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I used a template for all of my reviews. I will comment on plot, characters, scene/setting, grammar, and anything else that comes to mind.
I'm good at...
short stories, novels, and blog
Favorite Genres
dark fantasy and horror However, I will read anything that is similar to a VC Andrews story. I also like any books about cooking.
Least Favorite Genres
romance, comedy, mystery, science fiction
Favorite Item Types
short stories, novels, blogs, anything about cooking
Least Favorite Item Types
poetry, campfires
I will not review...
Romance, action-adventure, mysteries/thiller, science fiction
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Review of Winter's Breath  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
I am here once again to shower you with another act of joy on behalf of the Showering Acts of Joy Forum. I like the way you compare winter to a lover's touch. I also like the use of alliteration in the second line of the first stanza. I like the gentle way you end the poem, too. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Review by very thankful
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I am here again to shower you with another act of joy on behalf on the Showering Acts of Joy Forum. I love the way this poem rolls of the tongue as I read it. The second stanza is my favorite because of the descriptions you use. The last line of that stanza really stands out to me. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Calling  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
I am here to shower some joy and to be an angel and review a poem for you. This poem has so many emotions for such a short one. The first one chills me to the bone while the second one makes me feel great sorrow. Thanks for sharing this and writing on!

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Moving  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.5)
The angel strikes angel to float around in your port and review your article on behalf of the Angel Army. This would make a better poem than an article if the format were changed. The words read so smoothly and have a great flow. Yes, writing .com is a great place to move and settle down. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Review of The Nap  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
Here I am, still playing around in your port. I chose another piece to review on behalf of the Angel Army. This reads so smoothly that it makes me want to take a nap, but in a good way. Your writing is enchanting. I only saw a few mistakes. Make sure that your contractions have appostrophes and not question marks in them. Ex: don?t should be don't. Combine your first two sentences by cutting out the "an afternoon" from the second sentence. This will eliminate repetition. There were a few comma errors. Just make sure if you have a coordinating conjunction that you have a comma before it if both sides can stand alone as sentences. Otherwise, good job and thanks for sharing. Write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Restless  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
Here I am again reviewing something from your port on behalf of the Amgel Army. As I played around your port, I found this nice little essay about a sleepless night. I have had many of those as an insomiac. Here are a few suggestions to make this a 5.0.
1. A comma is needed before a coordinating conjunction if both sides can stand alone as sentences.
2. Do not start a sentence with a coordinating conjunction.
3. "After only a few hours of sleep....." A comma is needed after sleep.
4. "On second thought......" A comma is needed after thought.

I hope this helps.

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Occurrences  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
I am being an angel and reviewing your piece on behalf of the Angel Army. This is an interesting piece you write. I have had "occurrences" in my life, too. This was a smooth and easy read with only a few comma errors involving coordinating conjunctions. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Roses  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
I am here again to review another piece courtesy of the Angel Army. This is a well written piece, and I agree with what you write. There is a price we have paid as a society for progress. I only have two suggestions that would make this piece a 5.0.
1. "Maybe it would even be a good idea to stop and ....." Commas are needed after maybe and stop.

I hope this helps.

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Got Milk?  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (3.0)
I came across this while reviewing your port courtesy of the Angel Army. I really enjoyed the subject matter of your monologue. It brought back memories when I used to live on a farm as a child. I would like to offer some suggestions to make this a 5.0.

1. Write out all numbers under one hundred.
2. Stay in one verb tense.
3. You had several sentence fragments that were prepostional phrases. Ex: "On to the next cow."
4. You need a comma before a coordinating conjunction if both sides can stand alone as sentences.
5. "Over the years there has been....." A comma is needed after years.
6. In the fifth paragraph, drop the word if from the beginning of the sentence to avoid repetition, since you begin the sentence before it with the same word.
7. "The last couple of years I have had to milk...." A comma is needed after years.
8. "There is no substitute for heavy, sweet cream...." Remove the comma after heavy because you do not need a comma if there is only one adjective. You would only need the comma if there were more than two adjectives in a series.

I hope this helps!

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Mr Lucky  
Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
I am here again to review another work from your port courtesy of the Angel Army. Yes, you are very lucky I would say. This is another easy, casual piece that I enjoyed reading. I have some suggestions to make it read even better.
1. A period is needed after Mr.
2. Write out all numbers under one hundred.
3. "The other day I was visiting with a friend of mine...." A comma is needed after mine.
4. "Just from a slight cut." This is not a sentence.
5. "Later that same day...." A comma is needed after day.
6. In that same sentence another comma is needed after neighbor.
7. "On the way...." A comma is needed after way.
8. In that same sentence you have an extra space between the words "and" and "took".

I hope this helps. Keep on writing, and I will keep on reading!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Sister of Mercy
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Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (3.0)
I am here to review something else from your port courtesy of the Angel Army. I found this quite interesting. I like your easy and casual writing style. I do have some suggestions for you that will make this piece a 5.0.
1. Write out all numbers under one hundred.
2. "Even through change....." A comma is needed after change.
3. "At times the ham was used....." A comma is needed after times.
4. "While I am thinking of meat....." A comma is needed after meat.
5. "At first I was just a helper...." A comma is needed after first.
6. "Since then I have butchered....." This is not a complete sentence because it begins with a subordinating conjunction.
7. "As the winters here can be long,,,,,,," This is not a complete sentence because it is a prepostional phrase.
8. "Meat was removed as needed...." A comma is needed after needed.

I hope this review helps. Keep writing!!!!!!!!

Sister of Mercy
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Review of This Thing  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.5)
Here I am to review a poem from your port courtesy of the Angel Army. I love the meaning of this poem. I believe so many readers will relate to this. I have been in this same situation, too! The poem has a good flow also. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Any Number  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
I came across your port on the Angel Army Review Forum and thought I would ramble around. This is a cute story about a funny incident. I do have a few suggestions that would make this piece a 5.0.
1. Write out all numbers under one hundred.
2. "....so I said I was headed home." A comma is needed before so.
3. "Once we had the horses caught......" A comma is needed after caught.
4. In the next sentence, seen should be sent, and a comma is needed after message.
5. "Later in the day......." A comma is needed after day.

I hope this review helps.

Sister of Mercy
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Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (5.0)
I came across another great piece in your port and decided to review it. You have many great ideas in this short piece. I have never heard of these ideas either. I read this just in time for some great and inexpensive Halloween fun. Thanks for sharing and write on!

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Review of Entree of Soul  
Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I am reviewing you courtesy of Showering Acts of Joy Forum to help fulfill your port raid. I love reading poems about ghost and ghouls during the month of Halloween, or any time in fact. The format and flow are good along with the descriptions you use. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
I am reviewing your poem as a courtesy of the Showering Acts of Joy Forum to fulfill your request for a major port raid. This is a cute poem for children about Halloween. I did spot one typo in the fifth line. You have an extra a in graveyard. Other than that the poem is great. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Candle-Rope-Cave  
Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
I am reviewing this story in the spirit of reviewing black cases week. I had to read this a couple of times to get into it. I did like the fact this story involved zombies and had an element of suspenses, not bad for a piece this short. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Untrusting  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (3.0)
I am reviewing you courtesy of reviewing black cases week. I like the idea of this piece of prose. I think you ought to expand on this idea and write an essay using this idea as your thesis. Another idea would be to write this as a poem instead of prose. Keep writing and good luck with this.

Sister of Mercy

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Review of The baby  
Review by very thankful
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I am reviewing this poem courtesy of reviewing black cases week. This poem would make a great short story. I love the twist at the beginning and the end. A poem is cheating the great story that can come of this. Develop the plot and the characters and see what happens. Keep writing and good luck!

Sister of Mercy

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Review of Not the First  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (5.0)
I am reviewing your poem courtesy of reviewing black cases week. I applaud you for writting this poem about Sarah Palin. You seem to understand her better than all of those journalist and political know-it alls. I only hope she becomes the next VP. Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy

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Review by very thankful
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I am reviewing your poem courtsey of reviewing black cases week. Your poem is so emotionally breathtaking and drives the situation home at the same time. You describe the events of a school shooting. It reminds me so much of Columbine. The last three stanzas are so chilling! Thanks for sharing and write on!

Sister of Mercy
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Review of Loneliness  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.5)
I am reviewing your essay courtesy of showering acts of joy and review black cases week. This is a great essay. I really enjoyed reading it. I am rarely lonely too! I can totaly relate. I ran from a cult in my late twenties, too. I looked for different churches too and finally found one I was comfortable with. Thanks for sharing and write on!

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Review of Inevitable  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (4.0)
I am reviewing this poem courtsey showering acts of joy and reviewing black cases week. I came across this poem and found it interesting. I loved the use of alliteration. I liked the format , too! I loved the rhythm of the lines along with the lovely meaning. Thanks for sharing and write on!

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Review of End of the world  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (2.0)
I am reviewing you courtesy of showering acts of joy and reviewing black cases week. This reads like an interesting synopsis. For it to become a story, it would need a lot more. I can see a conflict, but there would be a need for characters and dialog. You have a way with words, and this is great. Your grammar is good too, and that is another good point! Do not let the low rating get you down, with some work this can easily get a better rating!

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Review of Balthasar  
Review by very thankful
Rated: E | (2.0)
I am reviewing this courtesy of showering acts of joy and reviewing black cases week. I got lost reading this. I did not quite understand the meaning behind this. In the beginning of this piece, a being is walking around then he thinks the earth is crazy. I get lost at the last paragraph. I believe it needs more explaining.

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