I enjoyed this poem. Unfortunately, I found that the rythym varied from the first paragraph, which through off the rest of the poem. Other than that, the poem is well-written. But, this is just my opinion, and hopefully will not be found as offensive. I still rated this poem high because it still allows me to connect with it. Keep up the good work.
A well-written sonnett that flows smoothly and captures the truth in words that express the feelings with ease. I found no errors in this poem, and enjoyed the feeling of understanding that the author brings about. I look forward to reading more of this author's work.
EXCELLENT! Wow, this author has hit a nerve within me that struck and sung so loud and deeply it nearly hurts. This writing gives us a beautiful description of a tender and sweet love that is wanting to express itself, but unsure of how well. It flows smoothly and reaches deep within the reader. Great job!
Krisit, I love this poem! It's great, and such a wonderful treat to read. It flows smoothly, and is well-written. It's easy for the reader to connect with it. You've done an absolutely wonderful job!
The poem was beautiful. The whole setting was tender and sweet. A love poem indeed. I did have a problem. In the beginning, it starts off with a rhyme pattern, then the second stanza through the rest of the poem is more free verse. I would recommend changing that first stanza. Otherwise, there were no errors, and it flows smoothly and is easy to read.
A grim picture painted in the beginning of this poem, but the truth is...the ending holds the prize. The fought for freedom is what is the best song that was ever sang. This one, is no less. It flows smoothly and is well-written. Thank you for sharing!
I had a really hard time with this one. Not that it wasn't well-written, but for me it just did not flow as smoothly. I could nearly hear the descriptions as the writer does give them so vividly, but for some reason, this one just did not connect with me.
A deep and dark poem. Waiting through the darkness sometimes is the hardest battle of them all. Especially when a sign of death surrounds the person waiting. This poem describes the scene so well, that it can send chills down the reader's spine. Very good!
A well-written poem that expresses what the reader sees within the words. The painting may not be visible to the reader on this poem, but it paints a portrait of a reader's ability to see the picture through the words they read. I found no errors and enjoyed reading this poem and understanding the connection.
And yet, do wondering eyes see the truth, hidden so deeply within. A memory, lost in the years, but burns as brightly as the day it was lit. Given life with words, will it ever deminish? Probably not. But, this poem of words, strung together will forever enshrine them.
Beautiful, inspiring and uplifting. This poem flows smoothly and easily for the reader. It's gentle rhythym nearly rocks the reader into a sense of peace and wonderment. Perfect for searching souls and those that have been found that still know how to look for beauty.
A new look at poetry, this author has given so much insight in the writing that the reader feels the depth of the emotions with ease. Connection is the key, and the author here has no problem connecting the reader with the work. If only the work would connect the life. Great job!
Sherri gives us the ability to send up this prayer in times of need, or just times of contiplation. A prayer written in poetry to ask for that which we always need. The peace of faith and the hope of peace. I found no errors in this poem, and enjoyed the smoothness immensely. Thank you for sharing.
Deep and intense. In the beginning the reader wonders at the beauty the writer expresses so gently and sweet. Then the reality is given. I found no errors, and this poem flows smoothly. Great job!
Nicely written. This poem expresses the feelings of moving, getting away, but not knowing how or when. Feeling inadequate to motivate, needing the freedom, but the pain still holds on and pulls one down into the deep abyss. I found no errors. Good job.
This is an inspiring and very touching. Bringing forth emotions that blend together to create what appears to be a mass of confusion, but the reader must read through this to find the truth. The rhyme pattern was a bit off. I slowed the reading just a bit, but there were no spelling or grammar errors. Good job.
Sweetness on the heels of sadness. This poem is absolutely beautiful and rings true for the love of a father. It is easy to relate to with how close to my father I am. And the ability to still say "Daddy" is the key that gives this poem the true beauty. It flows smoothly and is well-written. Great job!
A nearly devestating and beautiful poem. The love for a sister that shines through even after death can only be felt when the two siblings are very close. An angel on earth, and one in eternity, this poem shows the love with perfect shining light. An excellent job. The title catches the attention, but the description using "I have seen death...." really catches the reader's attention, drawint them in.
A beautiful gift of family memoirs allows the reader to feel the love that is shared in this poem. Family importance rings strong in the lines of love the writer has gifted us. This poem flows smoothly and the rhythym is excellent. Well-deserving the chance to be in the monthly newsletter. Congratulations!
Excellent. This poem gives vivid descriptions to the horses as well as the desert. Showing life once sustained in that area no longer can withstand the pain it causes. It is well-written. Congratulations on this being in the monthly newsletter. It is well-deserving!
Excellent. This poem gives vivid descriptions of both the time and the emotions that play out. The whole word is given, but the vivid picture painted is what tells us the whole truth. This poems flows smoothly and has a good rhythym to it. I found no errors in this poem.
This poem is a beautiful and inspiring write. The author reminds us once of the tragedy that happened and how love can build the bridge from hurt to healing. The picture of beauty shines past the clouds onto the reader bringing with it a sense of joy and peace. Well-written, I found no flaw within this poem.
This story is such a sweet and truthful story. The sadness in the beginning is overcome by the true spirit of the child towards the end. This story is left for the reader to wonder at how it will end, and could be just the beginning of a whole new story.
Beautiful. This poem is so very inspiring and reaches to the heart of the ones that are hurting. Thank you so much for sharing. It enlightens me and empowers me to keep moving on even when I feel the need to give up. I found no errors in this poem and rate it a perfect 5!
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