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Review of Sweet Tooth  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi J. D. Blaire,

I’m honored to read and review 'Sweet Tooth'

Title: Happy Halloween! I'm reading about sweets, to hopefully keep me out of the Halloween candy bowl!

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents: Congratulations on the Honorable mention. I have to note those things too, or I'll never remember any of it.

What a delightful tale! I personally think it should have taken first place!

Thumbs up: A very nice twist at the end.

Conventions: I didn't notice any errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of HAPPY HALLOWEEN!  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Countrymom IN SHADOWS ,

I’m honored to read and review ' Happy Halloween.'

Title: Happy Halloween, to you too!

Description: I can't wait to read it!

Contents: How sweet and delightful! I've often been accused of riding my broom to work some times. I really enjoyed how the poem flowed as I read it. It was light and breezy to read.

Thumbs up for jovial Halloween musings... incorporating children, and witches flying on brooms.

Conventions: I didn't notice any errors at all. Delightful read!

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi meastburn0808,

I’m honored to read and review 'The Day You Will Never Forget.'

Title: Interesting title to find on the search page for Halloween... My mind goes straight to getting married, having my first child ( I slept through the second).

Description: Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents: A scary little incident of younger days. I can't even imagine what I'd do.

Conventions: There are several typos, and grammatical errors. Things you probably didn't catch when proof reading.
I'll share a couple, they're all easy fixes. There were scary haunted house stuff everywhere. >> was instead of were.
It was very cold the night.>> that instead of the.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Indy Sports Fan ,

I’m honored to read and review 'Trick or Treat Scare'

Title: Happy Halloween.... I like the title, which is why I'm reading your poem tonight.

Description:Punch up your description. This is where people decided if they even want to bother. Entice the readership of WDC to open and take a peek at your work.

Contents: I love how you start and end the poem with the same stanza. The repetition of such a rhythmic section sets the tone for your piece.

Since your first and last verses have four lines that rhyme aabb, the middle seems a little out of sorts. I was totally lost when you had the cow.

I know this piece was from a long time ago. Maybe it's time to bring it out and tweak it.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of I Remember  
Review by Amay
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
My Mother has Alzheimer's, you've captured so much in your poem. Oh man the inhibitions... lol, I can't tell you how many times she's come out of her bedroom not knowing what to do next.

Sum1swriting suggested your poem to me, bless him, bless your daughter, bless you for supporting her in a way an author can.

Your poem hurts, its so real to me and my life's journey right now.

Thank you;
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Talicia Em ,

I’m honored to read and review 'Vampiric Interdiction: Prologue'

Title:

Description:Nice description.

Contents: There are a couple of places you go from third person, to first, then back to third. Pick your story teller and stick with it. If Villahr is going to be the lead, and you want to tell his story from his POV, you have to stick with that. Switching confuses the reader.

I think you've got the beginning of a really interesting read, if you're interested in jumping on the paranormal wagon. Keep your thoughts original and unique to your characters and settings.



Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Joy,

I’m honored to read and review My Indomitable Duct Tape

Title: Interesting title, love the adjectives

Description: Shares with the reader the purpose of the poem. I'd love to know the results of the Slam

Contents: If only reality was easily fixed by duct tape. One Christmas many years ago, my sons both received books about the wonders and marvels of duct tape. Wouldn't it be delightful to duct tape all of our political candidates together, until they decided to put the needs of the nation as a whole first and foremost in their minds. Bind their cronies mouths shut and tape their ears open to hear the real needs of the people. That might make an interesting story.

Thumbs up:
I sense, someday,
akin to a magician with his last secret,
my duct tape will mend and protect
delicate hearts
and bind the universe together
inside a friendly radiance.

Conventions: No errors noted

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Praying Mantis  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Catwoman,

I’m honored to read and review Praying Mantis,

Title: Appropriate for your piece

Description: Works well with your picture and information

Contents: I saw the picture of the praying mantis, and had to come look at it. What interesting insects. The females pull the heads off the males and eats it. The babies hatch out of an egg sac. We had the unfortunate pleasure of having a child bring in an egg sac for show and tell. It was forgotten and left in the room for a few days. Needless to say, we had hundreds of baby praying mantises crawling around one Monday morning. They look just like the adults, only much smaller. the babies we had were about 1/8 of an inch. Oh my, the memories of trying to get all of the babies outside without stepping on any.

Thumbs up: Absolutely beautiful photo to go with your piece.

Conventions: No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Texas Cow Patties  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Kenzie,

I’m honored to read and review Texas Cow Patties/

Title: I thought this might be a recipe that my husband has been wanting me to make for a while, I really was surprised when I read the ingredient list. Not at all what I expected.

Description: Thank goodness it isn't a literal interpretation.

Contents: In a lot of ways, it's very similar to my chocolate chip recipe. I can't imagine what the addition of the corn flakes makes to the cookies. Interesting thought. I'm going to have to try this recipe.

Thumbs up: I'm glad you added the blurb at the beginning. It brings more character and substance than just a recipe.

Conventions: No errors noted. Have you ever used small ice cream scoops to dole out your cookie dough. I've found that they really make for a more uniform sized cookie. That's my tip for all cookie and muffin makers.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of In a Daydream  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Mindertwenty,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review In a Daydream

Title: I love day dreaming, letting my imagination fly free. Nice title

Description: The description is where you entice a reader to open your piece. They'll be able to tell it's a short poem by the number of KBs the poem has.

Contents: 'Beam me up, Scottie.' Reading your poem transported me back to the days when Sci-Fi was more than zombies, vampires and werewolves. Traveling through space, watching the first men on the moon, the shuttles, exploration of the planets.
It brought back happy memories, of heros traveling and extending our knowledge of our own universe and writers clamoring on board with the fantasy.

Your poem flows well, the rhyme structure is sound. Very nice work.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Who Are You?  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi JesusLovinGal,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review "Who are You?"

Title: This is something I think we all feel at one point or another.

Description: Interesting description, certainly a part of learning all about someone- do we ever really know someone completely?

Contents: It seems that you've had a revelation, someone showing their true colors. The flow works well. I lime the two line styling. It works well with your message.

Thumbs up:I think your warning at the end, shows what you've learned.

Conventions: No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Victoria Ann Manning,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review Tiny Cage for a Golden Bird

Title: Interesting title that brings forth many memories of childhood fairy and folk tales.

Description: Sounds like an interesting challenge- but I'm not familiar with it.

Contents:Delightful poem. I love the use of repetition, it adds to the flow of your poem and gives it depth. I think you've captured the metaphor quite well. (Couldn't resist the pun). The story within your poem has a wonderful moral for those who wish to see it.

Thumbs up: Creating a cautionary tale within a poetic form

Conventions:I have a pet peeve- the word 'i' is always capitalized. That takes me out of the moment every time. Usually first letters of lines are also capitalized in poetry. You've used punctuation, personally I think you should use capitals where appropriate.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Retail hades  
Review by Amay
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Rudiepop,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Retail Hades'

Title: Your title pulled me right in. Wow! That's about how I feel about any form of shopping anymore.

Description: I can't imagine the torture the common population can cause the employees of a retail store. I always try to be on my best behavior. I'm sure the poem will enlighten me. Great description.

Contents: Your workplace sounds like a teacher's workplace. There are plenty of people willing to tell you how to do your job, but not one of them has any REAL experience with the average child. Bless you, thanks to our current educational system, if it isn't A, B or C your workers won't have a clue as to what to do, either!

Thumbs up: You've taken a bad situation and created a humorous poem to blow off some steam. I think I'd keep a copy on my desk, if I were you. Just to point to every so often.

Conventions: I didn't notice any errors. I don't have any suggestions to make it a better poem. The flow and rhythm is spot on.

I will make this promise, I will be a good customer, and respect those that are trying to help me in the retail world.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Room 315  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Nasreen Chaudhary,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Room 315'

Title and description piqued my curiosity. I'm curious to find out what is going on in Room 315.

Contents: Shame on the hotel manager. A very intense short read. I can easily see this being expanded into a novel filled with the horrific behavior of the hotel manager.

Thumbs up: Very intense!

Conventions: This must be an older hotel, with the hotels of today, the concrete between floors wouldn't allow seepage. It seems like with all of the fore planning that he must have done, he would have had the tarp out first.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of One Less  
Review by Amay
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Freethinker,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'One Less'

Title: This title immediately sent me back to my teaching days... lessons of one less, and one more building number concepts. It piqued my curiosity.

Description: An attempt at poetry- doesn't tell the reader a lot. It really makes me wonder why writers/ authors/ poets belittle their own creations. (I shouldn't say anything. I do it all the time too.) Look at the description as a place to pique curiosity. Engage the other authors here to want to peek into your port.

Contents: First- I love the form of the poem, at this point I haven't read it, but I'm looking at how it undulates as I scroll through. I think that's pretty cool.

It forms in puddles ( I don't think you need the word IT at the beginning of this line. I've read it with the it, and without. I think the flow is better without it)

Very deep and profound thoughts. There are places, I'd shift words a little, but all in all, a wonderful poem.

Thumbs up: You've dealt with a difficult subject matter, and looked at it through the eyes of a poet, describing the despair and hopelessness of a situation. You've made it palpable, very touching piece.

Conventions: There are a few places where the line breaks interrupt the flow of the poem. As far as conventions go, I saw no errors.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Seven Years  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Wyn,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Seven Years'

Title: My mind immediately went to the movie with a similar title 'The Seven Year Itch'

Description: A lot of ups and downs can happen in the seven years of marriage

Contents: Such a very sad poem. Seven years, seems like a drop in the bucket when I've been married for 31 years. I'm at a loss for words. The sadness and despair translated through your words that flow with simple ease. The repetition of the seven years just emphasizes the brief amount of time they've had together.

Thumbs up: Brilliantly written and heartfelt.

Conventions: No errors noted

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Nixie,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'The Submerged Half of the WdC'

Title: I love the title, I wasn't sure of what I was going to see, but it called to me. Daring me to open it up to read.

Description: Interesting description, creating another tempting reason to open up and read.

Contents: Eloquent musings from the heart, I think you've captured the essence of poetry in your piece. Not necessarily your fifth grade poem, but in your whole proposal. You've written from the heart. You've shared your soul. You've stirred the reader. That is poetry.

Thumbs up:There are lots of 'form' poets, there are lots of prose poets, just because something doesn't move you like it does the writer of the poem, doesn't mean you don't get it. Heavens, my dad loved poetry all of his life. He even collected it. But I never saw him put his pen to paper to try it. Putting the effort into a piece means more to me than being a natural poet. Giving something your best shot, practicing, the more you try the better you get.... Some where in all of that, I can hear my dad pushing me to keep writing, keep practicing the piano/ organ.

Conventions: No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Dark_Warrior,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'had i not seen you'

Title: I would use the appropriate capitals in the title of your poem, somehow it diminishes the value of the person when you don't care enough to use capitals

Description: "I" is always capitalized as the personal pronoun.

Contents: You've written a sweet love poem, showing how much your BF means to you. At the end, I stumbled a little on the next to the last line... it follows> I still remember the times we had,
The moment we meet- >>> This line is sandwiched between two past tense lines -- That makes me think it should be 'met' instead of meet.

Very nicely written, I could easily see this written as an 'anniversary message' or vows.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Just A Cat  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi GeminiStar,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Just a Cat'.

Title: It makes me curious about why it would be 'just' a cat... what is that feline up to?

Description: You've written a quatrain, with an AABB pattern, not a free verse

Contents: Your poem is a quatrain with a specific meter as I read it. It is rhyming with an AABB pattern in the stanzas. Free Verse on the other hand is by definition an unrhymed verse without a consistent metrical pattern that can use poetic devices.

The poem itself is cute, and very child friendly. It almost begs for a picture of a cat beside a broken antique vase. Very nicely written.

Thumbs up for taking fourth prize in the Children's Poetry Contest.

Conventions: Capitals and punctuation would be nice to add.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Toadalee  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi FictionFlasher (cute handle),

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Toadalee'

Title: Your title was a draw for me. My house was a 'toad' sanctuary in the spring. I guess the woods, the moisture from the natural well made a habitat that they loved.

Description: An image of having tea with a toad popped into my head when I read your description. Don't ask why, I don't even know.

Contents: A delightful tongue in cheek look into the drinking habits of toads. I must admit it had me chuckling. Very nicely written, with a few minor spelling errors.

Thumbs up: I loved the conversational tone of the piece, just like you were talking to a friend in the neighborhood bar.

Conventions: paragraph 4 first sentence- hopped, its just a typo.
paragraph 5, second line- pitcher
paragraph 6, first line- absence

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of The Art Gallery  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
You do have some beautiful signatures. The artwork and quotes work together to create something uniquely yours. I love Sweet Sig, I think the best. There is something so innocent about the picture.

The quote for the Be Yourself sig, sounds just like my best friend talking to me. I had to laugh when I read it, then a hardy 'Amen'.

I love the Woods photo. It is so appropriate this time of year, and the horse sent me to images of 'The Headless Horseman'. I have a friend that was there (the actual bridge and park) a few weeks ago.

There is a lot of talent showcased in this folder! It's wonderful that you can add these images to your reviews.

Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Rosie,

I’m honored to read and review 'The Asteroid Guard'

Title: Interesting title, would be a draw for sci- fi readers

Description: I didn't get the Greek business man reference.

Contents: This is a story that could be a great story with some added details. I would suggest that you go back and look at it. Read each line as you've written it out loud.
There are some gaps, that I think you'll catch.

I've found that when I write something and go back to it after a month or so, I can see what was missing, that I didn't notice in the rush to capture the train of thought.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay

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Review of America  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi KC is a teacher now, (Congratulations, or sympathies... Teaching is one of the most honorable professions, that gets the least amount of respect these days. While I loved teaching, loved the kids, what the job is turning in now fills me with apprehension- for our teachers and mostly for the children. But, that's another soapbox to stand upon).

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to work and review 'America, a word search'

I found myself singing the song while I was searching for the words. I'm sure kids would love the interactive version, if you're allowed to share.

A very entertaining way to start my evening. Thank you!

There is one thing I would suggest... but I doubt that you have any control. If the words found could change color drastically, or have a slash through them it really would help see what was left. As I said, I don't know if members have any control over that, it's probably a Storymaster/ mistress or staff thing to think about.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Love Feel  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Kirthi,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Love Feel'

Title: Interesting title... I immediately went back to my childhood and favorite cartoons in the paper- Love is...

Description: Very broad conjecture, I'm not sure I'd say every girl has this opinion

Contents: Finding love is an amazing adventure. Passions, hormones, newness, so many things come into play. While that first love is always the one you'll remember, the one that will hurt the most to lose, there is so much more to be developed through time.

Conventions: While I didn't notice any grammatical errors, some of your word choices seem contrary to your theme. ex, prey, iron heart, bondage...

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Autumns Fall  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi T. J. DeWahl,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Autumn's Fall'

Title: As I scanned through your port, I thought something about autumn would be appropriate since the Vernal Equinox was this week

Description: Indeed you've created a very poetic, emotion-filled story about the end of one season and the coming of the next.

Contents:Your imagery is so profound and truly poetic. The visions created will soon be upon us once again. Beautifully written.

Thumbs up:
Conventions: The wind is chill and tries to steal away my warmth,>>> is chill (sounds awkward, chilled or chilly perhaps)

Then the tempo of the wind increases, and out in the road, breathes life into countless dust devils that swirl and flee for the ditches. >> This could be broken into two sentences- the first ending with Increases. While ( then or another conjunction that shows time passing) out in the road it breathes ....

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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