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Review by Eneh Akpan
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi! HuntersMoon,
I was gripped by the theme of the poem even before I started reading it.
Thinking about one's father who is away on a war field is pretty touching especially knowing he might not be home (might not?) will not be home for Christmas.

A foot tall artificial Christmas tree - the very first line of the poem says it all. This Christmas is going to be or feel like a rehearsal for the poet persona and not the real thing because the feeling is not complete. The next line completes the image: A decorated memory.

The poetry took me away through the battlefields of Afghanistan and the rest of the troubled spots in the world. I tried to imagine somebody (someone's father) caught in a crossfire during the 25th of December when he ought to be home with his family and I couldn't stop the eruption of emotion. I didn't cry (I would not lie) but I almost did cause tears rose to my eyes.

This is a really lovely poem and it does justice to the theme.

Keep your pen bleeding!

Poesy


By the way, I wonder if you might be interested. I write poetry for the season every Christmas on my blog http://writeveriday.blogspot.com/ Would you be kind enough to write a poem so I can post it there or maybe, you might let me use this one?
Thanks!
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Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, SoCalScribe,
I know I'm stating the obvious, but you did fantastic job here. A really wonderful piece of writing that brings back the story of Beauty and the Beast in a glaring clarity. The comedic undertones grabbed me with unequivocal force and emphasis.

The picture is vivid and striking. I could see the lawyers gathered round their tables like applicants at a job interview and the Beast himself a terrifying and exasperated behemoth glaring down at these legal gentlemen. It's difficult to envision an individual exhibiting both complex and opposite emotions at the same time. But somehow, you have achieved this effectively and without any sign of the scene being mechanical.

The story has only one scene but the dialogue evokes images (besides the fact that we have read or heard or watched Beauty and the Beast several times) that fills up the missing parts. You impressed me like hell and I admit this is a simple story that carries a greater weight than it ordinarily should. And it's partly because I wasn't expecting the twists.

Keep your pen bleeding!

*Quill* Eneh


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Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Maria!
A dream within a dream. What a beautiful and yet simple way to tell a story. A story about the power of nature to protect those who go out of their way to preserve it.

The beginning of your story was a total kill. I fell for the piece from the very first line. There are just two characters exchanging words but the realistic dialogue tells the rest of the unspoken tale.

The tension is still something to be reckoned with. The suspense is like a visible thing; I could almost hear the footfalls of the lady's assailants and the grunts of the trees as these trampled on the roots jutting out of the ground.

It's a short story with a serious message.

Keep your pen bleeding!

Eneh
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Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hey! DJ Jazzy Rick ,

This review in the spirit of WDC's 11th Anniversary. Everything you read from this point, even tho' crafted of the deepest sincerity, is entirely MY opinion.

I thought DJs were into music and partying, not flying out into space to cook up comedy-in-Neptune? *Smile*

Brent Ladlow is a handful. In his own peculiar way, he deserves the 'Unforgettable Character' title.

The comedic twist thrown into the details of the plot is somewhat enterprising! I got hauled into the story right from the first line. Tho I kept expecting some intergalactic drama of sorts, it never occured. But it never diminished from the fun derived in the read.

A beautiful story packed with humorous twists!

Keep your pen bleeding!

*Quill* Poesy



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Review of "A Man Among Men"  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey! piewhackett1,

This review in the spirit of WDC 11th Anniversary. Everything you read from this point, even tho' they are crafted of the deepest sincerity, is entirely MY opinion.

A really nice poem to dedicate to a father. Your dad should be proud. *Smile* Full of embroidered detail and a conscious, deliberate attention to the simple virtues which immortalize the memory of a mortal.

The verse spotlights important moments through out the lifetime and relationship cultivated between you and your dad.

One other thing deserving mention about this piece is that it reads like an informal biography of a life which has peaked!

I lost my dad at a tender age so I guess I could say I know that feeling. He taught me God and to stick to my talent. I love the theme of your poem and it's a privilege to review it.

Keep your pen bleeding!


*Quill* Poesy



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Review of AGONIZING LOVE  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hey! Itchy Water,

This review on behalf of SAJ. I might add everything you read from this point, even tho' they are crafted of the deepest sincerity, is entirely MY opinion.

Till death do us part This verse opens with a promise lovers make to each other and acts as a ledge for the events which follow. Every other line which follow is detail.

You and I, comes up twice. The repetition works well for the poem and infuses the depth of the betrayal in the unfolding pattern. Three is a crowd, the phrase cries out. It fattens the central theme of the verse.

Daggers- Striking metaphor. Comparing cheating to daggers creates indelible mental pictures, firmly etched in the memory like carvings on stone.
The prodding of the soul is a deliberate intent to hurt, not once and not twice, the beloved. Prodding has a ring of continuity. The wound of the soul is kept fresh and bleeding. The imagery is perfect.

It was death do us part - The first line of the poem recurs in this sentence though slightly paraphrased. The was in this repeat appearance gives it a feel of 'lose'. The bond is broken, the affair is viewed in 'past tense' and is irrevocably beyond redress. The demise of the vow strikes home with finality. And the only alternative is learning to live with the with the pain or wait until it dies out and is no more.

A really touching and well-thought out unlove poem. Beautiful craftsmanship.

Keep your pen bleeding!


*Quill* Poesy


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Review of ANOTHER ONE  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hey! Itchy Water,

This review on behalf of SAJ. I might add everything you read from this point, even tho' they are crafted of the deepest sincerity, is entirely MY opinion.

This poem is beyond all doubt, satiric.
It's a woodcut print of a sardonist's view on partying.
The voice might belong to a recluse - like most writers are, or are supposed to be. 'Crowds' and 'noise' are not his/her thing.

A different and concrete idea is formed in the reader's mind. It's the point of view of an aged individual; one who has witnessed tons of anniversaries - theirs and friends', who just want to be left alone to continue the last pages of their existence in one sweet quiet life. This best expressed in the line, I'm just too old.

I love the brevity of this verse. It leaves poignant and lasting impressions on its reader like stolen kisses in the dark. It is short and to the point. It hits the target like a controlled missile and ends all arguments.

It's like a final word on a recurrent issue.
Truly a camouflaged masterpiece.

Keep your pen bleeding!


*Quill* Poesy


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Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hey! Untucoi,

This review on behalf of SAJ. I might add everything you read from this point, even tho' they are crafted of the deepest sincerity, are entirely MY opinion.

Conversation in tears. What a lovely name to christened a poem. And it's alright, too. Really.

I started reading your poem (I'm doing this on my mobile device) and I had to hands off the keys. I wanted to take my time, really take my time to 'compose' the review. I didn't want to fake it. I wanted to mean it, every word, when I put it down.

You got a masterful control of rhyme, Untucoi. And your rhymes flow with fluidity creating a web-like link between each line, each phrase, each sentence, weaving one perfect, seamless fabric grown out of pure emotion.

The voice narrating, or conversing, if you like that better enthralls the reader, holds him by the hand and leads him by the oracle of sincerity. And the flow does not ring false. Rather, it's natural. Freeflowing. This is the real deal.

It's definitely a conversation in tears that draws a water from the wellsprings of the audience.
Keep your pen bleeding!

*Quill* Poesy


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Review of FEELINGS  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey! SHERRIGIBSON

This review on behalf of SAJ. I might add everything you read from this point, even tho' they are crafted of the deepest sincerity, are entirely MY opinion.

I'm catching the feelings coming off the verse in waves. *Smile*
Don't lie These words drive the force of the poem's message home and possibly a big chunk of pretense off the subject of this verse. It's almost 'oral' and because it's got the personal touch the energy invested in it's making can not be denied.

My feelings won't change due to what is said. This line is pretty much the spotlight; a foretaste of the lines that follow. Feelings you titled it. I don't think there's a better way of expressing one's feelings than giving a piece of your mind.

The details of wrong done is not expressed in specifics, though. But it's almost unnecessary. Words like, dishonesty, betrayal tell it all.
This is good poetry. Pretty revealing, indeed.

Keep your pen bleeding!


*Quill* Poesy


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Review of Earth Day  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Earth Day Challengers  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, JWilloughby,

Such a thoughtful poem from someone who does not give a pin about the earth's depressing state. I envy you. I wish I could say the same thing and really mean it *Smile*

Actually, your attitude represents those of millions of Earthlings in their daily dealings with the environment. It's really a cause for alarm. Thank God, for special favors like "Earth Day" where we can summon ourselves to a little sanity, right?

Keep your pen bleeding!


*Quill* Poesy.

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Review of Love's Crush  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Wordgoddess,

*UmbrellaB* This is a Member to Member Review for Showering Acts of Joy! *UmbrellaB*


What follows are ALL MY opinion.

"Like windswept sand" What a lovely term for describing Love's inexplicable crush. It blows in like the wind, Love. And when it compares to a thing "windswept" like sand, beach sand maybe . . . I almost close my eyes to savorthe idea.
Sand borne on the wings of the wind is above all overwhelming. You can't stand in a sand storm with your eyes open. Or your head held up high. You bow to the flush of that wind. And you compare this event to Love's crush. Waoh, I'm breathless.

You have your "summer breeze" calling from the trees like they have a place of dwelling in and up there in those branches. Peculiar imagery. One just can't not stop o hear the whisper of such a breeze.

Beautiful poetry it is. "Pulled from the shadow" that is genius and often times, most writers give up pursuing within inches of grasping.

Keep your pen bleeding!


*Quill* Poesy

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Review of DEAR ME  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear SHERRIGIBSON,

*UmbrellaB* This is a Member to Member Review for Showering Acts of Joy! *UmbrellaB*


What follows is MY opinion.

A letter with words that crawl over the reader's sensitive parts with many tiny feet.

"Dear Me" Soul searching words with the power to rouse our deepest selves to action. And you did use words that in this world stand for responsibility "Family". It is enough to wake any consciousness out of sadness induced drowsiness.

Your letter is open and rid of pretense. Full of wit and down-to-earth remarks. Your mother would have been proud. I am. We are family are we not? Of course by reason of WDC!

Keep your pen bleeding, SHERRIGIBSON!


*Quill* Poesy


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Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Aralls,

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I did expect the unexpected and it was worth it.
So, where's the mind transporting time machine, han? You did turn it into fiction but I know it's for real. And you hid somewhere. *Smile*

I once read an article on Writers Digest website about "Agents' Chapter One pet peeves". There was this agent in particular ranting about how they get thrown off by a story that begins with dialog because then you have to start wondering "Who's talking now?" Your story begins with dialog but you filled up any lapses if there were any in the very second line, where you mentioned the character who made the speech.

Your "Time Machine" shows a little plot twist in action.I think it is almost the first I heard of the make. Transports the mind through time based on your most recent activity or your most recent memory. A nice touch of creative genius.

The conversation/dialog were natural enough, an easy read. I could almost make the character's distinct qualities by way of their speeches.
Nice going with the narration. Good story telling.

Keep your pen bleeding!


*Quill* Poesy

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Review of Prom Queen  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hey! Legerdemain,

This review on behalf of Showering Acts of Joy.
What follows is MY humble opinion.

I love the word "Beneath" marking the beginning of this poem. Serves a great deal of a purpose. Secrets are often kept BENEATH. And this piece speaks of secrets, right? Dark ones by the look of it.

The message stands out, called out by well-chosen words. There' s also the rhythm evoked by the choice of words and the arrangement of the lines and stanzas which provokes the mind to hard pondering. For as you say, "The Prom Queen abandoned her baby."

Beautiful poetry.

Keep your pen bleeding!


*Quill* Poesy
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Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, Legerdemain,

This review on behalf of Showering Acts of Joy.
Everything which follows is entirely MY opinion. No offence meant.

"It's the same every time" This line reinforces the title. Justifies it. The attitude it creates slides the reader naturally into the adrenaline-charged story.

Recently, I have come to have a passion for the Horror genre. Actually, I have adopted it as my pet genre. Thanks to the New Horizons Academy here on WDC where I was introduced to the works of Stephen King. What am I getting at? I know a good story when I read one!

One quality for which good Horror scenes are acclaimed is the power of the author to hold the reader spellbound through the use of suspense. Not by delaying the action but by deliberately giving it a shape which the reader can associate with.

When you talked about your helplessness while struggling to step off the gas, I unconsciously pressed your foot down (in my mind) a moment longer. Why? You created an expectation within me from the inception of your narration I could not help but try to see what got you so tensed up!

As with every Horror story with genuine curiosities I was stuck with indecision. I wanted you to stop and not make the dreaded impact yet, at the same time I lurched forward with your ride, racing faster than your wheels would take me in hope I would visualize the nightmare before I explode with expectation.

When you said it was a deer the eyes belonged to I was a little bit disappointed. What in all hell did I get all so tensed up about? And then it became the face of a man and before I could contain my terror . . . you woke up.

I guess the scream weighed on my lips than it did on yours who was having the nightmare. One of the best things a writer can hope for is for his/her reader to be able to personalize his/her story, adapt it to their situation. I just saw myself in your dream (nightmare) did I not?

I am not so good at doing reviews. I think I am much better when I just rant, and run off at the mouth. Like I said it is MY opinion. But if this is not a good story, Stephen King is not a bestselling author! *Smile* (that's sort of like blasphemy for me 'cause Mr. King is like a god to me.)

Keep your pen bleeding!

Poesy
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Review of Release  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, Pat!

This review on behalf of Showering Acts of Joy!

The words which follow are MY opinion.

You have a way with words. I have known this as long as I have known you as a poet.
But this piece is sort of a re-statement of a known fact.
"Release" is a poem rising in tension as it progresses. The drama is heightened as each line draws up and rushes past much like the wind depicted in the narration.

The verses of your poetry follow the patterns of a story. "Exposition, Conflict, Rising action, Climax (this one whooshes past you you can almost hear the wind!) and then (Release) Resolution"

You have your fingers on the pulse of poetry and poetry is lucky to have someone like you as friend.

Keep your pen bleeding!


*Quill* Poesy
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Review of Faded  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Pat!

This piece is not one of the piece I choose for your Shower Request. I'm doing this as a bonus! You have earned it. ; )

As always, you poem is speckled with IMAGERY. It is the one thing which gives your poem the feeling that I am "watching" a film and not "reading" at all.

Really, Pat, have you ever considered doing poetry like Edgar Allan Poe?
I believe you would actually thrive if you did something like "Horror Poems" I'm getting lots of "story ideas" from your poems. My favorite author (Stephen King) quotes lots of poems in his books. They lend their mystique to his stories and I intend to follow that path. What better way than to start with my Mentor?

I love the way you handle your own. The way you bring the pictures of reality into a stretch of words to create a spectacular universe breathing life through of its own charisma.

Keep your pen bleeding!

*Quill* Poesy
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Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey! Pat!
It's me again.

Another review on behalf of Showering Acts of Joy!
As always the words are ALL MY opinion.

I'm actually the fourth child in a family of five. At some point in this story I could actually feel my anxieties as a child summoned to life by the Kid's dilemma. A small world, han?

The story is written mainly in narrative with little dialog here and there. It's a well told story.Something which could very well become a children story classic.

Your story echoes many a kid's struggles to become their parents' idol. I love the way the ideas just flow into each other like waters at a delta.

All the senses are accurately engaged. The reader is taken by the hand and led into the heart of the story by a master story teller one sense at a time. I saw the meat on the butchers table, felt the Kid's fear for being at a loss about the item his/her mom really meant for him/her to buy. I heard the paper with list written on it crinkle every time he consulted it to make a purchase.

A simple story yet intricately woven so it lingers in the corridors of the mind long after the page is closed.

Keep your pen bleeding!


*Quill* Poesy
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Review of Dark Spaces  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Pat,

Here again on behalf of SAJ!
Again what follows are ALL My opinion.

The title of this item kind of gave me a fore-sense of what to expect, yet I could not help being amazed by what followed.
You write the nicest poems. Even, when they expose the darker side of the human nature.

Four or five lines of your poem begin with the letter "S". I can not tell is this is intentional on the side of the poet but it sure lends its own rhythm to the verse at hand. Nice trick, there.

If I may I would want to see this as a form of what I have particularly come to see as "Horror Poems". Poems which speak of the grotesque much like a Allan Poe stuff or a Stephen King story.

At the last lines of this piece you see the Menace has a form of continuity. A note which portends fiercely that the things, evils only recently mentioned might if not WILL resurface again. It only sleeps to awake violently.

"Shouts of rage"
"Sobs of silenced pain"
"Re-opened wounds"
"Shameful tears trail against vulnerable cheeks"
"Whispered apologies"
"Tender face"
"Self-loathing shards of unrelenting disdain"
"Silent vows"

Forceful imagery you have here. Screaming out at the reader to look and behold the lurking evil. To SEE the events as it unfolds like a film flickers on the wall from a projector.

Keep your pen bleeding!

*Quill* Poesy
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Review of Color My World  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey PAT!

This reviews on behalf of SAJ ; )
What follows strictly MY opinion.

I just happened to be listening to some old school while going through your Portfolio. There's a song on the CD that happens to bear a striking similarity with your poem.
Billy Ocean's Color of Love has a line,
"The colors of the rainbow turn gray
Whenever you're so far away. . .
What you see are colors of emotion
Reflecting what I feel deep inside."

I do not think any attempt to review your poem would produce as much thrust as the lyrics above.
Your lines are as piercing as they are soul searching.
"Gray" has taken on a new meaning for me. They are the colors of despair. Something I might use in a Short story soon enough.

And hope or perseverance as in your poem as Love in Billy Ocean's lyric is the Color of the Rainbow. Brilliant and complex. Shining right through and yet just a little bit out of comprehension's grasp.

Colors, according to your poem (and I believe in your poem) are shades of the human emotion. And even though, the emotions we feel may not be uplifting many of the times, they are just like the rain clouds blocking out the curve of the rainbow. Ominous darkness we are sure to burst through soon enough.

All I had to say I said when I quoted from the "Color of Love". The rest is just details.

Keep that pen bleeding, Pat!

*Quill* Poesy.
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Review of UNDER THE JACKET  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Ida_Matilda_Wright,

This review on behalf of Showering Acts of Joy.
What follows is my humble opinion.

I think it was Stephen King who said, "Memories are contrary things; if you quit chasing them and turn your back, they often return on their own."
Your piece sort of embellishes this fact.
The memory in your poem is one that haunts the poet personae.
A memory that peeps through the scent of a piece of clothing (Under the Jacket)
Memory that "lifts one up where s/he belongs (over the hills). . .

You have taken an investigators' pain, going through the minute and readily overlooked trails of reminiscence to bring the force of the memory of a loved one home.

And your title. There's something about it reinforcing the simple and yet profound message of this piece of poetry. Suddenly, "Under the Jacket" does not sound so "everydayish" anymore. It is more like "in the basement of lives, in the dark where all our deepest, yet-to-be explored secrets dwell."

"The Jacket" in your poetry carries a lot more weight than the world on Atlas' shoulders.
"Under The Jacket" like the cliche says, there's more to it than meets the eye.

A beautiful, well thought out poem.

Keep your pen bleeding!

*Quill* Poesy
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Review of All That's Needed  
Review by Eneh Akpan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Pat.
Another beautiful piece of poetry.
I actually love the part where you say we secretly want things our way, while screaming our heads off, and Thy will be done! : )
Most of us are as guilty as sin on that part. But thank God who knows best, right?
He always knows what's best for everyone one of us and steps in right on time to present himself when we most need him.

This poem is going to be my prayer tonight.
Let your pen keep bleeding!

*Quill* Poesy
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Review of hbar, the ogre  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey, Pat.
I love the way you formed the words around HBAR's handle name. It's pretty cool . . and poetic.
Beginning with Helpful in reviews; one of the things on which WDC was founded and to which the SAJ Group is especially dedicated, you set the tone for things to come in the rest of the lines.

Heroes in his own specialty way I love this line 'cause it kind of describes and speaks for all the writers on WDC who choose to to be true to their hearts content and follow same come what may.

HBAR, THE OGRE ought to be proud.
It's a really worthy cause poem.

By all means, Let your pen keep bleeding!

*Quill* Poesy
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Review of ANSWERS  
Review by Eneh Akpan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Now, there's a nice poem.
The refrain really goes a long to express every teenagers doubts about the answers he receives from adults when he inquires about the more obscure and confusing details of life.

I think the extra repetitions of the refrain gives expression to the confusing details that baffle teenagers at adolescence.

By now it's obvious we're not getting anywhere These words remind me of my own personal experience as kid. Some things just never seemed to have adequate answers. No matter how carefully the adult explained or how understanding they seemed to be.

ANSWERS The title is ironic. There are no visible answers in the poem. Only arousal of tough jaw breaking questions. Maybe, the the title implies, rather what the poet persona seeks and not what the piece incites.

A simple way of expressing an eternally profound truth, of raising equally unsettling facts about the life of a teenager. This is a display of mastery and finesse.

Let your pen keep bleeding!

*Quill* Eneh
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Review of Rage Within  
Review by Eneh Akpan
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, Sairah,

I almost tried to skip reviewing this story cos I could feel your childhood pain through the words like I was watching a movie. I was almost afraid I would be reviving 'forgotten' childhood memories. Then I remembered you placed this in your port cos you were 'strong enough' to show your inner struggles to others.

I'm sorry for the painful childhood you experienced and I'm amazed at your courage to keep going. You are a shero, Ms. Sariah. That cannot be taken away from you. I know if that little girl you used to be could keep loving her mom, the lady you have become will eventually conquer the pangs of bitterness.

You are a source of encouragememt to me. I have been able to acquire my first 'diploma' cos of your academy. Thankyou, for choosing to be strong against all odds.

Let your pen keep bleeding!
Poesy.
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