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Review of Red Destiny  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Farooq my name is Summer Wind and I am reviewing your short story to thank you for reviewing mine.


 Red Destiny  (18+)
A lady is stabbed by a stranger at home. A story depicting turmoil and strength.
#1774662 by Farooq
My first impression the story is that I found it to be a none stop thriller from beginning to end!

The author introduces the reader to a woman Sayali who has been stabbed by an intruder.

She is lying on the floor having flashes of memories of her cat and family and reminiscing how

the intruder came in the house and caught her by surprise while she was cooking. It seems

the young hoodlum had worked at her husband's company and was caught stealing money and

even though he had promised he would never do it again her husband fired him. He was drunk

and had come for revenge. The author takes the reader on a wild ride of thrills as the man keeps

Sayali on edge with a snake knife that he uses to threaten and control the situation. She rushes to

to the door trying to escape, but the man stabs her in the side. Emotions and thoughts of her

dying begin to flood her mind of what would happen to her children as she lays on the floor

bleeding. Then her mind focuses on the early part of her life as an abused child and how

she fought so hard to overcome being an orphan and living the life she has now with her

husband and children. She grits her teeth and summons up her strength and anger as she

listens to the attacker whistling in the other room as he is trashing her belongings. She comes

from behind with the knife that she pulled out of her side and with rage she stabs him in the

back and pushes him in a heap. He lays there stunned and ashamed that she has victory

over him. The end of the story Sayali calls her husband and is proud of herself having

triumphed in life again.

Summary: The author captured my attention with the opening paragraph and I could not stop reading.
This sentence is what really locked me in. It feels strange to know what thoughts can occur in a
persons mind when facing death. Sayali gripped the knife that was embedded deep in her, and
dropped to the floor.
This story was extremely well written, it had incredible imagery and excellent dialogue interaction
between the characters, and most of all good overcoming evil!
I applaud the other on writing a most interesting and thrilling story!

This is just my opinion on how the story affected me personally!

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Review of Flash Points  
for entry "05 - The Heir" 
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello silverfeathers my name is Summer Wind I dropped your port to see what I could review.

 Flash Points  (ASR)
Fantasy flash fiction stories, limit of 1000 words each.
#1807216 by silverfeathers
My first impression is the author has written a story about politics and loyalty.

The reader is introduced to Myles and a young prince who he is walking with

and showing him the ruins of a 15 year war. He explains how the war tore

everything apart and no one was safe. He explains that his father was king and

was responsible for all of the battle, but was finally executed. Then his uncle a

unstable man took over and was king. Further along in the story he is told that after

his mother the queen's death he was smuggled by a couple who pretended that

the prince was their own. The story gets to where there is a turn for the unsuspecting

reader. Up till now the reader is led to believe that Myles is protecting the boy from

harm, when in fact he is protecting himself from the boy who would eventually grow up

and be king and there could be dire circumstances from his reign. He explains to the boy

that he made a vow to God that he would not allow these ruins again. The boy is an

innocent victim, a pawn that must be played and destroyed to keep the peace.

At the end of the story the prince makes a break for freedom, but is eventually

caught and killed by being thrown into a well. Myles strolls back into the camp

like he never existed.

Summary: Even though this was a fictional story, I believe that this agenda has been played out in reality in
history many times. The story gave the reader a look at loyalty and how been born in a royal
family isn't always favorable. Unfortunately in this instance the boy was a innocent victim.
I found this short story to be very interesting and well written with an unlikely twist in the end.

This just my opinion on how this story affected me.

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Review of Who's the Boss?  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Christina, my name is Summer Wind and I am pleased to review your poem.

Who's the Boss?  (E)
I really don't know. Look at my ... Shane!
#1864137 by ChrisDaltro-Chasing Moonbeams
My first impression of your poem is how comical it was. The author has written a delightful

poem about a Bichon Frisse puppy. She introduces the poem with her purchase of the puppy

in Kentucky and then goes on to say he follows her everywhere. When she leaves him he

cries, so now she can hardly go anywhere. The author describes him as being small and smart

and how he likes to chase squirrels in her garden and follows butterflies around. She tells of

the companionship that he provides when he sits on her lap and how she forgives him when

he starts his crazy antics like hiding her lip gloss or chewing on her steel bed. The author has

made her mind that even the puppy is a lot work and has changed her life tremendously but she

doesn't care, because she has a friend waiting at the door for her when she comes home.

Summary: I enjoyed reading this humorous and enjoyable poem about the author's best friend a puppy.
I thought the poem was very descriptive and I could actually envision the puppy jumping and
chasing butterflies and squirrels.
The poem made me reflect on how animals have absolute unconditional love for us humans.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Tasia my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your short story for the Defeating the Darkness
With Light Contest.

 The Demon in my closet.  (13+)
No longer practicing Witchcraft a new mother is haunted by her past.
#1860104 by Tasia714



My first impression the story is that I found it to be a none stop thriller from beginning to end!

The author takes the reader on a view that being involved with Witch Craft can have a back

lash in your life. Even when you find that it does not bring you all the things that you think it

will there is always a price for everything. In this case this is a true story of the author's

family heritage where there were witches in her background. She dabbled in it and not getting

the ground she hoped for and now married with a new baby she put away her books in her

closet and forgot about them. But the devil did not forget about her. Though she had prayed

and asked God to come into her life and be her protector. She still had possession of the Witch

Craft books and was attacked by demonic entities, because she had not rid herself completely

of the evil. The writer tells of how the demon tries to possess her and how physically weak she

is when she first calls on the name of Jesus to cast the demon out and away. Battling in the name

of Jesus she refers to her voice like an old woman who can only whisper. Until she gains her

ground and faith and eventually is almost shouting. She grabs the books and burns them on the

BQ grill and thinks it's over, but is attacked again, this time she is prepared to do battle but she

still had to fight hard. She calls her husband and he reminds her that she still has books in the

shed. She takes the last of her witch craft books and burns them and then blesses her house.


Summary: I really liked how the author shared a personal testimony of her experiences of how Jesus Christ
gave her victory over the darkness that was hidden in her life.
The story seems like it is fiction when you read about black forms trying to possess you, but I know
from personal experience she is telling the truth.
This story was a wonderful story of a life changing experience when the author burned her books
and gave her life to God! Well written!


This is only my opinion on how this story affected me personally. Thank you for your entry in the contest and

Good Luck!



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The story ends with a similar incidence as the

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Review of Night Clock  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Spider my name is Summer Wind and I' m pleased to review your poem

 Night Clock  (ASR)
In the darkness of the night the fear of death finds you!
#1859461 by Simple Spider
My first impression of your poem is I never want to sleep next to a clock that I can hear ticking.

As I was reading your poem I was starting to feel the effects of the words on my physical body.

The power of suggestion from the words such as my heart beat, beat pounding in my chest with

quick little breaths. There is a lot sound effects in this poem that make the poem very dramatic

Then we have the word imagery such a this is my favorite verse.

the blackness of the night
Fear comes creeping up my spine
To whisper in my ear
…of time.

The writer has managed to write a word symphony of fear between the sound effect of the words

and the terror of the word imagery.


Summary: I must say as I read this poem I envisioned myself in a dark room with the sound of the sound of the
clock. Tick Tock and the rapid increase of my heart and pulse beating to the rhythm of the clock.
I think the writer has achieved a emotional poem inducing fear and anxiety with his word choices.

This is only my opinion on how this poem affected me

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Iluvhorses, my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your short short story.

 Spring cleaning: recycling  (E)
relationships need spring cleaning, too
#1859409 by iluvhorses
My first impression is the writer is introducing the reader to recycling. The story starts off with

when the recycling first began by collecting dog food cans, then newspapers were saved in

paper grocery bags. Also glass bottles were salvaged and hauled to the local recycling center.

The items were separated into the different colored dumpsters. Different ones for glass and

metal. Then loaded on a semi trailer. The writer gives an explanation to the reader for the

recycling, such as how it helps keeps our streets clean and helps reducing garbage and is

environmentally good for the planet. Although many do recycle there are those who would

rather just toss their refuge on the road or wherever. Also the writer switches from the

garbage that we recycle to relationships that need recycling. Such as unwanted marriages

like many plastic bottles, also children lost from broken families tossed like weeds picked up

from a lawn mower. The writer ends the story with it is time for spring cleaning to repair the

damage in relationships and families to make an effort. To build up and care about the

relationships that need recycling.

Summary: The writer gave me a lot to think about with this informative story on recycling.
I like the way the author compared refuge of broken bottles and cans to broken marriages
and relationships that all needed to be recycled.
The writer brought a very important truth to all of us about how recycling is vital to our planet
and lives. Whether it be relationships or bottles and cans.

This is only my opinion on how this short story affected me.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Tim Chiu my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your Las Vegas Spectacle,

 The Las Vegas Spectacle  (13+)
"the...excitement of craps,/The heart...of this fabulous town,/Remains overshadowed..."
#1786015 by Tim Chiu
The author has introduced the reader to the spectacular attributes of Las Vegas.

He tells about the lush and rich non-stop glitz and glamor with the star performances.

Also it's lavish resorts and gourmet dining and a bit of diverse nightlife. All accessible

from that incredible place called the Las Vegas strip. He mentions amongst the adult shows

and strip clubs lies the excitement of gambling which is the reason more than any this grand

city exists. Unfortunately he ends the Las Vegas Spectacle with the most rudely awakening

reality of the extreme amount of money that is lost at every casino.

Summary: The author has given the reader a very picturesque look at the attributes of Las Vegas.
I thought that the author's descriptions and word images were incredible.
Even though the author painted a glitzy glamorous picture, he ended his writing with
a reality check of how much money is lost in the luring casinos all the time.
Which to me takes a lot of the glitter out of the draw, making it lack luster.


This is only my opinion on how this piece affected me personally

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Las Vegas.
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Review of The Egg  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hell tasia my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to reiview your short story.

  The Egg  (E)
Jack finds a large, greenish egg sitting in a nest of sea weed on the beach.
#1857427 by Tasia714
The first impression of the story is the writer has introduced us to a boy named Jack who was

somewhat mean and a bully, had no friends. The reader finds him walking along the beach when he stumbles

upon a large greenish egg sitting in a nest of seaweed. He is very hungry and thinks to himself what a wonderful

meal it would be for lunch. He picks it up and heads for his home that he lives with his grummpy mean grandpa

that beats him. After walking a while he rests and notices that the egg seems to look a little bit bigger. It seems

every time Jack stops and looks at the egg and wonders if he should fry it or boil it keeps getting bigger.

The story ends with a most delightful twist. After Jack brings the egg to his Grandpa they both are deciding

whether to boil it or fry it, and Jack gets the egg to put it in the frying pan and it cracks and out comes a Sea dragon

with sharp teeth that get bigger and bigger until it is the size of their house. The giant Red Sea dragon looks

down at Jack and his Grandpa saying "you look delicious how should I cook you? Should I fry you or boil you?"

Of course he jumps on them and gobbles them up.

Summary: I really enjoyed reading this delightfull fairy tale short story and thought it was very creative with the twist
in the end. I laughed out loud because of the ending. All along Jack and his Grandpa were thinking how
they could cook this huge green egg, when in fact once the egg hatched ,it became the predator.
I thought this story was humorous and very descriptive and possibly have a moral.
Don't count on your eggs for dinner once there hatched if you don't know whats in the shell!

This is just my opinion on how the story affected me.

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Review of The Lost Writer  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Plandra my name is Summer Wind and I'am pleased to review your story.

 The Lost Writer  (13+)
A man takes a wrong turn and ends up in trouble.
#1821842 by plandara
My first impression of this story is the author introduces us to writer who has taken the long way

home and is walking in the park at night going over his thoughts in his mind about his family that

that thinks he's a lost cause and his next great book, carrying his trusty notebook he has named

Earl. As he is walking in a storm and freezing, he hears a woman calling out in distress.

He races towards the voice of desperation and stumbles upon blood spilled, saturating the snow.

Following the blood stains in the snow he comes upon what he thinks is a corpse. Bending down

and examining her body he sees her heart is missing from her chest. He thinks that explains the

blood in the snow, but then he gets even closer and notices her chest is moving up and down

he realizes he has been duped, but it is too late the girl lying in a Halloween costume pulls out

a gun and shoots him in the chest. He lays in the snow waiting to die and when he doesn't, then

he remembers he put Earl in his breast pocket when his fingers where frozen from carrying it.

He pulls out Earl with a bullet halfway through the book and kisses it stating I owe you buddy.


Summary: I thought this story was very descriptive, but I would have like to seen this as the first paragraph

The winter air stings my cheeks and hands. My lips are hurting, and starting to crack open. I think I’m alone here, just me and my thoughts. The path I took in life is all but a stable one. Other men have a trade or even a profession, but not me. I have a hobby. The snow that falls from the sky has covered up the path I seek. It reminds me of the way my fears have held me back from following my own path in life. I no longer recognize where I am. I have lost my way, and the blowing winds have hidden my footpath. It appears that I am lost.

This is just a suggestion meant to help not to offend. This paragraph shows the story, and catches the readers attention, as the other one tells the story. After this paragraph, perhaps incorporate the existing first paragraph as the second one.

Over all I thought the story was creative with an unexpected twist to the end and very entertaining and I enjoyed
reading it.

This is only my opinion to help and not to offend

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello Shannon, my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your short story.

The Death of Tucker Ray  (18+)
2nd Place winner (March 2012 Short Shots Contest).
#1858415 by Shannon
My first impression of the story is a young man who is immersed in his abusive past and has

not been able to heal. He carries a picture of himself when he was younger which further

emphasizes his pain and memories of his relationship of his brutal father. Not being able to

forgive himself or his father, the only way he sees out of his misery is suicide. Standing on the

Golden Gate bridge he is approached by a smiling young Chinese woman, who asks him to

to take a picture. He gladly obliges and then returns back to thinking about jumping in the

river, but he decides to make a deal with God. If just one person asks him if he is okay he

won't jump. Ready to take the plunge he hears a voice say "it's a long way down isn't it."

Turning around he sees it's the Chinese woman who asks him if he is okay and grabs his

hand and he remembers his promise to God and throws the picture of himself into the river.

As a ceremonial burial of his pain. He steps back and the young woman takes him to get

some coffee. When she asks him his name he says it's Tucker, the same name he told her

the boy in the picture's name was. The story ends with the woman confused and he says

I will explain over coffee.

Summary: I felt this story was a real look at how a young child who was beaten and burned with cigarette burns
could grow up with a terrible self image and pain.
The story related the pain of this young man with the constant reference of him wanting to jump off the
bridge. He kept repeating 245 ft the depth of the bridge and No do overs, which really implied he didn't
really want to kill himself. He had just run out of options and any other way out of his pain.
Even though was fiction, it carried an important message to us all about child abuse.
I thought this story was very well written!

This is only my opinion on how the story affected me

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello nightguy, my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your short story.

 Conversation...with dinner  (13+)
A conversation with a vampire...from the vampire's point of view.
#1854745 by E. L. Stieh
My first impression of this story is that the author introduces the reader to a journalist who is out

to dine with a vampire in a quaint Italian restaurant. The vampire tries to convince the reporter

that he is safe and that he eats regular food like he does. The vampire also tells him that he just

wanted someone to talk to. He explains that he is a mutation of the human race and that he has

been around since the beginning of time. That vampires are solitary beings they don't hunt in

packs but are very lonely and are not animals. He says that's why he asked the journalist to

come because he wanted to share how he has been cursed to walk the earth alone.

Unfortunately the story takes a turn when he discovers the journalist has been tape recording his

conversation and becomes upset as he sighs and tells him he is just like everyone else.

Not to be trusted, but then he he tells him not to get up that he is hypnotized like a mouse caught

in the stare of a cobra. He tells the journalist you will do what I say and go to the back alley.

I loved the ending when the vampire says to the journalist, Sometimes I also am deceptive.

I lied when I said you were safe. I also lied when I said I wasn't hungry. I just enjoy a little

pleasant conversation before dinner.


Summary: This author has written a deliciously wicked short story about the true nature of this alluring deceptive
creature known as the vampire. In this story the author has portrayed the vampire almost like a
lonely human psychopathic killer.
I thought the story was clever with the twist in the end. Well written!

This just my opinion on how the story affected me.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello SM Ferguson, my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review a Simply Positive review member to
member.
 Rules Of The Street  (18+)
NOBODY Is All Bad HON.Mention Writing That Makes An Impact Contest
#1254787 by dejavu_BIG computerprobs
My first impression of this story is the author has taken the reader on a inside view of the life

of a gang member leader. The author's first two paragraphs introduces the reader to the stark

reality of the jungle in the streets. The importance of showing strength in everything you do

from staring at someone until they look away, to the clothes, even the way the leader walks.

He must show no weakness. In order to prevail he must at all times be the predator and not

the prey. The writer takes the reader to a night where the leader is walking down an alley

to meet his buddy and he stumbles upon an old woman who has been robbed and stabbed.

As he stops to study the reason for the murder, he becomes enraged as it reminds him of his

grandmother, who he loved dearly. He also thought about how his grandmother begged his

mother to leave him on the farm, but his mother brought him to the city and left him to be raised

by gangs on the street. While she chased after men and booze. Filled with remorse for this

woman's death he looses himself to compassion for a moment, and makes a call for someone to

claim her body. He stands watching over her on till he hears the sirens, than regains his hard core

composure of a gang member, as he states she's the cops problem now and heads for the bar.




Summary: I thought the author wrote a realistic view of a what a gang leader's life would be like.
I can identify with this story because my son was in a gang for years and he was a terrorist.
I live in an area like the author has described in this story, There is gang graffiti everywhere.
This story was well written and the imagery was what made the story so real.


This is only my opinion on how the story affected me..


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Review of Kismet  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Angus, my name is Summer Wind and I'm reviewing your short story to thank your for reviewing mine.

 Kismet  (E)
A late 300 word contest entry. Oh well. Maybe somebody will read this...
#1857415 by Angus
My first impression of this story is a child will lead them. After seven years and fourteen months

fourteen survivors step out of their survival unit with fear and suspicion as to what is left of their

planet. Sheila is horrified, as she looks around at the blood red clouds and ash covered

landscape. She blames the oil mongrels for the devastation of the earth. They all seem to have

a dismal outlook expecting to die at any moment, except for one. A little girl of six years old

leads this pack of none believers with a strange small kitten she finds that has suffered mutation

of some sort, because when it opens his mouth, instead of Mew, Moo comes out, but that

doesn't even phase her, because she thinks they will be alright.

Summary: I thought that this author has written a short story that could be a look into the future of our planet.
I thought this story showed how man is fearful of the unknown and also quick to blame someone else
for the deterioration of our planet.
I really thought the ending was clever. A child giving a bunch of fearful and complaining adults hope.

This is only my opinion on how the story affected me personally.

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Review of That Summer  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Edmund, my name is Summer Wind and I'm reviewing your story, to thank you for reviewing mine

 That Summer  (E)
10 yr old boy loves a girl in his school. What happens to make him cry with utter sadness.
#1855120 by Edmund Gee
My first impression of your story, is that you have taken the reader on a delightful journey of your

childhood memories back to when you were ten years old and hopelessly in love with a little

girl named Judy. You weave a magical air around your story, when you compare the girl to an

angel, and how you share with reader your shyness and not being able to even talk to her.

We can all relate to when we were younger and had a crush on somebody else. I remember

when I was twelve and a boy named Roy lived behind me and wanted to play Tarzan and Jane.

I would just die every time he even looked at me. I so I could identify with your awkwardness and

insecurities with the opposite sex. Especially at an age when you are so vulnerable. I felt like I

was right there with you throughout the story witnessing everything that you went through.

Finally, you get to be with your darling Judy, only to be heartbroken by finding out when she

doesn't show up for the swimming lessons, that she and her parents drowned in a boating

incident.


Summary: I thought that the story was delightful, and was very well written!
I identified with your shyness and insecurities about the opposite sex.
I also was sad, to find out that Judy actually died in a boating accident.

This is only my opinion on how the story affected me personally


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello StoryBob, my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your poem to thank your for reviewing my
my story.
 By the Water's Edge  (E)
A young man is about to take his life...
#1857023 by StoryBob

My first impression of your poem is that probably more people than we can imagine have had

the same thoughts as that young boy. You touched on a very sensitive area about contemplating

suicide. I personally have thought of this not just once but a few times since I was struck with a

a deadly disease that has almost killed me 4 times. So, I felt the pain in your story even though it

was a fictional poem. I also was sent a doctor who saved my life, when everyone else said I

would die, if I stopped taking my chemotherapy. This poem brought me to tears and reminded me

of what a good and gracious God we have. It's more than a few words thrown together. It speaks

volumes of how God can intervene in anybody's life with just someone passing by.


Summary: As I read this poem tears flowed from my eyes, because even though I wasn't jumping into a river
I could related to the little boy and his pain.
I thought this poem was well written with an important message for anyone who thinks of suicide.
Suicide is a permanent solution to a problem that could be temporary if help comes along!

This is just my opinion on how this poem affected me. Thank you for the reminder

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Review of Some Thoughts...  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Christina, my name is Summer Wind and I' am pleased to review your message.

 Some Thoughts...  (E)
YOU ARE WHAT YOU BRING IN YOUR HEART
#1854496 by ChrisDaltro-Chasing Moonbeams


My first impression is the author has written a very powerful statement of wisdom and truth, with her own

perception of life. She compares individuals views to one another. She gives excellent examples of how someone

who has suffered illness with long treatments, how they should not focus on the suffering, but be thankful for the

healing. How superficial people can't be happy that they can see, but want different colored eyes. People that

have a job are not content, and want another job. Someone who wants a beautiful voice, and instead of a person

who has been ill and just wants a voice. She refers to wisdom as the upper and the lower. The upper wisdom I

relate to being spiritual and having gratitude for what you have. The lower wisdom being carnal and never being

satisfied with what you have and wanting more. The author has written a wake up call in her writing for all of us.

Especially in the time that we live, with such an affluent life style. Most of us want more than one television or

better houses, cars, clothes when we already have all that we need. Unfortunately our appetites have become

like ravenous vultures wanting to grab every material thing. If only we could remember that gratitude for what

we already have is the key to real happiness.

Summary: The author has written a very profound and wise message for all of us.
She has given examples of how different people view their own desires.
She also has given advice through her own perceptions of life.

This is only my opinion on how this message affected me personally

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello, Katz, my name is Summer Wind and I' am pleased to review short story.
Lying with Dragons: Ch 1  (13+)
Chapter 1 of the fantasy adventures of Zahilla and Allen.
#1847726 by Kaz


My first impression of your story is the title drew me in and I was captured to want to read the story.

From then, on I felt I was thrown into the story head on and could not make heads or tails who Zahilla was or

what he was. For me the story had no background or set up, just a bunch of characters running in fear in

every direction. Finally half way through the story I could piece some of it together. The little boy was a vampire

and the village people were afraid of him. The dragon came to find him and kill him for the king, so he wouldn't be

a threat to the kingdom, I felt I should not have to read almost to then end of the story to find out what the story is

about.

Summary: I thought the story had no direction in the beginning and finally I could figure out some of what the
author was writing about.
I thought the idea was great, but poorly executed.

This is only my opinion on how the story affected me.

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Review of One and the Same  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Dan, my name is Summer Wind, and I'am pleased to review your poetry.

One and the Same  (E)
Equanimity.
#1847670 by Dan Sturn
My first impression of your poetry is how you connect oneness with everything.

The problem for me is I' m not sure if you are writing about you, God, or consciousness. Because you write I am

the mountain in the rainstorm, I would assume that your are talking about creation, but I' am still not sure.

Now for the poetry itself. I thought the form was easy to read and was beautifully written, unfortunately I still am

at a loss as to what it meant. I suppose it means different things to different people and to me it was vague.

With that said, I still enjoyed reading it and thought your words were very picturesque.

Summary: I was not sure if the poem was about creation, you or consciousness energy.
I thought it was beautifully written, but thought it was vague.
I thought your technical form was easy tor read and had a nice flow.

This just my opinion on how the poem affected me personally.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Bear my name is Summer Wind, and I 'am pleased to review your short story.
      “Andrew's Treatment”  (E)
Freelance article written for Creative Writing Institute
#1846408 by BEAR


My first impression of this story is the dilemma Andrew finds himself in with his cancer treatment. He was so self

absorbed in self pity, that he forgot all the help, love, hope and kindness that he has received during his illness.

Just like the cancer, his negativity had eaten away any chances he had to be happy. He ignored a woman who

had always tried to cheer him up with a smile or a kind word. Until one day when he is focusing on all the negative

things in his life, he hears a cheerful voice, asking him to him to be her valentine. She presses a card with a heart

on it in his hand and it sparks a happy memory of his childhood, when he had an eye operation and his

classmates sent him a homemade card like the one the lady made and he starts to heal from that touch and those

memories. I think the story is an example of how people who already have a negative attitude, are blinded by self

pity and can't see all the positive help and support around them.

Summary: I felt that this short story has a lot of truth in it, as to how negative people will handle an illness, ignoring
the help or support of others, and focusing on their bitterness.
I thought the author wrote an important example, on how someone can help with a bad attitude with
persistence of kindness and positive words.

This is only my opinion on how this short story affected me.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Yellow Rose, my name is Summer Wind, and I am pleased to review your short story.

 No More Twilight 255 words  (E)
George and Bertha comedy
#1850920 by Yellow Rose


My first impression of this story is the hypocrisy of Bertha, whining and complaining to George, about the movie

being about an abusive relationship, when in fact she herself is a threatening abusive monster for a wive. She

continues to over power George by referring to him as a weasel, and belittling him by saying he can't even carry

a twelve pack soda around. She reminds him that she is 100 lbs more than he is and could wipe up the floor with

him. This story could be a true situation. Men are not the only abusers in a relationship. It is a fact the women

abuse men physically and mentally in marriages and relationships outside of marriage. This portrayal of George

in this story, the reader sees him as a small insignificant man that lives in fear of his wive's tantrums. He jumps

when she says jump and he lays down and he literally rolls over when she says to.

Summary: I found this story to be humorous in a sad way, because of the truth it expresses about woman and men
in abusive husband and wife relationships, or unmarried couples.
I thought the writer did a great job with her descriptions and interaction of the characters, so life like.
I could envision Bertha this huge woman with a big fat but, that if George breathed the wrong way, she
could sit on him and squash him like a bug.

This is just my opinion how the story affected me personally.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello Ham, my name is Summer Wind, and I am pleased to review your short story.
 Cinders of the Mind  (18+)
A dark twist on the original tale of Cinderella.
#1829393 by Ham on Rye


My first impression after reading your story, is how you led the reader by the nose to belief, that the story was

actually about a Cinderella type of story. Until I started to realize your bracketed comments were clues as to what

the story really was about: she could feel his breath (the smell of bourbon) The problem for me, is I thought it took

away from the flow of the story. I thought that you could have referenced her delusions differently instead of

making the reader stop and try to figure out what you were inferring. It was about half way through the story

that I new something was amiss with Cindy. But I found it to be confusing and difficult to read having to half

guess what you were writing about. The best part of the story is your descriptions of the characters and your

ability to show the story with your excellent interaction of dialogue between the characters. But I have to be honest

I don't want to stop and try to analyze a story while I'm reading it. I like to read the story through without it being

a challenge to my intelligence. Mystery is entirely different thing it weaves an air around the story the entices

the reader to read on with anticipation of unveiling something hidden in the story. I have to admit the second

part of the story made the first part credible, but I still have keep to my opinion that story was somewhat choppy

to read. I felt the story was written like a maze with instructions, because of all the bracketed comments.

Summary: I really did not know what I was reading about, if it was a dark Cinderella story, or a modern day story
with reference to Cinderella.
I thought your descriptions and character interaction were excellent.
I found the story frustrating to read, because I had to keep rereading it to try to understand what
it was about, and this took away from the flow and enjoyment of the story.

This is only my honest opinion on how the story affected me personally.

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Review of The Existence  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Christina, my name is Summer wind, and I' am pleased to review your short story.

The Existence  (ASR)
She held her breath for a while, waiting in the night’s stillness.
#1853541 by ChrisDaltro-Chasing Moonbeams
My first impression, of this story, is you take the reader and introduce them to a part of the world

that practices strange rituals for ridding of ghosts and spirits. The first part of the story Crystal is

waking up and feeling a thing hovering over her. She is terrified and she thinks that whatever it is

it wants to kill her. She calls her mother who is a practicing Voodoo spiritualist, who is very upset

that she didn't sweep the house from the lingering spirits. She gives Crystal a long list of items

she will need, from sea salt, to garlic, buckets, brooms candles rose petals and the Pemba. Her

mother and her go to work cleansing every spirit through all the rituals and elements.

With her mother's reassurance and beliefs she feels she has achieved removing the spirit, but

as she is relaxed and calm she closes the door and locks it. Then, she feels the spirits bony

hand on her forehead, and it speaks to her mocking her rituals and takes over her body pulling

her up into the air, as he whispers "You forgot the back door my precious."

Summary: I felt this author wrote a spell binding, suspenseful short story.
I thought the she used vivid descriptions and believable dialogue.
I have read many of this author's stories, and I would have to say this one stands out as one of the best
that she has written. The detail and the story line is incredible.

This only my opinion, to encourage the writer, on how the story affected me.

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Review of Valentine 07  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello bob cat, my name is Summer Wind and I am pleased to review your poem.

 Valentine 07  (E)
How do I love ==
#1199917 by bob cat


My first impression of your poem is your words convey your heart's deepest desire. In your words I see someone

who is making a statement or promise of what will follow, if the person accepts the proposal to be your Valentine.

The author has written a love poem of devotion and commitment such as these lines.

Know this thing and know it well,
My love for you always in my heart to dwell.: This is just a suggestion, but I thought this line could read like this
In my heart for you, my love will always dwell

The flow of the rhythmic words and rhyming arrangement add ease for the reader to read the poem.

The poem speaks of all the challenges, that a husband and wife face as they go through their lives together.

The words show wedded soul mates, who are bound the each other with love, no matter what comes their way.

In sight of God, in sight of man,
We stand together, go hand in hand
No matter the joy, no matter the woe,
Down life’s path, each step we’ll go.

Summary: The author has written a poem with a promise to be bound in eternal love with the one he asks to be
Valentine
The poem had a message faithfulness and devotion between two married people for forever
The rhyme and rhythmic flow were even and easy to read
I thought the author wrote a beautiful love poem.

This is only my opinion on how the poem affected me personally

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Itchy Water, my name is Summer Wind and I am pleased to review your lovely poem

Two Souls Sundered  (13+)
A free verse poem about the loss of a spouse. Rhyme: abca
#1844796 by Itchy Water~fictionandverse


What can I say, you have done it again, your poem is written with such passion and love as you create a beautiful

word portrait with a spiritual message. I know without a doubt that when I read something that you have written, it

almost always have a spiritual aspect to it.


These words of assurance for the spouse who is left behind

is going to move me emotionally. .
Together again we will reunite
in eternal glee our souls will embrace.
But for now, the days are dark and dim
until the day I share with you heaven's light."

I felt when I read your poem a peace that comes with knowing the one who holds you in his hand, in life and in

death. I like your poetry because it is never trite, it is always meaningful, and I enjoy reading it

Summary: I thought you wrote a lovely inspired poem on the death and assurance of being reunited with a
spouse. I also thought that your poetry has meaning and passion and is written from your heart.
I know that if I am going to read one of your poems that it will almost always touch on the spiritual
aspect of life.


This only my opinion of how the poem affects me personally

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Harry, my name is Summer Wind and I am pleased to review your free-style poem

 Sparrows of the Human World  (13+)
A free-verse poem about how sparrows are considered dispensable.
#1849432 by Harry


My first impression of your free-verse poem, is what a truth you're relating through your writing. People disregard

living breathing creatures as pests or being dispensable. The audacity, that parents would tell their children to

shoot sparrows, but never a blue jay, cardinal, robins or any other pretty song bird. This makes me upset. The

sparrow among others such as pigeons, crows and unattractive birds are considerate a nuisance. The poem tells

the unfortunate way people regard humans much the same way they regard the sparrows. A good example of this

is the people of Africa, we give billions of dollars to almost every country in the world, for development of countries

and help with Tsunami victims or military arms. Yet, millions of third-world children starve to death every year.

Who decides, who are the sparrows of mankind? The author has written a very sad poem giving the reader a

view of the reality of the way humans think, not only about sparrows that are birds, but about the sparrows of

humanity.


Summary:
This poem made me fell anger towards any parent that would teach their child to shoot a sparrow, but not shoot any beautiful song birds. I felt the poem related a very sad truth about the way about the way humanity regards people to disposable, as well as birds. I feel in my heart that all life should be reverenced and respected.
I thought the author wrote a very important truth, in a poem.


This is only my opinion of how this free-style poem affected me personally.

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