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I used a template for all of my reviews. I will comment on plot, characters, scene/setting, grammar, and anything else that comes to mind.
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short stories, novels, and blog
Favorite Genres
dark fantasy and horror However, I will read anything that is similar to a VC Andrews story. I also like any books about cooking.
Least Favorite Genres
romance, comedy, mystery, science fiction
Favorite Item Types
short stories, novels, blogs, anything about cooking
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poetry, campfires
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Romance, action-adventure, mysteries/thiller, science fiction
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Review of Complete  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (3.5)
I am showering you with an act of joy and reviewing a black case this week. I love the idea of this poem. The longing for love the heart has for someone. I only wish you had written more. That was the disappointment I had with this poem. Thank you for sharing this and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Allergies  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
I am here to shower you once again with another act of joy by reviewing this poem for you. You did a good job with the use of alliteration. I often use this device in my poems. I tend to suffer from allergies a lot and can relate to this poem. The flow of this poem is great and was a joy to read. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.5)
I am here to shower you with a review through the Showering Acts of Joy Forum. It was my pleasure to read your poem. I love poems about animals. They are always there in our time of need, especially when we are lonely. We seem to take them for granted, too, and you point that out nicely in your poem. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Cats  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (5.0)
I came to bestow on you another act of joy through the Showering Acts of Joy Forum. I have never heard of a Cinquain poem, so I had to check this one out. I also love cats. I have one name Gizmo. This poem fits him so well. He is so opinionated and self-confident. I totally loved the attitutde and finess of this poem! Thanks for sharing and write on!

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Review by very thankful
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I am here to shower you with an act of joy through the Showering Acts of Joy Forum. Reading your journal about your son was very eye opening and encouraging. I was born with a brain disorder that affects the left side of my brain. I wasn't offically diagnoised until about two years ago and was totally treated for complete mental disabilities instead of a physical one, too.

I applaud you for standing by your son and working with him, so he will not become a statistic. Thanks for sharing this journal.

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Renewal  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I came across your port in the Showering Acts of Joy Forum. I saw this poem and was drawn to it immediately. I like reading Haikus even though I could never seem to be able to write one. The main reason it attracted me was the subject matter. This poem is so true. I love the second stanza because God does strengthen our troubled souls to fight another day. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved your story about conquering your "boogeyman". I was going to point out a grammatical error or two but decided not to because it was from the point of view of a child, and the last part told to a child. Your description was great. I could picture the troll in my mind vividly. I liked the idea of leaving the troll behind in a town. Great job and thanks for sharing!!!!!!!! Write on!!!!!!!!!!

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Unfulfilled  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for requesting a review from my forum.

I like that you began the beginning of each stanza with a U. I like the meter you followed for the poem. I can really relate to this poem too. I believe everyone has felt unfulfilled at one time or another. Thanks for sharing and good job! Write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Who  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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This is another poem most people can related to. A love triangle is a good topic for a poem like this. This poem was easy to read and understand. Thanks for sharing and good job! Write on!

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Review of If Only  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
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I believe everyone has been through this at some point in their lifetime. I like the flow of your poem, and your use of repetition at the first part of this poem. Thanks for sharing and good job! Write on!

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Review of Stone Cold  
Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Suggestions
1. Only use contractions in dialogue.
2. Edit for commas.
3. Do not start a sentence with a coordinating conjunction.

Overall
This is a good start for a novel. It was easy to follow. I believe this will hook readers and make them want to read more.

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Review of I Suffered More  
Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Thank you for requesting a review from my forum.

This is a wonderful continuation of the other poem. Verbal abuse can be just as bad or even worse than physical. It does make you wonder if a mother could ever be trusted after doing those things. Thanks for sharing and great job! Write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Thank you for entering the Best Chapter contest. Good luck with your entry.

Suggestions
1. Only use contractions in dialogue.
2. Do not start a sentence with a coordinating conjunction.
3. Watch for fragments.
4. Edit for commas.

Overall
This story is so enchanting. I love the setting and all of the characters so far. I would love to read more. I would have rated this a 5.0 except for the above suggestions.

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Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for entering the Best Chapter contest. Good luck with your entry.

Suggestions
1. It is recommended to write in past tense. Your first paragraph was in present tense.
2. Do not start a sentence with a coordinating conjunction.
3. Edit for commas.

This was an action packed chapter. This was a great way to start a novel. I believe readers will like reading about Valyn and his family.

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Review of Chapter 1  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (2.5)
Thank you for entering the Best Chapter contest. Good luck with your entry.

Suggestions
1. Edit for commas.
2. Do not start a sentence with a coordinating conjunction.
3. Only use contractions in dialogue.

Overall
Your chapter has potential, but it needs work. The description you have is fine, but you need more. Dialogue is need instead of just telling what they said. It would be a good idea to describe what your main character, Kurt looks like, so readers can have an image of him in their minds.

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Review of Apocalypse  
Review by very thankful
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Thank you for entering the Best Chapter contest. Good luck with your entry.

Suggestions
1. Only use contractions in dialogue.
2. Edit for commas.
3. Do not start a sentence with a coordinating conjunction.
4. It is usually recommended to write in third person.

Overall
I love zombie stories. This story kind of reminds me of The Stand by Stephen King. I was very into this story from being in to end. This would make a good movie.

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Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Thank you for entering the Best Chapter contest. Good luck with your entry.

Suggestions
1. Edit for commas.
2. Only use contractions in dialogue.
3. Do not start a sentence with a coordinating conjunction (only twice toward the end).

Overall
I reall liked this prologue. It was easy to follow, and I could picture what was going on in my mind. I liked your two main characters, Karen and Silver. If the rest of your novel follows this storyline, it will be a very enjoyable fantasy novel.

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Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Thank you for entering the Best Chapter contest. Good luck with your entry!

Suggestions
1. Edit for comma errors.
2. Do not start a sentence with a coordination conjunction.
3. Only use contractions in dialogue.
4. It is recommended that stories should be written in third person and past tense.

Overall
This was an action packed chapter. It makes the reader want to read more.

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Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Thank you for entering the Best Chapter contest. Good luck with your entry!

Suggestions
1. Edit for comma errors.
2. Do not start a sentence with a coordinating conjunction (You only did this twice: once in the first paragraph and once in the sixth paragraph.)
3. Only use contractions in dialogue.
4. It is recommended that stories should be written in past tense.

Overall
This history of Yadout is very interesting. I believe readers will like reading this to help them understand the rest of the story.

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Review of Fey Darkly.  
Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Thank you for entering the Best Chapter contest. Good luck with your entry.

Suggestions
1. Edit for punctuation, mostly commas.
2. Write out numbers under one hundred.
3. Only use contractions in dialogue.
4. Edit for typos (only a few).
5. Do not start a sentence with a coordinating conjunction (only a few).

Overall
I liked this chapter. The ending is very suspensefull. I believe the reader will want to know what happens next.

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Review of Spymasters Return  
Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Thank you for entering the Best Chapter contest. Good luck with your entery.

Suggestions
1. Edit for comma errors.
2. Only use contractions in dialogue.
3. Write out numbers under one hundred.

Overall
This prologue was easy to understand and follow. Your main character, Rouast, is likable. The ending makes the reader want to know if war is coming.

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Review of Blind Ambition  
Review by very thankful
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This reminds me of Nirvana. Some of their verses would be soft and laid back then the chorus would explode. The second and third verses are my favorites. I feel like I can relate to them. The final chorus is very good because it ends the song perfectly. Thanks for sharing this and good job! Write on!

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Review of CHRIST  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like your poem and agree with what it is about. I would suggest that you capitalize the g in God and the L in Lord. I would also break up the one long stanza into maybe two or three. This would work better for flow. In the eight line, the s is not needed after and. Thanks for sharing and good job! Write on!

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Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is such a cute poem. The rhyme is perfect, and the flow is good too. I like your use of metaphors. I loved the line, "Put peanut butter in your shoe Pandemonium widespread". I also liked the reference to the haunted house. The dirt in tea, oh yuck, but I could picture in a naughty child doing this.
Thanks for sharing and good job! Write on!

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Review of Bouquets  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed reading your prose about gardens. I like the way you write about beauty, and I agree with what you write. I do have one suggestion. In the third paragraph, gaden should be garden. I really liked the first sentence in the last paragraph. It has a lot of meaning in it.
Thanks for sharing this and good job! Write on!

Sister of Mercy
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