had said to me.." I think "...first place said to me..." is fine.

Keep writing!
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Review by Tammy
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Definitely a satire with a pinch of salt. But then salt is good. In our culture, anything you cook without salt is tasteless and you know what happens if there's too much of it. But I think yours is well balanced.

Keep Writing!
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Review of Song  
Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (5.0)
Love your short and sweet poem. You could use it in posters promoting music. Along with the image of notes, this would be something I would put on the top of my harmonium.
I am not good with punctuation. But you may think of putting a full-stop after dune.
Good work Amy.
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Review by Tammy
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
It was a dramatic and emotional short story. The emotions were presented well, without too much detail, you have been able to convey why the woman wanted revenge. Besides you left a mystery unresolved at the end --- the relationship between the narrator and the woman. But that is good as well, leaves some space for the reader to imagine the relationship.

Here's a few correction I would like to suggest:


.... but I did want to jump in the middle. It seems to me there should be a 'not' between did and want.

The account she gave of the abuse was long and difficult, but gave her nothing. Do you think there should be a 'it' after but.


She was the most assertive girl...

Keep writing!
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Review of Mirror, Mirror  
Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (5.0)
OMG, as if I was reading my own life account. You have beautifully presented the stages of a women's life, the transition in her thoughts. What I like about your work is it's simplicity. Yet you managed to convey the important message which all of us women realise but often too late. The message that beauty lies inside us not on our skins.

Thank you for the wonderful write up.
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Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (4.0)
I am amused by your story...'God rest his yolk' Lol. I think is it sweet and intelligent. However I did not get the ending. What happened to the king's wealth and why was Sally poached. While I liked the way you described the fall as a conspiracy... I wish you would write something how king's men pretended to fix Humpty, all their efforts were like crocodile tears. But good job. Keep writing.
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Review of THE DATING GAME  
Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (4.5)
Awww, the story is something you can actually visualise. I like the simple way you have narrated the story, as if I am listening a female friend's blind date experience. I would not change anything about the story. It is well written. Keep Writing!
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Review by Tammy
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
A thoughtful piece. Makes one wonder what happened to the hunter after he went back to his society. Was he able to blend in again? I liked the way you described the accessories of the civilised world through the eyes of the hunter. But I think, a little more detail in the fourth para would have been nice. The hunter's thought on the words he was taught.
Well keep on writing...
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Review by Tammy
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A really amusing poem. Intelligently written.
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Review of Mortal Beauty  
Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Kamoonpuri: I liked the way your described women's beauty and gave the Creator the credit that goes behind it.
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Review of The Visitor  
Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (5.0)
It's so wonderful. Really sweet. Kind of made me jealous of the wife, who could love her husband so much that she could actually feel his presence. Good job. Keep it up.
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Review of EXistance  
Review by Tammy
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
you ARE DOING A GREAT JOB. i WOULD REALLY LIKE TO READ THE REST OF THE STORY...BUT I THE LACK THE IMAGINATION NEEDED TO ADD VALUE TO THIS WONDERFULLY DEVELOPING PIECE.
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Review of The Storyteller  
Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice allegory
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Review of limerick poem  
Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (1.0)
I am not a poetry expert. I review items as a reader not as an expert. Sharing my opinion about a piece shows two things.. 1) that someone has read your piece 2) The person also gets benefited as reviews usually earns GPs.
I picked up your poem for I was curious about limericks. Then I read it and tried to find out more about limericks. The definition I found online does not match what your have written. So honestly I did not get what you wrote.
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Review by Tammy
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I really like you Wolf and would . Lol. Great story and a very amusing read. I like how you connected other stories and fairy tales with your wolf. My favourite part is that of Little Red Riding Hood. Yeah we never got to get the wolves perspective about her. An intelligent piece too because of the way you used words like EWE and Mutton. Keep writing.
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Review of Chasing Ghosts!  
Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (5.0)
Lol this is a really amusing poem. I like the practicality expressed by the ghost. A great read. Thanks for the poem. Keep writing!
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Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow I had been looking for an answer for this b-item creation. Thanks a lot!
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Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (1.0)
Dear Maddie, I think you need to send your work for a thorough grammar and better sentence construction review. I myself if not great in grammar so I cannot help you in that area. Moreover, being a free member of this site, I cannot use the review tool. So I will just tell you about the few spelling corrections that needs to be made.
every, opposite and where
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Review by Tammy
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Awww if you really had experienced what you wrote then my heart goes out to you. LOL!

I didn't fall off the chair reading your piece but it was amusing. Here are the parts that I liked: The third sentence and the last couple of paragraphs where you gave advice about what not to do with the torch and how to follow your dog's lead.

Th middle was a little slow. But I, not being a professional editor can't tell what to do to improve it. But overall your piece is good. :)
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Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (3.0)
Dear Lynda Miller,

This is nicely written informative piece. However, I was wondering if you are going to use it in a book or magazine or website? If so then please so include image/images of a light house including the fresnel lens.Also I would suggest that you talk a little bit about modern lighthouses or whether lighthouses are used anymore or have they become obsolete.

In the sidebar along with the names of the places, I would suggest that you also put the present day name of the country where these seven wonders are located.

Good Job!
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Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (2.0)
Dear Ruwth,

Since I am not a believer it is difficult for me to get the full essence of your personal experience that you have shared here hoping that it would give readers some strength in their worst of moments. In any case I am sure those who believe will find it as a strongly inspirational story.
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Review by Tammy
Rated: E | (4.0)
it was amusing and I could easily visualise Alfie. Had fun reading it. Kids should love it!
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