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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Dr MC Gupta,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about what life would be like controlled humans and not the other way around. We had a dog when I was growing up, and I can see him having some of wishes expressed in the poem. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Drake,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of sorrow, hurt and anger. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a man who has been badly hurt by the woman he planned to ask to marry him. I am filled with so much sympathy for the man in the poem. I read to the last word to see if he would be able to rebuild his life. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but it is not needed here. You have used grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Troyizen,

This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with Princess Mary rummaging through her father's papers. The reader is wondering what she is looking for. They will read on to find out. This is a fabulous opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the story. They get a good look at Princess Mary's evil, devious side and wonder what plan she will come up with to gain the throne. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)More grander-Should read "More grand".

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Review of Writing  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi strlcuckoo,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged with wonder and excitement. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about having there first experience with writing. I remember when I first wrote a long piece in school. It was a story. This poem brought this right to mind. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Kavitapal,

I don't have headaches but my mother used to have them frequently. In fact, she complained of the ailment much more than my father. When I saw the title it made me think of her. I couldn't resist reading this article to find out more. There were times her headaches didn't seem to have a cause.

This is a wonderful article. The title is direct and to the point. It tells the reader exactly what they will be getting out of the article. The headache is such a common complaint. The reader will begin to read to find out what else they can learn about it. You launch into the article without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about some of the possible causes of headaches among women. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi xxdarkredxx,

Two things got my attention as I clicked onto this story. The title is designates it as a diary entry, but it is categorized as fiction. Obviously this some sort of mock memoir. It has been a long time since I read something like this. I wanted to find out what it was all about. Very interesting way to do things.

This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what is going on in Edith's life. They will begin to read right away to find out. The story is about how the main character, Edith, has grown up and how she lives. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. Edith's father speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of M1HBL  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi FIRSLFNJKNLKNJBHVGHBJNK,

The title of this piece really caught my attention. I did not know just from that what the piece would be talking about. It said educational so I was thinking an essay of some sort. I was anxious to find out what I would be finding out about as I read.

This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. I did have to look up standee to find out what that was, but others in your community would know what you are talking about. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have given the reader the guidelines and purpose of a contest going on in your community. The reader will know exactly what they will have to do to enter and enjoy this contest. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of A Lost Escape  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi MCrewDude,

The title of this poem caught my attention. I was wondering what type of escape you were describing here. Was is an escape from danger, from yourself or something else entirely. We try to escape from so many things in our lives. I had to find out what the escape was all about and why it was important to you.

This is a fantastic poem. The tone starts off dark and disappointed then changes to hopeful. This captures all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about going to where you previously lived, and finding the places you remember enjoying did not hold as much joy for you as they once did. We find that a lot as we visit the places with either grew up in or, simply, moved out of. I am hoping that in some way your disappointment will shift to a much more positive feeling. I read to the last word to see if this happened. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Awakenings  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Ken,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the coming of Spring and how the earth and everything on it wakes up at this time. I love watching the snow go and the leaves grow on the trees at this time. I love Spring, but Summer even more. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The Interlocking Rubaiyat poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Amethyst Angel,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and genre very well. The reader is wondering if the dragon they attacked can be caught. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, two princesses go with the King's knights to hunt a dragon who attacked the village. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

Winter Owl
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Review of On poetry  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi St. Francis II

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. In the poem you contemplate why you wrote poetry when you were younger and not very good at it. I did the same thing years ago, and I have always wondered the same thing. I saw a lot of myself in this poem, and read to the last word. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Night Thoughts  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Beholden,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with peace and love. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a man who is admiring his wife sleep and contemplating their love and their life together. This marriage seems so happy. I am hoping that this couple will withstand the test of time. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Chapter 1  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Brigid,

I have loved every novel I have experienced here. I have had a few books on this site myself. Two of these books were even published. I wanted to see what yours would entail. I love fantasy. They are some of my favorite pieces on this site. I anxiously read this piece.

This is a fantastic first chapter. The chapter opens with a boy getting slapped by his father. The shock of the blow and the wondering of what might have caused it grabs all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the action and chapter. They will read on. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Friend,
I loved Jack and the Beanstalk as a kid. It was one of my favorite fairy tales. I love seeing other writers' takes on popular fairy tales and other popular stories. Different versions can give the same story so much depth. I wanted to see what your version was like, and this is what drew me to this story.
This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what Jack's mother will day when she sees the beans he brought home. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a boy who swaps a cow he was supposed to sell for a handful of beans. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.


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Review of Tranquil Fields  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi ounsworth17,
I don't write a lot of poetry, but I love reviewing it. Poems are so subjective. I love seeing what random thoughts and emotions influence people's poems. So much of what happens in a writer's life influences what a writer writes.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is serene and filled with joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about a time when you spent time in peaceful, beautiful fields. Do you get to visit this spot much? We have a spot that is beautiful and peaceful just a short walk from my home. I love the description and imagery you use in this poem. I could see the fields as I read. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Wrexgor,
My self and my husband are always dreaming of winning the lottery, so I was really interested in reading this piece. We would like a boat, a cabin and setting ourselves up to do some hunting. We always spend a little a week on 1 or 2 tickets, sometimes more.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. Anyone who dreams about what they would do if they had more money will anxiously begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about an idea for a movie, TV series, or book about someone who has won the lottery. In any form, this would be a very exciting story. You can use your imagination very effectively, and in many ways, with a story like this one. You also have a variety of available genres you could write in. Comedy would work here, horror, mystery and, probably, many more. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Room 314  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Tori,
This is a fantastic story. The tone is full of confusion and fear. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering why there is no one else in the hotel. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about someone who ends up at a seemingly deserted hotel when they arrive looking for the room they reserved. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Survival  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Twit,
I was completely pulled in by the title of this poem. It tells the reader almost nothing about the poem. I read right away to see what exactly would be going on. I love that you stated exactly the poetic form you were using from the start.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of longing and lonesomeness. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who wants people in their live, but have hidden a broken heart in order to avoid being hurt. I have done this so many times and have always found that just dropping your guard is easier than it appears. I loved this poem and read to the last word to see if the speaker finds a way to reach out. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The reader is carried along as they read. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of For Her  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi HersForever,
The title is what attracted me to this piece. I was anxious to know exactly what was for her.
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what is actually in the piece. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the very last word. You have written about how much you love someone even though you have only had a brief encounter. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)But I still-There should be a comma after "But".

2)if it is not meant-"if" should begin with a capital letter.

You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Hope  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Adminn,
The title of this poem caught my attention. I believe in holding on hope. It got me through a bout of pneumonia, the pandemic and a couple of relationships I had to carry on long distance. It has gotten me through many things over the years other than these.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is encouraging and forceful. You have a point to make here, and you intend to make it. This grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how hope can see you through the difficult things you may encounter in this life. There are many difficult things to deal with in life but also pleasant ones. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Writer62,
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. You have a point to make, and you intend to make it. This grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the look of the waves on a clear day. I love watching the waves and listening to their relaxing sounds as they lap onto the shore. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Phoenix,
This is a wonderful story. The tone is filled with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering of the encounter between the officer and the suspect will be a difficult one. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about an officer who serves a community where personal ownership is not allowed. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and believable. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tori,
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. The will read to the very last word. You have written about a painting in a gallery which made such an impression on you with its vividness that you were entirely engrossed in it. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi cyoung,
I love poetry about love and relationships. I used to writer a lot of it when I first started writing. I was anxious to read this poem. I love to keep up on what other writers are doing in this genre. I also was carried away with the intense emotion in this poem which is evident from the first word.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with love but, also confusion. It takes all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is in love with a person they really shouldn't be with. They are confused and conflicted about how this relationship should go or if it should continue. I am wondering, as I read, if this relationship will continue or be broken off. I read to the last word to find out. The rhyme is well done and consistent. I gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Someone,
What caught my attention with this piece was that it was self help. I wanted to find out what problem you were trying to help people overcome. I love helping people and tend to reach out to others like me. I just had to read this one.
This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the very end. You have written about your attempt to drop the pride you use as a shield and try to live more freely. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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