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Review of unnoticed  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I walk over.
You won't talk;
you never talk."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Some of the grammar needed work. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was interesting and sad at the same time. I did not quite understand what it was speaking about though. Overall, nice work! ^_^

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Review of Untitled  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: " Jasper Fielding gripped the steering wheel with both hands. It was a beautiful day. The sun was shining on a Friday evening. "It was" the beginning of "the" weekend.

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: I have fixed the imagery category for you. Some of the grammar needed some work. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was a very interesting tale. The concept was unique. Nice work overall! ^_^

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Review of Lies  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Ask you a question,
I recieve deception.
Stumble on your words,
Your "fumbling" sounds "absurd."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Some of the spelling needed work. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^ I have fixed the imagery category for you. ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! You may wish to break this poem into stanzas. Maybe every four lines to make it more readable for the reader. Overall, I really enjoyed this concept. Nice work! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Why were their faces came wet
Where teardrops left on their face?"


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I did not quite understand the last two sentences. I understand what you were trying to portray. However, something in the wording did not seem right. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

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Review of Freddy's letter  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I will hand this small note and a coin to one of them so that in the event that I do not ever see your pretty face again, you will know that I died on my feet and never surrendered while my body holds breath."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this letter! I found this letter to be so moving. The ending was so beautiful. Excellent job on this letter, and keep up the great work! ^_^

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Review of Stargazing  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "My father followed my finger to the bright blue dot; "he" smiled. “They call that Earth.”


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: I have fixed the imagery category for you. There was a few grammatical mistakes. Otheriwse, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was very inspiring and uplifting. I very much enjoyed the imagery in this very short story. Nice work! ^_^

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Review of Before  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "That I'm "supposed" to hate you
So before I remind myself
I wanted to remember to forget that."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Some of the spelling needed work, as well as the grammar. Otherise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was a lovely poem. It seemed like a rhyme was trying to push through, but then some parts rhymed and flowed and others didn't. It did not take away from the power of this poem. Nice work! ^_^

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Review of Cherished  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Hannah stayed close, knowing in her heart it would be the last time she would see her mother and those may very well have been her last words."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! Oh this was so sad. I was literally crying at the end of this. This was a beautiful story. I have to give this story a perfect five for the emotions portrayed. Nice work! ^_^

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Review of Longing Memories  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Boris promised to leave Teodore’s backyard, and that his family and farm were protected from his soldiers."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! I found this story to be quite informative. Nice job on this story. I must ask if this is non-fiction. If this is then it is an amazing story! ^_^ Nice work overall! ^_^

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Review of Uninvited  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Now we’re sitting here, all locked up in jail
Deprived for good of our own holy grail."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: The grammar was a little inconsistent, but otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was a quite an interesting concept. I found the ending stanza to be the most fascinating part of the poem. Nice work overall! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "And now I hear the crocodile is closer
For time is the keeper of its clock"

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I found this poem so inspiring! This poem was so beautiful and the imagery was amazing! Beautiful job on this poem once again, and excellent work! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Until further research is done and more advanced containment techniques are developed (the sun anyone?), Nuclear energy should be at least slowed, if not halted all together."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this paper! This was very informative, and I daresay a little chilling. Nice work on the ending and summing up the aspects of the paper. Good work again! ^_^

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Review of I Am  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Who are blind enough to lose sight of any and all hope
Take the easy way out while their loved ones struggle to breathe on."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I liked the imagery and desciptions in this poem. Also, the beginning of this poem was beautiful. Nice work on this! ^_^

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Review of Troubled  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "theres always a weight on my sholders
no matter if its my burden or not
i feel as if im being "suffocated."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling:Some of the spelling and grmmar needed some work. Otherwise, nice work. ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was an interesting poem. I enjoyed the ending although it was a little depressing and I hope you do not feel that way. Nice work overall. ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "And so the putrid kiss of your corrupted offspring will spread the disease and you too will rot in the brain and in the soul.”

Emotion: Nice work

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this prelude! This was very interesting, but a little sad towards the ending. Nice work in the beginning. ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "The silence was a welcome relief, but something inside me still wasn't entirely comfortable. She seemed to sense this, and without lifting her head broke the silence."



Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was interesting. The ending was a sweet ending to a nice story. Good work on bringing the reader in with the beginning. Nice work again! ^_^

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Review of Lost Pirate  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Prior to losing her senses, she whispered to no one in particular, a smirk on her lips."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was quite interesting. I have also loved Peter Pan. I liked the ending. Nice work on this! ^_^

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Review of Sara's November  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "So, like the Second Brother,
I can truly join her."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! You may want to consider breaking this poem into stanzas to make it more readable for the reader. Otherwise, I enjoyed the imagery and descriptions. Nice work on this poem! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "The humans gathered Phoenix’s egg shell and placed it on their "altar" to the Sun. To my knowledge, this ritual is still performed to this day."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Some of the spelling and grammar needed some work. I have fixed up the imagery category for you. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! You may want to add spaces between your paragraphs to make it more readable for the reader. Otherwise, I found the concept to be interesting. Nice work! ^_^

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Review of Castle Of Sand  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Forever young
In the heart of
My beloved one!"


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! Some of the rhyming scheme seemed a little off in some places, but otherwise I really enjoyed this poem. The ending was beautiful! Nice work! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: ‘Somewhere hidden among these handful of days the key to my better understanding what impulses and actions brought me here lies … to where only one certainty remains, that soon, I too will rest’

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this prologue! I found this to be well-written and well-thought out. It made me want to read the novel. Nice work! ^_^

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Review of the red roses  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences:

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: This was a little unreadable from the formatting. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This concept was quite sad, and I was very depressed reading this story. It was well-written though and well-thought out. Nice work! ^_^

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Review of Through My Eyes  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "It's me. no not me, me.
It's through my eyes!"



Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Some of the grammar needs work. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was interesting and the concept was nice. Nice work on this. ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "If I go any faster," Lindsay replied, "I'll probably end up getting pulled over and it will be YOUR fault!" she added with "exclamation?".



Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Some of the word usage was a little confusing at times. For instance: in the imagery category "exclamation" does not make sense in this sentence.

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This did not seem finished either. The end sentence ended with "a." Are you planning on finishing this story? Nice work so far! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Cease was already gallantly astride his own dappled paint while the boy scrambled to prop up a stool and struggle into the stirrups--while the horse was still sitting."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! I feel I must apologize for not looking at this sooner. I was quite intrigued with this concept. I quite enjoyed this adventure, and found the ending to be well-written. Nice work! ^_^

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