An Acme Review for Ink Blot
This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it! 
This review is part of the EBB package gifted to you by kiyasama in
Overall impressions and suggestions
Hey Nicki I've gone in for the official contest too, and I know how hard reviews are to come by at the moment, so I wanted to stop here first. The deadline looms! Because this review has been gifted to you, please do not consider my returned auto-award as bad mannered.
First of the bat: this is funny. Good observational humour. I like the way that people don't change; the remembrance of youth in the older women reflects that of the teenagers 
It's a good story and spot on for plot and character development, so my comments are based your desire to cut it down a bit for the contest 
Typos:
A little motivation for the first week is exactly what we need. ”
unneeded space before quotation marks.
They settled in on lane nineteen. Tammy lowered her ball to the ball return rack and drew a sharp breath. “What’s the matter with you?” Cheryl snapped, following her stare.
put a double return space before the dialogue to avoid it following Tammy's action, and thereby looking as if it belongs to her. I had to reassess the scene when I got to Cheryl's tag.
Nicki, it is so hard to review your writing objectively because I'm a huge fan of your style. In fact, this piece is as well tailored as I expected it to be, so the following suggestions are just that: suggestions. Predominately, they are given to help reduce word count
she said, “No thanks, I’m not cheatin’ on my diet with only two week until the reunion.” She shouted, “Memphis and Hailey! Y’all get in here and clean up this mess!”
I know tags are necessary, but you can still liven them up if you have to use them. Personally, while it does add to your word count, I'd take time to set up the shout, because it just seems a little too choppy as it is. The exclamation does the shouting for her, and so the tag should only serve to point the reader in the right direction of the recipient. The best way to solve it (and no extra words) is:
“Well go on, Tammy, have a cookie.”
“No thanks, I’m not cheatin’ on my diet with only two week until the reunion.” Tammy tilted her chin, gave her head a shake, and with a resolute grin shouted (where ever the girls where), “Memphis and Hailey! Y’all get in here and clean up this mess!”
A great way to cut words is to get rid of telling what you've just shown (redundant words) [-8 words]:
Cheryl took another drag on her cigarette and reached for a cookie. She exhaled the smoke and took a bite. Tammy cringed. “Can you even taste that cookie while you’re smoking?”
Cheryl took another drag on her cigarette and reached for a cookie. She exhaled the smoke and took a bite. Tammy cringed. “Can you even taste that cookie while you’re smoking?”
[-9 words]
Tammy was used to this response which first replaced a reciprocal smile two years ago when Memphis turned thirteen. At first it broke Tammy’s heart, but she soon accepted that teenagers will be teenagers. So she’d adopted a retort that did wonders to cheer her up. Before Memphis turned away, Tammy shot her tongue out at her.
Tammy was used to this response which first replaced a reciprocal smile two years ago when Memphis turned thirteen. At first it broke Tammy’s heart, but she soon accepted that teenagers will be teenagers. Sobut she’d adopted a retort that did wonders to cheer her up: before Memphis turned away, Tammy shot her tongue out at her.
[-7 words]
using the right tense for words can cut out an extra word, here or there, as can getting rid of 'weak' words (just, seemed, almost, etc.)
a shade she began using when she was just a little older that Memphis. Tammy had always been self-conscious of what she saw as a her short forehead, and her coif just didn’t look right until she’d given it some lift on top
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A bit of spit and polish and I think this a good edition to other fictional accounts based on the histories.
Golly, I must be getting soppy in my dotage. That said, one of my favourite aspects of this poem is the intimate and courtly language used by the narrative voice 
I'm a fan of form, of fiddling about with it, and poets challenging themselves to 'see if they can'. Of course, the added bonus was the 'comedy' genre tag that comes with this Abcedarius. Good use of title, brief description, genre classification and author's note describing the form: all these things make your work so much more accessible to a passing reader's interest 
The pronoun 'I' should always be capitalised.
Those two sips of wine in the second stanza mean that this is 13+ content rating, not E. Also, the way it is worded makes it look as if you've sipped them at ten to nine in the morning. Now, that's comedy, but is also behaviour guaranteed to lose sympathy for failing exams, if that's your morning tipple! 
