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Riot

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Review Style

My reviews typically cover: initial responses, technicalities and mechanics, favorite parts, areas of improvement, and overall impression.

I'm good at...

Honesty, and finding what works versus what doesn't work. I will never give you a rating I don't think your work deserves. I am also particularly good at spotting grammatical errors and typos.

Favorite Genres

Philosophy, Steampunk, Horror, Dark, Emotional, Science Fiction, Technology, and Political Science. I'm sure there are more that I'm missing.

Least Favorite Genres

Romance, Western, Religious, and anything froufrou.

I will not review...

Chapters and Novels, unless arrangements are made prior.

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#3219613

Review of Mara's Musings

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A serious writer is not to be confounded with a solemn writer. A serious writer may be a hawk or a buzzard or even a popinjay, but a solemn writer is always a bloody owl.

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Hello there, Mara ♣ McBain !

I am reviewing "Mara's Musings "

- Below are my thoughts.

Firstly, I just want to say, that I'd like you to post more frequently! I know that last time you posted was of joyous occasion (finishing Nano) but even still, reading through your past entries it's clear that you're a very talented writer. Even if it is "just" posting about your daily life endeavors.

I really love the images that you've used in this journal. The angel in black and white at the very top speaks volumes and I think that it's very important to personal things of this nature, which it seems you have.

I like how you update about everything. I saw one post a few down that was a simple but thought provoking quote.

Overall, really great blog! As I said before, I wish you'd update it more. I'll have to take a peek in on this from time to time and see what all you've added!

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Keep Writing!
Riot

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#3216262

Review of Fire Flies

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Rated: E

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Hello again, Lupus . You have recently submitted your item "Fire Flies" into "Invalid Item" . I have been asked by stacylynn71 to help judge this round. Below is my review of your submission.

The Contest Rules

Only newbies may enter this contest. A newbie is defined as somebody who is 60 days old or less at the time of their submission. All entries must be poetry and cannot exceed 40 lines. Only two entries are allowed per person, per round and in order to qualify the item submitted must not have a previously awarded awardicon. Furthermore, the deadline must be met and only submissions submitted in bItem format will be considered.

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This short poem is a very good insight about one's possible journey to the next life. I found this poem to be very thought provoking in its own rights. The two stanzas, in my opinion, held enough context and excellent imagery to convey its overall meaning. Excellent job!

When reading this outloud, the last two lines to each stanza seem to be rhymed. It could be coincidence that the last two were, but having/passing feel close in nature. Because most of this seems free-verse, I don't think there's a lot of emphasis needed on making these exact rhymes.

To me, High does not need it's capitalization. Instead, I think that the beginning of each line should hold true to its needed capitalization based on the flow of the poem and its grammar. In poetry, it's not always necessary to punctuate the ends of lines or capitalize the beginnings, but in my opinion if you do one or the other you should take note of how you do it. For example, in the first two lines, you end line one with a comma and lead line two into the poem as part of its sentence, so I don't believe that "They" needs capitalization. Because you end line two in a period, line three should naturally be capitalized and so forth.

My only other thought would be to have the title be one word: Fireflies instead of two.

Overall, I thought this was an inspirational poem that held true to it's brief description. I think this is an excellent write that was very thought provoking and profound.

Write On!
Riot

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#3216260

Review of We are Angels

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Rated: E

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Hello there, Lupus . You have recently submitted your item "We are Angels" into "Invalid Item" . I have been asked by stacylynn71 to help judge this round. Below is my review of your submission.

The Contest Rules

Only newbies may enter this contest. A newbie is defined as somebody who is 60 days old or less at the time of their submission. All entries must be poetry and cannot exceed 40 lines. Only two entries are allowed per person, per round and in order to qualify the item submitted must not have a previously awarded awardicon. Furthermore, the deadline must be met and only submissions submitted in bItem format will be considered.

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I think that this is a very sweet poem about one person's view of the human spirit as a whole. How, as it so often is, heroes are in our daily lives, walking around in average lives making a difference in the world. It's such a shame that these wonders are taken for granted.

I think that this poem would be better presented in two or three shorter stanzas. The first five lines flow very smoothly, with a bit of a rhyme in there with poor/door. As I read on, I expected there to be another rhyme after off. Maybe what you could do, is add in a rhyming line with that one and have the last stanza be the couplet that it is.

Overall, I think this was a really great poem that everyone should read. Don't take the Angels around you and the Angel inside you for granted any longer. Excellent write.

Write On!
Riot

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#3216250

Review of Kindness

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Rated: E

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Hello there, awordqueen . You have recently submitted your item "Kindness" into "Invalid Item" . I have been asked by stacylynn71 to help judge this round. Below is my review of your submission.

The Contest Rules

Only newbies may enter this contest. A newbie is defined as somebody who is 60 days old or less at the time of their submission. All entries must be poetry and cannot exceed 40 lines. Only two entries are allowed per person, per round and in order to qualify the item submitted must not have a previously awarded awardicon. Furthermore, the deadline must be met and only submissions submitted in bItem format will be considered.

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I found this poem to be so lovely. I had to read it several times before I could snap my brain back into my reality. To me, I found this poem to be a wonderful read and true to its subject. I think that you have put a lot of time, effort and thought into this. I don't know if this is a personal experience, but part of me feels as if it is because of the way it was written. I think this is a very positive thing for your poem and something that a lot of poets strive to accomplish. For that, great job!

The way you wrote this had a distinct structure to it. Each of your stanzas began with a couplet and ended with a standalone line. To break down your poem for you, your syallabic count was as follows:

Stanza 1: 5/5/10
Stanza 2: 5/5/8
Stanza 3: 5/5/8
Stanza 4: 6/5/7
Stanza 5: 6/6/6
Stanza 6: 6/5/9

I point the syllables out to you, because while they don't always matter and are usually there out of personal preference, I feel that the beginning stanzas which were almost exactly the same flowed best from the tongue. I personally find that taking away syllables in a poem is often easier than adding them, because there are many "filler" words that we typically use that aren't always needed in poetry.

For your poem, I personally like the 5/5/8 method you used in Stanza Two and Stanza Three.

One other thing I'd like to point out, is that there are two places where your true rhymes are slightly off.

1. desires/fires - This is actually a real rhyme but the reason I point it out is because all of your other couplets match in syllabic count. Because it's in Stanza Three, you could fix this by adding another word before it or by chosing another word that has the same meaning.

2. silence/kindness - Not a true match, but not all that distracting from the poem.

Overall, I felt this definitely a read-worthy piece that deserves recognition for what it is. Thank you for sharing it with us on the site, it's clear that you are a true poet at heart.

Write On!
Riot

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#3214766

Review of Grow your manhood here?

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Rated: 18+

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Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.

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Heyas, Just call me Omni - I decided to peek through your port some more this morning, and I came across a nook of a folder with a single item in it. Below are my thoughts on your comical poem, "Grow your manhood here? " .

Firstly, I want to say that you have a nice use of italics here! I think that a lot of times when people do poetry, they forget the many different ways you can present your poem. What I like best about this, is how you seemingly tell a story in a commercial style setting. I think I can safely say, that I have never seen a poem like this before!

Overall, I found this to be a very humorous read and worthy of it's second place win in the contest it was submitted into. (Maybe more, but I haven't read the first place winner.

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Aside from being in the category "Erotica" (which I'm not sure about) - I think that this was a well written poem that made me chuckle outloud. Well done!

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Keep Writing!
Riot

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#3214761

Review of The Lost Journeys

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Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia.

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Heyas, once again, Euclid79 ! I am reviewing "The Lost Journeys" - Below are my thoughts on your work.

This poem reminds me a lot of those that contemplate the past. The "what if's" that could have been, the things that never were. In the opening paragraph, I'm made to contemplate. I think this is very good, because it's only usually after a poem is complete that I really sit and feel the full effects of it. I was pleasantly surprised.

I feel like there was supposed to be something "more" to this poem. I can't help but feel that Held her gaze a little longer... line was intended to be the centerpiece of the poem - and maybe it was. However, that being said, I found it remarkably insightful. The ending wraps around like the beginning, referring to the reminder of what may have been.

Overall, I think this was a pretty good poem. Thank you for sharing it!

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Keep Writing!
Riot

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#3214753

Review of Ramblings of a Crazy Man

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Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia.

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Hey again, Euclid79 ! While browsing your port I came across an older entry of yours, called "Ramblings of a Crazy Man" .

Firstly, I just want to say that I'll agree with the "Nonsense" category that you've put on this poem!

At first when I read this through, I was trying to think of analogies that would fit the tree growing out of the writer's ear. Unfortunately, I was unable to. I think that it was intentionally written this way, to be a silly and comical aspect of the story. In fact, it really reminded me a lot of Dr. Seuess. I liked the story of the little ant. I think that you incorperated a vital and important message into that, hidden away by the silliness, that's very true.

Overall, this was a very silly and nonsense-riddled poem (as stated in the genres) but amidst the perplextion, it did make me smile. Thank you for sharing it with us!

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Keep Writing!
Riot

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#3214738

Review of Sanctuary

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Rated: E

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Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia.

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Hello there, Euclid79 !

I am reviewing "Sanctuary"

- Below are my thoughts on your work.

I think this is a very good couplet. Not only have you followed true rhymes to each stanza, but you've also matched them up with their syllabic count spot on. As far as patterns and structures go, I did notice that in stanzas 2, 4, 6, 8 the lines start with the same two words. I think this is very clever and well thought out!

What I also like about your poem is that the previous stanza is a buildup to the next. Sometimes with poetry, even structured poetry, there is not a real set up, just flow from line to line. In your poem, I saw a lot more.

Overall, I thought this was a very good read. It gave me a lot to think about, something to ponder over my morning coffee. That is, I suppose, the sanctuary of my mind. Thank you for sharing.

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Keep Writing!
Riot

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#3212717

Review of The Write Place

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Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.

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Heyas, Just call me Omni !

I am reviewing "The Write Place"

- Your guide to everything in your folder.

I was looking through your port, and saw under your guest book that you have a main folder to all the stuff in your port. When I clicked on it, I was greeted with an asthetically appealing banner to "The Write Stuff" and a welcome message.

I think that this folder is well organized and easy to navigate. The added colors and buttons make everything on your page pop out. I think it's a really good idea how you have all your activities listed at the top in one easy to navigate fashion. I also like how your folders are organized.

Overall, I think you've done a pretty good job at personalizing your port and I found it very inviting to those that may navigate it.

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Keep Writing!
Riot

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#3212204

Review of Cold Torture

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Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia.

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Hello again, noellesce!

I am reviewing "Cold Torture"

- Below are my thoughts on your work.

All I can say is, "Yikes!" - I can definitely see how this won honorable mention in the Writer's Cramp for worst physical pain a character can experience. When I first started reading it, I had no idea where this story was going. Then, look out! There it was.

I really thought this was well written. The dialogue on the beginning, along with the build up from her best friend Kelly, really added to the story and helped me to sympathise with Francine, the main character. While I was suprised at the means of death for her husband, I still feel you had a lot of really good foreshadowing and prefigure. You introduced the murder weapons very early on and tied them in very nicely with the story. (Well, as nicely as you can considering she murdered him, heh.)

Overall, this was a good read. While it's rather... dark and kind of gave me the shivers, I found it to be well written and executed well. I couldn't find any flaws or errors in the entire document, though I do wonder a little bit if the phone conversation in the beginning should be split into more paragraphs. Keep up the excellent work!

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Keep Writing!
Riot

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#3211499

Review of Poetic Flow

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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piewhackett1,

Firstly, I'd like to say that I think it's wonderful that you've mastered such an art with putting words together, on a poem that's about poetry and flow. I really thought that it was a good read, however I did notice that there were a few parts that were very similar and repeatative. For instance, in Stanza Two, Line 1, You say The stanzas contain feelings from the heart and then in Stanza Three, Line 1, you say Each line is a part of feelings in the heart - While I appreciate the sentiments of both lines, I would suggest perhaps changing one of them to vary a little bit more, yet keep the same sentiments.

Overall, I felt this was a good and worthy read. I share your opinions on everything you've said. Excellent job.

Riot

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#3211497

Review of Scream!

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Rated: 18+

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StaiNed-House Targaryen

,

As you probably know, I am a big fan of darker poetry and writing. Not because I am a "dark" person myself, but because I can appreciate the value of purging emotions and those that recognize that we all have feelings of insecurities, hurt, and yearnings. I couldn't help but thinking, while reading this poem, that it almost sounds lyrical. I think that the elipses (which, in my opinion, is good at three dots) and the harsh breaks, along with the emphasized text, would really make a strong part if this were a song.

However, being that it is not a song, I think it is still a very good poem, especially for a free-verse. I didn't have any problems reading this as far as flow or rhythm was concerned. I have a hard time saying what my favorite part of this is, because it's all very good in its own right. However, the line I scream, shriek, till my lungs bleed really struck me as I read through this. I can only remember one time where I ever screamed so loud it felt like this.

Overall, I think this was executed really well. As an author, you successfully put me in a mind set of times where I myself have felt like this. It's not a comfortable place to be in, but I'm very impressed that you were able to evoke such an emotion from me.

Riot

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#3207308

Review of The Ouija

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Rated: 13+

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I am a Helping Hearts reviewer. Somebody has generously gifted you some reviews, which I'll be happily filling for you.

🌕 HuntersMoon , heyas!

I think I can honestly say that I've never seen a poem of this nature, executed so well. When I saw the image at the top (which is very fitting by the way) I had no idea that this would be such a potent political poem.

To me, that was the best part about this entire poem - the fact that you actually made this into a rhyming poem, with the theme of Halloween and fright, but also pegged the economic crises so well. My favorite stanza would have to be six and seven, but I did find the introduction to be a very good tease to what this poem was all about.

Overall, I think this is simply wonderful.

Riot
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#3207306

Review of Adult

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Rated: 18+

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I am a Helping Hearts reviewer. Somebody has generously gifted you some reviews, which I'll be happily filling for you.

🌕 HuntersMoon , heyas again!

One of the things I'm supposed to do, in filling this package for you, is to award a pink awardicon to the item that I like best. I started with the main part of your port, but realized most of the more popular work by you has already been deservingly awarded. So I found the first folder without an awardicon and clicked.

As I browsed through this port, I skimmed through some of the items inside. All I have to say is wow! I may need a cold shower.

Therefore, it's in this reviewer's humble opinion, that this is one of my favorite things from you. Not only are you graced with writing this topic well, but you have also had a lot of experience with it given the quantity in this folder.

Thank you for sharing!

Riot
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#3207243

Review of WDC Mom

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Rated: E

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Ida_Matilda_Wright Help

,

When I came into your port, I stumbled across this lovely poem. I'll be honest in that the bright pink is a bit hard to read, but it wasn't so bad that it detracted from anything. I was interested in reading this poem because of your introduction that stated it was a tribute to your internet mother.

I think the introduction stanza to your poem is very well posed in that you ask the reader what a mother is. As I read what your feelings were on the matter, I agreed. I have known people like this one the site. The first two that come to my mind: SHERRI GIBSON

and GabriellaR45

... who really fit into the category of caring and loving people you mention here.

Overall, I think this is an excellent poem. I think the ending was really strong and gave closure to everything you had to say, on a large up-note.

Happy WdC Account Anniversary from all of us at "Anniversary Reviews"

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#3207233

Review of Just Take The Time

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Rated: E

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Daizy May

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I found this to be a very simple, yet touching poem, perfect for the upcoming holidays. The fact that you did not clutter this with large and fanciful words, in my opinion, makes it better. I think that the title is very appropriate, as it is also the last line of the poem and the overall message of it. I have struggled in the past to see the optimistic parts of life - and I think you pegged them very well here. It's always a pleasure to read you.

Riot

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#3206783

Review of Tulips

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Rated: E

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Heya ~WhoMe???~

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Just peeking in on your poem "Tulips"

from Simply Positive.

I really like this short poem that you've written. I like how it transitions through a season, from winter to spring. In my mind I imagine an artist focusing on this transition with the last line.

Awesome job!

Riot

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#3206619

Review of White Case Memorial

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Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia.

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kiyasama,

I am reviewing "White Case Memorial"

- I am deeply saddened by this forum, but also highly inspired at the caring nature of those that helped create it.

When I first joined this site, I had little idea of how much I would become involved in it. As I grew to love it more and more, I realized what a really poignant part it played in my life. I suppose I never really thought anything happened to somebody's port when they passed on, until I joined a group that "rated" white-cases work.

Recently, a chat-friend passed away. She was known as RachelD on the site. Her portfolio no longer exists per her request. However, I remember when she passed away (just recently) and I remember other friends of mine who have been very close to people on this site who have passed. Reading through this forum, there are a lot of inspirational people no longer with us.

I can think of no other way to be more honorable and respectful than this forum you have created. It's from the bottom of my heart when I say that this is extremely touching.

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Riot

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#3204902

Review of Me and My Worlds

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Hey there, Dr Matticakes Myra

!

I was browsing through your port and saw that your Anniversary was November 8th. Sorry I missed it! Seven years, wow! That's a really long time.

I really like this port and how you've arranged and themed it. The only thing I did notice though, was there's a {size} tag at the very end. I don't know if it's spaced improperly, or if you may have added an extra bracket somehow.

As for the folders inside, I think they're neatly organized. I took a quick peek at what was inside and so far I like what I see very much. Great job!

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

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#3203162

Review of Pink

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Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before.

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So glad I checked this!

I was scouring your port to try and find something I hadn't seen before. Then I came across this folder. When I opened it I was surprised to see not one, or two, but three cNote shops. Full, too! The "You Did Well" note in "A Spoonful Of Care" is my favorite, I think. I have a thing for rainbows.

One of the things I noticed is that the introductions to your shops are decked out nearly as much as your forums and groups are! This kinda made me sad, because I was expected to be bombarded with pleasant font colors. I wasn't too disappointed though, because the images were all outstanding. I can see you're very big into anime!

Overall, I think these are some really beautiful and affordable cNotes. I think if you were to put an explanation of how they work at the top, they would be just about perfect!

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Riot

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#3203139

Review of Blue

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Rated: 13+

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Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before.

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Hello there, again, mARi☠StressedAtWork !

I really like how you've decorated this folder. The light blue and violet rotating letters really brings out the title and the color scheme is attractive to the eyes. The way you have your folder split up is in an easy to follow and organized fashion. The fact that you mix "impact" font with regular fonts for the links also brings out the titles more.

Overall, I think this is an excellent folder of work. I know that I have had a great time reading your work from this folder. Maybe on another glance I'll find something else I can read! Rest assured it isn't for lack of content, but rather I've rated so much from you already.

In the meantime, keep up the great work and know that you have special fans from all of us at Ink Blot authors.

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Riot

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Review of Polynesia Kiss

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Rated: E

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This poem is riddled with visual delight! I think you did a very good job. I did get stuck at one part though, in the very first line. I'm not sure what 'amberris' is. The mysterious blossom unfolding in the sudden dawn... is my favorite by far. In stanza three I smile, because you finally introduce her by something I can depict in my head. I found the second to last stanza to be extremely well written, even though it is a tiny bit longer than the rest. Wrapping it up with the two line ending, I smile. Great poem!

Riot

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Review of Panic Switch Misery

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Rated: 13+

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The whole twins aspect of this eerily reminds me of The Shining for some reason. I don't think it's meant to, but that's what popped into my head.

It's mentioned a lot that the person going through this doesn't really believe he's in Hell. (I think you should capitalize it, since it's being made a reality.)

Near the end I liked how you described things. Especially when you were referring to Lucifer pulling the strings. "Saw" should be capitalized though, since it's a movie title.

Overall, I felt this was pretty decent. I love the creepy vibes from it!

Riot

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Review of Muse

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Rated: 18+

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I found this short story to be wonderfully well written and articulate. I'm extremely envious of the talented way you have strung some of these words together.

Some of my favorites:

Stepping to the New Releases, his cold blue eyes raked over the holiday glut with thinly veiled revulsion.

Nibbling on a saucer-sized sugar cookie, Jess surreptitiously surveyed the store.

The menace in his baritone and icy certainty of his gaze made Jess backpedal, masking her retreat by turning to seek the warmth of the fire.

The ending of this was absolutely perfect with the quote.

Keep up the excellent work! I can offer no improvements that would do this piece any justice.

Riot

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Review of SIR TOM THUMBE

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Rated: 13+

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Hey there Joy!

I really enjoyed this short story. The ending was really spectacular. I don't think you could've picked a better way to end it. The poem at the end was very clever and witty in a light hearted way.

I love the overall concept of the story, but I did feel like the ending was a bit "rushed" - maybe it was intended to be this way. There was a lot of setup and what have you in the clinic, but the end seemed like a lot of really quick blurbs on what he did before he died. Y'know?

Overall, I really enjoyed this a lot. Thank you so much for sharing it with us.

Riot