Fabulous poem. Great style, lavish places and the New Orleans "Jive" makes it a 5+. This particular one appears even in lineage and spaced better than "Valentine", and I liked your irony as well as the title. Best Regards.
Excellent piece. Somehow, my heart goes out to this man too. Your
style of writing this is clever, suave, and very candid. I'm touched by
such things as well and could identify with it and "angels". Best Regards.
Saw it in this week's Short Story Newsletter.
I love the feeling that this story is true. I love Georgia, and have
only passed through it. Down into Florida. You have good lines,
I like the repitition as a theme, and the title as it flows into the storyline.
For a short piece, it is very well-written. Saw it highlighted in this
weeks' Short Story Newsletter. Luck. Best Regards.
A cute piece. I would love to get into your Portfolio when I have
time and rate your book, My Life On A Plate. It sounds fab. I love
Nottingham, England. I've only been there twice, West Bridgeford, but
I just love the accquaintances I met, and loved the scenery in London.
If you ever want to scout around my portfolio, I have a poem on this
guy I thought was such a genie in Nottingham. --"Invalid Item" , he's
married now, too bad for me, . . . I guess. Anyway, I also have just
a few more on London. --"Invalid Item" , "Invalid Item"
and "Invalid Item" . I promise I'll be back! Best, best regards.
Like a song, this poem sings a destiny that fills the heart. I thought
it was very original, and loved the naming of women and their place
in the poem. The poem was very well-formed and the lines were evenly distributed to which the ends justified the means as the poem returned us to its source with the line: And I'll love all of these women, til the day you
make it home. I couldn't help but wonder about the circumstances of
that last line. A very fulfilling poem. Best Regards.
What a journey! I'm one for saying I followed it all, Wayfarer was "some journey!" Shorts are interesting and this has great pluses to it. The sections with Jane's embarrassment and the state of affairs of her mind and the tension of "computer-gargon", gave this piece an originality and yet a slick time-frame. I went along for the ride. Smoothly done. Great piece for the Newsletter to feature when suggesting highly evolved characters. Best Regards.
WOW! This is the most complete item I have ever heard of on Writing.com. You had a printable item about forms earlier, and I had printed it out. But this is a text in itself, a massive undertaking. Highly informative and eye-opening for the amateur poet who would like to learn more.
This is a great reality poem. Each word means something to me, as I think of my brother's death just the last May. I like your title. He must be in Heaven. I liked the line:
Gee there is much to say as to whom this poem refers to. I saw it as a reflection first, asking myself where this was all going. I liked the steps taken to which you denied the reader all else but what perhaps to what means that person might be, "guilty", or, then an "audience"? Sometimes we demand "compassion" and get none. Best Regards.
I like the formula with the word "she" involved. Here I see a good "short". Eventually, it will all work out. Critically, you have begun . . ., nicely. Best Regards.
Schematically correct in the essence of this poem, it is can be thought of as simplified in its form and yet carry a "moral"kind of meaning that I really liked. --Put Christ in Christmas. So often churches are a bit more full at Christmas, yet actually we should visit him year 'round. "Angels" I have heard on high, as they say, is mentioned here and "Thanks". Very commendable. May you have a Happy New Year!!!!{:snow3}
This is a good attempt to share with the reader a certain "sweetness" which is apparent in the poem. Although it is a blatantly simplistic poem I think it stands up to criticism because of its message. Showing a graphics is always a (+) here at Writing.com. I liked it. Very nice. Best to you.
Well-meaning, adorable poem. I like candid, avorable caring poets. It's facts of life, I think, that you equate for us here. Misspelled for future use: Fourteenth line down: interruption instead of interuption.
So sweet, almost like a prayer. This intends to give you technique, I think, and really does. You have crafted this piece and is genuinely candid and marvelously set. I never went for horror witchy supernatural pieces without SOMETHING being attached to our love for each other as human beings. Delightfully, this piece is a cut above the rest, gives us the paragraph about death too and I find it uncannily true. Those three little words can move the earth. Good reading. Best Regards.
Great. I have always liked your poetry and you are no stranger to Poetry Newsletters! I had to chuckle at this one, it was sweet. Good to see you are in Amazon.com.
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I liked the strength of these lines, their meaning, the undying love is, I think, our greatest triumph to muse over. You have a knack for lending me this sort of thing, I've read you before, and really liked your stuff. Just a tribute to those "lovers" who love "long" is even enough, yet you give us a little more enthusiasum and it feels good. To have been with a man for fourteen years makes ME feel good,certainly, a shorter distance than some, yet I feel the same as many longer marriages. We've come a long way baby. Best to you.
Firstly, I loved this. The lines are very even, which is a great plus. Your style is very trendy, and it is not only an ancient secret but a contemporary poem. It does build, and it conquers boredom in the the stanzas. I really value the message. Very nice. Best Regards.
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A wonderful, meaningful poem. The distinctions are sublime.
Good lines:Living Water quenching us whenever we drink.
