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Review of Eyes of Mist  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
There were two kingdoms, but one of the appears to have been split into two and the first appears to be about to be extinguished. The three characters are necessary to complete the healing for all of them. Interesting... This really is a complex and well built narrative. I have certain expectations and they keep being overturned and reset by the progression of the story. Two brothers at each other's throats turn into a multiple generational war. This is a lot more complicated and finely crafted than the simple summary would indicate.
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "7 - White Woods" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ooh I thought this was a story of two characters but really it is the story of three. I can't wait to read more of the writer's story. To me it seems like these chapters are getting shorter but so much more is happening in them than the earlier ones. I do wonder about the world outside. How the war is going. I also have begun to question who the real villains behind the war are. I don't think her people are as innocent as she and the writer seems to think that they are. The doors open for him not for her.
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "6 - The Guardian" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Amputated? Whoa man. He seems a lot different he really has begun to care about her. too bad this adventure has cost her her arm. What possessed her to leap to his defense?

It is good to know that the writer can affect the situation, but it sucks he does such a puss poor job of it. What I want to know is which faction this city belongs to.

The writing is smooth and well paced this story is far more compelling than I expected it to be from the summary. Something needs to be done with that to improve the likelihood people will move on to reading this it really is worth it
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "5 - Dark Journey" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ooh so there is a reason the all wear masks. But why are they malformed? Is it a case of the cruelty within being reflected on the outside? Was there some kind of plague that altered their DNA? Did the parents systematically deform their own children so they would look alike? If so why did they start? Does it have to do with some kind of magic? The character building is bringing the two characters closer together but to what real end. Will she learn his viscousness or will he take interest in her attitude of compassion?
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ooh interesting. He does not want to kill her. It feels like more than weak thankfullness for her care. He really is different than the rest of his people, but is he strong enough to not get killed for that difference? Why is she the one that was trapped with him? What about the combination of the two of those people could be what brings enough change to end the war. It is already clear the girl is special from the writer's attitude towards her. What doe the writer think of the Prince though? I can't wait to see.
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "3 - Departure" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is getting really good. I love the two characters one on each side of the conflict. I question where this man built cave came from. And why it chooses that moment to collapse on these two characters in particular. I wonder if the rank of the Prince will offer him any more credibility than the average soldier when he encounters the world changing knowledge I sense he and the girl are about to encounter together. He is just peculiar enough an example of his people that I believe he might be able to absorbed it.
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "2 - Dark Clouds" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The writer is being drawn into the story in a way he didn't expect because of the girl. It reminds me of the neverending story in the way that there are the characters in the story and then an over story with a reader or in this case writer being affected by it. Is there something way he can affect the story. Can the characters hear him like they sometimes can in the neverending story? The young prince reminds me of prince zuko in Avatar the last air bender. He seems open to a way of thinking the rest of his people are not open to.
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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "1 - Peaceful Days" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I like the beginning with the soldiers seeking the fate of the unbreakable fortress. The way they are picked off in the mists is kind of creepy it makes me wonder what kind of Uber warriors the invaders were when the thoughts of the scout is that it seemed strange that they were capable of taking out the fortification. The two sides seem to know little except a just because hate of the other. Does anyone really remember why this war began? What about the mysterious writer in the white land. Is he writing what has happened or what will happen?


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Review of Eyes of Mist  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This would be better formatted in a book format rather than separate items that are linked as chapters it is for the ease of review let's and readers this way of formatting depends an awful.lot on the back button to get the whole story. It is also easier to write in a book format because it allows for easier outlining and editing individual chapter while keeping it easy to see an overview of the story. The summary of the story could be a little tighter. Giving more of the feeling and energy of the story. You shouldn't judge a book by it's cover but you better bet people are going to judge it and decide to read it based on the summary. It needs more action words and showing than the simple third grade book report description. You are trying to entice or seduce readers with your blurb. It is the first and sometimes only chance to hook your reader into reading what you wrote.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This seems unfinished. It feels like the end note should include the other examples of the historical wonders of the world. The end note appears to be part of a broken drop note. If properly done it would add to the story about lighthouses rather than taking from it. As it is formatted it detracts from the essay.

The essay itself is strong focused and informative it takes a less than pertinent subject and makes it accessible. I learned a lot about the historical workings of lighthouses. I hadn't considered where the light had come from before electricity. I think we should have more working lighthouses just in case of the technical failure of modern navigation means.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Man I feel sorry for Liam. From the first chapter I read this is not how I thought chapter five would turn out. This is the type of story I consider a guilty or hypocritical pleasure. Oh look at how awful the lives of these rich people are, with all of their money, and influence, and fame. It is just so rough to have parents expectations to live up to when they come with solid gold safety nets. Why do I like these stories? Perhaps it is because some people like this author can make the practically alien worlds of these characters vibrant ban relatable.
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Review of Bear  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This appears to be a piece in progress. It suffers from a few places where thoughts haven't been completed, or divided from one another. I think that this would be better served with separate paragraphs describing each individual type of bear. Also I am not sure that American black bears eat bamboo, which is how the sentence currently reads. This has the potential to be an informative and interesting article. Thank you for presenting this for us to read please continue to work on it and send me a link to the completed article so I can re review it. If you need help with linking items or reopening items you already began check out "Noticing Newbies"  for assistance.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Challenge accepted! Ahem. I found this to be a really ironic prompt. It expands upon the prompt for this prompt, with what I consider to be an acceptable use of the two-sentence limit placed on this entry. It is a creative use of the prompt word "newspaper." There are just so many directions the author could have gone with the prompt for their prompt. I like the Western, time-travel potentials that their entry offers. Only one real character is offered by their prompt, the ambiguous first-person narrator. It suggests that any response to this prompt would in fact be a first-person narrative. I wonder if it will be possible to smoothly add in another point of view to this mix, perhaps an unreliable narrator that is in fact the main character's foil? The possibilities for good fiction to come of this prompt make me miss the days when this contest alternated between prompt rounds and the round where you would write a story based on the last round's winning prompt. To me this prompt is a real winner whether it wins the contest or not.


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Review of The Hunter  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I like this start. The characters are revealed my the showing of their relationship. They are both good though perhaps only reluctantly so. They are trapped in the battle between salvation and damnation and it sounds as though neither of them qualifies fully for either state. I like the hunter character it is clear how weary she is of the war. It is also clear that she suffered a painful loss in her most recent battle. Basically her life sucks and she has little control over it. She is forced to be an unconnected wanderer and she wishes it would end even if it meant her end.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a clear and well-defined essay on the structure of a monster in the house story. It deals with the two major variations and certain elements that are common to them it defines the story type. It describes the structure of both variations.this structure ties a wide variety of individuals stories into this type, from jaws, to nightmare on elm Street, to alien. I hadn't thought about those movies being so similar until I read this essay. It makes me want to read the original book that this information references.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Been in a state like this before. Desperate indefinable apathy. The words and meanings of this prose poem flow together like watercolor storyboards. There is just enough ill-defined reality to this to carry a character through to the end. The setting is like you are looking at things through a silk scarf. The character too is unfocused. You really can't catch an image of them in your mind but the piece left me thinking they were someone I knew or had at one time been. The whole thing is unethusiastically moving right back into the state where it began. It reminds me of an artistic version of a tiktok reel.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The punctuation of this poem is lacking as in even lacking apostrophes where they should go. Usually I can ignore punctuation inadequacies in poetry but apostrophes in possessives and conjunctions are a must for a proper read.

That said I sympathize with the poet on the way some just want to shove a pill at any inconvenient emotion. How is it that other people think they have the right to value or devalue another person's emotions in that way. Sometimes there is a benefit to letting a pensive mood flow through you.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Awesome I don't know if the last paragraph about guy means he wasn't an angel or what but I love the last glimpse of him. I am so glad that they found each other and fell in love. I am happy about Brian and Stan's improved relationship. I just love the whole story. I am not accustomed to reading scripts but it read just fine to me it was longer than I expected it to be but I wouldn't have left out a bit to make it shorter. The part where Stan practically hijacked the bus after stopping the robbery was a bit extreme but it was a necessary breaking point for Stan.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a well thought to quiz. It wasn't too long or too short. I feel like it was the perfect length. I didn't expect to get as many of the questions right as I did and the question I got wrong I absolutely expected to get them wrong. The end of the quiz refers you to two articles assumably written by the author. It would have helped if those articles were linked. I really would like to read them after taking this quiz. I would hope they would include the answers and links to the reference material used as research.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It is a lovely story. I see how it could be extended into a wonderful book. It practically outlines itself. But what keeps people from chopping down the tree homes an massacreing the gnomes with garden tools accidentally without knowing they are even there. I mean humans aren't known for letting nature remain free and beautiful. We like putting in sidewalks and fences and new developments instead of scenic forests. Making it so we can't see them doesn't guarantee their safety. Humans eff things up to regularly.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an interesting premise. I would have love to have read an expanded version. I would have thought when he sat to have a bowel movement he would have noticed the pajamas and his lack of frontal companionship down there. He would have had to drop the pajama pants and most likely panties because women rarely go commando. We tend to wear underwear as a line of defense against staining everything when our monthly visitor arrives off schedule. Basically he would have noticed something was up before he pooped not waking till he heard a man.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a really good begining, it introduces the two characters fast but thoroughly. The uncle sounds mostly like a quack until we learn he isn't a tinfoil hat type but a scientist on the threshold of discovering or rediscovering a new technology.

The direct line between his experiments and ancient Egypt needs to be drawn. Did he Google the effects he was seeing or remember a pseudoscience article about Egypt or what? It doesn't matter much. I just want to see more story and find out. The next scene could be the uncle returning to his lab and telling his colleagues that he didn't have the luck they needed and he gets an update...
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I totally agree with the groundhog. I have one living under my porch and I couldn't help but see that little guy as the one talking to the reporter. Why does it take a rodent to point out just how pathologically stupid the human race is. I think if God wanted to end the world they would just let us to continue to put the same kind of complete idiots in charge as we have been the last hundred and fifty years. We have pretty much ruined the neighborhood ever since we decided to invent World Wars. Now we are so cute just waiting for the next one to start rather than putting in the necessary social, psychological, and scientific maintenance we need to prevent it.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Oh I really was rooting for them. It was clear from the outset how important this was for them. It wasn't until they were doused in water and all of their careful training and prep fell away how far they had reached to try and enter the university. I wish the university were more open to this someone who can work this hard trying to get in would only work harder at the curriculum to stay in. If there are so many races that have universities it only makes sense that there should be at least one that accepts everyone.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh, what a sad story. That poor cat was abandoned. Those people care about it they should take it home. I feel like I am missing something about this poem but I am stuck on what horrible people would just abandon their cat like that. The poor thing watching the whole world go by when their whole world is gone. I wanted so much for them to take it home before the poem ended.it would have been a happier ending. This leaves is sadder and I just don't like the way it felt when it ended. But things don't always end well in life and to have an unhappy poem is a harder thing to do.
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