This is a wonderful opportunity. My goal is to be able to write a book of poems, poetic stories (my own category), and short stories. I want to write a story about my life, the obstacles I've overcome, and hope that it can help others. I want to be able to write clearly and simply enough for everyone to understand. I don't know if this costs anything, but I am interested.
This last chapter was said because Larry had hung himself. I noticed that Larry was only 12 years old. The next question would be "What was the cause of his death? Death is hard to deal with no matter what the age of the individual; it's especially hard when the death was because of murder or due to an overdose of drugs.
Bowser Jr. was only five years old. Larry could have been someone he enjoyed playing with. The shock of everybody finding out that Larry was dead must have been a real blow to everyone.
I found out that on New Year's Eve, my second cousin, 33 years of age, was found dead in her apartment. I found out that when her father had gotten the autopsy report that they had found a massive dose of methamphetamines and fentanyl. This news was devasting to us, regardless if she had taken drugs. 33 years is such a young age for someone to lose their life.
Death from suicide and the death of someone so young, especially if you're a mother and you lose your baby is a real tragedy. There are a lot of people who like to say that you have to move on with your life when something like this happens. When you have someone close to you, this is easier said than done. We can always remember the happy times that we've spent with them; this will make it a little bit easier when a loss has occurred. We need to do our best to continue on with our lives; I'm sure that the person who died wouldn't want us to not continue on with our lives.
I encourage you to hang in there; time will heal. Even though it will be a bit rough as you move forward, there will be better days ahead.
When I lost my mother, I remember the good times that we've shared. She didn't let a day go by when she didn't tell me how much she loved me. Even though I miss her dearly, because she had said these things, it eased the pain somewhat.
I hope that what I have said helps you.
Anna Marie Carlson
I am going to send you 50 Gift Points to let you know that I care. I am hoping that this will make your day just a little bit brighter.
I am doing a review for you on your writing "Black". You chose very descriptive words that explained how you felt. I could feel the pain and emotion in all of this.
I encourage you to keep on writing; the more you write, the better you get and the better you get, the better you feel.
I am going to send you 100 Gift Points to show how much I have appreciated reading your story.
I had fun writing for the "What A Character!: Official WDC Contest. It was interesting how I came up with the name of this character as well as the other two. I hope that you will have fun reading this as well. I believe that I have improved on my writing in this story. This was a challenge for me to write.
I enjoyed reading the first chapter of your story (Sample of your unnamed novel). It was interesting that Christy was the eldest of three triplets, the only girl, and didn't resemble her brothers Luke and Axle. Her brothers were extroverted while Christy was introverted. The fact that the whole family, friends, and everyone in the house were werewolves.
Cristy and her dad sat for hours on a boulder reading books. I can relate to that as I enjoy reading.
It will be interesting to know if Christy will turn on her 18th birthday. Also, it was interesting that if they didn't turn when they were 30, they couldn't be a werewolf no matter how hard they wished for it. I wonder how many didn't turn.
I encourage you to continue on with your writing; you have an excellent style.
To show my appreciation, I am going to send you 300 Gift Points.
I thought that the rewriting looked great! I'm not sure what they look for in the rewriting, but I do a lot of rewriting. First, I do free writing, then I go back and look it over to make it better reading. After I once get it written, there are times when I get a different thought to my story and then I write it all over again.
You have given some thoughts to think over in your writing. I believe in the Our Lord and Savior Jesus Christ. There is one issue that I feel is questionable, and that is in the case of rape. I can feel a woman's pain when this happens. Carrying a child for nine months when it was forced upon them can be quite an ordeal. I believe that it would be murder to take the life of that baby, but if it was a matter between life and death, then I feel that abortion would be appropriate. I feel that a woman should be taken care of to help get her through a pregnancy, and then, because of the trauma that she had to go through, she could decide to adopt it out if she chose to do so. I admire the women who choose to love that baby and raise it; it wasn't the child's fault that they were conceived that way.
As far as having good hygiene during teenage sexual encounters is very important to know. If they are involved in sex, it's important to protect themselves as much as possible.
I am going to send you 100 Gift Points for being the writer of this story to show my appreciation. There are so many things to consider in different situations.
How would a young adult keep confusing him or her self of what life entails? It's no more a secret that the only to meet up with others in this world is having a unique value other's don't have, then you would find it easy to go beyond a far...This would give you an upper hand to boast about yourself and finally while dying at old age, you would mutter to yourself, a life well spent with smile and comfort in the grave...
It's nice to know that you could go to the grave at peace knowing that your life was well spent with smile and comfort. That would be a good way to go.
The second stanza that reads:
the best thing you can achieve that worth your time is IMPACT, your own part that you take in others is the only achievement that worth your time... Loving others and showing care within your own capacity or better still beyond, is the only success that would speak for you after you might have passed away from this Earth...
IMPACT is nice to know that is worth your time on this Earth.
The third stanza reads:
Your time is the only element that places value on you, why? Because you own it all, therefore, you can either misuse it or use prudently, mind you, woe to any man that spends his time unwisely, if he doesn't change from his ways, he would be a waste and liabilities to the present an oncoming generation.
The last stanza reads:
Smiles, look into yourself by yourself and think of something reasonable you can do to help your generation not to increase population (procreation) alone, you are a young adult that has a lot to offer to others, a unique package is what you are, you are a special being some common people need to step up to be unique, when you fail believe that many would fail as well because many success are attached to yours, imagine you now failing your creator.
I enjoyed reading "Paybacks". I liked the beginning where you wrote:
The moon, fat and yellow as a summer squash rose languidly in a late August sky. Summer squashes have a pretty color to them. I can picture the moon having this color and being fat just lying back enjoying the beauty.
It was interesting that the castle was made of sand and the walls fell back into the sea as the scuttling hermit crab greeted the waters rushing food within his clawed grasp as he went sideways, traveling about wondering at the small creature that was caught up in his pincher. The moon smiled at this.
I surely enjoyed your story. This story is a fantasy of something like I would write. It didn't say at the end if Daniel got the contract or not, but I'm thinking that it did.
It was so sweet of Cindy to say that regardless of whether he had gotten a contract for the Robot Minder or not, that she still loved him. Her encouragement of even if he didn't make the contract, that there was always next year.
Thank You for writing this wonderful story. This story sure did make my day.
I am going to give you 200 Gift Points for writing such a beautiful story.
Even though this story is about an assassin, which in not a favorite topic of mine, it was well written. I encourage you to keep writing.
It shows in the story that Andrea was so angry at Liam that she had orders to do away with Liam, along with three other interpol agents that followed him there, all because of the bad remarks made by Liam. It's too bad that she had killed four people altogether because of one night gone wrong.
This was an interesting contest entry and the subject for the prompt was indeed interesting.
Teenage love can be a difficult one. You want to meet the right person (there are many possibilities out there), but the first thing to look for is friendship. Some people choose not to marry because they just haven't met the right match (this process could take a long time), however, sometimes you have to take a risk and just go for it, ask that special someone in your life if they would like to marry you. If you fail to do so, you may have missed the one person who is very much in love with you and that both of you could have found the happiness that you so richly deserve.
Take care of yourself and stay safe.
Don't let the opportunity of genuine love pass you by.
Keep on Writing; you've done a great job!
Anna Marie Carlson
I'm sending you 100 Gift Points for a job well done. I'm hoping that you've won the contest.
This was a very moving love story. I'm glad that you had a friend who loved you no matter what; he only wanted you to be happy. I know that you were scared to see Steven, but I'm very glad that it turned out to be a happy ending.
I know someone who is gay that, even though we think differently on this kind of lifestyle, we are still friends. I am sorry that you had to go through all the pain and suffering that you had to go through.
Keep on writing; you have a nice flow with words.
I am going to give you 100 Gift Points; I hope that this will encourage you to write.
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You have put a lot of thought into this story. I can relate so much to what you have said.
I grew up in a Quaker church where I have learned so much. Our values have been torn up by those who don't have faith or think that the Bible was just a book that someone has written. The morals that I was taught helped to live a better life. There are times when it's hard to live up to everything that the Lord wants us to do, but I try to live as close to God and Jesus as possible. I have made some mistakes, but I do the best that I can to correct them.
It can be a lonely place out there when so many people refuse to believe in a loving God.
You have done a good job in writing this story and I encourage you to keep on writing.
I am going to give you 100 Gift Points; I hope that this will give you some encouragement.
I scored 2 out of 8; I pretty much lost the battle, but that doesn't mean that I've given up; I'll get up and try again some other time. This was an interesting quiz. Keep up the good work.
I haven't looked into the history yet, but yes, I did pretty bad. I will not give up. I will try again some other time. It was nice to have a quiz about it though.
This is such a beautiful poem. Sometimes you need to take a leap of faith. I can fully understand why both of the characters in the poem were afraid to take that leap of faith after being hurt. Sometimes you just need to take that leap of faith; perhaps if they both took that leap, they both may have found each other.
This is the first time that I have reviewed a newbie; you did a very good job; it sounded professional to me.
My name is Anna Marie Carlson and I totally enjoyed reading 📖 your poem entitled, "Conscience for sold!'
I agree that your conscience can 🥫 get lost and your innocence crushed when you don't take time ⌚ to listen 👂 to that inner voice that tells you that you shouldn't do something. There's a reason that you weren't meant to be at a certain place; you could have been an innocent victim of something that had occured.
I liked the last paragraph that read: You need to set yourself free
From all the existential world's worry
That's how you will get the Lord's adjacency
And become in list whom the Lord's agree.
I want to encourage you to keep on writing. You're doing great!
October chills have filled the air
The scent of pumpkin is everywhere
Spiced lattes warm the coldest ❤ hearts
Making tingling happen in all their parts
I think of lattes because they are so good. When the October chills hit, having a nice warm latte would make me feel good. My whole body would tingle all over with joy.
The part that reads:
Smiling faces greet them all
Bring out the treasures and sample fall
Pancakes, soups, stews and crackers
It's all about to drive us bonkers.
This would bring a smile to my face for sure. It would drive me bonkers to try all this out because there would be so much to sample.
I enjoyed reading 📖 this. It was very descriptive. Keep on writing. This took me back a few years.
Empty screen, no emotions,
But there's a painted smile,
Which truly hides what's inside;
Selfishness, greed and guile.
This shows that behind a painted ☺ is someone who is ❄, with not a care in the world, but only thinks of themselves, and the only thing on their mind is money. It shows a blank picture of their life on a screen; it must have been a sad life.
The part that reads:
If my cunning thoughts were to
Be displayed on my face,
I'll lose reputation
And my beauty and grace!
This would show a very mean person who was beautiful, but because of hard thoughts 💭, even though they were of good status in the community, they would lose their reputation and would look ugly on the outside and their mannerism's would fall by the wayside.
This is a good portrait of someone who would want to take their life and turn it from something beautiful into something ugly.
I thought that this was very well written and descriptive.
A cherished awakening
Crystal blue skies and the shimmering sun
Towering above the brisly cool, enchanted morning;
A pleasant and glorious day beckons with its
triumphant scenes and miraculous wonders.
High in the heavens resides the scattered and billowy
clouds
Whose gratifying appearance can excite the fondest of
imaginations; Uniquely puffy and well-formed shapes
Moving lazily in some dream-like direction,
Reminding us so of many fantastic creatures and things.
It's so wonderful that someone has the same interest in cloud formations as I do. This takes me back to the year 2006, in the month of July, when I lost my mother. For a whole year after that, perhaps a bit longer, I would see a cloud 🌥 formation of my dad and mom lying down with their heads together looking down on me with a ☺. This showed me that they were approving of what I was doing down here on earth.
I have noticed a lot of different animal shapes in the clouds as well.
Clouds can also get to the point of breaking, sending a lot of water in a short time, which can be depressing sometimes.
I enjoyed the prose. Keep up with your writing, as I'm sure that it will enjoyed by others.
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