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The title is apt and the In & Out is about reflecting on a picture. I like the way you ask the readers what would they do if they were in the picture-revolution. Thanks for sharing!
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There are no suggestions. Well Done!
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
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The title is apt for the In & Out. I like your idea of asking the question; "If you had one wish, what would it be?" Thanks for sharing.
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I have one suggestion;
There is no explanation or description about the In & Out. Just the sub-heading has the thoughts about your In & Out. You could probably use some description along with some xml to spice-up the page.
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
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The title is apt and the In & Out is on "Apocalypse" theme. The picture is perfect for the theme. I like the organised explanations, rules and details. Very creative and interesting. Thanks for sharing.
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There are no suggestions. Well done!
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Hi 🌕 HuntersMoon! After reading "Admonitions" , I offer these comments as I am one of the judges for the contest "Invalid Item" .
I apologise for the late review. My computer was not working for 2 months. I got it fixed recently. Thanks for your patience.
This round, there is no prompt. But, the poem must be Nature inspired.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is apt and the poem has a good social message. My favorite lines are;
"We could pretend that all of this is really nothing new.
That change has happened many times and now the time is due."
These lines are so true. Everyone just pretends and no action is taken. In a way, all of us are selfish. we are not ready to take any responsibility.
This poem made me think, and I beleive this is the victory of the poem! Thanks for your thought-provoking words.
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I have no suggestions. Thanks for sharing.
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou,
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This round, there is no prompt. But, the poem must be Nature inspired.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The ironic title is apt for the poem. The poem talks about the negative side of Nature in a humorous way. I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing.
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There are no suggestions. Your poem is good.
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou,
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Hi Wyn - missing III! After reading "Dear God" , I offer you these comments: A proud member of Paper Dolls, Helping Hearts, Angel Army, Team India and Infinity Group.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is apt for the prayer song. The poem is neat and nice. I like the simple and short lines that every reader can relate to. My favorite line is;
"Just a sign to prove my faith,"
This line flows really smooth and is good to read aloud! Thanks for sharing.
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There are no suggestions. Your prayer is lovely!
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi ~WhoMe???~! After reading "Crimson Teardrops" , I offer you these comments: A proud member of Paper Dolls, Helping Hearts, Angel Army, Team India and Infinity Group.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is apt for the poem. The poem describes about child abuse. The lines are emotional and they give the mental-status of an abused child. Very touching! Thanks for sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
There are no suggestions. Your poem has a good social message.
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi ~WhoMe???~! After reading "Painted Pink" , I offer you these comments: A proud member of Paper Dolls, Helping Hearts, Angel Army, Team India and Infinity Group.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is interesting and inviting. The poem is cleverly woven to make the reader think. I enjoyed the end-twist! Beautiful and humorous. I could not stop laughing... Thanks for sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
There is one suggestion;
I am not an expert in punctuation, but somehow I felt an exclamation mark at the end of last line would be nice.
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi ~WhoMe???~! After reading "Tulips" , I offer you these comments: A proud member of Paper Dolls, Helping Hearts, Angel Army, Team India and Infinity Group.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is inviting and apt. This c-note verse is cute. The words have deep inner-message. In four lines you inspire the reader. I like the words "tulip parades". Beautiful expression of spring season. Thanks for sharing.
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There are no suggestions. Your poem is a tulip treat!
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi Daizy May! After reading "Like A Flower" , I offer you these comments: A proud member of Paper Dolls, Helping Hearts, Angel Army, Team India and Infinity Group.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is inviting and apt. The poem has strong philosophical message; "Love is the only thing that can help a person grow when all other doors are closed." I like your comparison of life with a rose. My favorite line is the refrain line;
"Like a flower, I'll wither and die."
This line makes the poem flow smoothly. Thanks for sharing.
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There are no suggestions. Your poem is inspiring.
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi Daizy May! After reading "Roses In Winter" , I offer you these comments: A proud member of Paper Dolls, Helping Hearts, Angel Army, Team India and Infinity Group.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is inviting and apt. The poem says that nothing is impossible. The words are positive and inspirational. I like the ways you use "Rose" in the poem. My favorite line is;
"I looked into the mirror,
And saw one looking back."
These line are truly inspiring! Thanks for sharing.
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There are no suggestions. Your poem is a beautiful rose!
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi Daizy May! After reading "I'm Special Too" , I offer you these comments: A proud member of Paper Dolls, Helping Hearts, Angel Army, Team India and Infinity Group.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is inviting and apt for the poem. This short poem reminds that everyone is special in a way. When a person realizes this truth, he overcome inferiority complex.
Nice thoughts! Thanks for sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
There are no suggestions. Your poem is lovely!
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi SHERRI GIBSON! After reading "A DISTANT MEMORY" , I offer you these comments: A proud member of Paper Dolls, Helping Hearts, Angel Army, Team India and Infinity Group.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is interesting and apt for the poem. The lines are deep and emotional. "Memories are not always good" is very true. But, bad memories mostly come with a lesson. It is wise to learn from the mistakes. I liked every line of the poem. Thanks for sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
There are no suggestions. Your poem is inspirational!
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi SHERRI GIBSON! After reading "THANKFUL" , I offer you these comments: A proud member of Paper Dolls, Helping Hearts, Angel Army, Team India and Infinity Group.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is apt for the content. The poem really flows well and is good to read. My favorite line is;
"Hearts and minds that fit together like hand to a glove,"
This is the most beautiful definition of God's creation. Your poem is a thanking prayer song. Thanks for sharing.
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There are no suggestions. Your work is philosophical.
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi SHERRI GIBSON! After reading "Follow Your Heart" , I offer you these comments: A proud member of Paper Dolls, Helping Hearts, Angel Army, Team India and Infinity Group.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is inviting and apt for the content. The poem is inspiring with positive thoughts. My favorite lines are;
"peace isn't an illusion that can't be found,
but stems from love that will grow."
This is very true! I like the way you explained peace and love with plant and stem. I strongly agree with the thought "Follow your Heart". When following the heart we travel through the path of truth. Though the path of truth is tough, the rewards are sweet!
Thanks for sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
There are no suggestions. Your poem is lovely!
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi Daizy May! After reading "Cats, Rats and Baseball Bats" , I offer you these comments: A proud member of Angel Army, Team India, and Infinity Group.
I am reviewing your poem as one of the judges of the contest "Nine, Nine, Nine!" . Thankyou for letting me comment on your work.
The contest requires you to write a story (not more than 2000 words) or poem (not more than 24 lines) on one of the following themes; Birthday, Celebration, Fun and enjoyment, Contests and games, Winning and losing. Your work must feature the number NINE in as many ways as possible. The more the number NINE features in the story/poem - not physically only, but even as a concept, the more are your chances of winning!
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is interesting and apt for the sweet poem. It talks about a baseball match among cats and rats. This is a cute children's poem! I like the attractive rhymes used. My favorite lines are;
"A nine-inning game was why they came.
One rat was lame, but played all the same."
The rhyming words; game, came, lame and same are perfect. These lines are fun! Thanks for sharing.
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The poem is about "game" as the contest requires. You have used "nine" 14 times. I am sure you would have had great fun composing the poem. My 4 year old son like the poem too!
I felt, the words "fault" and "adult" do not rhyme smoothly. Lovely Poem! All the best in the contest.
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Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi fyn! After reading "99 Bottles Later...." , I offer you these comments: A proud member of Angel Army, Team India, and Infinity Group.
I am reviewing your poem as one of the judges of the contest "Nine, Nine, Nine!" . Thankyou for letting me comment on your work.
The contest requires you to write a story (not more than 2000 words) or poem (not more than 24 lines) on one of the following themes; Birthday, Celebration, Fun and enjoyment, Contests and games, Winning and losing. Your work must feature the number NINE in as many ways as possible. The more the number NINE features in the story/poem - not physically only, but even as a concept, the more are your chances of winning!
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is interesting and apt. The poem is about a celebration. The lines are fun to read. It is more like a tongue twister. I enjoyed reading it. My favorite lines are;
"9 presents they brought, and 9 cakes too
on 9 party plates, each with 9 candles of blue."
These lines are are fun to read! I like the rhyming lines. I am sure it would make a great kid's poem. Thanks for sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
You have written the poem on the "celebration" theme. The contest requires you to use the number nine as many times as possible. You have used the number nine 39 times!
I feel, "street" and "each" do not rhyme smoothly. I have a suggestion; You could use "beach" instead.
"9 friends joined together at number 9, 9th Beach
Street, to celebrate 9th birthday with 9 sweets each!"
All The Best!
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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I am reviewing your poem as one of the judges of the contest "Nine, Nine, Nine!" . Thankyou for letting me comment on your work.
The contest requires you to write a story (not more than 2000 words) or poem (not more than 24 lines) on one of the following themes; Birthday, Celebration, Fun and enjoyment, Contests and games, Winning and losing. Your work must feature the number NINE in as many ways as possible. The more the number NINE features in the story/poem - not physically only, but even as a concept, the more are your chances of winning!
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is interesting and apt for the poem. The poem is about winning and losing in love. Your words are deep philosophical at the same time with rich imagery. There is a good message; If you lose passion then you will fall into a lonely life. Very true! My favorite lines are;
"Nine is the highest garden in heaven
and the deepest pit in hell."
These lines are great opening lines. I like the way you have centered it. Thanks for sharing!
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
Your poem is written on the "Winning and losing" theme. The contest requires you to use the number nine in as many ways as possible. You have used it two times. I have no suggestions. Your poem is beautiful. If not for the contest, I would have rated it 5. All the best in the contest!
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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The title is interesting and inviting. The poem is about love. The lines are delicate with deep meaning. My favorite lines are;
"Just don’t want to lose the hope,
for in your eyes, I see my fate."
These are beautiful lines that describe the intense love. Thanks for sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
There are no suggestions. Your poem is inspirational.
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi Lauriemariepea! After reading "Moving Target" , I offer you these comments: This review is on behalf of Helping Hearts. A proud member of Angel Army, Team India, and Infinity Group.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is interesting and apt for the content. The poem is about travelling alone as thoughts cover the mind. Your words are so lively that I could feel as if I was travelling on the road. My favorite lines are;
"Am I running to or from?"
This is a strong question. I feel, if we know the real answer for this question then we would attain peace. Thanks for sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
There are no suggestions. Your words are lovely!
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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The title is interesting and apt for the content. The poem is about "Broken Heart" with emotional words and smooth flow. My favorite lines are;
"There is no string to mend a broken heart,
No way to travel backwards, to begin at the start."
These lines are absolutely true. There is no way that a broken heart can be mended! Your words have deep philosophical meaning. Great thoughts! Thanks for sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
There are a couple of suggestions;
* I feel the first line of second stanza is a bit long. You could remove the words "Oh my..." to make the line-syllables match with the others.
* Also the second line of third stanza is little long. You could remove the word, "These..." to equalize the lines.
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi VictoriaMcCullough! After reading "May Angels Watch" , I offer you these comments: This review is on behalf of Helping Hearts. A proud member of Angel Army, Team India, and Infinity Group.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is inviting and apt for the content. The poem is a warm prayer. My favorite lines are;
"May Angels steer you into morning dew,
May they warm you and live in your heart,"
These lines are truly inspiring and positive.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
There are no suggestions. Your poem is a lovely.
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi Joy! After reading "Recipe For Happiness" , I offer you these comments: This review is on behalf of Helping Hearts.
First Impression/My Favorite:
This is an interesting and unique article. I like all the ingredients required for the recipe. Great thoughts! This is surely a delicious recipe. Thanks for sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
I have a suggestion;
I feel "Confidence" and "Positive Attitude" are also important ingredients of life's happiness.
Your article is inspirational.
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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Hi T.L.Finch! After reading "Santa" , I offer you these comments: This review is on behalf of Helping Hearts.
First Impression/My Favorite:
This is a nice haiku about Santa. I like the two different colors used in the poem and the way you bring in new year. Sweet words. Thanks for sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
There are no suggestions. Your poem is good.
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Hi aralls! After reading "Wishing On A Weed" , I offer you these comments: This review is on behalf of Helping Hearts.
First Impression/My Favorite:
The title is inviting and interesting. The poem is written in Musette form. The lines decribe the emotions that exist while wishing on a dandelion. My favorite lines are;
"Winds shift,
eyes look skyward,
hope lifts."
Most beautiful narration. Thanks for sharing.
Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar/Suggestions:
There are no suggestions. Your poem is inspirational.
These are just my views, so please make changes only if necessary.
Even without the changes your work is good.
Thankyou, Puja.
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