I am not a professional reviewer, but I can give you my take on what I've read. I am reviewing your piece entitled, "A time to burgle".
There is a moral to this story. When someone does the same thing that someone else is doing, but it's not the right thing to do, there are consequences for doing that. The man in the story, Mike, did a bank heist and threw his duffel back into the car. Shelly followed in his footsteps doing the very same thing. Before this happened, Shelly was concerned about her nail.
The police showed up and Shelly replied, "Where are we going now?" He replied, "To hell, if we don't change our ways". There is a lesson to be learned; Don't do something just because someone else is doing it, otherwise, you will get caught.
This was a story that said that we would go to hell if we didn't change our ways. Mike and Shelly had something to consider before committing another crime like this one.
I encourage you to keep on writing. The more you write, the better you get. I thought that this was a cute story with a bit of humor.
I hope your days are going well, today, tomorrow, and always.
I can truly understand where you're coming from; I've been in a dark place where it seemed impossible to come out of. I've had a panic attack where I thought that the whole world was against me.
It takes a great deal of courage to share what's going on inside the mind of an individual; the thoughts that make them want to scream at the world, for not taking the time to understand. I am so glad that you've taken the first step in coming forth to share your story so that more people can understand what they can't understand. You are very brave. Don't let anyone try to convince you that what you're experiencing is very real. I find that most people don't believe what I'm saying because I have a mental illness. I have a schizoaffective disorder; I have my ups and downs. They think that I should be working. I had a good job working for the city and county government but ended up losing my job because I was too slow at doing things.
I did my best to go faster but I could not do it; I am what I am, and I had to accept that.
Believe in yourself, and do what you can to give yourself peace of mind that you're okay. I go through periods where I feel like something is crawling all over me. The feeling leaves me uncomfortable; it's not a fun place to be in. It took many years before I could get enough courage to write down what I was feeling and to share what it's like having a mental illness in public.
I have great admiration for you. It's not easy to calm down when you're anxious. I get a good book to read; this helps to take my mind off of the ugliness that I feel.
Having a panic or an anxiety attack causes me to sweat a lot. I feel all clammy inside.
My sincere advice is to get someone to help you if that option is available and get a piece of paper and begin to write. This helps me tremendously and is good therapy as well.
I encourage you to keep writing; the more you do it, the better you get.
I hope that this will help to put a smile on your face.
I am going to review your writing piece entitled, "ABECEDARIAN'. Although I'm not a professional reviewer, I can offer my input on how your writing made me feel.
I can tell that a family name is valued in this poem. You have a beautiful way of expressing how beautiful poetry is. I took a class during summertime once, and the kind of poetry that you've written is called an altruistic poem. One of my writings on Saint Patrick's Day was a long altruistic poem. You are welcome to check that one out and review any of my writings if you have the time. I appreciate the feedback.
I encourage you to keep writing am sure that it will bless others.
I am doing a review on your piece entitled, "Nelida".
Even though I'm not a professional reviewer, I can tell you how I felt about your piece.
What a wonderful way to express how you felt about Nelida when she was born! This would be the best gift anyone could give a child when they grow up. Her name means light. She was your guiding light. Everything you have done in life is to prepare yourself for being her mother. How wonderful is that? Priceless.
Your mother called and said that she looked like her Great Grandmother, your namesake, and hopes that she will pass on her name as well. You first wanted to name her Lena, but her father didn't like it. You hope that she will like her name.
You sounded like my father when he told me that I could get through anything and that I would survive. That is very good advice.
When you picked up her pictures that day, you said that she was gorgeous.
You began writing this piece when she was a year old and you hope that you haven't forgotten anything.
You were in labor for two days. My mother was in labor for two days; it was a difficult labor for her; I was a breech baby. My mother also had a tumor in her uterus for the entire pregnancy. She never complained when I was born.
You saw her first smile when she was five weeks old. People might say that this was ridiculous, but, you would know when you noticed it. She became the light in your dull life.
In the tenth paragraph, I would suggest that you look it over again for any misspellings and correct them if you would like.
Looking into her brown eyes, her Father's eyes, when she suckled, it was magic.
I encourage you to write more. It's such a beautiful memory to pass down to your children about how you were feeling when you were pregnant. I enjoyed reading your piece. I wish more parents would feel the way you did. I haven't had any kids of my own, but I know that when I get encouragement, I feel a whole lot better. I know that Nelida will love what you've written for her.
I hope that you can have a smile on your face today.
I am reviewing your piece entitled, "Trouble never hot him down". Even though I'm not a professional reviewer, I can offer my thoughts about your writing. I hope it will help.
It's amazing how in the thirties, there was less pay and hard work, and yet they were able to survive. My dad was born in 1900, and my mom was born in 1918. Whenever there was a car breakdown in front of our house, my dad would fix a flat tire or whatever else he could do. I admired his spirit.
It was a good thing that your dad had a sense of humor when the rear passenger door of the car had fallen off. When asked by someone if he had a wreck, he responded that he was driving one.
My dad was a good storyteller. I appreciated hearing all of his stories. The sad thing is that I only remember one story and that was because a friend of ours decided to do an interview with him on tape.
I'm happy that I was able to read your story. In the olden days, people were able to make things work.
I want to encourage you in your writing. It's nice to hear the stories from a time era that was different from what it is today. Even though the whole world is in a mess these days, I feel that things will work out alright.
I am hoping that your days are going well for you.
I am doing a review on your piece, "Nothing More Than a Box of Confusion". Even though I'm not a professional reviewer, I can offer my input.
Paragraph One:
It's impossible to believe that we're all the same.
We can't say that we belong in a bubble,
that we fit in a box.
How can that even be?
Especially, since I feel like I'm so
many people at once on any given day.
This sounds a lot like the person I am. It's comforting to know that there's someone else out there who feels the same way.
Paragraph Three:
But on other days, I just want to be still.
I don't want to have to think too hard
to have a conversation.
Conversations of "nice weather we're having" or "I'm fantastic, how are you?"
Paragraph Four:
On these days, I just want to stare.
Stare at the TV, or more likely the wall
if we're being completely honest.
Listen to a monotonous tune, a mundane beat.
Not having to feel the pressure of being human.
Paragraph Five:
And then on other days, I want to be loud.
I want to play my music at an obscene level
of volume.
I want to feel it in every single cell of my body.
I want to talk about controversial things, just so
I can raise my voice a bit.
Just so I can create a little bit of chaos.
Paragraph Six:
I like chaos.
I like to play in it.
But I do not thrive in it.
It consumes me.
Paragraph Fifteen:
So on the days that I'm flying with fire,
And the days that I'm floating on the tide,
And those damn days when my mind is eating
me alive.
I know that everything is always alright.
I know that I'm still shining.
I know that I'm here.
And I know that I'm perfect as I am.
Last paragraph:
So it's impossible to say that every one
of us can be the same.
When I'm not even the same as I was yesterday.
Your writing is beautiful and expressed very well. I encourage you to keep writing. On the days that I want to be loud, I want to play my music, sing, dance and do karaoke.
I believe that other people can relate to what you are saying here. Keep up the good work.
I did feel guilty Knowing that guilt is unproductive. I tried to accept myself as I am and it worked.
High expectations for yourself when not measuring up can leave a toll on you; I know it did for me. I always felt that I had to prove that I could do something for everyone. I didn't feel good about myself whenever I accomplished something; I felt that I had to do more. I still struggle with that today.
In the second paragraph:
Your journey was designed to introduce yourself to new information and new and more possibilities for growth and development. Trusting that you need to be at the right place at the right time, preparing what do you need to succeed with your interaction for today. You are nurtured emotionally and also spiritually, being encouraged to attain your full potential.
In paragraph five:
Today, you live in honor of yourself and by doing so you honor others and yourself to stop expecting that you are perfect so you can find enjoyment even in the smallest detail of your every undertaking.
In paragraph 6:
Anything you can do for yourself stays with you. The more you learn, the more you become, including learning from your mistakes. You believe that everything you do deserves your best effort and that no precious time is being wasted so that you can greet each challenge with much eagerness, trusting in your capacity to succeed.
In paragraph 7:
You have to set the pace for every progress that you're doing now and for the rest of your existence. It is awesome to understand that you're responsible and always take full responsibility for your every action.
In paragraph 8:
More laughter, more freedom, more achievements. They are within your power, they can never elude you unless you let them. But then you must define your direction for each move and be very careful about each step along the way.
In paragraph 9:
Yes! Everything you learn enhances your life including your expectation. The world is so wonderful and each moment is worth living.
Closing:
Have A Pleasant Day Everyone
Thank You, Lord, for Everything
Your writing is very encouraging to me. You sound like me. The thing is that I don't always feel as confident about things as I should be. You have expressed in your writing, that I feel for myself, except that I fear branching out into something, due to hearing a lot of negativity.
I love your closing:
Have A Pleasant Day Everyone
Thank You, Lord, For Everything
Keep writing. It's great that you've figured out these things for yourself.
The last paragraph in your story was misspelled. You put wonderful instead of wonderful.
This is a beautiful poem. It touched my heart. I find it hard to forgive myself sometimes but I know that there is a creator, God, who loves me no matter what, if I ask Him to forgive me.
He sent His only Son, Jesus Christ, to die for us, taking all of our burdens upon Himself, who knew no sin, that we can be forgiven. This is my personal belief. Whatever you get the strength from in your life is perfectly okay. I read about the Native American Culture and what their beliefs are. I found them to be interesting.
I know God, and Jesus Christ, in my life, has given me the strength to continue whenever I'm feeling down in the dumps. I have overcome many obstacles in my life because of my faith.
I'm happy that you have found strength in your writing. I find your piece to be uplifting. It's important to recognize the backgrounds of where people have come from. There are good things that we can learn from them.
You should continue with your writing; you're off to a good start.
I intend to give my opinion in hopes that they can see things in a better light. Depression can be temporary and will go away. Don't let them get you down. Seeking help is a good way to get out from it.
You would like some ideas on what to write. What I do is focus on a thought, object, or something that comes to my mind on the spur of the moment. Have some paper handy. Write the first word or two that come to mind. Then, come back to it later and write whatever words you want to add to those words. You will find that you will begin the start of a story, poem, etc. I find that I am not able to put down the pen until I'm done with the story. I hope that this helps.
When talking about a man, you describe him beautifully, not having any flaws. It's easy to fall into sin when seeing someone like this. We're all human; I believe that this kind of thing is something that we're all tempted at one time or another to do.
I would encourage you to keep writing. This looks like the beginning of a good story.
I am doing a review for one of your pieces entitled, "Under the Starlit Sky". I thought that you did an excellent job of writing about the categories of love/romance, environment, and Spiritual. It's wonderful that you see the love for her in a star. I think that is so beautiful.
The only thing that I could see in your writing was to add an s to appear. I encourage you to keep on writing. I feel that you're off to a good start.
I reviewed your story entitled, "A Bunny's Tale". I loved the rhythm that you had per line. I enjoyed reading this. I thought that "A Bunny's Tale" was well written. I didn't notice anything that I felt needed improvement. In the end, I felt sad for the bunny because he was only passing through for Easter, and then he'd be gone. This was the most challenging part for him. He enjoyed looking at the flowers in springtime. He noticed some baby chicks in a basket; he felt good about that.
I reviewed your story entitled, "A Master of Priorities". The story was interesting about the baseball game and that your wife wouldn't have believed you no matter what you said about being at the game all night. I have to admit that it was sad that your wife had recently passed away after she attended over 15 years with you. I'm glad that she did finally go to the baseball games with you. It's nice to have beautiful memories and am so glad that you felt confident enough to share your story.
Keep writing. I'm truly sorry about the loss of your wife. It's never easy, but if you have some good memories, then it does make it a bit easier.
I am not a professional reviewer. I strive to do my best in helping others to continue with their work. If I see something that needs to be corrected, I give my suggestion on where to go for help; I try to do this in a gentle and caring way.
I'm in hope that you are having an enjoyable day.
Finding love a second time around can be scary. I'm not sure what you mean by saying don't become collected. Are you meaning that you are afraid of repeating the same mistakes?
I went through two marriages that ended in divorce due to a lot of verbal abuse. I try to not let that be a factor in saying that all men are that way; there are some nice men out there. I feel that it's normal to be a bit wary of love the next time around, but if it turns out to be true love, then you've hit the jackpot.
I encourage you to keep on writing. You can help others by sharing your story. It's very brave of you to come out of the box to talk about it.
I am trying to earn enough Gift Points to get a Premium Membership. I would give you some Gift Points and a Merit Badge, but, being that my membership will expire on August 15, 2022, I need to work hard.
I am not a professional reviewer. I read stories and give my input on how they made me feel, and gently offer suggestions on what areas I see that may need improvement.
I enjoy reading stories where the characters can live happily ever after. I thought that it was great that Andrew was approved to date by Esteban the father and Margarita his wife, after seeing that he was a good man. When Aurora was kidnapped by the thieves and treated badly, Andrew was able to go in and rescue her.
Andrew and Aurora became sweethearts, married, and moved to another country where they lived happily ever after.
I encourage you to keep writing; this was a beautiful story.
I would give you some Gift Points and a Merit Badge, but, I am working hard to try and save enough points to earn a Premium Membership. Don't be discouraged by this. I would love for you to be successful in your writing.
I am not a professional reviewer. I can offer my input on what I felt about the story and hope that it will help.
I admire the courage that you have in sharing the story, "Ripples". I can see that you have a special wife that was willing to listen to what you had to say. She was very understanding. This should help you with the abuse that you had as a young eight-year-old kid. Keeping things hidden can cause a lot of pain; sharing it with someone who won't hold it against you can heal these past hurts.
When I was a teenager, my dad had a friend that would get drunk, and sneak upstairs into my room to do some sexual activity. Even though there wasn't any penetration, I stuffed my feelings inside, too scared to tell my mom and dad; you just didn't talk about such things. If my dad would've known what his friend did, no telling what he would've done. I've kept my feelings stuffed inside to the point that it had affected my relationships with guys. Even though it wasn't my fault, in some ways, I believed it was.
When I got older, I thought that I had the experience put behind me, but it had affected me more than I had realized. It still bothers me some today, but thanks to a loving God, I knew that I had been forgiven.
My mother revealed to me when I had gotten older that she had been raped while my dad and my sister took a trip to Sweden. I asked her, "Does this mean that I may have a different dad? She said no. If that had been the case, I wouldn't have tried to find him, because, as far as I was concerned, my dad was my dad. He raised me and he was a good dad.
As painful as your story was to share, you were able to write about it and share it with others. This is remarkable.
I encourage you to keep writing. Any little bit helps to heal the scars.
I am not a professional reviewer. I offer my input on what I liked or didn't like about the story. I do this politely. I want to help the writer improve his/her writing.
I can relate well to your story. I have a schizoaffective disorder. Even though I accepted the fact that I would have to take medications for the rest of my life, there was a stigma of believing that someone was suffering from mental illness. No one believed me when I shared how I was feeling or the experiences I've gone through because of that.
My trauma with the stigma was unbearable. I can only imagine what society has said to you because of your paralysis. I've seen people walk past people who had disabilities or were homeless. Believe me, I can feel your pain. It's been written that sticks and stones make break my bones, but words will never hurt me. This is not true, words do have the power to hurt feelings, emotions, and traumas.
It helped me to have heard your story; it made me feel better knowing that I'm not alone.
I loved the last part of your story that said, "I take back the power you stole from me, I see myself clearly, I forgive myself for ignoring my pain, I give myself all of the love and healing I deserve, You have broken me down, But I built myself back up 100x stronger, I finally found the beauty in the midst of trauma.
Those are beautiful words. I admire that you have found the strength to pick yourself back up. This is difficult to do. I'm glad that you found beauty in the midst of trauma.
I want to encourage you to write. Your words have helped me.
I would like to send you some Gift Points and a Merit Badge, but I'm trying to earn enough points to get a Premium Membership. Don't be discouraged by this. Remain strong and confident. Don't be afraid to be who you are.
I am not a professional reviewer. I learn something new every day. My hope is to offer you my input and that my remarks can be helpful.
I learned something new concerning adhd. I didn't realize that that were different types of adhd. I thought one form of adhd was, for example, repeating the washing of your hands constantly, or another one that someone with adhd was someone who is very hyper; they can't sit still. Thank You for informing me of the different kinds.
I found your article, "Ink has adhd" to be very interesting. I can see why ink would have adhd. Too much ink can drive anyone crazy, especially when it doesn't want to print when you needed it to.
I want to encourage you to keep writing. It opened up my eyes to learn that adhd comes in many forms. This was good information for me. I have a schizoaffective disorder myself.
I would give you some Gift Points and a Merit Badge, but, I am trying to earn enough Gift Points to get a Premium Membership. My membership expires on August 15, 2022.
I am not a professional reviewer. I look for the best in people and like to encourage them by offering hope. To me, this is good medicine.
Wow, what a great story! It would be great if there were more doctors like this one. It's important to listen to what people are saying. I remember when I had a good doctor; at first, he talked way above my head; I didn't know what he was talking about. Then he started to talk more at my level. I felt more at ease when I talked to him after that. He's now retired. He was a great doctor.
I want to encourage you to write more. The man who was dying in the story was right by saying that this doctor had a great gift; the gift of listening.
I would like to give you some Gift Points and a Merit Badge, but I'm trying to save up enough points to get a Premium Membership. My membership expires on August 15, 2022.
I am not a professional reviewer. I can tell you that I enjoyed your story, "Open Your Wings". The mother eagle was happy to have built her nest and come to find out that six little eagles had hatched. Before it was time to be taught how to fly, the mother eagle was ahead of the game. She taught them to run and flap their wings. I could tell that this was a good mother because she taught them how to practice flying. Then, one by one, the little eagles jumped off the nest and began to fly. This was a proud moment for the mother.
When it was time for the last little eagle to fly, it had hurt its wing and was not able to fly again. This didn't hurt the eagle since it had a nice demeanor that it developed. It was being talked into flying by its brothers, but he wouldn't try because it knew better. Then, a brother told it to close its eyes and try. It wasn't long before it discovered that it could fly.
It wasn't that it couldn't fly, but, because of its insecurities, it didn't. When he became more secure, his insecurities vanished.
What a lesson of faith! This eagle was proud of its mother because she never gave up on him.
I encourage you to keep on writing. I'm sure that other people would be moved by this story.
I would like to give you some Gift Points and a Merit Badge, but, I am trying to save enough Gift Points to earn myself a Premium Membership. Don't let this discourage you. Keep strong, keep the faith, and don't give up.
I am not a professional reviewer. I will do my best to give you an excellent review.
I can relate to your story, "The Diary of a Teenager" since I have been laughed at in a classroom after I answered a question the teacher had asked of me. No one should have to go through the humiliation of being laughed at. This is a sure way of making someone feel sad. I have heard cases where teenagers have committed suicide because of being bullied. I feel bad when that happens.
It takes a lot of willpower to be able to share a story about yourself, especially when it's from your own diary.
I encourage you to keep on writing. This is a sure way of making you feel better about yourself because you've shared your story with someone else. This can be helpful to someone else as well.
I would like to give you some Gift Points and a Merit Badge, but I am saving up my points so that I can earn myself a Premium Membership.
Keep Strong. Believe in Yourself. Don't let anyone get you down by the negative things they say.
I am not a professional reviewer, but, I will do my best to give you a lovely review.
I thought that your story, "Illusion at Best" was interesting. It gave me some food for thought. I agree that things have been better in the past than they are today. Things have changed so rapidly that it's very scary.
I want to say that there's always hope. Hope can help us survive most things. I would like to offer more food for thought. I hope that nobody has to starve; they shouldn't have to be homeless. I've been homeless and still don't have a secure place, however, I applied for Section 8 Housing, and I have hope that something will turn up.
It takes a lot of courage to do what you have done and that is that you share your story. Don't get discouraged; I know it's easy to do that.
I encourage you to keep on writing, and, then, one day you can become a Preferred Author.
I would gladly send you a Merit Badge and some Gift Points, but, I'm trying to save up enough points to earn a Premium Membership. My membership expires on August 15, 2022.
Don't let this discourage you. Keep Strong. Have Courage. Have Hope. Things will get better.
I am not a professsional reviewer, but I will do my best to give you a nice review.
With your story, "Discovering the Reason for Living", I can easily feel the pain from others that put you down for the things that you do. I can feel that pain because I have experienced it, and still do in the present.
I've been told by my sister at first that she was happy for me that I've taken an interest in writing. Now, it seems to me that she's not an encourager for me in that anymore. She also treats me like I'm stupid, because I don't get things as quickly as most people. I think that there's some jealousy that she holds against me. She has been a negative influence for me in the things that I want to do. There have been times when she's been helpful to me though.
Sometimes it takes someone you meet, when you realize that they have been through some rough and tough times too. Music and my Spirituality has been an uplifter for me; without that, I would have given up on doing on doing things anyway, regardless if they have a low opinion of me.
I want to encourage you in your writing. It takes a lot of courage to write about these things, and you have done it. I'm proud of you. Tell yourself that you are a good person. Erase all the negativity from your mind, and you find that you don't have to depend on other people's negativity. The important thing to recognize, is that you have value; you are important.
I would send you some Gift Points, but I'm trying to earn enough to eary a Premium Membership for a year. I would like to send you a Merit Badge, but, until I can send a free one, I am not able to do that. Don't let this discourage you. Keep Strong, Be happy, and, most of all, tell yourself that you have worth.
Anna Marie Carlson
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