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Review of Love Daggers  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I grapple with myself , try to bring myself to sense
To no avail, oh! To no avail!"

Emotion: Amazing emotion in this poem! ^_^

Grammar and Spelling: There were some grammatical errors. I have fixed the imagery category for you.

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I enjoyed the sentiment in this poem. The only thing that confused me was the last line. I think you have an extra word in there somewhere: "Now as each moment takes me away from you." This in and of itself is an incomplete sentence.

Otherwise, I felt the stanzas were set up accordingly, and the emotion in this poem was simply lovely! My favorite part of this poem was: "Can someone hear my desperate cries, of pain and tears and piercing knives?" I really liked these sentences. They were well-structured and had a good rhyme and flow to them. Overall, nice work! ^_^


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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "A thought floats -
phlegmatic -
"I" is an idle reflection
in a mirror
that breathes heavily
and sweats."- Beautiful stanza! ^_^

Emotion: Amazing emotion in this poem! ^_^

Grammar and Spelling: The punctuation in this poem seemed a little inconsistent. Otherwise, it did not take away from the purity of this poem. ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! I read this poem through three times. I could not get over the amazing first stanza! It just flowed off my tongue and sent chills running down my spine.

I very much enjoyed the sentiment that was portrayed in this poem, as well as the incredible imagery and descriptions which you presented. One of my favorite sentences was: "Only the sparkle delivered of poisonous earthly days..."
Excellent job on this poem and keep up the marvelous work! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Hauntingly soft mystifying eyes
that devilish charm, the bewitching smile
Striding like a princess, royalty on your face
so queenly so regal, a picture so perfect
You are carved from marble and chiseled to perfection."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! A beautiful portrayal of love! I found myself getting lost in these words. The last stanza was so well-written, when reading it I felt the words were being spoken through my husband. Nice work on this poem! I am giving this a perfect 5 for the emotions and imagery portrayed! ^_^

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Review of 5 Little Guests  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: " I walked cautiously into the gate that gaurded Hotel 13. I stode past the crabgrass and dead squirrels that littered the unkept yard, and knocked on the door. It cracked open, and I opened the door. How cliche, it creaked on its hinges. I walked in." -Nice sentences! ^_^


Emotion: Nice scary emotion in this entry! ^_^

Grammar and Spelling: There were some grammatical errors such as spelling, run-on sentences and incomplete sentences. However, ignoring these factors, I really enjoyed this story! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This story presented such an ominous feel from the beginning through the ending. I was at the edge of my seat wondering what was going to happen as I read this! This is the kind of story that I am looking for, and you did an excellent job writing this! I really enjoyed the ending as it left me wondering what the "strange noise" actually was. Nice work overall! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
Rated: E | (5.0)
To pay for the bids I won at the auction. I hope I am sending the funds to the right place...^_^
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Review by Lolita-New Book!
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Please take note these are only suggestions and opinions.

Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "She spent 40 years painting. When nobody wanted them, 12 truckloads were taken to the dump and nearly all were destroyed in a bonfire. A neighbor, Nathan Fleischer, rescued 70 of these paintings. He was my husband."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: A few incomplete sentences. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This story was very informative and historical. I very much enjoyed this story, especially the ending. Nice work on this story! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Fortunately for me, most people don't know about or bother with these little frustrations to my quest to invade lives."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! It was such an unexpected twist at the ending! Nice work with the piece! I really enjoyed this! The beginning really had me. Nice work overall! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery!

Emotion:
Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Some grammatical errors. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this interactive! This had such a unique concept! I really enjoyed this. I am giving this a perfect 5 for the uniqueness it presented. Nice work overall! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Then they were streaming down her face. She turned, tail between her legs, and slowly walked away. Fang stood, no emotion showing, as she walked away."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Some grammatical errors. Otherwise, nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! You may wish to add spaces between your lines to make it more readable for the reader. Otherwise, I very much enjoyed the stories, as I have three cats at home. Nice work on the ending too! ^_^ Great job overall! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Etwol attacks Jaden and there is an explosion, when the smoke clears Jaden is gone or so it seems. Alexis goes over to the spot Jaden was at, "but she" can't find anything. "That is when" she spots a faint glimmer on the ground, "and" she finds Jaden shrunken down to a very small size about 1/100, or as best can be judged."



Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: I have fixed the imagery category for you. Some grammatical and wording errors. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was quite interesting. It had a unique concept, and I look forward to reading the other chapters. Nice work overall! ^_^

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Review of Red roses  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "You can see it,enjoy those fragrances
And fill your heart with its beauty
But please... dont take it away

If i lost,i have nothing else
As you think it's not
But my blood made it red
And my feelings gave those fragrances.

And my soul dwell in those dewdrops
That stick to it each refreshing morning
Let it be there,till eternity merges with me....."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: There are some grammatical errors. Otherwise, nice work!

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! Itried to break up the ending portion for you. Also, you may wish to place spaces between your commas and the next word. The sentiment in the poem was lovely. Nice work overall! ^_^

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Review of Words  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Celebrate the triumphs, the fellowship, and the family that made you the person you are. Stand proud in the strength of your faith. Stand proud in the accomplishments of your special loved one."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! Beautiful sentiment. I very much enjoyed this story. My favorite part was the last paragraph. I try to live my life by that everyday. Thank you for writing this and introducing pure pride into everyone's hearts. Nice work overall! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "But then, considering some of the strange things we see and hear on the news these days, maybe it should be on that list."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this quote! I must have to see that I completely agree with this quote. Too many times this quote has been proven in society. When are we going to do something about it? Nice work overall! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I stared at my hand in disbelief. The crusty dried blood caked upon it. I ran it under the cold water and scrubbed it all off. No wound was present. Amazed, I touched where the laceration was, and I remember the glint of the man’s image – his shadow – when I passed by on the highway."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! The ending was so unexpected. I was really drawn into this story in the beginning all the way through till the end. I very much enjoyed this story. Nice work overall! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "What about the PA systems? Will they be working? And I’d like a tour of the grounds before I leave," Alex said and Jackson nodded.

He had been hired because he shared Alex's views about the future, and he wanted somewhere safe for his men and their families. Alex would not turn away anyone short of a cold blooded murder, and only if they could not be of use."

Emotion: Nice emotion!

Grammar and Spelling: I have fixed up the imagery category for you. A couple grammatical errors. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this short story! This story had an interesting concept. I especially liked the sentence about Alex not turning away anyone except for cold-blooded murderers, but that was only if they were of no use to him. Very descriptive! Nice work overall! ^_^ I am giving this a perfect 5 for the descriptions and imagery!

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Review of Free  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I wish I didn't have to put up with this anymore "more-" (you may want to take this out it is repetitive to the word you already used.)
I wish I could leave, just get on a plane

All this guy does is gripe and complain
Oh why oh why can't it be the same?



Emotion: Nice emotion!

Grammar and Spelling: Some grammatical errors, and a couple spelling errors. Also, no punctuation used. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! The rhythm was a little chopped, and there were some grammatical errors. It had good sentiment. Otherwise, I can completely understand how the author is feeling. I very much enjoyed the concept. ^_^ Nice work overall! ^_^


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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Ron sat down and looked enviously at Dudley, who was stuffing his face with Sinister Sally's Sugar-Coated Sugar Cubes. Dudley, who had been denied breakfast by the Dursleys, had eaten two tons of food before noticing Ron."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! You may wish to add spaces to your story to make it a little more readable for the reader. Otherwise, I found this very amusing, and I could see the characters from Harry Potter once again coming to life. Nice work on this story overall! ^_^

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Review of MAJESTY'S SPAWN  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "It took him a few seconds to extrapolate useful knowledge from the downloaded memories. This knowledge would save him many days of preparation for adaption of his humanistic kernel to actual human behavior."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This seemed quite interesting. I was captivated by the details and the descriptions. I am curious to see how this book will progress. Nice work so far. I hope the nanobot falls in love with Michelle, I like that character. ^_^ Ni9ce work overall! ^_^

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Review of Love Me Now  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Envelop the mind and body in all that you do
Drive yourself to the brink and back of insanity
Deliver and absorb love like no other human being on earth."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: No punctuation used. Otherwise, nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was beautiful and I found the flow of it to be so poetic. I very much enjoyed the last stanza. Nice work on this overall! ^_^

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Review of Love Never Lasts  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "These words are now printed on her epitaph

On final breath passed, "Love Never Lasts."


Emotion: Love and anger

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This was so lovely and so sad at the same time. I am sorry for your loss and I offer my deepest condolences. My blessings to you and your family. Nice work on this overall! ^_^

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Review of My Lady  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "But my love is real
and soon we will be together
once we met in sunshine
joined will we be forever."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: No punctuation used. Otherwise, nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem! This poem was so lovely. You may want to break this poem into stanzas to make it more readable for the reader. Otherwise, nice work overall! ^_^

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Review of Wishing Stone  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery!

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Some grammatical errors. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this interactive! The concept of this interactive was so unique! I found the beginning to be my favorite part of the story. Nice work overall on this interactive! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "I simply did the first thing that my instincts screamed for: I made a break for it."

Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this prologue! This seems like it is going to be quite an interesting tale. I cannot wait to read the coming chapters. I found the ending of this piece to be interesting! Nice work overall! ^_^

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Review of pity party  
Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "Don't worry my new friend, the pain shall soon end,
And when it does, you'll thirst for blood,
Oh we shall never be lonely again."


Emotion:
Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling:
Nice work

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this poem/story! This was so sad. I felt so much sorrow for the old woman. I pictured a grandma sitting alone in her house. Beautiful work on this! ^_^

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Review by Lolita-New Book!
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Context: Great context here! You presented nice descriptions.

Imagery: Nice imagery! I especially like these sentences: "The other is brand new, untouched, and looks like a rainbow kaleidoscope with bubbles protruding from the bowl. I found a few more stacks of cash and it's all goin' in the bag. Now it's time to run on home."


Emotion: Nice emotion

Grammar and Spelling: There were grammatical errors throughout this piece. Otherwise, nice work! ^_^

Overall: Great job! I really enjoyed this story! This was quite an interesting story. I found the ending to be surprising. I wonder if all vampires are as fiesty as she was. Nice work overall! ^_^

Keep writing! Please feel free to stop by and check out my work as well! My Published Book Will Release on July 1, 2011! Please Give Me Your Support!

Blessings~
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