This is a fantastic story. The tone is contemplative. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering to where the old man is traveling. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, an old man takes a train ride and enjoys memories of his family. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the old man, and he comes across as a real person. There is one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. The younger man on the train speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how much you enjoy listening to the wind and rain. I love the rain falling on the roof during the night. It puts me right to sleep. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about your decision to enter college away from home. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic outline. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. You launch into the outline without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the outline. You have given the reader an outline of your latest novel. For any person interested in reading the novel this is a wonderful first step. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the outline tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of pride and love. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is a tribute to your father. The love that you feel for your father comes through perfectly in this poem. I am so glad you have such a good relationship with him. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with pain and anguish. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about your past abuse at the hands of a parent. I am so sorry for the pain you went through. I read to the last word to see if you found a way out. I loved this poem. The poem has a unique rhyme that is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Malik is the son of Devil. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a young man who is thought to be evil tries to do something to help his village during hard times. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is well developed and believable. The story concentrates on Malik, and he comes across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a wonderful piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about your self image. I am hoping that how your feel about yourself will improve as time goes on. I was delighted with the look I got at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across on structural issue that needs your attention:
1)She always felt pretty in this mirror, so why can't I.-This is a question and should end with a question mark.
You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a wonderful article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. The reader is intrigued and will begin to find out more. You introduce the topic by telling the reader exactly what they will be getting out of the article. Anyone who has questions about their own relationship, or relationships in general, will anxiously read to the last word. You have written about how to have a healthy, lasting relationship. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with fulfillment and delight. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about how much you love your craft and your desire to bring people to your writing so they can enjoy it. As writers, we all feel similar. I want to share the writing I love so much to do. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The poem has a wonderful rhyme. It gives the poem a lovely rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is light and informal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Rudolf will find work as a magician. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a retired man who is trying to start a new career as a magician. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Wile E. Coyote will win his law suit. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, Wile E. Coyote sues the Acme Corporation because their products kept failing and injuring him when he tried to use them against the Roadrunner. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is filled with confusion and aggravation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Marcy will survive the outing with her Addie and Allan. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a woman who decides to give her sister a break by taking her two children for the afternoon then realizes how hard it is to care for these children. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic article. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the article is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You introduce the topic telling the reader what the mind set of most new college students is. This grabs all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the article. They will read to the last word. You have written about how, as well as an education, college students gain a wider way of looking at the world around them. You have done your research here. You are conversant with your topic and easily make it comprehensible for your reader. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the article tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a wonderful story. The tone is filled with urgency. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Billy will escape from his family. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a boy who is trying to get away from the family who has used and abused him since his mother's death. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:
1)Charlie winced. "Well, I didn’t figure he’d be stupid enough to head into the forbidden forest.” Charlie pleaded. “We almost caught the little runt, but then Junior got spooked and wanted to turn back." He rolled his eyes.
“Oh, there ain’t nothin’ out here,” Earl scoffed. “Those are just old tales made up to scare the hobos and littluns’.” They all fell quiet for a moment as they nervously looked around, recalling the rumors that had been spreading through the town like wild fire the last few years.-These are two separate paragraphs and need to be double spaced.
2)“Oh Billy,” Marla sang. “Come on out now sweetheart. We feel real bad about how we treated you and just want to make things right. Come on out and I’ll set you up your very own room in the house. The cherry boys are ready to make it right too, aren’t ya boys?” The cherry boys snickered as they said, “Oh yeah, we’re real sorry Billy. We won’t tease ya anymore.” Billy could hear his heart pounding hard as the forest grew quiet and they tiptoed closer.-This paragraph should be divided into two to accommodate both pieces of dialogue.
The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a wonderful piece. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the piece. I have had a troubled relationship with my mother, and like to read pieces about children and their mothers. I began to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about the ways in which you are like your mother. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)it seems like-This is the beginning of a new sentence, and "it" should begin with a capital letter.
You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is light and erotic. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about an older couple who have a sexy, role playing evening. I am thrilled to see this couple still interested in each other. I read to the last word to see if this interest prevailed. I loved this poem. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic chapter. The chapter opens with anticipation as Sadie is leaving for university. The reader is wondering what she will do with her freedom. They will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your plot and main characters very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
This is a fantastic story. The tone is filled with anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering why Toadette is going to Central Toad Town. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, Toadette goes to Central Toad Town looking to get a job and finds a unusual position waiting to be filled. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about the elements which should go into writing erotica. I have written a few erotic pieces and am looking forward to writing more in the genre. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The diamonte poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
These are fantastic lyrics. The tone is sinister. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The lyrics are about the birth of Rock n' Roll and how this could have been because someone sold their soul. The idea of selling one's soul is very popular in literature, even today, though not as much as before. I loved these lyrics and read to the last word. I would never want anything bad enough to sell my soul. The free verse works well in these lyrics, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The lyrics flow extremely well. They are a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in these lyrics. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about healing and starting over after hardship. This poem will resonate with many people. It happens so much in life. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with sorrow and disbelief. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. In the poem, someone is confused when a relationship which means a lot to them abruptly ends for, apparently, no reason. The reader is hoping that the speaker will get some answers from the person they are no longer involved with. They will read to the last word to find out if this happens. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of serenity and contentment. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone taking a relaxing stroll through a garden and enjoying the solitude and peace. I love spending time in my garden. I tend mine and love the sense of peace gardening gives me. I loved this poem and read to the last word. There is a wonderful rhyme in this poem. It gives the poem a lovely rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
This is a fantastic poem. The tone is filled with love and joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about two lovers sharing a romantic, sensual evening just being a couple. I am so happy for this couple, and I hoped they will always be this way. I read to the last word to see it this happens. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a lovely rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.
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