Hi Kalyani,
I liked your short and sweet description of yourself as a cake.
It's kind os hilarious. But the last 2 lines give a different meaning all together.
I want to save a piece of me
Hi LLL,
I loved your piece. Considering i am addicted to love,I fall in love with all the poems related to love. So I cant pinpoint any particular favorite line because I loved all the lines. From starting to end.
Happy writing,
Muskaan
Hi there,
I found your poem ,the way you have described it. DARK.
Full of melancholy.I hope you write some happy poems soon. There are few lines I liked though:
The knife twists with increasing pleasure.
The bonds grow tighter, I resist in vain.
And here? Some light, with value unmeasured.
It splashes my face with refreshing truth,
Then disappears, as my vision grows dim.
Happy Writing
Muskaan
Hi Mark,
This is a very thoughtful piece. And I do agree with you-Mom knows everything.
It is a tough job being a mom.I'm not a mother as yet but i know beforehand It's a tough job. A full time job. I liked the final paragraph. The lines as follows:
ur relationship is still somewhat recovering but over the years I’ve come to realize one all-important detail about parents. Small children think that their parents know everything. As that child grows into their teenage years their impression is that their parents don’t know anything. Sitting here as an adult, I realized that the impression I had of my mom’s abilities for parenting when I was a child had been correct all along… She does know everything. Therein lays a small portion of the “Lessons from Mom” that I have retained from my childhood.
Muskaan
Hi Morgan.
I loved your poem.It is exactly how i feel about my best friend too.Thats my husband.
My fav lines are:
Those moments I am with you
Are the greatest times of my life
You're the nerves in my head
The butterflies in my stomach
The star of my dreams
All the best for your future work
Muskaan
Hi Linda,
I loved your piece.I wont call it a poem because it doesnt rhyme at all.
But the way you have pen your thoughts,it's amazing.A very leisure description of a sunset.The lines i liked the most are:And as the sun begins to
lower in the sky,
God's pallet has opened.
Pinks, oranges, reds and blues
paint the horizon,
in what seems to be a
random array of colors,
but if you look close enough,
and if you look long enough,
you would see a pattern
form.
All the Best,
Muskaan
Hi Sharp girl,
I liked your poem but i think you should make it into stanzas of four. It'll make more sense that way.Thats what i feel. But i wish you all the best.
The part i liked the most is:
in the hollow tree with no one around.
The butterflies danced as I was being romanced.
I was somewhere else and everything began to blend.
The kiss lasted so long I didn’t want it to end.
It was the deadly kiss to end all others and send them to ruin.
So that no one could ever compare to the true one.
Hi there,
It's really beautiful and quite true.All in all i liked the full poem but the lines i loved the most are:
Do you starve; do you ache?
Do I fill you; will you fill me?
Thirst for my love; purged,
black comes into the light.
Be my eyes tonight
Hi Blackrose,
It's a nice poem but seems like there's no hard effort taken for the poem. The meaning is well understood but i think you can do better.
Muskaan
Hi babyblu,
I really liked your poem.It's simple and easy to understand.
The lines i liked the most are:The two most influencing
Speak in whispers
God, because you must want to hear
And Satan, because he wants you to think
That you might be hearing god.
Haha..I should say this was quite funny.A very different kind of story.The last part is funniest.
Embarrassed, Mrs. Miller quickly stepped back from the janitor saying, "Thanks for your help. Bye," and got into her car.
The janitor walked back to the school, a grin on his face. He knew he would never have a woman like Mrs. Miller, but for one brief moment, his favorite food had allowed his lips to touch the perfect woman.
Haha.hey gal.thats a dream...what i can say is "keep on dreaming"
OK...jokes apart.Its a nice piece,you've got there..
got a smile on my face after reading..
Wish you all the best for your hunt.
Muskaan
Very Insightful I would say.Though the poem is not rhyming,It doesnt sound odd.It is a very nice poem.
The first line-Today slowly reaches towards tomorrow
is a perfect way of explaing the whole poem.
Its a great piece.
Wish you all the best in whatever you do,
I really liked your piece..
quite humorous I should say.
I wish I can make a list like this.. haha
cant think for so long about myself..
Wish you all the best to fulfill your dreams and desires!
Muskaan
Hi there,
Thats a very nice poem.Very Light yet very meaningful.
The lines i liked a lot are:
A free person who knows what she knows
In my heart the music flows
Coursing through my veins
Even as it rains
Teardrops from my eyes
I realize my lies
But yet I dance some more
On my own private dance floor.
Hi Twiggy,
This piece is so pure and untouched.Written straight from the heart.The lines i really liked are-
When I can't find anything to say you still fill my heart by gracing me with your presence.
I don't have to be happy or sad. I dont have to be the center of attention.
With you I don't have the urge to be bigger or better. I can just be.
This is brilliant piece.I totally agree with all your thoughts.Troubles are there in everybody's life and there is no happily ever-after.These are the lines i liked the most-
You must know yourself as God sees you. You are blessed. You must know that, above all things, God loves you and would never forsake you in your needs. Ask Him and He will build you up. Invite Him into your life and feel that inner peace of knowing that He's in control. Let Him take control.
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