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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Raven,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Derranged Miss Muffet'

Title: I love twisted nursery rhymes for some strange reason, so this was a definite calling card for me.

Description: Little Miss Muffet is actually a Mother Goose nursery rhyme which makes it a type of poem

Contents: You've twisted Little Miss Muffet with several different characters from some of the fairy tales. The story is very twisted with a blood thirsty Muffet literally sucking the blood from fairy tale favorites such as Little Red Riding Hood and Humpty Dumpty. I guess she'll have a blast heading back to the Little Old Woman in the Shoe. While your poem is written in lines that rhyme, they are inconsistent in meter which detracts from the poems flow.

Thumbs up: Your first four lines follow the flow and meter of Little Miss Muffet very well.

Conventions: Derranged is actually spelled deranged, Hanzel and Gretel,


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Amay
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Review of The Cookie  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Southern Grace,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'The Cookie'

Title: I'll admit it... I want a cookie right about now. Since there are none in the house, this will have to do.

Description: I love a good challenge, sounds like you do too.

Contents: Wow, How often do I go in blind and chose two philosophical pieces to review in one sitting. Someone must be trying to tell me something.

Your poem shows so much creativity. The last piece I read was all about blaming others for creating obstacles, I've never looked at the process of growing in such a light. Not that I see everything through rose colored glasses. Obstacles are the instruments of growth and change, necessary parts of life.

Anyway, back to your piece, You present the argument that each person is responsible for their own actions, inactions, good choices, poor choices. To that I say, dog gone straight! We all are in the process of living and learning. Growing and stretching our wings. Our choices are ultimately our own responsibility.

Thumbs up: for taking up the challenge and writing about a food with such a profound lesson in the balance.

Conventions: myself is one word in line 6

Sometimes others as well,>>> You might want to add 'can' after others. To me it reads smoother with the can in there. It's up to you.

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Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Late Night Writer,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'What Shape is Your Tree?'

Title: Your title piqued my interest, while your Description had me wondering where this would lead me.

Contents: Your article uses the metaphor of a tree growing over the course of a life time. It brought back memories of driving up to my Great-grandmother's through the mountains of NC and TN. Young saplings taking root and growing right out of the side of the mountain, seemingly right on boulders.
You refer to the boulders as obstacles placed in your way, forcing you to change to meet the needs of someone else. I'd like to propose, those boulders build character, give life meaning, in essence force to the fore front issues that some would rather sweep under the rug and not deal with.
Consider, if you will the roots of that tree. Roots that have the power to grow around, and break boulders down with the help of water, heat and cold.
No one ever said growing up would be easy. No one ever promised a life without challenges. To me, it's the way you face the challenges and learn from them that puts everything into proper prospective. Like the tree growing from the side of the mountain, the challenge is to hold on, never give up, and strive to always learn and grow.

Conventions: No errors noted

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Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Iravan,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Say Must to Investment'

Title: Scary title- since I've lost so much in the stock market.

Description: The description could spur someone's interest, just to see how your take on investmenting

Contents: You've presented interesting concepts utilizing a variety of analogies to illustrate your points. For the topic, personally, it seems a bit flowery. You understand the importance of saving, setting a budget, short and long term goals. All of these things are important to being successful in managing your economic future.
You're correct in pointing out the wastefulness of youth, but that too is a part of growing up. I totally agree, most teens live for the moment, not their financial future.
Planning for a family is a wonderful goal. It sounds like you have a good head on your shoulders. Heed your own advice.

Thumbs up for tackling a topic that many people would just as soon forget. They live for the moment, like Aseop's grasshopper.

Conventions: I would suggest that you go back and read each sentence aloud. There are places where things are really choppy and draw the reader away from your piece trying to figure out what your meaning is.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Aproiri Adlucem,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Relativity Limerick'

Title: Just having limerick in the title would be cause enough for me to come in and check it out. I dearly love limericks.

Description: From your description, one might wonder if this is an oldie that you love or if you wrote this. You may want to clarify for future readers.

Contents: I love limericks and cosmology so this is a perfect fit for me . I think this is a great one.

Conventions: No errors noted

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Keaton Foster Wears No Pants, (Let me cover my eyes!)

I’m honored to read and review 'One Man's Submarine'

Title: My best friend and my uncle were both submariners, which is probably why I clicked onto your poem.

Description: A poem of introspection lets others see into your port.

Contents: I love the way your words flow and build tension within your poem. The repetition of lines anchors your piece. It's deep and raises ideas of how we currently live our lives. Not necessarily for the betterment of all.

Thumbs up: I love the way your poem sounds as I read it aloud, the flow is excellent.

Conventions: No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Winnie Kay,
I’m honored to read and review 'Evolution of the Written Word' which I found on Random Reads.

Title: I am a retired Montessori teacher one of the Great Lessons presented to the Elementary students is the History of Writing. SO, it's a natural that I would want to see if your piece has information that I can learn and present to the children.

Description: Your description added to my curiosity... I had to find out - How far have we come?

Contents: Love your characters! Your piece is very tongue in cheek, which I love, btw. You had me chuckling! Awesome job!

Thumbs up: Taking what could be a very dry subject matter and making it into something light-hearted and fun.

Conventions: no errors noted

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Amay
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Review of The Letter  
Review by Amay
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi aralls,

I’m honored to read and review 'The Letter' which was listed on Random Reads today.

Title and Description: It was your title and description that called for me to click on your piece.

Contents: An awesome piece that brought tears to my eyes. You can feel Nathan's discouragement and pain, his realization that it isn't what the media depicts. The reality of his life is abundantly surrounding him. While he's following orders to maintain contact with home, there are things weighing on his mind that he needs to share, and he knows his mother is strong enough to hear/ read them. She'll worry more, but at least Nathan would be able to sleep without some of those emotions floating in his subconscious.

Thumbs up: Powerfully written, you transport the reader to the front.

Conventions: No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
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Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Cynaemon,

I’m honored to read and review 'Dreaming of Spring' which I found on the Random Reads section.

Title: I love your title, but as you probably guessed being the middle of September here in the US, I'm dreaming of Fall.

Description: I love Itchywater's contest and all of the poetry forms she's found for me to learn about.

Contents: Isn't it wonderful when those first leaf buds start to come forth. The days start to get longer, and the chill of winter fades away. You've created a lovely haiku and I really hope it did well in the contest.

No errors noted

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of A funny quote  
Review by Amay
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Josh Stone Waters,

I’m honored to read and review 'A Funny Quote' which I found in the Random Reads Column.

Title: Did you know, your title and description match? Sometimes it just works better that way, doesn't it?

Contents: I'd love to know who the quote is from. The therapists may be correct, if we put as much passion into our making out, as we put into arguing, I imagine things may indeed be very different. Of course, all the TV ratings would be hurt. Who pays attention to TV when enjoying a playful romp?

Thumbs up: It is a unique quote, with a little tongue and cheeky review.

Conventions: No errors noted, but I do have a question. Do you think you'll use this quote to inspire a piece of writing, a poem or a short story perhaps?

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of The Abyss  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Talaena,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'The Abyss'

Title: suggests a dark and ominous time

Description: It breaks my heart to read this is the only poem you have left. I know there must be reasons, but it still is so sad to lose your poetry collection. I know over the years, I've lost things that I've written. It's really hard to recapture the moments to recreated those pieces lost.

Contents: While the contents of your poem are dark and sad, the word choice, style and flow are beautifully written. If you are aware of any outlets that could use your poem for the greater good- I'm thinking in the lines of bullying awareness, prevention of bullying, poetry readings where the audience participates, this would be an excellent piece to offer.

I do hope you'll find your poet's voice once again. It was an inspiring piece.


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi ShadowXV,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read, review and share in your Guestbook.

Title: Works well.

Description: I was happy to stop by and sign your guest book. It's one of your most recent posts.

Contents: Short, sweet, to the point. I don't know that I followed your directions too well. You'll have to read my post to find out. I do hope you have more guests.

Conventions: Capitalize the title of your story, the beginning of sentences, and the pronoun I. Other than that, it looks fine.

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Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Choice  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Andrew G.,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Choice'

Title: Have to admit, your title and description called to me this evening. I had to see what your thoughts were.
Description:
Contents: I love how you've used the characteristics of ocean life to lead the reader through different paths their lives could take. After reading about the dolphin, I found myself wanting more. I'm not sure if I was expecting a concluding stanza, or if more sea life would be introduced.

At the beginning of summer, I wrote a lot of poems on sea life for my soon to be born (I know his momma wants sooner seeing as he's already 5 days late) grandson. They've decorated his nursery with an ocean theme. I guess that's what makes your poem special in my eyes right now.


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Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi CAT,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'You really don't like me now??'

Title: It works really well with your article.

Description: Your attempt is very humorous, and 'very tongue in cheek' ... therefore, I think it works for your description

Contents: I started reading, thinking 'who cares' if you cut your hair. If they're that hung up on it.... lose 'em. They're not worth the effort.

I kept reading and visions of the past, floated into my head. The days when my hair would get wet when I sat down in the bath tub. and how my dear hubby loves long hair.
Blah, blah... you know the drill. Come home with a hair cut (once way too short- I even cried when I saw what she'd done right before my son's graduation from college) and the only comment hubby dear had was ... "gonna be a while before you have to go back'...Then all the helpful friends... 'Maybe if you spike it?' .... Sigh, what we do for hair.

Your article brought back those memories, and now I can laugh at them, while I'm puffing my bangs out of my eyes as I type. I've reached the stage of life, if you don't like it... bite me. I'll move on. I think you've joined the growing masses at that stage of life. Congrats!

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of ??? B.C. – 2011  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Mark Lewis,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review '???? B.C.- 2011'

Title: I must admit, your title piqued my curiosity.

Description: I've had some sloth-like students in my day. I think their song would have been more like- who me? I have to work? What? NOOO way! Yeah, I can still picture their cute little faces, too. I hope they grow out of it.

Contents: Wow, Mark you've packed a lot of history into a brief poem. You've created a time capsule of appreciation of the past, acknowledging the works of the past, while honoring their legacy they've bequeathed to us.
I know, with youngsters the love of history is tied up in their questions, especially when you have them think about how did these people do the amazing things they did- without our 'wonderful' technology that they can't live without. Your poem should be a part of every Montessorian's history album. In fact, with your permission. I'd like to add it to my album.

Thumbs up: Thank you for sharing an appreciation of the past, because without our past... we wouldn't be where we are today. (Good or bad)

Conventions: only thing I saw that really caught my attention and made me stop reading was on this line
How do the great conqueror Alexander
Expanded a vast empire to the far east--- How does instead of how do....

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sarita,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review The Entelechy of Zunn.

Title: I remember this prompt. I entered too.

Description:Nice tease!

Contents: A great story! I love the way you've woven everything together. It draws so many elements of mythology/ cosmology/ and religion together. I was mesmerized and sad when the story came to an end.

Thumbs up: The ending was awesome. For some strange reason an image of God with earth in a snow globe flashed into my mind. I'll let you figure that one out.

Conventions: I was so engaged with the story, I didn't notice anything. That's a good thing, right?

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi George,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Patricia's Secret Garden'

Title: You have a typo in your title, an extra 'a' in secret... easy fix

Description: Sounds inviting.

Contents: The first time through, I kept getting hung up on capital letters all over the place. I went back and read it again. You've written a beautiful poem describing the place that so many of us need. A place of beauty, and solace. Even as this reader read it again, I let the words release the tension that normal mornings tend to bring. I can easily see this poem as apart of a thinking of you card, or a get well message for someone going through rough times.

Thumbs up: Your message is the best part of this work. Your poem flows so well.

Conventions: The capital letters in the middle of lines in words that don't need to be capitalized distracted me. I kept wondering why, was there a hidden message an internal acrostic that I was missing?

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Henry Weatherall,

Happy WDC Anniversary Month!

I’m honored to read and review Words of the Uncertain

Title: The title and the description, leave me with questions, perhaps I haven't read enough of your works to understand the comment at the end of your description.

Contents:An interesting poem delving into a relationship that possibly was lost, possibly long distance. It does leave the reader with an air of uncertainty. The dreams of a lover, that hopefully one day will find their love.

Thumbs up:Immersed in a blissful remembrance of times past…>> with rose colored glasses we view the past as something perhaps more wonderful than it really was.... but then, we still long for what we cannot have.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Punnett  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Barkhakariwala,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Punnett'

Title: I'm assuming that the title of your poem is the form's name.

Description: I've never heard of a punnet, so I was curious to see what the form consisted of

Contents: Your poem describes of scene that reminds me of the cartoons Tom and Jerry. Jerry always tease poor Tom, anyway its a cute form. There are a couple of places you might change a word to help the flow, but as it is, you've met the word requirements.

I always love finding new forms of poetry. Thank you for sharing this form with me today.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Peace please!  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Frosty,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Peace Please'

Title: A delightful thought if humanly possible

Description: Self centeredness and greed... the cause of so many wars

Contents: The awareness of the atrocities of war are expounded upon through the eyes of the narrator the reader is transported for a brief time to a place where pain and suffering are daily events. Life's joys have been replaced with hopelessness and loss. Greed, selfishness, unwillingness to bend. Such a shame life has to be this way, such a crying waste.

Thumbs up for bringing the plight of the children to the eyes of your readers.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
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Amay
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Review of P.Z. Pryor  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Story Jester,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'P. Z. Pryor'

Title: As I have a friend with the initials P. Z., I was kind of intrigued.

Description: Love the cautionary tales... therefore, I must read further

Contents: How cute. So many times the image of the snowball growing and taking over is part of the 'lying tale'. It was a breath of fresh air to see a consequence that visually stimulates the imagination. That commercial on TV- Geiko- Liar, Liar, pants on fire just flashed into my head. Think about the looks on those guys faces after they've been caught in their lies- they truly look disgraced.

Thumbs up: Your poem flows very well. I'm sure kids would enjoy it.

Conventions: No errors noted

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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi misunderstoodwiccan,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'great love (it isn't important no more!)

Title: Your title intrigued me, it was kind of like looking at opposites, a contrasting piece perhaps

Description: In eleventh grade, I don't think I was even interesting in anyone in particular. Everyone is different, if true loves knocks, open the door.

Contents: I'm glad you shared your poem here on WDC. It came from your heart... her loss. Too many men can't reveal their emotions like you've done in your poem. Sorry about the loss of your love though, but I'm sure you know... that happens too.

Conventions:" i know that i will love forever for the rest of my life because i found you" >>> forever- then the rest of my life is redundant- I know that I will know love forever, because I found you.. would be smoother.

Editing wise- capital letters when appropriate- I. first words of sentences

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Review of Books are Great  
Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Ladygrace,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Books are Great'

Title: Your title drew me in to read. I totally agree, books are great.

Description: I'm sure every teacher around could use help in encouraging youngsters to read.

Contents: Your poem has a lovely sentiment that I totally agree with. The lines flow with ease, and I can easily see sharing this with children as an encouragement to get a good book.

Thumbs up: I love the classics you chose for your first line.

Conventions: thru = through.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review by Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Desire,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'A Charming Ring to It'

Title: An interesting title, I wasn't sure where the story was going

Description: I do love the prompts for Daily Flash and Writer's Cramp, They are such a good way to get the creative juices flowing.

Contents: I felt so sorry for Lydia. Bless her heart, if those are her future in-laws, she should run to the nearest exit. Of course, her future mother in law did seem to warm up at the end. Maybe, things will work out after all.


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Review of Masks  
Review by Amay
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Deelyte-Chillin',

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Masks'

Title: Piqued my curiosity

Description: Inside the faces we use... deep thoughts, the person we project to others depending on our roles with those people.

Contents: A look at what my dad would call putting your brave face on. There are so many times everyone has to pull up their boot straps and move forward, no matter what. The expectations are there and we have to follow through. Everyone has those periods in their life.
Your poem flows well, it's message is concise and clear, and leads the reader to wonder, when do we really get to be 'ourselves'.

Thumbs up: The first two lines say so much to the human condition

Conventions: no errors noted

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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