This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic by sharing your overall feelings about the year you have just been through. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on you and the topic. They will read to the last word. You have written about a year spent surviving, and cleaning up after, a disaster. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer while they feel so sorry for your pain and the pain of those around you. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic piece. The tone is full of anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering how Raju's father will react to his report card. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a boy who thinks his father will not approve of his school marks. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of sorrow. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about someone living through the first week after the death of a loved one. It sounds like a spouse. I am feeling so much sympathy for the speaker, I just want to put my arms around them and tell them everything will be alright. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is filled with confusion and fear. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will survive living in the marsh. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who becomes the victim of a strange beast, and victimizes others, when he decides to live in a marsh away from other people. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the man who moves away from Society, and he comes across as a real person. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. The man speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is filled with curiosity and horror. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will take film he has found to the authorities. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who finds a film of a Nazi scientist being tortured by a relatives of one of his victims. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone starts off with curiosity and delight then turn sinister and full of fear. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Mr. Andrews will find out who is stalking him, before they find him. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who is stalked by a woman starting in high school. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on Mr. Andrews, and he comes across as a real person. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The stalker speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have described an stylish hotel that is built on the site of many battles. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with vivid description. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the chapter. They will read on to see what happens next. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a renovation that went on near you. I am not looking forward to that part of owning a home, but I fear it will be a part of it. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the horse in the story will make all the deliveries she is supposed to. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a horse whose job it is to deliver dreams to sleeping people. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the night horse, and she comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce by explaining to the reader what they will be getting out of the article. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. The article discusses a specific place that is run by steam and steam technology in general. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering how Simba will react to his makeover. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, the lionesses get together and decide to give Simba, the Lion King, a makeover to put him in a less serious mood. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full anticipation and tension. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering how Blog will handle his first meeting with a human. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a being from another planet who comes to Earth hoping to meet a human for the first time. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone if filled with lonesomeness, but the reader gets the feeling the speaker is content with it. This grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker is alone by choice or if they were abandoned. They will read to the last word to find out. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of delight. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about having a dragon to ride on when you go to school instead of riding the school bus. That sounds just wonderful to me. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow of the poem. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to interfere with reader's reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. In the poem, the people of Earth have come to the point that they realize they need a new planetary home, but the one they find puts them in grave danger. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The poem has a unique rhyme that is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the boy will be stuck in a rain storm. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a boy who goes out to amuse himself and gets caught in the rain. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. the characterization is fully developed and believable. The story focuses on the boy out in the rain, and he comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is filled with confusion and shock. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Joe will end up in Hell. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who gets a glimpse of the way to the afterworld. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of serenity but is tinged with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The story is about someone who takes a nighttime sail and had the feeling they are being watched. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is well developed and believable. The story concentrates on the person sailing, and they come across as a real person. There is one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. The person in the story speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about a woman who lived as she saw fit without the support she readily gave to others. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:
1)You have neglected to either double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
2)There are a few spelling errors that a second proof reading will catch.
You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with drama as a beast is being killed by a huntsman's bow. The reader is wondering if the hunting trip is significant or just sport. They will read on to find out. This is a fabulous opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of joy and sorrow at the same time. This takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem celebrates the summer sun and laments the day when we will not be able to enjoy its warmth for a while. I love Summer and the warmth that each day has. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The Huitain poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the article by asking a direct question. This has the reader thinking about their answer. They will read to the last word to find out your thoughts on the subject. You have written about how easy it is for students to find classic novels online. I would love to find Moby Dick. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about your feelings about writing on this site. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you and why you are here. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an aggressive style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The poem starts off with a tone full of serenity but ends up full of tension. This takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone dreaming of their quiet paradise in the middle of their real noisy, urban home. We moved just outside of the city in which we lived to get a bit of peace and quiet. We found it. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The poem has a unique rhyme that is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
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