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I tend to review using a format that I can comment on plot, characters, setting, atmosphere and dialogue. I also try to point out typos/errors and that sort of thing. This style may change depending on the item!
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I'm better with fiction than anything else. I might be able to have a go at poetry but please don't expect too much!
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Horror, dark, suspense, thriller, mystery. However, I'm open minded and will read most genres.
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Statics - fiction.
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Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Reading*Initial hook: I'm here with a review because you were locked up in "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.!

*Pencil*Storyline: This tells the story of Alisa who, after getting in from work and spending some time chatting to Larry online, realises that she's been a bit silly in what she told him and starts to see things materialise in the shadows. Determined not to face another attack she takes the matter into her own hands.

*People*Characters: Alisa is the main character in this piece and do feel incredibly sorry for her. At the beginning I was wondering why she was checking the locks over and over but after the revelation from the police it all made sense. She must have been going through hell and was doing really well and moving on with her life, or trying to.

*Home*Setting: This takes place in Alisa's home.




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Review of Night Terrors!  Open in new Window.
Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Checkg*What I liked:

I always think 55 word challenges are difficult so I like both reading and writing them! I really enjoyed reading this piece. I think it captures the terror of a child at night really well, it's so atmospheric *Smile* Thanks for sharing this!

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Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Checkg*What I liked:

I love writing vignettes and feel that I'm full of them sometimes (WdC helped me realise what they actually were). I really liked this one, I think it's a brilliant description of the man within. It captures his essence and his personality brilliantly and really makes me want to know him too!

Thank you for sharing this with us!


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Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Reading*Initial hook: I'm here with a review of this piece for A Contest of Firsts!


*Checkg*What I liked:

Hey Megan, thanks for taking the time to write this piece and enter my contest, it's much appreciated *Smile* This is a really wonderful story that tells the reader about your first memorable Christmas and you tell us exactly why. Perhaps this Christmas kindled your love for dolls? You seemed like such a sweet child and I love how innocent you were about missing Santa!

Thanks for sharing this with us *Smile*


*Cut**Paste*A few suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*An older girl, Debbie who was fourteen who was a friend of mine bought over her make up kit she had got for Christmas.
*BulletG*An older girl, Debbie who was fourteen who was a friend of mine brought over her make up kit she had got for Christmas.



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Review of Madeline  Open in new Window.
Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Reading*Initial hook: I'm here with a review of this piece for A Contest of Firsts!


*Checkg*What I liked:

Aw Elena, this is such a sad story! The first part of it really hooked me in. I love that your mum made up clues and had you search the house. I think that part is really exciting and intriguing, especially for kids. I can imagine that would have been a blast. And then the part where you found the kitten and named her was brilliant, you really showed me how happy you guys were *Smile*

However, the story took a turn for the worst and poor Madeline passed away in 2003. This part really moved me and I felt my eyes sting, I'm sorry that you had to go through this and lose the cat who was your Christmas miracle.

Thank you so much for sharing this with us *Smile*


*Cut**Paste*A few suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*“Let them be surprised.

This just needs quotation marks at the end.

*BulletG*“Let them be surprised."


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Review of Silent Witness  Open in new Window.
Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Checkg*What I liked:

Hey when I spotted this piece I knew I wanted to read it. The title was intriguing then when I found it was told through the perspective of a mirror, I couldn't resist. I think it's a really interesting piece, all the more so because we see the girl grow from being a baby to the seventeen year old woman she is. The mirror sees her for what she is, nothing is hidden and there is no judgement *Smile* It's a very perceptive and warm mirror, I like it! But honestly, this is a well thought out piece!


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Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Reading*Initial hook: I'm here with a review because you were jailed in "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.!

*Pencil*Storyline: This tells the story of Jenna's wedding, the day that is supposed to be the happiest of her life, but she is in fact surrounded by a swarm of bridesmaids she hardly knows, a feeling of isolation deep within. She knows she's not doing the right thing for her and when her ex, Kevin, stops by and asks her to change her mind, she considers this before telling him to leave. The ending was a little bit of a surprise for me. I thought that she'd leave with Kevin, forfeiting the big wedding she didn't want anyway for the love of her life, but then we find out why she couldn't.

I like that the ending of this piece was unpredictable because yes, although you are supposed to marry for love and your wedding day is supposed to be your happiest, there's nothing more genuine than a mother's love.

*People*Characters: Jenna is the main character in this piece and we watch the struggle in her mind throughout as she marries Jim, though she knows he is not the love of her life. I have to say she is a truly inspirational woman and at the end, when I realised what she'd done, I was happy knowing that she would love the child as much as, or even more than, any mother would.

*Home*Setting: This takes place at Jenna's wedding day on a snowy Winter's day.

*Ghost*Atmosphere/tone: This piece was full of passion and sadness.




*Cut**Paste*A few suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*Where was this 3 years ago?”

Usually anything numerical 100 and below should be written out in full:

*BulletG*Where was this three years ago?”

*BulletB*and though she tried not to she lent into his touch.

For me, I'm not sure about the word 'lent'. I think it should be 'leaned'.

*BulletB*and though she tried not to she leaned into his touch.

*BulletR*Dropping the jacket in the snow she turned her back on him escaping back to the cacophony that had driven her unknowingly into his arms.

Here you use the word 'back' twice. I would maybe try something else to avoid repetition:

*BulletR*Dropping the jacket in the snow she turned her back on him, escaping to the cacophony that had driven her unknowingly into his arms.

*BulletV*Kevin’s words echoed in her mind “None of this is you!”

I think this could use a comma:

*BulletV*Kevin’s words echoed in her mind, “None of this is you!”

*Bullet*He would never of understood that she was bearing Jim's baby.

I think here the word 'of' should be changed to 'have'. I think that while it's fine when talking it's a little informal when written down:

*Bullet*He would never have understood that she was bearing Jim's baby.





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Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Checkg*What I liked:

Okay, when I was looking for something in your port and stumbled across this piece, I couldn't help but open it! Lol. I have to say it was a highly amusing read and something that I could imagine would happen with fair frequency on a submarine full of men! I like the way you tell it too and I can imagine just how it went down *Smile*

Thanks for sharing!


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Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Checkg*What I liked:

Hey I thought I'd stop by and review your charity raffle because I've seen it many times and just not had the chance! I think you've got a really unique idea for a raffle here because although it functions as a raffle would, you offer prizes of reviews and review packages and images as prizes rather than just the gps. I think it's a nice touch and makes it unique *Smile*

The page is well laid out, the colours work well together and the banner is lovely! You make the rules really clear and invite people to try their luck! It's got a catchy title too!


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Review of Sherri's Web page  Open in new Window.
Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Checkg*What I liked:

Hey Sherri, I thought I'd come check out your website and I found it a delightful treat! The whole thing is so prettily made up *Smile* The background of flashing stars in amazing and really sets the tone of the whole thing, as well as the fairies dotted here and there *Smile* I like the way that you introduce yourself, what matters to you and parts of your personal life before going on to list some of your published works and where they're available.

I think everybody's website is different for them but you've done a great job with this and I hope I can build my web designing skills to this level!


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Review of Empty Shell  Open in new Window.
Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Checkg*What I liked:

This is a really neat, dark sig and I have to say I'm a little jealous. The whole thing is fantastic, the colours work well together, the silhouette of the fairy and the words beside it. I can only hope that things are okay for you *Smile*

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Review of Megan's Ballroom  Open in new Window.
Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Checkg*What I liked:

Hey Megan *Smile* I spotted this forum in your port and decided to check it out. I have to say I've not seen it before but I think it's a great idea. An open forum where people can drop by and share whatever they want from their rant of the day to a new item they'd like some reviews on *Smile* Great idea!


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Review of Julian's Secret  Open in new Window.
Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Reading*Initial hook: I'm here with a review since you were jailed in "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.!

*Pencil*Storyline: When I saw this and it was likened to Alice in Wonderland, I couldn't resist. It's one of my favourites! I really like this one too. It tells the story of a young boy, Julian, who can't resist the curiosity he feels when discovering a small door in the base of a tree, what twelve year old boy could? So he goe sto investigate and plunges into the world of Ecila who takes him to meet the Queen who is very angry indeed...

I didn't see that ending coming either! I thought it was real. So you caught me with that one, well done *Smile*

*People*Characters: Julian is the main character in this piece. He's a curious young boy who wants nothing more than to find out what the door in the base of the tree is. I love him for his bravery and the courage he shows in facing the queen.

I have to say, I love that his little sister is called Dinah (nice touch) and it was also a nice touch to have Alice's name in there, even if it was spelled backwards (which I didn't twig onto!)

*Home*Setting: This takes place in wonderland and it's just as cool and crazy as I remember it!

*Ghost*Atmosphere/tone: Fun and adventure!




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Review of All Hallows Eve  Open in new Window.
Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
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*Reading*Initial hook: I'm here with a review since you were jailed in "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.!

*Pencil*Storyline: This story tells of a young woman who comes back to visit her parents on All Hallows Eve despite the fact that she passed away several years ago, her spirit can't seem to rest.

For me, while this piece was interesting, I felt like the narrative held me at a distance. I wasn't able to get to know the characters well and rather than being there and understanding the scene, I saw it as if I was looking in the window.

*People*Characters: As I mentioned above, I felt a little detached from this piece and I think perhaps the characters had a lot to do with that. You tend to refer to each of the characters as 'the old man' or the 'young woman' which doesn't sit well with me. It left me wondering who each of them were and getting confused in places. I think giving them all names earlier in this piece would help.

*Home*Setting: This takes place in the family home, a formal place for dinner.

*Ghost*Atmosphere/tone: This piece was a little creepy but mostly sad, knowing that the daughter cannot stop visiting.




*Cut**Paste*A few suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*The young woman run to them,

I think this should be 'ran'

*BulletG*The young woman ran to them,

*BulletB*The middle aged man kissed her cheek and reached to huge his father.
*BulletB*The middle aged man kissed her cheek and reached to hug his father.




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Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Reading*Initial hook: Hey I'm here with a review as part of the Nuclear package that was gifted by your Secret Santa! I picked this piece because the title and description intrigued me.


*Checkg*What I liked:

This piece tells of your love for your dolls; while other people were learning you were more interested in those dolls, as is natural. However, you found a way to compromise and enjoy doing both by teaching your dolls. I'm so glad you found that and that it helped you grow academically.

I also want to say that children can be cruel and I'm so sorry for the hurt you had to go through, but I know that you're a wonderful person and that's all that matters *Smile* Stay strong and take care *Heart*


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Review of TEENAGE MOTHER  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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*Pencil*Storyline: This short story is a little sad piece about a young mother who can't deal with her new baby and the social services turn up.

I think you've done well with the word limit but it does leave some questions for me, like who called the social services and why.

*People*Characters: The young mother and her mother are the main characters in this piece. It seems the teenage mother is struggling to adapt to her new life as a mother and is feeling pressure from her own mother. I did wonder about the relationship between the two.

*Home*Setting: I think this piece is set in the mother's house.

*Ghost*Atmosphere/tone: This piece made me feel really sad for the young woman. I can imagine it would be a difficult life to live.


*Cut**Paste*A few suggestions I had:

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*BulletG*The baby cried. Mommy looks down at her baby, confused.

In this line we switch between past and present tense. I would try to stick to one or the other. I would write:

*BulletG*The baby cried. Mommy looked down at her baby, confused.





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Review by blue jellybaby Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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*Checkg*What I liked:

Hey MEgan, when I spotted this piece I couldn't resist stopping by! I think it's a really neat idea and lets people come together to share their favourite hobbies and share and swap ideas. I really love that *Smile* The description you give at the beginning of the forum tells us what hobbies you have and what you love collecting and I have to say you have such an extensive love of different things and different activities! I love it *Smile* Thanks for sharing this with us!

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Review of Nightmare Circus  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Reading*Initial hook: I'm here with a review because you were jailed in the "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.!

*Pencil*Storyline: This tells the story of Sammy, a young boy who is visited by the Nightmare Circus one night as it pitches the tent on an empty field outside of his home. He is compelled but scared but after being persuaded by an odd looking clown he allows himself to be led inside. Things go from bad to worse as he is eventually recruited and has to face the same torment he had to watch before...

*People*Characters: Sam is the main character in this piece. He's a young boy, possibly about twelve, who is lured by the circus. He goes despite the fear he feels which shows he's either brave or silly! Hehe. He's a well rounded character and the way you write made me root for him.

*Home*Setting: This takes place in the Nightmare Circus. You set the scene well *Smile*

*Ghost*Atmosphere/tone: This piece was really tense throughout, it kept me hooked!




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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Checkg*What I liked:

I don't often read poetry but when I spotted this piece I couldn't help but open it and take a peek and I'm really glad I did *Smile* This is a really sweet piece of poetry that shares the light of your life with the community. This is about the emotions you had when she was born and when she grew. There is a strong sense of love and protection in this and it comes across clearly.


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Review of Motherhood  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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*Reading*Initial hook: I'm here with a review since you were locked up in "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.!

*Pencil*Storyline: This was a really well written piece that gives the reader a brief glimpse into the life of a parent. I think you did a fantastic job of showing here and really take the reader through that. I'm not a parent so I can't comment on that side of things but I can understand how exhausting it must be.

*People*Characters: I think you've captured the personality of the mother here so well. We see how exhausted she is yet, despite everything, we can also see how much love she has for her children. I guess I wanted to know why she was crying. I guessed it was exhaustion but it could have been a number of other things too.

*Home*Setting: This takes place in her home late at night.

*Ghost*Atmosphere/tone: I think this is a really emotional piece and you seemed to catch it so well *Smile*



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Review of S.I.S.C.O.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Reading*Initial hook: Hey Sisco, I'm here with my second review *Smile*


*Checkg*What I liked:

This is a really neat folder and a place to keep the novels that you're working on. You've set the page out well and it's clear and concise. I have to say I've heard other members and yourself refer to Sisco before in a context of it having been a program perhaps? I've never heard of this... care to enlighten me?

*Cut**Paste*I have no suggestions to make!



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Rated: E | (3.5)
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This is a WDC Power Reviewers Winter Wonderland Review! *Smile*

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*Checkg*What I liked:

I spotted this piece and thought that because the date was looming nearer it was a very apt poll and one I wanted to take part in. I was really surprised to find I'm the first person to vote! Maybe it's a new item though *Smile*

I do have to say however, that I'm not sure your choices cover every base. You have a lot about different natural disasters but only one that says 'It's not going to happen'. While in principle I think this is fine the way you've worded that option didn't sit right with me. I don't necessarily think it's baloney but I do have a different belief system. Maybe it would be more appropriate to ask how you're going to change/not change your life on that day. Just a thought *Smile* Thanks for sharing this!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Reading*Initial hook: Okay I decided to stop by something a little more positive for my last review of the mini port raid! I chose this piece because I always enjoy finding out more about other members of the community *Smile*


*Checkg*What I liked:

This is a really nice piece that gives the readers a chance to dip into your life and find out what sort of person you are, what your passions are and, and you mention here, your life mottos. I think this piece gives a good sense of your personality and I want to thank you for sharing it *Smile*

Also I want to say a big congratulations for being published, I know you wrote this a while ago now but I still feel like it's worth saying!

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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*Reading*Initial hook: I'm here with a review because you were jailed in "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.!

*Pencil*Storyline: I couldn't resist this piece when I spotted this. I love zombie apocalypse stories! I have to say, this was well worth the read. The narrative voice of this piece is really strong and the personality of the character comes across well throughout (though I have to admit I thought it was a woman at first, but I'm not sure why). The piece is written as a journal and the reader finds out this is the fourth in the series as Devin travels and keeps on the move to avoid the walkers.

I'd be really interested to see his other journal entries, if you wrote them!

*People*Characters: Devin is the main character. Through his journal we find out about his experiences, himself and his thoughts/emotions. It works well and as I mentioned it lets his own voice come through strongly.

*Home*Setting: In this journal he is sitting in mausoleum writing.

*Ghost*Atmosphere/tone: This piece has a good narrative voice that really hooked me and while it wasn't full of fear, there was certainly tension and uncertainly hanging in there.



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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Reading*Initial hook: I'm here with a review because you were jailed in "Invalid Item" Open in new Window.!


*Checkg*What I liked:

I've spotted this piece every time I visited your port but never managed to stop by yet, so here I finally am. It's great seeing all of those great awards in one place and you so deserve all of them! You are a wonderful member of the community and you are much appreciated *Smile* Can't wait to see you add more to this!

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