Wonderful Tribute to your home. You painted vivid imagery, and a lovely environment. This was beautiful, sentimental and sincere. The simplicity of your comntent made it all that more enjoyable. No grammatical mistakes, and a beautiful flow! Thanks for sharing this!
Fav Part:
"I'm not really alone most of the time,
I spend some spare hours writing rhyme.
I have my son's dog and a grandaughter's cat
to keep me company, now fancy that!
I call it HOME."
Very inspiring to be happy with what we have. Keep it up!
Very short summary with a very good message behind it, and that is to find time for our children. My daughter is getting ready for preschool, and she has been broken of her pacifier, she has been taught her ABC'S and to regognize them, I play games with her (yes her Grandma spoiled her with a gaming system for toddlers, we do crafts, we color together, tell stories, and then I have me time. I am usually online, however, i run back and forth, and give her attention, remain idle on here, then come back..lol. We are free to choose as parents if don't answer that phone(which, bythe way, I dont use the phone with my daughter around, lol, or otherwise she wont let me talk! This was beautiful, very thoutful, and educational to the reader. Today is family day, when my daughter wakes up from her nap. You have a great message her, and in not so many words, you have a brilliant impactful piece about whats most important. Our children and our future. Well done, WarriorMom! I guess your name says it all! You are very sweet to have written this.
Fav Part:
"Friendly chatter or solitude.
Mindless play or thoughtful expression.
Completion of a task or enjoying a nap.
Answering the phone-- or not."
Wonderful job..this is my home away from my home and my daughter..I try to balance that time as much as I can. Although this site can be addicting. lol. This was a great meaning to my heart.
Nice piece. I would to have liked to see you turn this into a positive though. I too have had problems with friends who did not treat me justly and I have over come the negativity by being positive. You just have to think about what you mother told you long ago, "It will make the other person involved so mad if you just smile and are positive, because they want you to be hurt and if you don't show it, it will kill them.". I enjoyed your write as I can relate and have had it happen to me too. Although life must go on and we must learn to let by-gones be by-gones. I am sure you will find your way and turn this situation into a positive one soon.
Fav Part: "Gossip isn't the answer.
And neither is telling lies.
You've built a sturdy barrier,
separating our lives."
Excellent write! I enjoyed this piece and share the same view, education for all children in the world who would like to learn. It is sad that today there are still places in the world which exclude children from learning. I have a daughter of my own and I know that she is really excited about starting school. Your write was inspiring keep up the good work, I can see you are a humanitarian.
Fav Part: "Some kids don't experience school ever
Friends they don't meet or talk to"
Again, an incredible tribute to your roots, the military in Australia, so heartfelt, so meaningful, this was another love masterpiece. This poem represents pride, and who you are, and what you appreciate. I love reading your works. They are unbelievably loving and such a memento for all of us who arent in Australia. You paint this Day like a Memorial Day for America, in a way. The descripteveness of the celebration and appreciation for those who fight, was a joy to read. Knocked my socks off yet, again!!
Fav Part:
"As dawn breaks across the waters of the bay,
We hear haunting sounds as a piper starts to play.
Australians gather to remember the day
The ANZACS landed at Gallipoli.
Silhouettes of old diggers appear ghostly on the sand,
Proudly, though frail, they march to the Strand,
Where the Eternal Flame burns for the heroic band"
I love that you include that these soldioers spirits are still alive on this day, to give thank to those whom keep theri memory alive. You are a great part of that!
Loved this! Keep it up, sweetie.
My Dear friend,
Thank you so much for sharing this in our Treasure trunk! always,
Anna
Profound write! I was impressed how you put a story in poetic verse. Very creative. Very spiritual too. The words are a mystery, and there are many ways to interpret the poem, so the suspense was definitely there! The flow, unbleievable, the grammar, no mistakes (Not like I am one to judge that, which you know) lol.
Awesome poem, very descriptive in the plot and the mystery of it isnt easily deciphered, very holy, and creative at the same time...A genius work. Can be taken in the negative or positive.
Fav Part:
"They traveled to an apartment,
An old man was in a chair.
He was reading the Bible on his lap
While smoothing his thin, gray hair.
The Master presented the old man the Key,
"It's time to use this, my friend.
You have been a faithful servant,
Your job here is at an end."
I believe this is about serving God, and once we have fuinished our deeds to him, he awards us with Paradise. I could be wrong though. Great write anyhow!
Keep it up, my friend!
Your fellow Pioneer,
Anna
Thank you for sharing this in our treasure trunk!
WoW, what a suspenseful and horrible story about a ship and being ship-wrecked. I was intrigued by the story, and I read all of it. Very good writer, you are! I can't write a strory very well. Your characters were painted wonderfully, the plot, very dismal, and not very upbeat, but the cousins seemed to be very close. I liked that and also liked the fact that the two of them were always willing to help eachother inspite of the Authority figures like The Uncle, Anna's father, the other Captains on the ship. Very good plot, vivid, and a bit depressing, however, the family ties were the best. The Father, expecting her daughter to marry someone she wished not too, bothered me, however, I can't like everydetail of a story..lol. I also was freaked out by the ending...Who were the men in strange robes, wanting to take Anna away? That was highly mysterious, and made the story all that much more interesting. I found no grammatical errors, I thought the story was a combination of hope and faith and family trouble. This had me captivated! I do hope that these characters "Do the right thing", and the two poor cousins are spared by their strict and ruthless father. Awesome write!
Keep it up!
Violet
Beautiful write, and very special treasure!! You have a great heart, nd it shines through in this poem, the flow was easily read, and very clear. The contents were appreciative, tributing this person you love so much, but only wishing them happiness! How uplifting, and that is the spirit, even if you love someone but are far away, and they have another. You respect that and that's a great trait showing unconditional love! Awesome!
Fav Part:
"I dream of you when you remind me of who and what I am
You make me feel so free.
Even though you are not near me
And you have another in your life
Some how you complete me even though I treat you like a brother from another mother.
You mean a lot to me.
I dream of you often when......."
Wow, what a wonderfully horid write you have here.lol I am shaking literally! *bigsimle* I did have to give you 3 stars though for the effort and no spelling mistakes and an extra brownie point just for you. I mean what can you really do with brownie points? lol I did enjoy reading your struggle in baking and with a little work you might even get to eat one of those brown delights with the snow on top. I can not belive I am talking about snow in the middle of Spring.lol But hey it is your poem so maybe I am missing something? rofl Great write.....for the literally challenged.
Awesome write! We all go through this, some more than others, but we do know that nobody ever really knows anyone unless they have 24 hr surveillance on the person. lol. Even the FED's wouldnt bother ith that! You have a great decriptive poem here about prejudice and hating just to hate and spread defamation, possibly blasphemy. It runs rampant on the interent, but we all know sho we really are, and that's all that matters. You have a highly educational piece here. One which all can learn from. I admire that.
Fav Part:
"Maybe if you took me
Without a doubt
You might possible know
What I'm thinking about
But no, you can't
No reasons to list
Tomorrow my thoughts
Will all be a mist."
Who cares what people saty about you! It is only jealousy and hearsay., which means nothing, knowing how evil humans can be if they hate you for no good reason. You are strong, and if you need a freind, I am here!
Beautifully written! I hope others can learn from this! We are equals here, not one better than the other! You displayed that wonderfully! Keep your chin up, the storm will pass, as does the rain. Only your strength in your truth is what will remain!
Jessica!!
Awesome tribute you have to Germany and I loved your poem! It's funny, my fam always fights over whether I am Norweigan or German, luckily, I am a researcher by heart, so I know I AM German..lol. Your poem was expressive of you, a reflection of you, and very positive as a wordly view to all your intersets! Wonderful variety, and coupled with the different colors, gives the reader a very well understanding what is true in your heart and your desires! Great Job!
Fav Part:
""I want to visit Norway and the South,
But plane trips make me pout.
I love German culture and speaking,
And a place to live in Dresden I am seeking.
Public speaking gives me the jitters;
I hope to make it glitter."
Beautiful C-notes!! I loved them, and thank you for sharing them. They were very upbeat inspirational and full of color for Earth Day! You have a great collection here, that get's a 5 from me! Happy Earth Day!
These C-Notes are amazing, very vibrant and you have much talent! Thank you for sharing them! Haoppy Earth Day! God Bless you in Love and Miracles...Your photos get a five!
Good Job SW!! I was a little surprised at how you got this done so quickly, however, it seems like fun. I am glad that Cubby completed all entries. It should be quite interesting what people write here. lol. I will BE SURE to participate. Don't you worry, my pretty southern gal.
You worked very hard, and this isnt a competition. I liked that.. This is to have fun, right? Well, fun is what we will have! Thank you so much for doing this forum. It means a great deal to me. More than you would ever know. oh, and a great trusted friend too. That's the most important thing. Thank you for your hard work, I am sure it will be a hit...
Always,
Anna
Wonerful Tribute to Earth Day!! This is beautiful, Kiyasama! I am amazed at the poems here, and at the graphics, combined with the music behind this, and the useful tips, this is truly a great page, and I hope you are rewarded greatly for it. If more people think about this, it raises awareness to keep our earth stable and intact. She is by far the most powerful force in our world! You did a beautiful job!! Keep this up! 2 thumbs up, and a five star rating, this gets! You have really contructed something meaningful and beautiful here, and this tribute blows my mind. Awesome, Kiya! Keep it up! The links and quotes were endearing too, and very educational. Wonderfully done!
Excellent write with a graceful rhyming pattern and consistent flow. The message was conveyed to the reader in clear form making for an enjoyable read. Your descriptiveness and attention to detail contributed to the success of the piece. The ending was impactful, yet suggestive. Thank you for sharing this masterpiece of knowledge.
Fav Part: "For all of us know how truthful we play,
That results come to those who work everyday.
But smart as we are, we're too shallow to admit
That our yearning is so our pride won't take a hit."
Your write was set in a very depressing mood, yet at the end the reader is enlightened by "the light at the end to of the tunnel", brilliant. I enjoyed the vivid description portrayed of the setting which was dreary, but all the same vivid. This write was a pleasure to read as I always seek new ideas and views to implement in my own writing.
Fav Part: "And yet, here I stay,
Where there is no sleep,
No conception of time.
There is only the blank void I live from now on.
What little light there is stares back at me,
Unblinking
Like a teasing salvation I can never reach,
A reminder of a happiness I once had."
SW, this was a very sentimental piece which reminded me a lot of my own family. Your words so bold and full of thought. I can feel that this poem is very touching for you and also for me. This really saddened me and I really hope expressing this story though your poetry has put your mind at ease. Thank you for sharing this enjoyable read.
Fav Part: "When I told you we were having a son,
I remember your first words to me,
for they ring in my husbands ears when he hears your name
You said, "I just don't know if I could love a boy""
This is a wonderful write..It's unbelievably creative how you used that song, spread out through the different stanza's of your own. I know this feeling, and you created this beautifully! The song,, to me has much relevance, whenever I hear that song, I think of my Father too, and hope that one day, he will be around. You did this brilliantly, the flow, still easy to read even though, you incorperated an entire renowned lyrical piece in it as well. Awesome job! I hope thing get better for you. God bless you. Keep your good hearted head up, you deserve it!
I give this a five for being sentimental, sweet, educational, and genious with the art within the art.
Fave Part:
"We pulled up to the house. You had the grace to wait
till the song ended before you patted me on the leg,
So, should I walk you to the door? I told you no thanks,
Just tell me what you thought of the song.
What song, Oh, I didn't hear the words, but I liked the beat"
Unblelievable hon. I will be praying that he changes!
very strong words, and they grab the reader! Keep writing and smiling.
Your Friend,
Violet
Very cute write about Thanksgiving, and about the simplicity of it. All about family, combined with some humor in the first lines! A simple sweet piece for all to enjoy, about the generalation of a summed up Thanksgiving day. Wonderful flow, and I guess you won it! lol. You deserved too!
Fav Part:
"Oh, here's one that I can remember.
On Thanksgiving Jule's can dismember,
The turkey for us,
Now don't make a fuss,
There's enough to go round this November"
I really liked how you were able to laugh at yourself in the beginning of the poem, cause if we can laugh at ourselves, we really are humble good people.
Lovely write Meg! Keep on Writing! This has been a pleasure to review you!
Violet
Written Beautifully!! How could you get a bad rating? I loved this because it is so true, the people who hate you, will give you a bad rating just cause it's you and thats unfair, again, you show your compassion. and fair justice. As I read your writing, I realize you are a wonderful soul in all aspects. Alot like me, you see the truth for what it is, and try to encourage others by it, and lift their spirits. You do not pretend, you just keep a positive attitude. I loved this, as it encourages everyone on WDC to take heart, and stay strong even when someone tries to take you down. Again, a five, just for your truth and compassion for others!
Fav Part:
"To all of you out there, don't fret,
You'll get the odd low rate.
It's what we call in writing land
Reviews with barbs of hate.
I know that it will make you sad
And feel you're not quite trying,
But please take heart, ignore the fools,
You can't write while you're crying.
So when you get a low, low rate
Don't worry any longer.
If it doesn't really kill you,
It will surely make you stronger."
Very true!! Keep it up, hun.
Love and many blessings,
Violet
Unbelievably sentimental and impactful write on your background and where yourpride lies, the customs you described, the way of the people, the celelbration much like many countries have on January 26th. Unbelievable description about the greatness of being Australian or celebrating the culture, even if not! You have a masterpiece here of why your country is so great, and it speaks straight from your heart. Again, tender, endearing, and a tribute to your roots. I loved this, it was a pleasure to read! Sopunds like you are a true Aussie! Thats a great thing.
Fav Part:
"Australia Day ~ January, Twenty six,
A day when Aussies get their fix
Of barbies, beer and backyard sports
Like cricket, footie (and ogling sorts).
Flags fly high from vantage spots
Of poles and buildings and parking lots.
Dress of the day for young and old
Are national colours of green and gold."
Describing the celebratory day and even including the Australian Falg's colors...Your country would be proud, as I am! This gets a five!
Keep on writing!
Love,
Violet
Again, Meg, A beautifully inspiring poem, about what we all go through. Your words are so humble, you hold no anger, just remembering the yearnig of a love not meant to be and then finally, out of the blue, comes this best friend you have known for life, and alas, you found your real true love, not just a lost love without a great meaning in your your life. You are a wonderful compassionate writer, everytime I read your work, it humbles me. Your shining soul project through in every word you write! This gets a five!
WoW!!
Fav Part:
"A sound brings me out of my daydream.
There's a knock on my door - could it be?
A bouquet of roses and candy
In the hands of - but wait - it's not he!
This face is familiar, I know him,
He has been by my side all my life.
A friend through the years since childhood,
And he asks me to now be his wife."
What a beautiful turrn of events at the end, flowed smoothly and is a true work of beauty! Keep it up, hun.
Love,
Violet
I loved how you used the ,links to inspire and tell how you are to all. Very loving and peaceful. I have never seen a poem that involves links to contruct a masterpiece such as this one! Unbleievable job! You have a great soul, and are a truly intellectual writer. Very artistic! I give this a five 's!
Loved it. Greatest luck in the contest!
Fav Part:
"If I'm "Sailing To Yesterday" or "Coming Home" from "Tomorrow",
"Brief Encounters" with "Emotions" - "My Tears Are Not Sorrow".
"A Friend's Worth" is measured "Through good times and Bad",
And I "CHERISH" all "Friendships" that I've ever had.
"Morning Awakens" to sweet "April Showers",
"My Spirit will Breathe"; "BEHOLD" "ALL THE PRETTY FLOWERS"
Like "Nature" and "Love's Glow", "Friendship" never ends,
"Thanks to You", "My Wonderful WDC Friends"."
Very sweet loyal, and loving! Thank you so much for sharing! Keep it up.
Love,
Violet
Very deep poem about married life and how after a long time, it loses it's luster, a good teaching at the end that what someone is accustomedto in their partne, may not really be as there partner always is, yet they know the person so well, they just expect it. i loved the happy ending, and how she just gives him a little peck and walks away. Beatiful masterpiece here! Highly insightful! This is definitely one of my faves from you!
Fav Part:
"Unwilling to allow the inevitable fall from control
He looks into his computer screen and braces himself
Awaiting the anticipated complaint or demand
To issue forth from her lips
Hold on... , Here it comes...
She plants a gentle kiss on his forehead
And without another word, she walks away
He waits for the flood of emotions to ebb
And breathes a sigh of relief
As the flood subsides"
Breathtaking!
Keep it up!
Love,
Violet
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/purp-l-otus99/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/10
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.27 seconds at 2:18am on May 23, 2024 via server web2.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
This was beautiful, very thoutful, and educational to the reader. Today is family day, when my daughter wakes up from her nap. You have a great message her, and in not so many words, you have a brilliant impactful piece about whats most important. Our children and our future. Well done, WarriorMom! I guess your name says it all! 
Although life must go on and we must learn to let by-gones be by-gones. I am sure you will find your way and turn this situation into a positive one soon. 
I mean what can you really do with brownie points? lol I did enjoy reading your struggle in baking and with a little work you might even get to eat one of those brown delights with the snow on top. I can not belive I am talking about snow in the middle of Spring.lol But hey it is your poem so maybe I am missing something? rofl Great write.....for the literally challenged.
Wonderfully done! 